FF:-ENTWINED SOULS{maaneet)ch-18 page-37 Oct9/11

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Aren't there times when you are determined to have something so badly in your life and you are ready to fight with all the odds to keep it with yourself safe and sound in your heart

But then situations of life and cruelty of fate snatches it away from you and rip it apart from your heart and you just can't bear the pain of your bleeding heart
 
And all that is left with you is pain and love and memories of her and the heart that still beats for her

 
 
Will destiny entwine them together again?

Will he give up the last hope of finding her back?

And will she forget the love they had


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Entwined souls
is story of two such lovers who met at an age
when their souls were basking in the glory of innocence time nurtured their relationship the budding seed of their care which grew up with time into love .
 
 
 
Entwined souls...

There's this throbbing ripping feeling,
its seeping from deep inside,
emotionally scared with no sight of healing,
crashed together so hard to hide,

the blood flows so hot it burns,
a constant reminder of the pain,
for the rays of happiness it yearns,
please snap the trailing chain,

seizing hearts sit so heavily to bare,
in our heaving chests, life full of fibs,
its hurts to much we don't care,
if you ripped it brutally from our ribs,

our souls are scattered like glass,
its cold chards slice deeply,
unable to deal with emotions at mass,
we are being chased down too steeply,

our aching souls no longer whole,
which is why we must join together,
lend each others to fill the bleeding hole,
stop the red soaking the delicate feather,

with spirits and souls entwined,
we can unleash from our framed cage,
two half make whole to find,
the answer to the pain and rage,

the mirror falls like a memory at our feet,
we hate what we see,
but stand side by side under friendship heat,
we are more than whole but beautiful and free,

free from being trapped inside our own head,
the monster the claws our insides raw,
sadness sank its teeth into us and fed,
but now we've found the cure.

Each other.
Friendship.
So diamond bright.
A voice that whispers between trees.
To let each other know.
How our souls are feeling.
How they're healing.
Or how the stitchings are becoming undone.
Because we'll always be there.
Like the sun in the infinite sky.
Petals of rose.
The glimmering moon.
Feel each others pain.
Happiness.
Anger.
Frustration.
With souls entwined.
And most of all.
We understand what other can't.
With souls entwined.


Poem by
Dressed Up as Myself
 
 
I am a huge fan of maan and geet though the writers i read in india forums are much more talented than me

But my heart said its worth a try to express a story of our beloved maaneet in my words...well the journey of this story will only begin if you all will be with me 😳😳
will continue if you all will like me too
CHAPTER-1 Page-1
 
CHAPTER-2 Page-2
CHAPTER-3 Page-3
CHAPTER-4 Page-4
CHAPTER-5 Page-5
Chapter-6    Page-8

 
 
Chapter-7     Page-10
 

 
Chapter-8    Page-11

 

Chapter-9

 

Chapter-10 Page-16
 
Chapter-11 Page-18


 


 

Chapter-12 Page-19


 


 

Chapter-13 Page-22
 


 


 

Chapter-14Page-25


 


 


 

Chapter-15 Page28


 

 
Chapter-16 Page-30
 
 
 
 
ur feedback would really be appreciated...
Miki😊

 
Character's Photo


Abhimanyu singh Khurrana (Abhi)
 

 
SAVITRI DEVI (DADI)

Priya Singh Khurrana(Maan's Mom )

 

 


GEET HANDA & MAAN SINGH KHURRANA
(THE CREDIT FOR THE PHOTOS GO TO THERE OWERS )
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seems intersting plzz do continue soon...n add me to ur pm list...
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Originally posted by: rupzloveu

seems intersting plzz do continue soon...n add me to ur pm list...

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Chapter-1

The day we met

 
 

Maan the winds are really cold please close the the window of your seat

But dadima its so soothing to look outside

The trees and the stars and the moon everything seems to look so beautiful

 

Savitri devi smiled her grandson was complete replica of his father Abhimanyu singh khurrana same looks same attitude the father and son duo has some strange attachment towards nature one who like the chilly cold winds and the calm atmosphere of the scary darkened night and the other who brought a complete new farm house to enjoy this beauty for god knows how many days there is something seriously wrong with the father and son  if only Priya could have been alive to see the bond they shared she would have been so happy her death brought the son and father so close they are each other's pillar of strength but still she can see the loneliness in abhi's eyes  and that's why he looks for such calm and quiet places so that he can think and compose himself and find some peace with just her memories...

