IshRa TS: I see you, I see you not. (Final Pt 3 - Pg 10

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Nidoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Blame it on the meaningful discussions that have begun happening on the forum again.

Blame it on the mad YHM chatterhouse that my crazy girls are.

Blame it on the snail's pace at which the show is moving, which gives me absolutely no IshRa hopes for at least three more weeks.

Blame it on the little excitement that is building up at the thought of IshRa confrontation - 7 saal baad.

Blame it on YHM sweeping SPA away.

Blame it on KP & DT, who still manage to make look Raman and Ishita real in the bleakest way possible.

Here's a piece of work that naturally came to me while I was working today, and that almost never happens now.

Part 1: Did I just see you?

Part 2: I just saw you, and I can't stop.

Part 3: I see you, I see you not

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Nidoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Part 1 - Did I just see you?

As is evident from the main title of this TS, it is about when Raman sees Ishita, or when Ishita sees Raman, or when they both see each other, or don't see each other.

It'll be a two or three shot, depending on how I finish it up, and don't worry, this will definitely get completed as the continuation of the plot is already in my head.

I have attempted a different writing style for this TS. It's a blend of my usual style + some monologuing. Would love to have honest feedback about it 😊

900+ words. Not proofread.

Monologues and self-talks are colored.

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Nidoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

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-Anku-

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Posted: 9 years ago

Nids 🤗 I LOVE YOU so so much for this ...even otherwise..but this was such a surprise. Didn't see it coming. I was so happy when you said you were posting and it's so worth it.

I like how you've dealt with this. You directly plunge into the feelings and situation at hand here, wasting no time to let us know the man's feelings whose in a mess from within and nothing less of a corpse on the outside. The words are hard hitting, making you feel the emotions Raman is undergoing. The best part is, you don't let your opinion here come into the way of the narrative and it leaves it to us to form an opinion. Which is amazing...I have that to learn from you when I write.

The best moment that you penned was the build up to Raman realizing Ishita's presence... it wasn't dramatic...It was going to happen we knew but the way you write send a thrill down the spine and when he finally sees her, the battle, the argument or the jumping match between Raman's warring mind was a master stroke. There's no explanation, there's no detail of his emotion, there's no reaction expressed in your first shot, but the argument he has with himself says it all... GENIUS is not the word for this.

I love how you write Nids, I've always admired the depth with which you perceive characters and stories and to be able to pen them detailed at the same time in cases where its more summarized but still manages to say all the same ...you do it both so perfectly.

I can't wait for the next one already 🤗 UPDATE FAST

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-Atii-

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Posted: 9 years ago

NIDS

OMG.

LOVED. IT.

UPDATE SOON.

bYE.

❤️

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Zoyamalik2005

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: -Nidoo-
Blame it on the meaningful discussions that have begun happening on the forum again.

Blame it on the mad YHM chatterhouse that my crazy girls are.

Blame it on the snail's pace at which the show is moving, which gives me absolutely no IshRa hopes for at least three more weeks.

Blame it on the little excitement that is building up at the thought of IshRa confrontation - 7 saal baad.

Blame it on YHM sweeping SPA away.

Blame it on KP & DT, who still manage to make look Raman and Ishita real in the bleakest way possible.

Here's a piece of work that naturally came to me while I was working today, and that almost never happens now.

Part 1: Did I just see you?

I'm excited to read this in a few minutes! I attempted to write something too, part 1 of 3 is up. But man I'm not skilled with ff, I think analysis will be my thing after this. It's so hard and so many fabulous writers on this forum, hats off to u all!!! I think I'll go back to analysing these crazy people instead of creating my own stuff. Well done everyone who create their own beautiful stories. It is not easy.

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gargpoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Awsm update ...
The way u described raman's state of mind..superb...
Its like he is fighting with himself...his monologue n self talk...too gud...
Loved it
Cont soon

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-K.13-

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Posted: 9 years ago

Omg Nids! ❤️

This is so so good! I loved the mental dialog of Raman!

Can't wait for the next part of this surprise! 😳

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Nidoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Zoyamalik2005

I'm excited to read this in a few minutes! I attempted to write something too, part 1 of 3 is up. But man I'm not skilled with ff, I think analysis will be my thing after this. It's so hard and so many fabulous writers on this forum, hats off to u all!!! I think I'll go back to analysing these crazy people instead of creating my own stuff. Well done everyone who create their own beautiful stories. It is not easy.

Thank you so much 😳 Even I find analysis posts better than fiction, but then sometimes ideas just flow in and you feel like writing 😊

I look forward to your take on this 😃 Meanwhile, can't wait to read your FF 😳 You have a way with words that have convinced the old members to come back, and the negative ones to back off. Love your analysis posts 👏

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Nidoo

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: gargpoo
Awsm update ...
The way u described raman's state of mind..superb...
Its like he is fighting with himself...his monologue n self talk...too gud...
Loved it
Cont soon

He IS fighting with himself. He wants to be happy and angry at the same time. He loves her and hates her at the same time. It's not an easy thing to see your assumed dead wife suddenly standing in front of you.

I'm glad you like it 😳 Thank you 😊