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I just caught up with the remaining chapters. You know I experience a lot of maturity in your writing...the way u express the feelings. It's coming out so well. And the way you have expressed their anxiety, its just so so true. Happens when one is in love :). Great going though am wondering how you will take it forward. Needless to say a definite relief from all the physical abuse being shown in the show! Kudos to your speed too...!!👏
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Originally posted by: DJakaDesiJames

I just caught up with the remaining chapters. You know I experience a lot of maturity in your writing...the way u express the feelings. It's coming out so well. And the way you have expressed their anxiety, its just so so true. Happens when one is in love :). Great going though am wondering how you will take it forward. Needless to say a definite relief from all the physical abuse being shown in the show! Kudos to your speed too...!!👏

aww it's nice to see you here, I'm waiting for your update as well
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Posted: 11 years ago
I just enjoyed reading the update.
I really Superb.
Thanks for updating regularly and for the pm.😊
Edited by athmi - 11 years ago
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Chapter 8
He would've run a marathon for her if she had asked him to.
Oh he has it real bad😉😆 As you were saying you are the "dead kinda girl" that day was the biggest lie you must have ever told😃😆😆 i mean this was so cute..you were doubtful abt Shlok after reading Meerabs update...your Shlok is so naughty..one I havent read in any other story since he is clearly trying to flirt with his doc😈 I was rofling when he asked her to call him Shlok..what a reason to state😉


Chapter 9

I was so lost in Ashlok forgot to read the part of Shloks marriage with the hurricane😆 in future Anjali will sure be skeptical of Astha's presence in her son's life...plus her past! I was thinking how long it will take for shlok to woo Astha😛 but he will have to first know her past to break her inhibitions! Already he has been feeling her sadness❤️
Love Anjali and Shloks bond...they share everthing⭐️
there was a spring in her step. Spark in her eyes. Blush on her cheeks. Tune in her lips. Smile on her face. Hope in her heart. All unaware to her.

This was woww..why dont you write some poems for given incidents too? Sometimes😛 Btw I noticed your update length is increasing thank you😳

Sorry for the late regard 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sreekailas

aahan..at first i asked u to write sometng, n now u r asking d same to ME?!😆
Poor aastha, she sees things in black n white, no in between..she need to realize that life has numerous other colors in store!

Even I see things in black and white. There's no grey! Things are either right or wrong. No maybe. See u prove my point again. U really shud give writing a serious thought. I'm sure, iknow in my heart ud be great at it.
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Originally posted by: DJakaDesiJames

I just caught up with the remaining chapters. You know I experience a lot of maturity in your writing...the way u express the feelings. It's coming out so well. And the way you have expressed their anxiety, its just so so true. Happens when one is in love :). Great going though am wondering how you will take it forward. Needless to say a definite relief from all the physical abuse being shown in the show! Kudos to your speed too...!!👏


Oh! My sweet aparna, thank you for taking the time. I know just how precious it is to you. Mature or boring and bland... I can never write anything steamy remotely close to u. U are and shall remain our steam queen. I'm trying to finish this before I go to Sri Lanka for vacation. My ammi will kill me if she sees my affair with the iPad. Plus at navis granddads place no internet. Thus the speed. Glad your enjoying the story. I really appreciate your feedback. Love ya...
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: NatashaRia

Bookmarked...

Will read soon


Let me know your precious thoughts...
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Originally posted by: athmi

I just enjoyed reading the update.
I really Superb.
Thanks for updating regularly and for the pm.😊



Thanks Athmi. Happy you like the story so far.
Your welcome. I'm trying to finish this before going to Sri Lanka for vacation.
Edited by Anunilmini - 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Aishaa3

Chapter 8

He would've run a marathon for her if she had asked him to.
Oh he has it real bad😉😆 As you were saying you are the "dead kinda girl" that day was the biggest lie you must have ever told😃😆😆 i mean this was so cute..you were doubtful abt Shlok after reading Meerabs update...your Shlok is so naughty..one I havent read in any other story since he is clearly trying to flirt with his doc😈 I was rofling when he asked her to call him Shlok..what a reason to state😉


Chapter 9

I was so lost in Ashlok forgot to read the part of Shloks marriage with the hurricane😆 in future Anjali will sure be skeptical of Astha's presence in her son's life...plus her past! I was thinking how long it will take for shlok to woo Astha😛 but he will have to first know her past to break her inhibitions! Already he has been feeling her sadness❤️
Love Anjali and Shloks bond...they share everthing⭐️
there was a spring in her step. Spark in her eyes. Blush on her cheeks. Tune in her lips. Smile on her face. Hope in her heart. All unaware to her.