 

The screeching sounds of tyre broke her chain of thoughts as the car came to halt unexpectedly

 

Savitri devi- kya hua ram singh apne gadi kyu roki

 

Ram singh-madam sadak ke beech koi ladki behosh padi hai

 

Savitri devi –kya itni raat ko sadak ke beecho beech ladki

                           Jara ja ke toh dekho kahi chot toh nahi lagi hai use

 

Maan – who was till now listening to the conversation between his dadi       

                and ram singh got down of the car

                mein dekhta hoon daadi and ran towards the lying body

                he sat down and observed the petite figure lying down on the            

                road he tried calling her

 

              Hello tum thik ho hello

              but to his vain she didn't replied at

               all he could hear was her sobs

              she was crying for a long time

               it  seemed as he could hear her hiccups and heavy breathing

               he kept a hand on her shoulder and turned her face towards him

           

              a girl hardly of 8 or 9 years old was whimpering profusely infront 

              of him

              mumbling

              I am sorry please take me home please

              there was something in her eyes    

              fear he guessed but that eyes were searching for something on    

          his face a look that had thousand questions in it

 

             Maan savitri devi called- kya baat hai beta kaun hai wo

 

             Daadima koi ladki hai lagta hai yaha kho gayi hai shayad bahut

             Ro rahi hai

             Acha aap yaha aaiye maan hum dekhte hai

             As soon as he got up he felt a tug on his hand

             Mujhe chod ke mat jao please

             yaha bahut andhera hai

             I am scared

            Maan looked back first on her hand and then in her eyes

            her big brown eyes which were looking towards him with some  

            Hope

             there was little shadows of fear,fear that i might not hear to her   

             cries and leave her here she was trying hard to stop her tears  

            which was  continuously coming out of her eyes

 

      Don't worry I won't leave you the reply came out of his mouth as he    

      held her hand little tighter and helped her to stand up

     

 

   Maan- humare saath chalo we will find your house...hai na daadima

 

  Daadima who was watching everything smiled and nodded for a yes

(It was the first time her grandson was talking to someone so calmly either wise he never talk to people so easily not even kids of his own age and here he is talking to someone for the first time so politely and calmly is he the same maan she wondered)

 

 Savitri devi- Maan its getting late why don't you bring your new friend  

                          here and settle in the car so that we  can resume our journey

 

Maan-yes Dadima he said as he pulled her along with himself chalo I am  

                     not gonna leave you yaha jaldi chalo he said

 

And she grabbed his hand and followed him into the car there was something in his hold something that brought sense of security in her something that made her believe he will not leave her as her own people did something that made her believe that he will take her home

Precap-The journey begins😊

Thank u to those who replied
I would be really glad if you all will press the like button and comment would help me know that my imagination is on the right track with the story
 
Miki😊
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Chapter-2
 Ride towards a new beginning
 
As soon as Maan settled in the car with the new found stranger in his life the journey started yet again but for him it was not like restoring a journey which came to a halt for a while, the journey which only consisted of his dadi and his loneliness and the trees and star whom he confided when he felt really alone
It was a new beginning for him a new journey he looked ahead to and for him he knew this journey wouldn't end when he would reach his new farm house but would only end when he reaches to the place she calls her home but something within him told even that wouldn't be end
 
He saw at the girl who was now asleep beside him she was still holding his hand as if she would never let it go not even in her dreams he looked at her tired face the dried tears on her cheeks the loose tresses that was covering her face partially he smiled as he closed her eyes and wondered about those big brown eyes he has never seen anything more deeper than them he saw faith for him in them he felt the need of his being there for her yes she needed her and her eyes were enough to convey that message to him and he somehow felt that it is his duty and his right to obey all the orders that those big brown eyes made to him and all he needed in return
was an assurance that those eyes won't be flooded by tears again...
With these thoughts and promises in his heart he finally drifted to sleep too
 
