ASHLOK FF - AT FIRST SIGHT Last Chapter - Page 53

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Posted: 11 years ago
Cliffhanger... how can u end this update with the first hinted confession of Aastha? :0 loved how she is constantly thinking about him and how she needs to talk to him. She finally starts thinking about herself like that she too deserves happiness and the fears she thought of were understandable what if she wasn't accepted by his family?
Good going pls continue soon :*
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: deepavasudev



thanks honey... hey.. the picture in Apple Junir.. it is little Ved..mine..


awww..ur son is really cute..crowned little prince..n his name is ved?! Now i underdtand y u were using d same name again n agsin for ashlok baby!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: deepavasudev



ANJU,
Wow.. what an amazing thought.. i feel you should start writing.. your level of comparison and usage of metaphors.. etc.. pls start writing...

Rgds
Deepa


thank u so much..im really honoured..thank u very very much
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Anunilmini



Your like Jane with your use of metaphors. It's just so beautiful. I envy you. I don't even know what to say. This time the consistency is all rong. So the cement is not setting. It's all crumbling ...

I'll just stop at that. You are truly brilliant. I'm still waiting for my punishment.
Thank you sweet lil Anju for all these beautiful words.


omg!! Are u planning to kill me?! My heart is beating harder than ever in happiness..n u compared me wid jane?! Oh god!!anju kailas-terminated!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Lovely update Anu...

Wow... the way u described Astha feeling was mind blowing...
The way she was battling with her mind and heart... Poor Astha really had a very bad experience in her past... Hope shlok give her all the happiness she missed ...Shlok is so caring and kind hearted...
At last Astha won the battle...amazing... and decided to call Shlok even without thinking abt the time... so Sweet... lets she have the courage to express her feeling to Shlok...
Anu you r a great poet... I just loved the poem very much... A big hug to you dear...
The way u describe each and every little things r just mind blowing...
keep writing more...
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Posted: 11 years ago
ANU... A BIG FOR YOU...
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: deepavasudev

CARD, CAGE AND COURAGE ...

CAGE :

I was green and my beaks were red , my flying wings and feathers were cut.. when I was not even 6 months..I was asked to do the Monkey job oh sorry the TOTHA JOB.. oh sorry the PUPPET JOB..

I wanted to fly high in the sky.. some thing was snatched.. by my own.. or so called own..

I wanted to touch the sky.. flying like a bird.. but my own guilt .. or my happy but short lived future with two fruits in hand.. with a word called commitment..

MY FREEDOM - snatched at a very young age and again committed because of situations in a cage..

Like a bird.. whose hands and legs are tied.. expecting a day.. to come.. SO I CAN FLY AND BREATHE FRESH...

COURAGE :

After all past tortures.. why I became so numb.. helpless.. not so brave and not having enough strength to fight.. why I have become like a ROCK.. OR SAY.. a statue.. with no feelings.. Im wrong.. the statue carved does have emotions running thru its face or postures.. so .. why im so.. I have feelings.. I can reveal.. but why I have tied ..in me.. why iam not letting it out.. I think.. im scared..but why should I be.. for whom..my so called own.. or the society.. or the new one crossing my life.. thinking.. it might be my RETURN TO PAST..SECOND SAGA..

No... I think.. I just need to MUSTER SOME COURAGE.. IM NO MORE THE PARROT IN CAGE ..

CARD :

I did.. muster the courage .. and finally... spoke to him.. yes..HIM.. the Mr.MCP.. is he so.. I don't think so. . he should be called the Mr.SSP.. - SOFT AND SENSITIVE PERSONALITY.. having a PMA..- Positive mental Attitude... I think.. it will take some time.. so I will also and he will also.. TOGETHER.. WE UNDERSATND.. US AND OURS US ( AS OF NOW ) AND OURS - MY FUTURE FAMILY..

The card.. YES.. the Invitation card...

On this day.. at this ..Church.. Shlok and Astha.. are becoming one.. in the matrimonial bond.. blessed by all Gods..

