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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: kunakshafan26

Read all chappies firstly congos for the new thread :) nd srry for my late cmmnts nd irregular ones too :( but due to some problems I m not able to visit forum regularly so sorry :( but apart from that the chapters specially last 3 were heart wrenching I don't believe how she is so strong inside to hurt zain to this extent nd how he is so strong to bear each.nd every taunt of aaliya nd working in the graveyard this was too surprising for me :( I srlly can feel his tears also it was awesome :)

I was wondering where did you disappear ...
yes Zainu baba is a tough cookie and Aaliya is nuts to crack him
he would go to any extent to win her back ...
loads of love
Sim
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: manny136

wow what a confrontation btwn zaya. The pain and loneliness that oozes out of zain is so heartbreaking but he did hurt aliya and this is the real redemption now when aliya is there with him. His working at a place that started the most painful part of their lives is symbolic and makes things come full circle in a way. Of course its just the beginning there is still more pain and redemption to come. Aliya finally talked to him and her actions like not wanting to take th money kissing it while returning it totally show she isnt immune to zain his love and especially his pain. this is just the start and lets c what happens tomorrow. Beautiful update so heart touching and meaningful. Cant wait for the next one.

Manny
yes the real redemption ...with rhea he suffered alone ...but with this he knows he want to ask for forgivness ...and will go to any extent to get it
the next update might tell you what aaliya is made up of
loads of love
Sim
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: nashfa

Awesome chappy sim

What a confrontation between zaya
totally loved it
continue soon
Take care
Lots of love



Riya

Riya
Thank you so much
loads of love
Sim
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: zaya.fatima

Khud se padva lo ...umra bhar bhurke mai bhi reh lunga ...koshish toh karo ...

The way Zain said this to Aaliya it was hilarious🤣

And the one when she said mudo & he was like peche say marna mat I was laughing hard at that line too😆
But I loved the way Aaliya kissed the currency notes and secretly kept one . . . ❤️
It was depicting her conflict being a lover and hater at the very same time & her heart was more attracted toward the first option

And the line when Aaliiya said: Agar aik baar or marne ki baat ki tw gala ghont dun gi . . . . .
It reminded me of her words when Zain had an accident in Beintehaa and Zain have mentioned that too.
The conversation between ZaYa was tit for tat type loved the way Zain was confronting her and she was adamant to ignore him but it was emotional to the level that it was making me cry😭
Clearly you have justified their emotions so well,It was truly depicting their pain masked in words
All in all It was a mind blowing chapter Sim👏
Continue Soon😊
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Thank lord Kiran
atleast someone read the humor...I was waiting to c if anyone read it or not and girl you surely caught the right lines ...and the exact scene ...yes their talk was from that scene ...when zain had a accident
its always a fight of words between them
Thank you so much
Loads of love
Sim
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Posted: 10 years ago

Your comments are fab...just fab ...love you all..

Ok, I dont know how a single line went on to become a full chapter...consider this as an OS...it is a part of the story whatever happened between them ...I always believe the unconscious mind secretly picks words and weaves a story ...this is Aaliyas version ..it is not nice ..infact horrible..and I didnt want to update it ...but I just wanted to share it ...the next update maybe tonight again if I am not that sleepy..

Dedication: To Sakeena ...Zaya Crazy ...

You are a very beautiful writer yourself ..please write ...the shayris and the dept speaks volumes to the thoughts and feelings that are drapped in that heart dear ...open up...I want you to write ..to the most keen reader of my story, a small tribute to you ...

This is tangent writing ...when I am in a weird mood ..sorry for hurting any religious sentiments for me khuda and ishwar are same ..had it been a hindu setting the curse to god would still be same..so please dont feel offended ...

Wont ask you to enjoy ...but once u read close ur eyes and see harshads face ...and prees too

love you all loads

Sim


Chapter 10

Khauff...

Aaliya Ghulam Haider ...mai tumhe talaaq deta hoo...talak talak...talak ...she stood there in a daze as the rain splashed on her face ...the tears vaporized with the rain drops as she stood there ...with a fistful of mud ...he walked away from her

...plunging her world in a darkness ...she wept till her tears had dried ...Mamu ...kyu kiya usne aisa ...kyu ..

the sobs faded with the splatter ...seeping through the soil towards her Mamus grave ...his restless soul ...trying to stop them ...from breaking a relationship that he had fixed ...

