ASHLOK FF - AT FIRST SIGHT Last Chapter

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Hi,! guys... It's me. Finally managed to conjure up enough courage to write a fiction. I don't know if it's gonna be a SS or FF. You guys decide where it belongs. Having been toying with the idea for a very long time. But didn't think I had it in me what it takes to write a fiction. Me being a addict to all the fictions on ASHLOK, hope you can understand my apprehensions. Forum has some amazing writers. I will keep on second guessing my self. Something I'm not used to doing. With the urging of few of you to make the transition from poems to fictions, thought I'd give it a try. And here's my first ever offering.


Even during my school days! I hated essay writing. But I do have a very vivid imagination. That is the fuel to the fire that is this fiction. Hope I'm making sence here. Here's the prologue. Let me know if I should continue or not. Special mention to anju, Roshani Sam and farah. For your continuous provocation. Now bare the consequences.




Ps. I don't think I'm sending the pms the right way. Farah run me through how it's done.



Prologue




She stepped inside the room illuminated with a soft pink glow. One look at the occupants and everything was ok. They always have had that effect on her. Everything made sense, every waking hour worth it. They gave her the reason to live. She lived for them, they lived because of her.




Ever so carefully, making sure not to make any sound. She settled her self at the base of their bed and kept looking at them with all the love <font face="Helvetica">in</font><font face="Kailasa">the world</font>. Sleeping so blissfully unaware of her presence. Hoping, praying and thanking all the gods she could think of. Hoping and praying that they may never find out the truth and they never have to go through what she had to. Thanking for the blessing that was bestowed upon her.




Then she remembered her day at the hospital. She had to cover for a friend who fell sick and she volunteered. It was her first time as they said its a light day. So she'll be able to cope. But was it fate or just coincidence...

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INDEX

Chapter 1

Chapter 2

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109852360

Chapter 3 A

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109867809

Chapter 3 B

Chapter 4

/www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4089559&PID=109951760&#p109951760

Chapter 5

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109980756

Chapter 6

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110015191

Chapter 7

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110027286

Chapter 8

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110135289

Chapter 9

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110212572

Chapter 10

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110259952

Chapter 11

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110275633

Chapter 12

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110355880

Chapter 13

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/110427782

[Chapter 14


Chapter 15

Chapter 16

Chapter 17

Chapter 18

Chapter 19
Chapter 20

Chapter 21

Chapter 22

Chapter 23

Chapter 24

Chapter 25

Chapter 26

Chapter 27

Chapter 28

Chapter 29

Chapter 30

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rbb1 thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice prologue can't wait to read the story
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: rbb1

Nice prologue can't wait to read the story


Thanks ray! Will post the first chapter tonight if not tomorrow morning.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Anukalu read some of ur poems...its good to see u writing ff...yes I want ff,bcoz the prologue is really nice...n the tittle is really catchy n interesting...update soon!! All the best!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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CHAPTER 1

Few hours into her maiden shift as a surgeon in the emergency room a man was rushed in by another man in his mid thirties. He was hysterical. The other doctors first try to pacify him and find out what happened to the man in the gurney. He had been a victim of a drive by shooting. It was through and through. The bullet has entered from the back of his torso and exited just below the collar bone. He was bleeding heavily and was minutes away from going into cardiac arrest. He was in shock. He was rushed to the operating theatre, further information was given by the other man who claimed to be his brother. Police took a statement and due protocol was followed. Victim was extreme lucky, extremely rare to not to have any of his vital organs damaged in a life threatening manner. He was in serious situation but it was not life threatening. He would make a full recovery in few weeks time. Surgery was routine and he responded to the medications well. After the surgery she got busy with other patients, but something was nagging her. May be it was the fact that he looked Indian or maybe it was the fact that when she was trying to wake him up bring him back from the effects of the anaesthetics. Suddenly he held her hand that was placed just next to his. He squeezed her hand and she had a strange feeling. Something she's never felt...she's touched many a patient before, but never anything like this. It was not a bad feeling. He looked into her eyes a slight smile appeared in his pale face and said " I'm in heaven" and closed his eyes again. She tried to wake him up again and he opened his eyes and she said," your in the ICU what's your name? He said still looking at his angel, he managed to say "SHLOK" "are you my angel"


A smile appeared on her face in an instant... She said no I'm your doctor. He closed his eyes again. She gave the necessary instructions for the nurses and the interns and left.


When she came back after few hours he has been shifted to a private room and she wanted to see him before finishing off her 18 hour shift. When she came up to his room she saw the name of the patient Mr. Shlok Agnihotri. She went inside, his brother introduced himself as Varad Agnihotri the elder brother. He thanked her for saving his brothers life and she just said it's my job. They were here on business. They were walking back to their hotel after doing some gift shopping at the nearby Mall when Shlok was shot. It was the last day of their two week trip. They were to fly back the next day. Based in Mumbai.


He was still heavily sedated, and sleeping. She checked his file and she noticed he was 30 years. Varad was still anxious, she assured him that he would make a full recovery but he should take things slowly. She took her leave with a promise to come and check on him when she's returns.

Astha opened her eyes when she felt a soft kiss on her cheek. She has failed to keep them from waking up. But she was glad to see their sleepy yet giggly faces. She was bombarded with accusations along with hugs and kisses in equal measure.


Chapter 2

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109852360

Edited by Anukalu - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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YAAAY YAAAY YAAAY!
I'm super duper happy to see you write your first fiction! 🤗
And needless to say, this was AMAZING!
Loved every bit of it!👏

I wonder what does Shlok do, that he had enemies to shoot him 😆
And Astha is a cardiologist I guess, and the people on the bed seem to be her kids if I'm not wrong? 😳
And I loved the "I'm in heaven" part.. 😆

OMG, I can't wait to read further... Pls update soon! 😳
Add me to your pm list!

Ps- Thank you so much for the mention 😳
And about the PM's ... You can ask the interested people to send you a buddy request, and every time you update, just click on their names in your new message and send them the link!
If you still have doubts, I'll pm you the way to do so 😳
Edited by .Farah. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: priya_avi

Anukalu read some of ur poems...its good to see u writing ff...yes I want ff,bcoz the prologue is really nice...n the tittle is really catchy n interesting...update soon!! All the best!!


Thanks priya! This witness is not in terms of a crime. But just what a witness is. Proof of once existence. I herd this line in a Susan Sarandon movie, and it had struck chord in me. She said "your children are your witnesses"
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Posted: 11 years ago
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amazing start dear!!!
looking forward to more!!!!

update update!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Anu... Wow.. What can I say.. I'm speechless. I'm so happy that you decided to pen Ashlok's story in a different angle. "He squeezed her hand and she had a strange feeling" that scene came to my mind.. You know which.. Thanks Anu.. Keep tagging me. Best of luck girl.. Love you.. 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG i love u dear
you accepted my suggestion
thanks
it is awesome
you are not only gud poet but mind blowing writer
love it
please continue soon

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