ASHLOK FF - AT FIRST SIGHT Last Chapter - Page 3

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Oh My God!! I never thought that u would write this fast..😃 Im proud dat I was never wrong abt ur talent..😊 U proved that u r not only a good poet but can write great stories too..👏👏 Thanks 4 considering our idea writing this..N comin 2 d prologue, does Aastha have children?! so where is shlok?! Is dat d mystery?! Anyway, i really love emotional stuffs even though i will end up heart broken after reading those..
In short.. Well begun is half done..so ur job is half done di..⭐️waiting 4 u 2 complete ur work..n no need to hurry
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Amazing Start dear...
Astha and shlok in a different Avatar...
Eagerly waiting to read ur next update...
Do continue soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#23
awesome update
nice start
loved it
continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#24
Really nice story can't wait to read more hope you post the next update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg Anu I am sooo happy to see u finally decided to pay heed to our suggestion and write a story Thank you so much for considering our idea. Trust me you have many fans just eagerly waiting to read any piece of writing you offer them because you are such an amazing writer. Whatever you'll write will be awesome 😃

Coming to your story, I don't know where to start from. Starting from the title everything abt ur story is intriguing. Let me tell you, the title witness invokes interest straight away. I thought it wud be related to some crime but then I saw ur comment abt how u heard of this phrase in some show abt witness being a proof of one's existence like children...well that's just really deep.

And what an idea and concept!! Love love love it 👏 The concept sounds so unique and...mysterious. Astha as a doctor and Shlok as patient...wow. Don't think such idea has been explored yet by anyone. I wonder what's the reason behind Shlok being shot. Does he have enemies? And those people in prologue, are they Astha's kids? Sounds like they are. Hats off to u for coming up with such a gripping concept for ur first story 😃

And let me tell you, if you still have doubts about your story then please chuck them away 😛 because your writing reflects sophistication. Doesn't at all seem like its the first time u r writing fiction. Judging by ur poems I knew you would excel if u write stories and I am happy to know I wasn't wrong. You write so well. You go into perfect detail describing the scenario and incidents 😊

Continue soon. Will be waiting for the next chapter. Btw thanks for tagging me. Plz keep doing so in the future too 😃
P.s. Just to warn u, I have a knack of leaving long comments 😉
Edited by Sam_15 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Chapter 1

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109833453


Chapter 2


One word from them and the fatigue was gone, "mommy" she never get tired of hearing that word. Astha's 4 year old twin girls Roshni and Rashmi, for they gave her light where three was darkness, melted away with their warmth, her heart that was frozen with regret and anger. They are her universe. Her sun and the moon. The bandaid to her scared heart and soul.


She tucked them back and stayed with them till they fell asleep. It was nearly 4 am when she climbed on to her bed to get some much needed sleep. But she was feeling uneasy. She kept on tossing and turning unable to sleep. For some bizarre reason her mind kept going back to that moment when Shlok Agnihotri held her hand and spoke to her in his semi conscious state.


What was so significant about this one particular patient? She just couldn't pin point it, but there was something about him that has caught her imagination. That was giving her sleepless nights. She forced her self to close her eyes and but she opened them in a flash and she reached for the bed side lamp. She got out of the bed and rushed to the bathroom and splashed some water onto her face. She gulped down some water. She couldn't understand why she saw his face smiling and looking at her intently. What does this mean? What was happening to her?


Morning, At the hospital Shlok was slowly coming out of his semi conscious state, and he kept mumbling about an Angel. Varad got anxious and called the doctor they checked his vitals and asked few basic questions to verify his mental status. He was all there. He remembered what had happened to him his name the place. Doctor assured Varad that he's mentally sound and nothing to worry about it's just the heavy doses of pain killers that's making him bit dillutional.


By evening Shlok was fully conscious and he finally managed to convince Varad to go back to the hotel and get a much needed bath, a change and few hours of shut eye. After all he too has been through hell and back last night. But Shlok , kept glancing at the door every time he heard voices or footsteps in the corridor. What was making him anxious or rather the question was who? Shlok kept seeing her face looking into his eyes, the most beautiful eyes the most ,beautiful face he had ever seen. He wasn't sure if he had dreamt of her, a pigment of his imagination or was she actually there in the ICU. He was captured by her soothing voice, it seemed like music to a deaf person hearing sound for the very first time. Her image was so magical like the first sight a blind person saw. Was she real he kept wondering. Just then the door opened and three nurses walked in with his medicine. He was disappointed, few minutes later the house doctor walked in with another doctor they were discussing the patients progress. And his heart skipped a beat when he saw her face. It was her, his Angel.


Chapter 3A & 3B

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/109867809

Edited by Anunilmini - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#27
ME FIRST HURREEE
so Aastha has kids so cute
and love u
u r so sweet u gave my nameto her one daughter.
love the update
the doctor patient relation
different
beautiful👏
Edited by lively_roshani - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Anu read both chapters in one go...its really nice...n ur story is really intense n have a depth in it...loved all ur comparisons like 'bandage to her scared heart n soul'...
Its cute that astha having 2 lil girls but where is their father???
Ashlok feeling connected with each other...now what shlok gonna do with 'his' angel...lovely start with some myster...do continue soon...
P.s:when ur updating a new chapter put it in ur heading,helps reader to catch the updates...
Thank u!!!
Edited by priya_avi - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anukalu



Thanks priya! This witness is not in terms of a crime. But just what a witness is. Proof of once existence. I herd this line in a Susan Sarandon movie, and it had struck chord in me. She said "your children are your witnesses"



Anu thanks for the explanation...after knowing it,the tittle sounds even more interesting...
Proof of once existence...witness...its too good
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Posted: 11 years ago
#30
Nice update... Sound interesting...
Waiting for the next update...

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