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damon fan

@-damon-

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#41

totally loved it
seriously..awesome part
can't they both see how much they love each other..
i loved when sanskaar said those things to swara in d end about divorce nd all..swara really desereves it.she has been giving really hard time to sanskaar even in the show..
Loved the quotes that u put in b/w
Once again loved it waiting for nxt part

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medha

@ToujoursPur

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#42

Shruti🤗,

what do i say about this part...I sincerely have no idea where to begin, and certainly none about where i would be able to stop.😊

you gave the entire conversation such a feel with your words. even an impatient person like me was compelled to go back once or twice and re-read the previous line, just for the pure unadulterated joy of it.👏

You know, i have always admired the way some people can write everything in detail and still manage to catch people's attention. writing emotions in detail requires a lot of finesse, which i'm grateful to say i'm learning from some writers on this forum. You happen to be one of them.⭐️

You'll tod-phod you next job. Congo! matlab don't do tod-phod...just pharo it. Oh me and my incoherency. sigh!😲 like do your best.😛

love---

medha.

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jasw

@jasw

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#43

OMG! This is an incredible TS! I am new to this forum. I have started watching this serial recently and I am hooked onto it already!😊 Well, some Sanskar Maheshwari has to be blamed for this! 😃

Your take on Sanskar and Swara is superb and so real! I so wish the CVs take the story forward like you envisaged here although going by the melodramatic tracks they churn out, that looks kinda impossible. 😆

I so loved the reference to Heathcliff and Darcy(Darcy being my all time hero❤️).

Looking forward to the next part.

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Anu

@anu91

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#44

No words to describe...

U nailed the show...

Simply wow...

Waiting for next part to read...

My sweet sanku and shonu both are in pain...😭

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Smilelicious

@Smilelicious

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#45

Shruts i'm in love with your stories 🤗
I read it twice (and i'm going to read it again) because i didn't want it to end.
You left me speecheless. I've seriously no words to describe how well you have penned it down.
You described their pain extremely well 👏
Shruti you are amazing 😳
And with the last line you just nailed it 👏 Such a powerful line.
Now waiting to see SwaSan happy and back together 😳

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JIDHNYASA

@Jidnyasa

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#46

Awww..

That's so nice..

Loved the talk and the flashback

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JazzyM

@JazzyM

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#47

Thank you for a fabulous update...

"Heaven doesn't want me and Hell's afraid I'll take over!"

This would have been Sanskaar of the serial before the entrance of Swara in his life...loved how you showed the emotions of both characters. Very real...when you have rejected the love, to claim it back it's more than difficult. The recipient might take your declaration of love as pity or as a thank you or as gratitude or simply as no way out...it's tough. For the other party, declaring it again, would mean forcing the person or asking for gratitude...Sanskaar will never lower his standards to that level... Poor Swara...

You brought all this into the update...superb...👏

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piccola1

@piccola1

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#48

Can I just say you had me gripped all through the lovely 1st shot..but had my heart in my throat, during the 2nd? What a wower⭐️ of a story this is turning out to be TootiFrootie ! Cant wait for the 3rd shot...This will stay a truly treasured story, in my all time favorite list !

The entire story, so far, has been beautiful ! The angst superbly captured..the heartache, the heartbreak, the despair and the sheer misery eked out marvellously ! 👏

The Sanskar you've potrayed is what we'd like to see him as..at least...from a professional point of view! Successful, Confident, Smart and on Top..Personally though, he is at the rock bottom, despairing, miserable and completely alone ! What a super contrast !

Swara..desperate, miserable and so afraid of being separated forever..mirroring his angst, his heartache and his heartbreak! But I am relying on her to chase him down, catch him and tell him its the same with her ! Coz he has given her enough hints in his barrage of words today..enough signals for her to catch on to how it is with him ! Please make her do it !!👍🏼

Can I demand a reunion that has pictures please? Any of those we have in our galleries...? Your stories are so well drawn out, we can visualize them..If you add at least one pic..it'll be an absolute Treat !😃

Thank you for it !!🤗

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: Lifez_Beautiful
ok today I will sleep much better!! Thank u so much for updating this dearie... 🤗

Nw coming to the story as such... U just touched upon all my soft spots there... I love my Heathcliff and my Darcy and maybe am a lil partial to Heathcliff despite him being a jerk no1 to his supposed wife... His EPIC love for cathy is all I will always remember... Like I said I love my angst monsters and what better than WH for that?! 😳 And now since u hv triggered that thought in my head, I'm sure tomorrow whole day I'm gng be thinking of the ways Sanz wud fit in Cliff's characterization... Hmm...

And as for the conversation in the studio... it was very satisfying to my angst craving mood at the moment... So once again 🤗

Ahhh- your such a sweetie- thanks so much for liking the "angst monsters"- me too!!!! But yeah, I have always hated Heathcliff and yet been repellently fascinated by him. I thought there was nothing good in either Cathy or Heathcliff save their love for each other and I always annoyed other book lovers with my comments about them- but I seriously did find it very disturbing that it was that sort of disturbing soul searing obsession that was madness in itself but yet when they described their feelings for each other, you got chills. So glad you liked it and thanks for this and the comment below too 😆. Will PM you for the next one xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: fia21
Apologies for commenting so late. Got busy with something.

So I just caught up on reading these two parts and my mind was BLOWN!!

Shruti, this is one of the most spectacular pieces of writing I have ever had the good fortune of reading, and this is coming from a person who absolutely loves to read. Books have been my lifelong companions and if I could, I'd want to get buried in a library 😆

Anyway coming back to this amazing TS, I'd first like to commend you on the concept of your story. It was a mix of both current and possible future track of the show. But I must admit though that now I'm biased towards the show progressing the way you have penned out in this story. The angst between the two characters is so beautifully expressed through words that it made it easier for me as a reader to connect with them. Their pain, their love and their desire for each other was so potent that I couldn't help but visualize your writing into an actual scene in my mind.

Two broken souls, equal parts longing and dreading to make the first move to declare their love for one another, the desperation in their eyes and words, it was truly a beautiful moment captured even more beautifully with words. Facing each other after such a long separation, unwanted but needed by both, was a poignant reminder of a past they once shared. Even with all it's ups and downs, it was clear they cherished the memories of it all.

I loved how you showed how desperately Sanskar did not want to face another rejection from his beloved. He didn't even give her a chance to speak, fearing to give life to his dreadful thoughts. And Swara's slow but steady realization of her growing feelings towards her husband, a man she just doesn't want to give up on but is too scared to acknowledge that fact, owing to the possibility that she just might have screwed it up for good judging by the distance he had put between them before they finally got separated, much to both their dismay.

Can't wait for the third and final update. I don't know if I'd be able to wait that long. I'm bad in dealing with curiosity. Especially when it comes to knowing the ending to a story. But I'm sure their confession and union is going to be CATACLYSMIC!!

Great work Shruti 👏 . You should know, you've just made another fan!!!!

Wow- I just love reading your comments Fia- you take such time to give your feedback and you so engage with what the writer is trying to portray- kudos to you 🤗. Your comments are making me blush- I have so much to learn and often when I read back what I write I literally cringe 😳.

You've really captured what I was trying to show with this in your summary- yayyy, it came through to you!

Re final part- I had it figured out but then this changed as i was writing so that too has now gone haywire 😆. I have a few possibilities but I want the one which makes the most sense to me for them, if you get what I mean? I wanted to do justice to both Sanskaar and Swara but still make sure their ending is individual- I really hope I can do it some justice. Thanks again and catch you again soon! Mmmwah.

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