******

All these happen in a dream.. The situation is .. Where Astha.. is in night shift.. and she dozes of for some time in mid..say... 50 mins.. The thoughts of past some hour.. kept on thinking..it has become a dream.. where her.. confused and flying.. fluttering mind.. makes her think .. from the past to the future ... with a PROSPECT of POSITIVITY.. THAT she will have him.. as HUBBY..

Yes... she is TAKING A STEP FORWARD.. BUT ...ONE STEP AT A TIME..

*******

Anu.. this is what I could write on your chapter..

She is the bird in cage.. She did muster her courage to her own Freedom.. on the process.. Confused lil bit.. but positivity is all thru her actions.. of phone calls.. or her inner mind fight.. and finally calling him.. for " NOT NOTHIN ".. it starts with hi.. I will disconnect.. later.. HEY NOT NO.. NOT NOW.. LET US TALK.. So she is opening herself.. to him.. and will get shelter.. but slowly...steadily.. clearly... perfectly.. finally.. CARD - WEDDING BELLS BABY..

Slow and steady wins the race..

CAGE , FOLLOWED BY COURAGE , FOLLOWED BY CARD - 3 C'S.

Deepa... Wow... just amazing dear...
you have described Astha situation in a lovely and beautiful way...
my god u r a gifted writer dear...
so amazing and mindblowing...
A Big Hug to you dear...
To My Sweet friend...
Sathu..
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sreekailas

Finallyy..aastha decided to open her heart..poor gal!! Due to d faulty mixture of d cement she used, d cracks on her heart revealed itself again..n she tried in vain to close it using her hands!!(dont think what kind of scene this is, i remembered such a scene frm richie rich, not d movie, d cartoon!!)
ever since aastha met shlok she felt like she's drowning..drowning into some deep bottomless lake..like a black hole, his love was attracting her towards it..she remembered dat she's scared of water..she's scared of depth..she got scared in d thought of being unable to breath..!!she weighed all these "facts" with d attraction her heart was developing to dive into d depths of water..but still,she slipped..unknowingly..she tried to withdraw her limbs, but his love pulled her more..n she drowned..4 a moment she thought its okay..but her brain sent alarms to her body..she felt lack of oxygen in her lungs..she struggled not to breathe n fill her lungs wid water..she felt like she would die if she doesnt gasp..but she couldn't..atlast..her diaphragm arched,lungs xpanded..she felt cold liquid rushing into her lungs..it was her death... Mistaken..she thought his love would be her death..she drowned in a breathable liquid..now she's away frm d unreal world ..able to breathe..able to feel d warmth of shlok's love..feeling safe as she is in her mother's womb..feeling like a foetus..
I donno y i typed all these..but i feel lyk dis is aastha's life!!

Sree...Wow...
You have wrote it so well... lovely comparison...just amazing dear...
As deepa suggest u should start writing story/FF... u are a good writer...
waiting to read a lot from you...
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Posted: 11 years ago
THANK YOU ANU... FOR THE LOVELY WRITING...YOUR WORDS GAVE US ...
A BEAUTIFUL WRITING FROM DEEPA...
A LOVELY WORDING FROM SREE...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Chapter 16

Chapter 17


Just as the new dawn brings new light

Your happiness is my only delight

Someone to love someone to hold

Take my hand and let our story unfold

~*AnupamA*~


Astha, stop saying sorry. I was awake anyways. It's already tomorrow. I'm listing" he cut in


"Shlok, I don't know what to do. I don't know if I can be all that you want me to be. How can you be so sure about us. There's so much you don't know about me, about my past. Things I've never repeated to a another living soul. Things I promised I'd take to my grave.You do know that I'm a mother to two little girls. How do you know you'll be able to love them as your own? What about your family? Will they accept us?" She said.


"Astha, I know, just give us a chance. Give me a chance to love you. I can't tell you why I'm so sure about us. But all I can say is that I'm sure about my love for you, of my feelings towards you. And I have seen the same in your eyes. I've not forgotten that you have kids. I will convince my parents. They owe me that much. Even if they oppose it, it's not going to make a difference to me. Nothing is more important to me than you. I will face anything if I have you in my life." He was speaking so rapidly. His thoughts were fighting to come out of his head.


