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Lifez_Beautiful

@Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

ok today I will sleep much better!! Thank u so much for updating this dearie... 🤗

Nw coming to the story as such... U just touched upon all my soft spots there... I love my Heathcliff and my Darcy and maybe am a lil partial to Heathcliff despite him being a jerk no1 to his supposed wife... His EPIC love for cathy is all I will always remember... Like I said I love my angst monsters and what better than WH for that?! 😳 And now since u hv triggered that thought in my head, I'm sure tomorrow whole day I'm gng be thinking of the ways Sanz wud fit in Cliff's characterization... Hmm...

And as for the conversation in the studio... it was very satisfying to my angst craving mood at the moment... So once again 🤗

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Lifez_Beautiful

@Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

PS: ur end quote... ❤️

PPS😆: Thnx for the PM swty!

Actually when I saw that the story was back on top n saw ur name in the last person who answered list, I had hopefully chkd wether u hv updated and to my grt joy u had, so i had startrd reading this even before u modified the title let alone PM me! 😆

Edited by Lifez_Beautiful - 9 years ago

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fia21

@fia21

Sparkler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#33

Apologies for commenting so late. Got busy with something.

So I just caught up on reading these two parts and my mind was BLOWN!!

Shruti, this is one of the most spectacular pieces of writing I have ever had the good fortune of reading, and this is coming from a person who absolutely loves to read. Books have been my lifelong companions and if I could, I'd want to get buried in a library 😆

Anyway coming back to this amazing TS, I'd first like to commend you on the concept of your story. It was a mix of both current and possible future track of the show. But I must admit though that now I'm biased towards the show progressing the way you have penned out in this story. The angst between the two characters is so beautifully expressed through words that it made it easier for me as a reader to connect with them. Their pain, their love and their desire for each other was so potent that I couldn't help but visualize your writing into an actual scene in my mind.

Two broken souls, equal parts longing and dreading to make the first move to declare their love for one another, the desperation in their eyes and words, it was truly a beautiful moment captured even more beautifully with words. Facing each other after such a long separation, unwanted but needed by both, was a poignant reminder of a past they once shared. Even with all it's ups and downs, it was clear they cherished the memories of it all.

I loved how you showed how desperately Sanskar did not want to face another rejection from his beloved. He didn't even give her a chance to speak, fearing to give life to his dreadful thoughts. And Swara's slow but steady realization of her growing feelings towards her husband, a man she just doesn't want to give up on but is too scared to acknowledge that fact, owing to the possibility that she just might have screwed it up for good judging by the distance he had put between them before they finally got separated, much to both their dismay.

Can't wait for the third and final update. I don't know if I'd be able to wait that long. I'm bad in dealing with curiosity. Especially when it comes to knowing the ending to a story. But I'm sure their confession and union is going to be CATACLYSMIC!!

Great work Shruti 👏 . You should know, you've just made another fan!!!!

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Lumos_18

@Lumos_18

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

I am totally blown away.👏👏👏

I can't even form a coherent thought in my mind to come up with a proper reply.

So much intensity, angst, poignance.

You have mentioned Heathcliff and Mr. Darcy, two of the most popular characters with an anti-hero character. Though I've always been a Mr. Darcy fan than a Heathcliff fan, Heathcliff is too much to handle and I can understand how Swara must have felt. Fantastic referance by the way. Sanskar do remind me a bit of both.

There were a lot of lines which went straight to my heart.

"Loving someone was after all, never reason enough to be loved back."

I had to stop here for a good 5 minutes. This simple sentence contained so much within it. The agony, the despair that Sanskar feels about not being loved back. The pain behind his acceptance, that Swara can never love him back.

Hats off. 👍🏼

I can sympathize with what Swara did due to her obvious confusion and fear of heartbreak again. Little does she realize that's exactly what she is doing to herself. To spare her of heartbreak in the future, she is breaking her heart every day in the present.

And Sanskar! For me he is the only real character in the show. He had shown different shades, like every other human being. And he should be forgiven for that, because that's what human's do. We make mistakes and we forgive them. In the real world, there is no black and white. And I really really hope that Sanskar gets his share of happiness, not just in your story but also in the show.

And now being the committed fan girl that I am, I beg of you to make Swasan happy.

Brilliant update. 😳

And now I've realized that I've rambled a bit too much, I'm gonna go before you fall asleep.😆😆

Do write more.

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-Ros-

@-Ros-

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

This is so so beautiful, exceptionally written! 👏

"he had explained to her that it was perhaps because of Kavita that he had fallen for her the way he had. What he had felt for Kavita was born of happy times, certainly love but love of the variety that grows in a natural way between two young souls who love being in love, learning to like and enjoy everything good in each other. His and Kavita's love was never as hollow as her and Lakshya's relationship, but neither was forged from the fires of shared pain and joint suffering- thus indestructible unless by themselves. It was only after Kavita's death that rage had consumed him, rage born of his helplessness and the unfairness of having a good soul snatched from him and from this world in such a brutal senseless way. Kavita had never seen the Sanskaar Swara had- dark and full of hate, bent of vengeance. "

This. This is why I've fallen in love with SwaSan. ❤️

EDIT: Thank you, this has totally made my day!

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ZAINAB

@Miss-swasan

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#36

I LOVE YOUR FAN-FICTIONS THEY ARE ALWAYS SO CREATIVE

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Swathy

@SwathyS

Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Thanks for the update .

Well i hope she confess in the next at very begning so that we will get a part full of swasan

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Your all so lovely for reading and commenting. I'll be doing individual replies once my work day ends as I start a new job from today so please bear with me! I'm very grateful! X

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Shivangi

@Annei123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#39

Congo for ur new job !!!!

Lovely update

Hope all the misunderstandings b/w swasan gets clear soon 😃

Do update next part asap

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The.Lannister

@The.Lannister

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 9 years ago

#40

Thanks for the PM.

I am so happy that we get to read what swara is feeling & felt all those months ago. I sorely miss that on the show atm. You really do get Sanskaar. This behavior is so typical of them.

I also liked that you have kept the dialogue in hindi. I could easily imagine them actually saying these things.

Waiting for them to get back together forever and ever!

Congratulations on your new job!