Nids 🤗 I LOVE YOU so so much for this ...even otherwise..but this was such a surprise. Didn't see it coming. I was so happy when you said you were posting and it's so worth it.
I like how you've dealt with this. You directly plunge into the feelings and situation at hand here, wasting no time to let us know the man's feelings whose in a mess from within and nothing less of a corpse on the outside. The words are hard hitting, making you feel the emotions Raman is undergoing. The best part is, you don't let your opinion here come into the way of the narrative and it leaves it to us to form an opinion. Which is amazing...I have that to learn from you when I write.
The best moment that you penned was the build up to Raman realizing Ishita's presence... it wasn't dramatic...It was going to happen we knew but the way you write send a thrill down the spine and when he finally sees her, the battle, the argument or the jumping match between Raman's warring mind was a master stroke. There's no explanation, there's no detail of his emotion, there's no reaction expressed in your first shot, but the argument he has with himself says it all... GENIUS is not the word for this.
I love how you write Nids, I've always admired the depth with which you perceive characters and stories and to be able to pen them detailed at the same time in cases where its more summarized but still manages to say all the same ...you do it both so perfectly.
I can't wait for the next one already 🤗 UPDATE FAST
Edited by -Anku- - 9 years ago
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