#2Rewriting YHM Living for each other:Pt-16;Pg-05;6/2/17

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Hello,
Guys! I have an idea.We always have different thoughts in which each track should be molded. So lets write our own Yeh hai mohabbatein! I mean we will rewrite Yeh Hai Mohabbatein. We will use the same characters and story-line but we will change the situations however we want it. Cvs have shown worst sequences for many of the good tracks. I'm sure writers here can make them the best. So writers who are interested can notify which track they wanted to write and go on... All tracks will be in the same order but remember you can change the whole track. Hope I made sense!!!
By the way I don't know many writers here but I know they are the best, so please let me know if you people are really interested. Please do reply who are interested in reading this story also.
Tracks:
1. IshRa acting as a couple before marriage
2. IshRa Wedding
3. Ruhi's custody
4. Ishita helping Param and Simmi
5. Ishita helping Raman in business
6. Param fiasco - Mayasundar
7. IshRa helping mimi to get together
8. Amma's accident
9. IshRa picnic and cricket
10. Ishita's hand injured
11. Revival of ishita's licence
12. IshRu helping Raman in girl child abandon scam
13. Revelation of shagun as mihir's sister
14. Mani track - Cutieruhi
15. Ashgun marriage
16. Shagun at bhalla house(This can be written as many tracks or a single one)-Shreya303
17. RuDhi custody
18. Aadhi adosclene problem
19. Adhi accepting IshRa and bhalla family
20. Subbu into Ishra lives
21. IshRa confession
22. IshRa consummation
23. Ishita helping Raman in kid's juice deal
24. IshRa's baby

Guys,
If I had missed any tracks, please do notify me. I mentioned tracks which are worth of writing again. Writers who are interested can notify me. Also you people can suggest tracks you people are interested.
NOTE: ALL OF THE TRACKS WILL HAVE NO CONNECTION AND EACH TRACK CAN BE WRITTEN IRRESPECTIVE OF THE PREVIOUS ONES. I HAVE MENTIONED ONLY TRACKS WHICH HAD BEEN ISHRA 's!

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Index:
A scorned woman( param fiasco) by Mayasundar :
Pyaar hua ikraar hua( Mani's track) by Cutieruhi
Living for each other ( shagun at bhalla house) by Shreya

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Part-14



As the morning star showed its presence, the couple opened their eyes, bodies fused together.

"Ayyo! Raman me late hogayi hoon" Ishitha hurriedly gathered the blanket around herself.

[Oh! No, I'm late, Raman]

Swiftly holding the blanket and pulling it over their heads, completely concealing themselves from the outer world,

"Ab koyi nahi...Sirf tum aur mai" he whispered, cuddling close to her flushed skin.

[It's just you and me]

"Ra...man!" As his eyes swept across her voluptuous body, she shied away and lay on top of him burying her head into his chest, in order to escape from his gaze. Smiling at his innocent wife, he kissed her temple straightening her hair.

"Tum bahar math anaa" he said plunging his right hand, he took out a pocket-fitting frame and got into the blanket again.

[You don't get out of this]

She opened her eyes, as she was nudged by the frame and her lips curved up seeing the photograph of their laughing faces, leaning into each other. It was caught when they saw the video of Mihir, being the priest of the wedding of Ruhi's doll.

"Romi ne click kiya tha, aur meine frame karwaya" he said caressing her sleek fingers which held the picture, while she moved up and kissed his forehead.

[Romi clicked it and I got it framed]

"Happy New Year Madrasan" he whispered as their eyes caught the others. "Hamesha tujhe hasaunga jaisa uss photo pe hass rahi thi, pagalon ki tarah" he chuckled kissing her heart, while she smiled closing her misted eyes.

[I'll always make you laugh, as in the photograph, like crazy!]

"Happy New Year mera Ravan Kumar" she pecked his lips snaking her arms around his neck, as he began nuzzling her shoulder.

***

"Ishima Aaj hum dono evening shopping pe jayenge. Mujhe shaadi ke functions ke liye nayi dress karidni hai" said Ruhi, having her breakfast.

[Ishima, we will go for shopping in the evening. I want to buy new dresses]

"Nahi! Aaj Ishitha mera sath party pe jayegi. Important he, skip nahi kar sakthe" he said shutting Ishitha's about-to-open mouth.

[No Ishitha will attend a party along with me. It's important]

"Nahi papa, Ishima meri sath chelegi Mera paas koyi dresses nahi hai" Ruhi tried convincing him.

[No papa! I don't have any new dress. She will come with me.]

"No Ruhi! She will come along with me"

"Hmmpf...Ravan Kumar papa!" exclaimed Ruhi angrily and glanced at her mother who stood thinking what was she supposed to do.

"Okay! Koyi baath nahi Rooh...Ishima aapke sath afternoon shopping jayegi aur raath kho papa khe sath, Okay? "Ishitha tried convincing her grumpy daughter.

[Oh, it's okay! We will go for the shopping in the noon and I'll leave with papa in the night! Okay?]

"Okay, Ishima bye! Bye Ravan Kumar!" she quickly kissed her parents, whose lips instantly curved up and ran off to her waiting grandfather.

"Bilkul papa jaisa, bohuth gussaili" said Ishitha smiling.

[She's like her dad, very annoyed.]