This was woww..why dont you write some poems for given incidents too? Sometimes😛 Btw I noticed your update length is increasing thank you😳

Sorry for the late regard 😃


I read others updates and I have no clue on how to write romantic scenes. I like to read, but I'm extremely shy to express is it. My hubby will vouch for that😉
He's a man of action. So he will go after what he wants. And he wants her bad...
She will try to hide. ... But not indefinitely... He'll confront her...
And he'll,be blown away... Or may be he'll weather the storm...
Stay tuned folks...

I thought about the poems aishaa. But sadly I just don't have the time. I'd love to. Let's see.
Thank your for lengthily comment. I love it. Do keep on reading and comment when ever time permits you. Im trying to cater to the readers wishes. I'm reader first ...remember. Thank you once again dear Aishaa!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Chapter 11


Aisha! This short poem is dedicated to you! For convincing me to put a poem in with the updates. Thank you.

Chapter 12

She was going through the motions herself. The kids wanted to go the park, so she took them. Watched as they played and when ever she sees a child with a father, he would come to her mind. All she thought was about him. Most of the time She didn't even realise it herself. But he was constantly on her mind.

She put up a brave face for her daughters'. But they were quick to recognise their mother was sad. Once back home, Rashmi kissed her on the cheek and seated herself on Asthas lap. She hugged her mother with all her might and asked with concern "Mama, why are you sad? Is it because of us? Please don't be sad!" Astha just tightened her embrace and tears just started to flow unchecked. She, was trying to say something to her little saviour...but words refused to be spoken.

All the pain and heartbreak that was kept capped just erupted like a volcano. Spilling out in the form of her tears.

Astha held onto her precious saviour as if her life depended on her. Then it dawned on her, her behaviour is effecting her babies. She had to be her usual self. She made a mental note not to let her girls see her like this. She realised how much it effects their sensitive minds. She wiped her tears and told little Rashm she's not sad anymore, and they didn't do anything to make her sad but they are the sole reason for her happiness. She said she was sad about a patient. She was telling the truth.

Rashmi was satisfied with her mother explanation. She made her mother promise that she'll never be sad. She said she'll try. She kissed her mother one more time and ran towards the TV room, her favourite cartoon Mickey Mouse clubhouse.

Shlok tried to call Astha, but she just didn't answer the phone. He just needed to hear her voice at least. He was running out of patients, he did something he really didn't want to do!

When the nurse came with his medication, he asked her about Astha. He asked her if she's married. And she said "no". He asked about the kids.

She said "all I know is that she's never been married and she's not seeing anybody now. Many fellow doctors have been interested in her, but she's not even gone out for a cup of coffee with them. But she's an amazing person. Always ready and willing to help anybody who's in need. Everybody loves her. She doesn't treat us like how other doctors does. She's a real sweet person."

He asked "Do you know how many kids she has and their age?"

"She's got four year old twin girls" replied the nurse.

Shlok thanked the nurse.

"You're not the first patient to fall for Dr.Astha, nobody's been successful to date. I wish you all the best!" Said the nurse and left.

She's not married! He was on top of the world. He still had a chance. He knew the reason for her absence today. It was because she didn't want face him. If she didn't have any feelings for him then she would've just sent him a message or called him told him such. The fact that she's avoiding proves she too feels something for him. The realisation made His heart sing many a love song, painted hundred perfect sunsets.

Shlok, had been a very optimistic person. The more he thought about Astha, the more he was convinced of her feeling something toward him as well. This gave him immense happiness. He vowed to himself he would give it all to win her love. To win his Astha

Did he just say Love. He didn't realise it. He was in love Astha. For the first time in his life, Shlok Agnihitri is in love. He has fallen head over heels in love. It was the most profound feeling. He was flying without wings. Dreaming with his eyes wide open.

He wanted to spend every waking moment with her. There was so much he wanted to tell, so many things he wanted do with her. He wanted to experience life with her. He wanted to grow old with her. He wanted to have a family with her, kids.

Then he remembered her kids, is he ready for them. What about his family. His parents? What Will they say? Am I ready to be the father to someone else's kids. Will they love him? What about the biological father?

His mind was creating an emotional whirlpool. He was willing to sacrifice any thing, he was ready to try anything for her. To be the sole recipient of her love.


I died a million deaths thinking of your rejection

Darling, I know you too can feel this connection

Don't shut me out, Let our love blossom

My love is forever this is my promise that is solemn!


Chapter 13

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Edited by Anunilmini - 11 years ago

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