[FF] #YKAGH... pyaar ki iss rah par CH 74 PG-98

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Posted: 9 years ago
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I will take @karishma's advice and start writing fan fiction.
lets see how it goes
and please leave comments and suggestions
{continuation of this segmentfrom the cold storage scene of how I would have liked it}

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Index:

Chapter1 - page1 ... (Scroll Below At The End Of Index)

Chapter2 - page3 ... 131890361 // Chapter3 - page4 ... 131943045

Chapter4 - page6 ... 131970663 // Chapter5 - page8 ... 131992694

Chapter6 - page10 ... 132015368 // Chapter7 - page12 ... 132032634

Chapter8 - page16 ... 132056783 // Chapter9 - page18 ... 132099313

Chapter10 - page19 ... 132111046 // Chapter11 - page21 ... 132178268

Chapter12 - page22 ... 132210561 // Chapter13 - page23 ... 132265294

Chapter14 - page25 ... 132347118 // Chapter15 - page27 ... 132402063

Chapter16 - page29 ... 132459561 // Chapter17 - page31 ... 132547505

Chapter18 - page33 ... 132613661 // Chapter19 - page34 ... 132676211

Chapter20 - page36 ... 132755741 // Chapter21 - page38 ... 132806808

Chapter22 - page41 ... 132865738 // Chapter23 - page44 ... 132949115

Chapter24 - page46 ... 133004941 // Chapter25 - page47 ... 133062359

Chapter26 - page51 ... 133144182 // Chapter27 - page53 ... 133195957

Chapter28 - page56 ... 133260813 // Chapter29 - page59 ... 133340736

Chapter30 - page61 ... 133398611 // Chapter31 - page63 ... 133460561

Chapter32 - page65 ... 133523614 // Chapter33 - page68 ... 133587146

Chapter34 - page71 ... 133707721 // Chapter35 - page72 ... 133766811

Chapter36 - page73 ... 133815872 // Chapter37 - page74 ... 133908202

Chapter38 - page75 ... 133958026 // Chapter39 - page77 ... 134011939

Chapter40 - page78 ... 134155068 // Chapter41 - page79 ... 134220496

Chapter42 - page80 ... 134486763 // Chapter43 - page81 ... 134556076

Chapter44 - page82 ... 134620356 // Chapter45 - page83 ... 134882212

Chapter46 - page84 ... 134942418 // Chapter47 - page85 ... 135271420

Chapter48 - page86 ... 135339118 // Chapter49 - page86 ... 135511538

Chapter50 - page88 ... 135635608 // Chapter51 - page89 ... 135689146

Chapter52 - page90 ... 135812467 // Chapter53 - page90 ... 135923882

Chapter54 - page91 ... 136055716 // Chapter55 - page92 ... 136282985

Chapter56 - page93 ... 136423359 // Chapter57 - page93 ... 136469504

Chapter58 - page93 ... 136600747 // Chapter59 - page94 ... 136676699

Chapter60 - page94 ... 136734563 // Chapter61 - page94 ... 136859132

Chapter62 - page95 ... 136928208 // Chapter63 - page95 ... 137059222

Chapter64 - page96 ... 137145529 // Chapter65 - page96 ... 137192493

Chapter66 - page96 ... 137414064 // Chapter67 - page97 ... 137570133

Chapter68 - page97 ... 137708149 // Chapter69 - page97 ... 137890010

Chapter70 - page97 ... 138035594 // Chapter71 - page97 ... 138316545

Chapter72 - page98 ... 138419206 // Chapter73 - page98 ... 140026377

Chapter74 - page98 ... 140260314 [FINAL]

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Chapter 1

Maanvi wakes up next morning from the bright sunlight falling on her eyes through the window. It took her a moment to take in her surroundings. She is in her bedroom, warm sheet... carefully tugged in.
Now she recalls last night. She followed rahul to the cold storage, where they both got locked in by accident. How rahul tried to keep her warm and comfortable even when he was feeling cold. Each time she thought about it, her cheeks turned red.

"There have been many circumstances and each time rahul put her first. Is this the real rahul sabarwal?? Whom she always thought to be womanizer, arrogant and selfish person?? Everything she had known and believed about rahul is absolutely opposite of what she has learned about him since they got married. Has there been a mistake in understanding rahul?..."
The train of thoughts trailed away from maanvi.

Maanvi looked around but there is no sign of rahul.

"Rahul kahan hai? Mein yahan kaise ayi ?" Maanvi whispered to the air.
"Kya rahul mujhe utha kar yahan laya ? Par kab? Itni subah wo gaya kahan? Mujhe jagaya bhi nahi?"

Knock on the door. Maanvi opens to let chotu bring breakfast tray inside.