Hoshiyarpur
Mannat (The Khurrana's new farmhouse)
 
It was 3am in the Morning when the car finally halted on the destination
Everything around was silent savitri devi was glad they finally reached though her tired state made it clear that the journey wasn't a very pleasant one for her she had the minimum amount of sleep and the darkness and the late night journey made her little worried poking her with all kind of bad thoughts but when she turned back to wake up his grandson and the cute little girl she found on the way the site almost made her forget all her worries and distress and a serene smile covered her face
 
Ma a voice broke her reverie as she saw his son Abhimanyu coming towards her
Ma what took you so long he said as he hugged her for a while
I have been waiting for you two since evening pata hai kitna pareshan ho raha tha mein
 
Savitri devi-hum thik hai beta haan humein thodi der ho gayi delhi se nikalte nikalte hi der ho gayi thi but ab toh hum yaha pahuch gaye hai na ab aap saas le sakte hai...she said as she affectionately touched her son's cheek
 
Abhimanyu smiled he loved his mother she was his best friend the one who has always stood with him even after priya's death when he left everyone even his son maan she stood there with him understanding his pain and taking all his responsibility even of maan's...It was only because of her that he was living his life again it was her who made him realise that even maan needed priya and also him and from that day till now abhimanyu singh khurrana has been with his son maan as a father friend and also guide...
 
Abhi-Maan so gaye kya Ma
 
Savitri devi-hmm dekho back seat mein your little devil is sleeping there
 
Abhi-went back to wrap his son in his arms but the sight he saw almost brought a smile to his lip as he saw his little devil sleeping contently holding a cute little angels hand near to his heart and the innocent angel was keeping her head on maan's shoulder
 
Ma Abhi said with a huge smile on his face as he looked back to where savitri devi was standing
 
Kya baat hai abhi
 
Maan bahu la raha ye toh apne bataya he nahi he said with a little smile on his face
 
Savitri devi was little confused as she tried to comprehend the meaning of the words her son said
 
Abhi aap bhi na
 
Ye koi umar hai unki shaadi karne ki
 
Ye toh unki nayi dost hai...jo unhe raastein mein mili thi kafi ro rahi thi shayad jungle mein kho gayi thi
 
Humne socha yaha le aaye aur waise bhi maan ne pehli baar kisi ke taraf khud dosti ka haath badhaya that toh hum unhe akela kaise chod dete
 
Abhi-hmm bahut acha kara apne ma
           Hum kal unse baat karke unka ghar dhundne ki koshish karengey
           Waise maan bilkul pari si dikhti hai Maan ke liye perfect rahegi
 
Savitri devi-aap bhi na beta
                         Aap woh pehle baap hongey jo apney 10 saal ke betein ke liye                      
                          rishta abhi hi dhund rahein hai
 
Abhi-ha ha haan maa
Par hum rishta nahi dhoondh rahein
mera maan toh love marriage karega bilkul meri tarha
aur haan ma mujhe uski pasand abhi se he kaafi achi lag rahi hai
 
savitri devi-aap thoda jyada soch rahe hai beta
                        abhi toh in dono ko pyaar ka matlab bhi nahi pata hoga
 
Abhi-sahi kaha aapne ma
            Magar pyar ko samjhne ke liye umr(age)ki jarurat nahi hoti bas ek
             jhalak hi kafi hoti hai
             Aur mujhe in dono ke maasoom saath mein pyar ki jhalak dikh
             rahi hai
 
savitri devi couldn't argue on that part who would have known about love more better than her own son and after all even he was about the same age when he met priya
 
Precap-none 😭
No one commenting on this ff seems the story line is not good enough it's the last update i wrote but after seeing the response i think i better should st😭op updating this 😭😭
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love the concept and enjoyed reading the parts
 
please update soon !!!! πŸ‘πŸΌ
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hey, don't give up. it takes time for people to find this ff and read. just keep posting and the more updates, the more response u will get. I remember that when I started posting my first ff, it took quite some time for me to get comments but evtl they started comming... so don't give up and do pm all those who are in ur buddy list