Aaliya heard some noise as the rain dimmed its lashes ...the shoveling of mud ...the metal click ...mixing with the stoney noise ...

Sobbing as she turned ...she saw someone close by ...a new tomb was being dug ...the wet dress and her weak legs walked to see if someone can help her ...she called out ...Suniye ...

He turned around ...those eyes that had an innocence ...a repentance ...a need to be held ...to be loved ...

the wet mud painted his bare legs ...it was a disrespect to wear shoes in a grave ...the gravel ...and tiny pebbles ...few of which had embedded in those not so soft soles ...

Legs that shook a bit from the cold ..hands that had never ever dug soil even for a small pod ...the length and breath of the tomb ...she could see only his face ...as the mud levels towered his height ...

Ji Boliye ...he spoke as he wiped his muddy hands on his tired arms ...smudging his shirt a bit ...

Tum yaha ...

Aap kaun ...

Zain tum yaha kya kar rahe ho ...yeh sab ...the pain of seeing him in that place was unbearable ...

Zain kaun hai ...

Tum ho ...aise kyu bol rahe ho ...

Nahi mai zain nahi hu ...

Toh kaun ho tum ...

Naam toh pata nahi ...par ...mujhe log choote nahi hai ...

Kyu, she asked to ponder what those eyes that had an over caste of pain were questioning her ...

Haram hu na ...uske liye ...sab ke liye ...log toh bas yeh naam se pukarte hai mujhe ...Haram ...he was smiling

Khude ke liye aise mat bolo ...

Kaunsa khuda ...

Wahi jisne tumhe ye zindagi di hai ...

Ohh...aap uski baat kar rahi hai ...he laughed ...who waha peeche he pointed out ...

Aaliya turned back...uski waha kabra hai ...maine hi khodi hai ...dafan kar diya usse...jab dekho mere peeche pada tha ...tang aa chukka tha ...toh wahi par daal dya usse ...

Accha ek baat batiye ...she was crying ...

Aap koh kisine bataya nahi ...

Kya ...

Ki mare huae logo se baat nahi karte ...

Kiski maut hui hai ...

Meri ...kabra par khadi ho ...ehsass nahi ho raha hai aapko ...

Kya bakwas kar rahe ho ...

Oh ...ab bhi shayad thodi jaan baaki hai ...woh bhi chali jaayegi ...raund ne aayi ho na ...his eyes blazed with anger ...

Zain ...aise kyu bol rahe ho ...

Ab adat si ho gayi hai ...woh kya hai na nafrat ikhata karte karte ab jubaan se sirf kadvahat hi utarti hai

chaleiye ..jaiye ...mujhe bahut kaam hai ...abhi tak hissab poora nahi hua

kaisa hissab...

aree apne gunaho ka ...wahi toh bhar rah ahu ...kishto mai ...aajkal EMI ka zamana hai na...log tadpate aur sazaa bhi har mahine ...har hafte kiston mai dete hai ...he laughed ...meri jaan bhi kishton mai jaa raha hai..

Zain ...kyu bol rahe ho aise baatein ...

Mehsoos karta hu ...bolta nahi hu ...koi baat hi nahi karta mujhse ...

Aap se ek baat kaho ...agar izazaat ho toh

She stood quiet enhancing the deafness of the graveyard ...

Maine dekha abhi aap ke saath joh hua ...dariye mat ek din lautega who ...

aur haa tab maaf mat karna usse ...khoob tarsana ...jaise mai tarsta hu ...theek hai ...

Aur haa ...kisise boliye mat mujhse baat hui ya dekha ...log pagal samjhenge ...jaise mujhe samjhte hai ...

She stood still as her legs buried in the soil...

Auraton ka andarr aana mana hai ..pata hai na ...phir bji chali aayi ...bahut aziz the na who aapke liye ...reham dil the ...janat mile unhe ..isliye unki kabra nahi chuyi maine ...maila ho jaata ...

She was crying ...bitter tears as his words digged her grave ...

Ek kaam karegi mera ...choti si guzarish hai ...

Kya ...