"Bhabhi ji, rahul bhaiya ne aapke liye special coffee aur breakfast banane ke liye kaha hai. Kaha hai ki kal shayad aapko thand lag gayi ho. To aaj aap aaram kariye."
Maanvi inquires "par itni subah rahul gaye kahan?"


Chotu informs "Rahul to studio gaye hain. Unhone kaha hai ki unhe kuch concert ki details twinkle se confirm karni hain. Uske baad unhe kahin zaroori kaam hai to wo sham tak lautenge."


Maanvi finishes breakfast and gets ready. She decides to meet with twinkle before she heads to hospital to go see her parents. It's been two weeks since last her baba was out of coma. His words still fresh in maanvi's mind. "Manobi...shaadi ... rahul..."
Doctor said his condition is stable but no improvements as of yet. No one knows what or when will he be able to reveal the truth of that day.

"Maanvi..." a voice from behind broke maanvi's chain of thoughts.
"Kithe chale puttar ? Teri tabiyat kaisi hai? Rahul ne bataya tha ki kal tum dono cold storage me band ho gaye the." Dadi asked with concern.


Maanvi~"Main theek hoon Dadi. Me baba se milne hospital jaa rahi thi."


Dadi~"acha hai. Arre putter, jaate samay ye kuch banaya tha maine shilpa ke liye. Wo bhi le jana. Usse bahut pasand hai. Aur usse keh dena ki kabhi milne bhi aaya kare. Saalo pehle jo hua uski wajah se humare beech jo doori hai, unko door rehkar nahi... saath baith kar hi mitaya ja sakta hai ."


Maanvi~ "ji Dadi, main maa se keh doongi."

Nisha-shaleen were discussing last night's party.


Nisha~"shaleen kal raat dekha tumne ... kaise sab us maanvi ko importance de rahe the? Sab to aise behave kar rahe the jaise wo party sirf us ki ho. Hum to wahan jaise the hi nahi. Pata hai shaleen, mujhe to kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki hum iss ghar ke nahi, balki maanvi iss ghar ki zyada hai. Phele to sirf rahul rahul karte rehte the. Ab us maanvi ke aage peeche bhi ghoomna padega ? Iss ghar me hamari kabhi koi value hogi bhi ya nahi?"


Shaleen ~ "yaar tum hamesha mujhe hi kyun sunati ho? Mujhe bhi dikh raha hai. Itna sab hone ke baad bhi... apni marzi se shaadi ki, wo bhi dad ke dushman ki Beti se, phir bhi dad ke liye to aaj bhi rahul hi sab kuch hai, aur uski har baat maani jati hai"


Nisha~ "seriously shaleen, mujhe to lagta hai ki ghar me sabke liye sirf rahul hi sagaa hai. Hum to iss ghar me naukaroon se bhi zyada paraye hai. Tumhe pakka yakin hai ki tum inke bete ho? Kahin ye log tumhe kahin sadak se to nahi utha ke laye hai?


Shaleen~"jo bhi ho...ab ye sab jyada din tak nahi chalega . Me wo sab inse cheen loonga jo mera inhone itne saal tak mujhse cheen kar Rahul ko diya hai."

Maanvi reaches studio hoping to see rahul.

"Sari preparations sahi se honi chahiye. Rahul sir ne specific instructions diye hai. Wo chahte hai ki iss bar concert ab tak ka sabse BEST performance ho. Sir apne fans ke liye special kuch naya karna chahte hai. Sab ready hone par ek bar phir se cross check kar lena ki kahi kuch chut nahi jaye. Ok?" twinkle was talking to someone on the phone.

Maanvi~ "twinkle, kya rahul yahan aaye the?"

Twinkle~ "haan. Rahul sir to just abhi bahar gaye hai. Tumne unhe jaate hue nahi dekha? Kyon? Kya hua?"

Maanvi~ "nahi, hua kuch nahi. Bas aise hi." Maanvi still in deep thoughts. "twinkle, kya unhone kuch bataya ki wo kahan ja rahe hain?

Twinkle~ "nahi, kaa to kuch nahi. Kya hua maanvi? Tum thodi worried lag rahi ho. Everything Ok?"

Maanvi leaves without answering. Thinking "rahul bina bataye kahan ja sakta hai? Hospital chalti hoon. Jab sham ko rahul ghar ayenge tab pata chal jayega."

Maanvi reaches hospital. While walking through the corridor she remembers the night they attended mata-ki-chouki. Rahul tied his mauli on baba's hand and wished for his speedy recovery. Then rahul's words from last night echoed in maanvi's mind "...main tumhe kabhi kuch nahi hone dunga maanvi...". Maanvi self-talk

"sahi hi to keh raha hai. Hamesha to mera dhyaan rakhta hai."

