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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello friends. 😊
Okay i know this time i am extremely late for an update, i hope you guys haven't forgotten this SS 😕 Well, i don't even expect from you all to remember, my fault completely and i am sorry something very sudden and unfortunate happened, the reason of my delay. And if that wasn't enough now i am caught up with viral, ugh! But but, sorry no excuses, and here you are for the next update.
And also one thing, this SS is going to end soon. maybe in 2 or 3 chapters as i don't want to stretch it unnecessarily leaving ya'll bored :)
Plus i want to thank you all amazing people for coming and hitting the like button and commenting, thankyou dil se! I may not reply to each and everyone this time but i've read each comment and i get obliged reading every bit of it.
Thankyou 🤗

Two amazing people always being my inspiration to come and update here, Bhavini di and Jahanvi di ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago

Chapter: 10



Precap: Jalal and jodha start their journey towards amer, jodha tricks him to rest and they spend a night in their way.
They finally reach amer.



Raja bharmal and mainavati welcomed them inside the palace. It was their first visit after marriage so the arrangements were made accordingly, palace was decorated like a newly wedded bride. Every person working in the fort was dressed up with grace for welcoming their daughter and son-in-law. "Jodha jiji!" a chirping shivani came and hugged jodha "Pranaam Jiju Sa" she turned towards jalal and greeted him. Jalal smiled and nodded his head. Dadisa too joined them and they all shared a family moment after months. Jodha was extremely happy meeting her family after such a long time, she longed to see them. "Jamai sa aap thak gaye honge, jodha jao inhe apne kaksh mein le jao...thodi der vishraam karlenge toh thakaavat mehsus nahi karenge" mainavati said. Jalal looked at jodha and smiled a bit from the corner of his jawline...jodha just nodded at her mother and ignored jalal. They walked together past the corridor with a pin drop silence hovering all around. Jalal was taking small steps in order to annoy jodha. "Subhanallah kya behtareen kaarigari hai" he looked at the fabulous engraved walls. Jodha stopped and turn around to look at him. Jalal pointed towards the wall "Behad khoobsurat hai yeh jodha begum...kamaal ki kaarigari hai" She all understood his intentions, she smiled at him and stood there speaking nothing. Jalal
Yeh kuch bol kyu nahi rahi hai
Jodha Humei pata hai aap kya karne ki koshish kar rahe hai...par hum aapke jaal mein nahi fasne waale
After some seconds of silence and staring jalal himself says "Chalein?" jodha smirks at him and makes way towards her room. Her room was huge, just like a rajput princess should possess, royal and elegant. It had a huge round bed in the middle. Jalal went and sat on it "Aaiye jodha begum thoda aaram kar lijiye" jodha stood there looking at him, he knew that they never shared a bed so how come this time she will agree but did she had an option? He smirked to himself. At the same time jodha's mother came "Pranaam jamai sa aapko koi takleef toh nahi ho rahi?" jalal immediately stood up and smiled at her "Nahi rani sa, aapki beti hamari bahut ache se seva kar rahi hai" he passed a look to jodha. Jodha glared at him and said "Maasa acha hua aap aa gayi, dekhiye na inhe vishraam hi nahi kar rahe, kitne thak gaye hai" Mainavati "Kyu jamai sa, aaram ki kaafi zarurat hai aapko.." Jalal with a confused look "Um...jee bilkul..hum aaram karte hai bas.." and he sat on the bed. Jodha "Chaliye maasa, hum chalte hai..." Jalal stood up again with a thud "Hum?" Jodha "Haan! Hum! Ab aap aaram karenge toh hum kisse baat karenge, isliye hum shivani ke paas jaa rahe hai" Jalal "Par jodha begum..." Jodha "Dekhiye na maasa hum paas hote hai toh inka kabhi aaram nhi ho sakta, inhe samjhaiye na aap" Mainavati "Haan jamai sa aap aaram kijiye, jodha ka kya, woh toh yahi hai" Jalal's face fell, his plan backfired. Jodha shifted close to him and with a smile said "Humei aapki seva karne ka kuch toh avsar dijiye shenshah" jalal glared at her. Jodha to mainavati "Chaliye maasa, shenshah ko sone ki aavyashakta hai" and she giggled at him and passed a victory glare towards him. Jalal was pissed "Hum bhi dekhte hai jodha begum aap kab tak humse bhaagti hai, bhaagne ka bahut shauk hai na aapko, agar aap bhaagin hai toh hum yaha ke cheetah hai, raftaar kahin zyada hai aapse" an evil smirk reached his eyes.