"Astha, let's not do this over the phone. Where can I meet you? Please Just tell me a place I'll be there." Shlok said.


"My shift ends at 6.00 am can you meet here around 6.30" she said.


"No. You've been up all night. You need to get some rest. Get some sleep. I'm not going anywhere. I'll be still here. Will meet later in the day." Shlok said with concern.


"Ok. If you say so. But I'm not gonna be able to rest let alone sleep." She said. But her heart filled with emotions to see his concern for her. It was nice to have someone care about you. She was feeling special.


"It's ok. Rest and then you call me" he said. Ended the call.



He couldn't go back to sleep. His heart was rejoicing with content. She's finally accepted the ultimate truth. She's willing to give us a chance. He wanted to jump and do cartwheels. She agreed to meet me. He was on cloud nine.


He checked the time. It was 5.45. He jumped out of the bed. Changed into a pair of jeans a t-shirt and over it he wore a pullover.


She felt relieved after her talk with Shlok. Her heart felt light. As if a weight had been lifted off her shoulders. No more denying. She was ready to give her life a second chance. Give happiness a second chance.


By 6.20 she stepped out. And to her surprise he was standing, waiting for her on the other side of the road. With a single red rose in hand. His face lit up as soon as he saw her emerging from the hospital door.


All the tiredness just vanished with that single glimpse of him. Smiling at her with all the love pouring from his eyes.


She was gonna cross the road... But he signalled her not to. He quickly came up to where she was standing. He gave her the flower and said " good morning. They didn't have any white lilies"


"Good morning! But what are you doing here. You told me we'll meet later" she asked him with a confused look.


"I know. I just came to take you home. I'll drop you and be on my way"

He said with his mischievous grin.


"You shouldn't have come. I have been doing this for many years. I can take a cab" she said.


"I'm sure you can. But not when I'm around. I don't like you travelling alone so early in the morning" he said.


"Ok. Shall we go?" Said with a smile on her face and hailed a cab.


He opened the door for her. Closed the door after her. And ran around to other other side quickly and got in. As he got in, in his hurry he hit his head on the side handle.


She instinctively reached for his head. His hand was on the spot he got hit. She rubbed his head. He just kept looking at her. She realised what she was doing and quickly withdrew her hand.


"Thank you!" He said.


She tried to look outside. "Astha, are you mad at me for coming?" He asked looking at her.


She just looked at him and nodded her head to indicate no. And smiled at him. He never knew that a simple smile can bring so much happiness. Sitting next her in the cab. He felt he had everything he needed. His life, his future, his happiness, his family, his dreams, his hopes. She meant all that and so much more.


There was so much they wanted to say to eachother. But their eyes succeeded where the words failed. A single teardrop was waiting to betray her, he ever so softly wiped the tear off her eye with the back of his right index finger. And signed her with a slow nod of his head to not to cry. And kissed the tear in his index finger.


He slowly moved closer to her. And ever so gently took her delicate child like hand into his. She rested her head on to the side of his shoulder. They didn't say anything. They didn't need to. Their heartbeat, the sound of their breathing it was speaking all unsaid words that needed to be spoken.


She felt safe. A feeling that she's not felt for as long as she can remember. She wanted that moment to last forever.


He was feeling content. With her next to him he wanted this moment to last forever. He wanted to wrap his arms around her and never let go.


She asked the cab driver to stop in front of beautiful white picket fenced house. She looked at him with longing. She wished she can invite him over. But she as well as he knew it was too early. He tried to get out. But he stopped him. And told him "it's ok I can open the door." And smiled at him.


"Thank you" saying that she was about to step out of the cab. When she felt her hand being pulled. He was holding her hand. He slowly drew it close to his lips and placed a soft kiss. His eyes held so many desires. She blushed seeing his action. "Pleasure is all mine" he said in husky tone. "Until I see you again" he kissed her hand one more time.


She smiled and pulled her hand. She walked towards the house. He waited for her to go inside the house. She turned back to see if he's still there. He was looking at her. He smiled at her once more. She just gave a shy smile just before she opened the door. Then he was gone.


Chapter 18

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Edited by Anunilmini - 11 years ago

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