Memories ... during NGO rally against rahul on my complaint... wedding night he tucked me in... he was worried when I had high fever... on my birthday he worked so hard to arrange a way for me to talk to my parents... and last night also he didn't even think about himself and gave me his jacket.

"kyon rahul, tum mera hamesha bina kahe itna khyal kyon rakhte ho? Jabki maine tumhare saath kitna bura bartav kiya. Tumhe kitni baar galat samjha. Kya jo main samajhti thi wo sab galat tha, bina wajah tha? Par jo sab maine dekha tha... shayad maine hi sirf baat ka adha sach jaan kar tumhare baare me apni raay banali thi. Tum waise bilkul bhi nahi ho rahul..."

Maanvi suddenly realizes she was so deep in her thoughts that she has walked way past her baba's room. She turns around to go to her baba. A familiar voice from around the corner draws her attention. Maanvi takes a step back and tries to see from behind the plantation...

Sujoy was talking to someone on phone

"dekho, main tumhe pehle bhi samjha chukka hoon. Mujhe tumse koi lena dena nahi hai, samjhi? Aur abki baar yadi mujhe phir kabhi phone kiya na to tum jaanti ho ki main kya kar sakta hoon. Koi bhi tumhari madat nahi kar payega. Phone rakho."

"ye sujoy kisse baat kar raha tha? Sujoy usko kis baat ki dhamki de raha tha?" seeing sujoy coming this way maanvi hides. Sujoy passes by without noticing maanvi. "Kuch to hai jo sujoy ke bare me main nahi jaanti..." thinking that maanvi goes to see her maa and baba.

Maanvi enters the room.

"aunty yeh kuch nashta maa ne aapke liye bheja hai. Maa aur papa to roj bas yahi chahte hai ki uncle jaldi se theek ho kar ghar aajaye." Sujoy was talking to shilpa. Handing over the parcel "acha aunty, ab chalta hoon, main thodi der aur rukta par papa ko kuch kaam me help chahiye isliye jana padega. Mere liye kuch kaam ho to zaroor bataiyega." Sujoy turns around and sees maanvi "oh hi maanvi, tum kab aayi?"

Maanvi hides that she heard sujoy's converstion and acts natural "bas abhi abhi aayi. Dadi ne maa ke liye kuch bheja hai. Dadi maa aur baba ko miss kar rahi thi..."

Sujoy interrupts maanvi "sabarwals bhi kabhi kisi ki kadar kar sakte hain kya? Jhoota dikhawa hai bas. Agar itni fikar hai to milne bhi aasakte hai, par unke paas hum jaise chote logoon se milne ka time to hota hi nahi hain. Jis ghar me rahul jaise log rahte ho unse aur umeed bhi kya kar sakte hain..."

"Sujoy!..." maanvi stops sujoy right there "rahul mera pati hai, aur uski family ab meri bhi family hai. Unke baare me kuch bhi bolne ka haq sirf mera hai. Wo jaise bhi hai mere in-laws hain. Dadi ji aur dada ji aise nahi hai jo chote aur bade me faraq karein. Unke liye meri family bhi utni hi important hain jitne ki ghar ke baki members."

Sujoy~ "Right right. Main to bhool hi gaya tha ki ab to tum sabarwals ki hi side logi. Chahe phir rahul tumhare parivaar ke saath kuch bhi kare, tumhare ghar ko tudwane ke liye log bhej de, ya phir tumhari dost rupa ko suicide karne ke liye majboor karde. Mujhe to lagta hai ki ab to tum rahul ko har baat ke liye maaf har chuki ho. Bhool gayi ho ki rahul se aur uske pariwar se tumhare baba kitni nafrat karte hai. Bhool gayi ho ki kis tarah sabarwals ki wajah se tum sangeet ke samay aag me phas gayi thi, rahul ki wajah se tumhare baba aaj yahan hospital mein hain, aur kis tarah rahul ne tumse dhoke se shaadi ki..."

Maanvi~ "Bas sujoy. Rahul ne kya kiya aur kya nahi kiya, yeh sab mujko tumhe yaad dilane ki zaroorat nahi hai. Main rahul ko tumse jyada ache se jaanti hoon. Rahi baat rupa ki, to wo ek misunderstanding thi. Jo pehle hi door ho chuki hai. Sirf aadhi baat jaan kar kisi par dosh dalna aasan hai, isliye rahul ke baare mein bina jaane kuch bhi bolne ki zaroorat nahi hai. Wo meri problem hai, usko kaise handle karna hai wo main khud dekh loongi. Tumhe apne papa ki kuch help karna hai na, to tum jao. Tumhe der ho rahi hai."