Mainavati and jodha were sitting and talking, after a long time they got some moments with each other. "Jodha beta tum khush ho na apne sasuraal mein?" she asked her loving daughter caressing her hand. "Haan maasa hum bilkul theek hai aur khush bhi" jodha gave her a comforting smile masking all her sorrows. "Jamai sa tumhara ache se khayaal toh rakhte hai na?" her mother got curious. "Ve bahut ache hai maasa, humei kisi bhi cheez ki kami mehsus nahi hone dete, hum unke saath sukhi hai" jodha said whatever came up on her tongue. Though she was upset at what juncture her life brought her but she knew he was suffering the same and the blame was on equal heads. Mainavati was relieved seeing her daughter happy. The way she saw them talking in the room and their intensity towards each other, she understood that their lies a deep connection between them which can never tear them apart. After spending some quality time with her mother and her sister, jodha didn't realize when sun got settled and when night-time came. Shivani "Jodha jiji jiju sa aapka intezaar kar rahe honge, aapko unke paas jaana chahiye" this statement brought jodha back to problem. How can she go and sleep with him on the same bed? Jodha "Haan bas hum dadisa se milke unke paas jaate hai" she nodded and wished her sister goodnight. Jodha was walking alone in the corridor "Ab hum kya kare, kuch toh sochna padega" she went to her dadisa's room and luckily she was not sleeping. "Dadisa!" jodha came and hugged her. "Are jodha, soyi nahi ab tak?" her dadisa asked her in surprise. "Nahi dadisa, humei kitna waqt ho gaya aapse baat kare aur aapke god mein sar rakhke soye hue, aaj hum aapke paas soyenge" she passed a big smile. Dadisa thought a bit about shenshah but looking at her lovely jodha she agreed and made her head lie on her lap. They talked about jodha's married life and jodha inquired about the palace happenings and their routine, happily time passed and they fell asleep.

It was 2 in the night when for the 10th time jalal went and stood on the entrance of their room, just to find her coming. He was waiting eagerly for her to come to the room but she didn't show up. Finally he decided to search for her; after all he could not stand the whole night waiting for her in the corridor! He sneaked outside and started scanning the palace, there was a staircase going towards the terrace he guessed, then there was raja bharmal's room, shivani's and then he reached dadisa's room. There he found jodha sleeping close to dadisa, she was looking adorable just like a kid. Jalal thought to himself "Kab aap hamare saath apne dukh dard baatengi jodha begum, hum aapko issi tarah khush aur sukoon se bhara dekhna chahte hai" jalal sighed, he wanted to be there instead of dadisa to share that closeness with jodha, to feel being alive and to be loved. How he wished that moment to go straight away inside the room and kiss her!
Wait! He can still do that! What if she's sleeping. Jalal looked right, then left and barged inside the room slowly at a snail's pace. He reached at the corner of the bed and looked at jodha...she was cuddled into the blanket and only a small part of her leg was visible...jalal's hand reached her and with two of his fingers he tickled a bit at his feet. Jodha was in deep slumber, she just twisted her legs and again drifted into the sleep.
With no reaction from her he again did the same thing...this time jodha's sleep broke in the middle and she sat on the bed with half open eyes. Jalal hid himself near the bed and waited for her to do something, he was smiling...jodha found no one and she again went into sleep...jalal peeped over her and found her sleeping Hamari neendein udaake aap chain se nahi so sakti jodha begum he again tickled her feet, this time on both the feet...making jodha come out of her sleep at once! Jalal got no time to hid himself and they both came face to face...jalal smiling at her and jodha in shock.
"Aaap!" she spoke wearing a shocked expression in her big eyes.
"Shhh" jalal kept his hands on her mouth and signaled towards dadisa. Jodha looked at him in anger...but they were too close by that time. There was no sufficient light in the room, moon was the only source. Their faces were shining under its light and the environment had already turned sensuous by them sitting on bed so close...jodha in half sleep half awaken state, with her senses not working at this point of time she was losing herself in this moment. Jalal was lost in her beauty all over, her brown eyes shining like pearls...he could feel her deep breath on his hand, he shifted himself closer towards the bed surprising jodha a bit...but she didn't move back, she was enjoying this intimacy...with his hand moving much closer covering her mouth in the same position and touching her lips created a sensation between them. She turned helpless and love struck, she was not getting time to even think before him. Jalal wished this night to never end, he was so close to his lady love and a mere touch of her made him go nuts. He slowly started moving his hand down to see her lips...she was taking deep breaths and looking in his eyes. Inch by inch the distance between them was fading; he could see her pink lips which were appearing to be striking desirable to his eyes. They were losing themselves in the moment and wished to not come out from the passionate embrace; their shadows were about to unite when dadisa shifted in her sleep stealing the only moment left for Jalal and Jodha. The shift in her sleep made jalal and jodha sit like a statue on the bed and stare at her like fools. Within seconds jodha grabbed jalal's arm and took him towards the door.
"Itni raat ko aap yaha kya kar rahe hai" jodha spoke in a whisper yet reflecting anger in her tone.
"Pehle aap btaiye jodha begum aise raat ko apne shauhar ko bina bataye aap yaha kyun so rhi thi!" he got furious.
"Jaise ki aapko kuch pata hi nahi"
"Hum yeh baat baithke bhi kar sakte hai"
There came a silence for few seconds; jodha didn't know what to say next in response to him resolving the problems surfacing between them.
She looked at him for a second then diverted her gaze "Ab aapko yaha se jaana chahiye"
Jalal "Ek shart par"
"Kaisi shart?"
"Kal raat aap hamare saath apne kamre mein rahengi"
Jodha hesitated, she didn't know what to say.
"Aur agar humne mana kar diya toh?"
Jalal smirked "Toh fir aaj dadisa ko karvat lene mein zara takleef ho jayegi"
Jodha's mouth got wide open at his audacity she looked at him with disgusting gaze and murmured something under her breath.
"Kuch kaha aapne?"
"Nahi...haan...woh theek hai kal hum aapke saath rukenge..ab aap jayiye"
Jodha made a worried face while looking here and there.
Jalal "Abhi toh hum ja rahe hai, kal aap aisa kuch nahi kar payengi jodha begum...yaad rakhiyega" he stared at her making her go all gaga over him. She was surprised at his courageous words, how come so confident? He surely dropped a bomb over her and this time she was aloof of the diffusing kit.
Jodha "Ab kal kya hoga" she looked upwards in the sky in an order to ask her krishnaji to save her from this chaos.
Night time arrived leaving jodha and jalal sleepless in their respective rooms. Their situation was the same; none of them was worried of what will happen the next day but what happened between them few hours ago.
Jodha was sitting on the bed, her hand curled up hugging her knees and her chin resting on the back of her palm...she was busy thinking just one thing If dadisa wouldn't had made us realize then probably we would've...oh god where was my control lost? Well i don't have to...we are married...jodha ugh!! What's wrong with you, how you can let him unmask you so easily! If today you're reacting this way in front of him what will happen tomorrow? One full night in the same room?
Stress marks re-appeared on her forehead and sweat started to roll down her face.
Jalal on the other hand was sitting on the window and staring at the moon with a dark sensuous smile playing on his lips. He felt so much better after playing an already winning game. He was shooting daggers at the shining moon "Kal aapki roshni ko tez taraar jawaab dene hum apne chand ko leke aayenge, bas aaj raat ka intezaar, kal aapko apni jagah khaali karni padegi"
Moon was watching and shamelessly smiling on their state, what he has planned for them they didn't have a slightest idea.


