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Arjun FF: Haunted mansion Ch. 30, p.79;end note p. 80. *Complete* - Page 2

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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome start dear
concept is really interseting
do pm me
i too love the thriller concepts
good job

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Posted: 10 years ago
Thanks a lot for your feedback. Here the rest of chapter 1.

Chapter 1: (2nd installment)

Same day, 4.30 pm

 ETF had just solved a case, and returning to office.

Rathod was driving the SUV, Arjun was beside him, looking outside. Saakshi was talking to Aisha and Shree and also shooting glances towards Arjun. Chotu was taking a nap in the back seat, his snoring was hiding the whispers of the trio( Sa-Ai-Sh). Nobody's seemed to be affected by Chotu's snoring, or was too busy with themselves.

Suddenly Aisha asked Rathod to stop the SUV.

Aisha : Sir, stop the car plz.

Rathod : What happened, Aisha?

Saakshi : Actually I'm feeling like nausea... so I need to change my seat with Shree.

Arjun : (mutter under his breath)Drama...huh.

Rathod stopped the SUV and Saakshi and Shree exchanged their seats. Aisha passed her a water bottle and Saakshi drink from it. Seeing this, Arjun made faces, Rather glared at him  and starts the SUV.

Rathod : what happened to you suddenly, Saakshi? If you are not feeling OK, then let's go to a Doctor.

Saakshi : No..no. .Sameer... I'm fine, just need fresh air... actually feeling little strange in my stomach.

Aisha : Is it paining?

Saakshi : Not actually...it's strange!

Shree : Hey ..I think it's may be food poisoning !

All together : What?! (Saakshi in mind he's leaving me on the lurch! I won't spare you Shree!')

Rather pushed the break very hard and stopped the SUV.  Due to this Chotu's short slumber broke and his head hit on the side of the  backdoor of SUV.

Chotu : (Waking up in a startle) What happened !!!

Rathod : ( turned to Saakshi and asked in a concerned voice) What did you had in lunch?

Saakshi : Same that you had.

Rathod : But  I didn't have my lunch yet... One minute, Saakshi...if you..

Arjun : Not only you, none of us had our lunch yet, and it's around 5,so it's too late for lunch.

Rather : (Sighed) So you are hungry Saakshi... Just say it straight na, Why you're playing this drama yaar? You scared me.

Saakshi (grinning): Sorry Sameer, Actually, I'm not too hungry but Aisha and Shree are starving (both shake their head negatively)...and look at Chotu... He has just fainted!

Chotu : No, no... I was sleeping, but yes I'm Starving also. (all except Arjun smiled at that)

Rathod  : (smiling)You're impossible Saakshi (and started the SUV).

Arjun : (In a low voice to Rathod) I told you , she's a great dramebaaz. Look, she has just wasted so much time for this trivial matter. Drama queen kahiki!!

Rathod : You're right Rawte, but (turned the SUV to another direction)...you know..

Arjun : What are you doing? This is not the way to the office!

Rathod : I know, but I'm also starving and my body is defying my orders Rawte, I'm helpless!!

Now, Arjun looked at Rathod in disbelieve, shook his head, sighed and turned to look outside.

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Plz tell me how it was.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Nice but different concept dear Plz update it :)
Sakhshi is a real Dramma queen ... But she does care about her friend ... Poor Arjun ... Kya face bana raha tha and Kya Dialouges hain uske miss Chirpy Devi ke liye ... And Rathod is also awesome and funny in this story :)... Thanks Plz update next part soon. Edited by nicky13 - 10 years ago
kunchu thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
that was cute
dramebazz team
Arjun must be upset...lol
continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
nice update 
sakshi  is so caring for her friends.continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
awesome again
aww arjun bro
wid a dramebaz team lol
nice going
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Posted: 10 years ago
Really nice start..
Continue soon
wildire thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
Sorry for being late in catching this up.
A very interesting piece I must say.

I love Horror stories, so naturally this FF caught my interest.

I m waiting to see what more the mansion stores for us.

The second part was a very cute one. Yes, Sakshi as always is the drama queen.
LOL.

Looking forward to see more.

Continue soon!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Loved it .dramabaaz wala accha tha.cont plz
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Posted: 10 years ago
Really mice update dear...
loved it...
Please continue soon...