Sujoy was stunned by maanvi's words. Sujoy leaves while thinking "aaj maanvi ko kya ho gaya hai? Rahul aur sabarwals ke khilaf ek shabd bhi nahi sun rahi hai. Yoon hi chalta raha to rahul aur maanvi paas aa jayenge. Ye main kissi keemat par hone nahi doonga. Rahul main tumse aise haar nahi maanu ga. Mujhse panga lena tumhe bahut mehnga padega."

Maanvi returns home.

Sonali and dadi are having tea break. "aagayi puttar. Aa beth mere kud. Uppa ki tabiyat kaisi hai?" dadi inquired.

Maanvi~ "ji dadi, abhi bhi waisi hi hai. Doctors ka kehna hai ki stable hai. Par kab hosh aayega kuch keh nahi sakte. Maa keh rahi thi ki wo bhi aap sabko yaad karti hain. Par hospital mein ek family member ka rehna zaroori hai. Dada ka kaam par jaana bhi to zaroori hai, nahi to maa aapse milne zaroor aati."

Maanvi looks around and asks "mommy ji dadi ji, rahul ghar aa gaye hai kya?"

Sonali~ "nahi maanvi abhi to nahi aaya. Aa jayega. Kya baat hai? Kuch problem hai kya?"

Maanvi~ "nahi mommy ji, subh se rahul itne busy hain. Kuch bataya bhi nahi bas kuch important kaam hai keh kar chale gaye. Kal hum cold storage me band ho gaye the. Rahul ko apni zara bhi fikar nahi hain."

Sonali~ "yadi aisa hai to phone kar lo. Iss tarah pareshaan hone se to acha hi hai."

Maanvi likes the idea and decides to call from her room. She calls rahul but no one picks up the phone. She calls again but this time phone is switched off.

"phone switched off? Switch off kyon kar diya? Abhi to baj raha tha. Kahan ho tum rahul? Mujhe aisa kyon lag raha hai ki kuch galat ho raha hai? Bas tum ghar aa jao rahul."

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shanakyasharan thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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multi talented girl


LOVED IT!!!!

honestly i thought u would show them romance in the room when i started reading lol

her self talk n realisation was beautiful...makes so much sense only if maanvi realises in the show too

i hope someday maanvi hears sujoy's convo with mala or his friend or father n his truth is out or she atleast spies on him finding sumthing fishy


write more...i want to see u writeā¤ļø


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow Cathy you have written very beautiful ffšŸ‘šŸ¼
Thanks for Writing a FF on Rahul & maanvi

Your story started from after cold storage incident that was was good way to start.
Maanvi remembering all good gestures of Rahul was so sweetā˜ŗļø
Bashing of Sujoy was awesomešŸ‘
Maanvi trying to reach Rahul was good😃
Update it soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: shanakyasharan

multi talented girl


LOVED IT!!!!

honestly i thought u would show them romance in the room when i started reading lol

her self talk n realisation was beautiful...makes so much sense only if maanvi realises in the show too

i hope someday maanvi hears sujoy's convo with mala or his friend or father n his truth is out or she atleast spies on him finding sumthing fishy


write more...i want to see u writeā¤ļø


straight up romance will take all the fun out of it.
but with building a base first for romance that progresses with story
that might be fun
well we will see it as the story progress further and gains momentum
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetcathy29

straight up romance will take all the fun out of it.

but with building a base first for romance that progresses with story
that might be fun
well we will see it as the story progress further and gains momentum




ohhh so u wanna create some hot drama b4 romancešŸ˜‰šŸ˜‰šŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Too Good Cathy Di. Please continue further.
Loved the addition of Sujoy's tele-talk and Maanvi hearing it. CVs have forgotten that angle totally I think.

And twinkle is also missing. Pata nahi kyoun? And Nikhil?
You could write a track wherein Manvi helps Nikhil in his studies.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sagi.

Too Good Cathy Di. Please continue further.

Loved the addition of Sujoy's tele-talk and Maanvi hearing it. CVs have forgotten that angle totally I think.

And twinkle is also missing. Pata nahi kyoun? And Nikhil?
You could write a track wherein Manvi helps Nikhil in his studies.

good point
I will try to work / include old characters as well
and yes main lead with 2-3 side characters per chapter kept in loop can make it feel as full show
wanna keep it simple as well
no confusions and close old tracks smoothly
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beautifully written up Cathy...
Good jobšŸ‘
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ALUJNA21

Beautifully written up Cathy...
Good jobšŸ‘


Hi I am new in this forum. But I think you should writer for this show. Then we can get some sensible episode.ā­ļø
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: aban1


Hi I am new in this forum. But I think you should writer for this show. Then we can get some sensible episode.ā­ļø

I do appreciate your thought ThanksšŸ¤— But Cathy is doing it...and i'm not good at it.
I like chatting and joking here...

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