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Edited by surbhimathur - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome plz update nxt chappy tomorow plz plz loved it
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Posted: 10 years ago
RES!!!
THIS TIME ILL SURELY COMMENT!!!!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Waooow outstanding update surbhi ... just loved it amazing ... superb 👏 the best part of this update which made me rofled cum blush was this
Jalal "Ek shart par"
"Kaisi shart?"
"Kal raat aap hamare saath apne kamre mein rahengi"
Jodha hesitated, she didn't know what to say.
"Aur agar humne mana kar diya toh?"
Jalal smirked "Toh fir aaj dadisa ko karvat lene mein zara takleef ho jayegi"

bwuahahah 🤣... my jalal is sooo cute , passionate & daring ... OMG i sooo much loved this daring answer of his ...☺️

btw when can I expect hot SR of these two love birds ...
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Posted: 10 years ago
part 10
nice part...
shes know how to trouble him...
but he never gives up...
cont soon dear...
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Posted: 10 years ago
Nice update👏
loved it❤️
update soon😊
n thanx for d PM😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
Surbhii.. firstly sorry for commenting late as I was stuck up in work.. You had viral fever too, huh!! I pray and hope you are fine now. If not, get rid of that disgusting guest soon, it's no pleasure tending to unwanted guests for long 😉.

You wrote an update amidst all the fathoms, so I don't complain on the length this time. But definitely coming ones should be longer 😃. And you are planning to end this in 2 or 3 chapters? Why dear? I'd recommend you do it if you are too much occupied, but not under the impression that we are getting bored. I just love your writing, your Jodha and Jalal as they both are sensible and realistic. I'd always look forward to reading more of them. So, even if you end this please pick up some other track and describe it in your own style. That's a bigger relief from watching illogical characters on screen.😉

Coming to this update, WoW!! Ja and Jo nearly kissed, but missed, haan?? 😆 Translate to me that dadisa ko aaj karvat line.. I didn't understand due to my poor Hindi knowledge 😕. I loved the way Jalal tricked her to be with him next day. What's in store darling? What has the moon planned for them? A SR? 😳 If so, I'll be eagerly waiting for next chappy, it as it should be an awesome read in Surbhi style. ⭐️

Love u loads and update soon.. 🤗
Edited by hemakeerti - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni

Waooow outstanding update surbhi ... just loved it amazing ... superb 👏 the best part of this update which made me rofled cum blush was this

Jalal "Ek shart par"
"Kaisi shart?"
"Kal raat aap hamare saath apne kamre mein rahengi"
Jodha hesitated, she didn't know what to say.
"Aur agar humne mana kar diya toh?"
Jalal smirked "Toh fir aaj dadisa ko karvat lene mein zara takleef ho jayegi"

bwuahahah 🤣... my jalal is sooo cute , passionate & daring ... OMG i sooo much loved this daring answer of his ...☺️

btw when can I expect hot SR of these two love birds ...



I googled the meaning of karvat.. is it sideways? Is jalal saying that he'll sleep with them if she doesn't budge in? 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: hemakeerti



I googled the meaning of karvat.. is it sideways? Is jalal saying that he'll sleep with them if she doesn't budge in? 😆



Yes di :D He says "If your answer is no then i suppose dadisa will have problem turning sides in the night" as he will sleep with them.

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