"Phir bhi apni Ishima jaisa, jyada der mujhpe gussa nahi reh sakti" replied Raman winking.

[But she couldn't stay angry upon, like her Ishima!]

"Bas pagal nahi banna hai, tumhara jaisa" Raman pulled her leg.

[Hope she wouldn't be as crazy as you are!]

"Haww!Mein pagal nahi hoon, After all aap ho Ravan Kumar, Bewakoof Kumar" she gave it back to him.

"Haan...aaj kal sangat kha kuch jyada hi asar ho raha hai" he taunted.

"Ishu kanna, Apna pati se aise bath nahi karthe he" her Amma advised her.

[Ishu, this is not the way you speak to your husband]

"Haan Ishu, aise nahi bolthe. Ajav pair choo mera" he teased her but sensing that his mother-in-law is serious regarding her words, he continued.

[Yes Ishu, You shouldn't say so, Come and touch my feet]

"Amma, May be aap sahi bol rahe ho. Lekin kya kare Ishitha meri biwi hone se pehele meri dost ban gayi aur mujhe who aisa hi pasand hai. After all, mei bhi usse kayi baath boltha hoon joh nahi bolna chahiye. Its ok, hamme aise hi rehne dejiye" he simply projected their relation.

As everybody adored the couple, he lightened the atmosphere saying

"Yeh toh mujhe last friendship day pe French kiss deeyi thi". He winked while Ishitha's mouth opened in shock. Before she could react, he sprinted into their room.

[She gave me a French kiss on friendship day!!]

"Aisa friendship day pe bilkul nahi hua tha" she stated, as a matter of fact.

[Nothing of that sort happened]

"Oh! Toh Valentine's day pe huyi kya?" Mihika pulled her leg.

[Oh!! Is it on the Valentine's Day?]

"Kuch bhi!" Ishitha turned red while Raman made his way towards her.

"Suno, Important party hai isliye jaa rahe hai. I know ki tum tired ho javogi isliye sirf ek ghanta rehenge" he left.

As the family smiled seeing his care, Ishitha grinned.

***

"Hum ghar agaye!" Ruhi barged directly into her room to drop the bags her small hands were carrying.

"Arey! Ishitha, Wait there, I'll help you with the bags" Raman volunteered while everyone was amused.

"Thank yo..." her words dropped as he hugged her tight, laughing, taking advantage of her opened arms. The family had a good laugh while she started hitting him throwing all the bags on the floor. He released her as the continuous vibration of his mobile was disturbing him. He excused himself for the call, as Adi volunteered helping Ishitha.

Adi found her adorable, darting her eyes from his, embarrassed at his father's act. He tried comforting her by giving some smiles which obviously did some help. He saw her excitedly showing all the things she bought, he was also gifted a watch which he liked a lot.

"Thank you Ishitha aunty! Lekin aapne sab ke liye, aapke liye nahi?" he asked.

"Woh kya ha na Adi, mujhe apne liye choose karna bahooth difficult hei...toh" she was cut by Neelu who gave her many bags which were delivered in her name.

"Woh tumhare liye shaadi ke liye..." Raman said, sitting on the couch.

While everyone started checking the bags, he pointed towards a packet,

"Yeh Simmi ke liye aur yeh payal Ananya ke liye, use pasand ayegi na?" he asked.

"Hmm...acha toh hai! Abhi bulatha hoon...Simmi...Simmi" she shouted.

"Simmi! Bolo yeh acha hai na?" Ishitha asked.

"Haan!yaar bohuth acha hai yeh kitna acha design hai" Simmi said.

"Yeh tumhare liye...Raman ne laya hai aur yeh Ananya ke liye" Ishitha gave the gifts to Simmi who was overwhelmed and hugged her brother.

Adi who had seen this, observed how Ishitha had silently appreciated Raman for his gesture and he acknowledged the selflessness of Ishitha. He could never remember an instance in which his mom was this giving. The effect of the venom spread by his mom was being diminishing.

***

"Raman abhi upar auo" Ishitha's voice boomed into his phone. Silently excusing himself from the family, he made his way towards their bedroom. As he entered into the room, he was awestruck by the beauty bestowed upon him. There stood his wife carrying a navy blue silk gown which extended from her shoulders exposing her shoulders and milky back. Her hair tied into a bun catalyzing her grace.

"Madrasan..." he whispered making his way towards her. As she turned around and walked towards him, locking her eyes with his passionate ones. He rubbed his lips fiercely onto hers, then chow them gently. He leaned completely onto her, misbalancing her and held her tight against him by her waist. His hand which was on the head of the couch, stabilizing them, lowered further into the couch. He rose his head looking at her serene face which further dipped into her neck.


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Edited by shreya303 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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waiting for the next update and congratulations for new thread
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Many many many many many congratulations f ur new thread...I wish u create more more thread...update soon
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Congratulations dear for next thread I want subbu .ishra triangle love story .subbu what to take ishita back to his life how ishra will take it
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Congrats shreyu diii for the second thread
Dii I want to see a jealous puttar
I mean jealous of subbu
And ya even the part of ashgun marriage
Like if ashgun actually got married
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congrats for the new thread
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Congratulations for new thread
Waiting for updates


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Congo for new thread
Lovely updt
Thanks for pm

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