Usse kehna ..bahut pyaar kart ahu ...intezaar karunga ...yehi hu ...issi jagah ...tadapta hua ...akela ...

Zain ...khuda ke liye chup ho jao...

Ho jaunga ...humesha ke liye ho jaunga ...andhere aur khamoshi se ab toh ek pyaar sa hota jaa raha hai ...aap bahut boti hai ...who bhi mujhse aise hi baat kiya karti thi...ab sirf nafrat karti hai ...

Jaiye na ...akele rooh koh satate nahi hai ....he turned around to continue digging as she turned back...

she wanted to tell him to stop ...as she mustered up her courage ...and turned again ..there was a fresh tomb ...sealed with wet mud ...a living dead man ...

Aaliya screamed as she got up...crying her heart out ...nightmares that haunted her ...she wiped her tears and the got up from the bed ...walking towards the balcony ...shaking

Allah ...kaisa sapna tha ...please hifazzat karna uski ...bahut dard mai hai ...mai bhi hu ...

Par ...aisa manzar kabhi nahi dikhana ...uski kahi hare k baat ...nazar aayi ...kaise samjhao usse ...ab nahi mud sakti peeche ...chut gaya hai who haath ...her sobs faded ...as she saw his face ...


Halki si hasi chaiye ...mujhe tere labo se bas ek maafi chaiye ...


SIM


Pre-cap: Aaliya takes Zain out where 😉

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Posted: 10 years ago
Sim,
Firstly I'd like to really thank you for the dedication, its a feeling of honour that makes me smile. Well, I must say really less people understand me and understand the difference between my words. Really less people can me between the lines. And gladly your one of them. Bolted emotions- the reason of me being such a keen reasons are many but of them one is, that I can very finely relate myself to Zain & Aaliya. Every chapter explains a part of me. The way you write, it can be felt and connected by and ti the heart.

Honestly, 'mein shayar toh nahi...' but love teaches us all. We have spoken before and I remember you saying this story displays alot of you. And like 'love' has made you a writer...'love' has taught ne how express in the form of shayris. I am a writer. I love to wite, but for now in a state where sitting in front of blank screen, knowing what to write makes my fingers shiver. And expressing sends terrors and fears doen my heart.

Connecting to the story a little revealation, Aaliya- a scared soul to fall in 'love', scared of betrayal. Where she stands, without words this chapter showsthe insides it shows a part of me in personal. As much as I enjoy Zain his tries and his purity to love...the way it makes me believe into love once again is unexpressable. But looking back at Aaliya, her state, condition and mindset seems fimiliar, circumstances are such where she wants to scream to the world how much she loves him. But simply she 'Fears'. Aaliya somehow makes me realise being harsh isnt being strong- it's being weak to face reality.

Whereas the question of me expressing, I might start writing again, but for my heart and soul to return and gain strength to speak for love again, wite for it, express it, might take time, and maybe this time a little longer then expected.

Thank you Sim,
For unknowingly being an amazing friend
And for clearly being a marvellous writer.

And a tribute to your writing, your imagination, your understanding, you being Sim in return.


Edited by zayacrazy - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Amazing update excited to know where Aaliyah takes Zain 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
Superb Update sim
Exited to know where would aliya take zain
continue soon
take care








riya
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Posted: 10 years ago

chapter 4
Khuda meri izzat k hifazat karna\
Ya Allah ..hifazat karna ...meri makhmali tvacha khurad na jaaye

The whole chapter was fun filled..but these two lines just cracked me up..perfect lines for this chapter..
Sim,I should start calling you a painter,who paints exquisite paintings which touch the core of our hearts..
it was jovial...something we can relate to zain..moresoever..its something I would die to see Harshad portray..
it was simply a treat...rejuvinating and beautiful...
Love
Ann
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Posted: 10 years ago

The pain which Zain is trying to hide is just a reminder to him that he's alive..that he needs to live for another day..because he needs her in whichever way he can..he needs her to come back to him..
if you can make your readers smile..you can make them cry too...the last chapter was funny..but this one...was something that made me cry...
The kind of silent tears which debilitate the dull ache in my heart...
Aaliya is hurting herself..and she's hurting him...she's right...maybe its jealousy...maybe its pain..but hell..this is the best redemption track i have ever come across...
Love
Ann

(CHAPTER 5)

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