FF: Precocious Rawte. chapter 26, p.67

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Posted: 10 years ago

I'm daring to start another fiction. It's my second attempt to torture peoples. It's not a romantic story nor a crime fiction. It's an thriller -adventure of a little boy, Junior Rawte. Inspired from my favorite si-fi novelist and a mind-blowing movie that never bored me till this date. I'll try to make it enjoyable to you. Plz give me your support and feedback.

Index :

 Character scatch

Prologue

Chapter 1 : page 3

Chapter 2 : page 5

Chapter 3 : page7

Chapter 4  : page 9

Chapter 5.1 : page 11

Chapter 5.2  : page 13

Chapter 6  :page 14

Chapter 7  : page 16

Chapter 8  :page 19

Chapter 9  : page 21

Chapter 10  :page 23

Chapter 11.1  : page 24

Chapter 11.2  : page 26

Chapter 12  : page 27

Chapter 13  : page 30

Chapter 14  : page 32

Chapter 15  : page 34

Chapter 16  : page 36 

Chapter 17  : page 39

Chapter 18  : page 41

Chapter 19  : page 44

Chapter 20  : page 46

Chapter 21.1 : Page 47

Chapter 21.2 : Page 48

Chapter 22 : 104698633   Page 54

Chapter 23 : page 56

Chapter 24.1  : Page 58

Chapter 24.2  : Page 61

Chapter 25 : Page 64

Chapter 26 :  114398542 page 67

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Posted: 10 years ago
Character Sketch :
 
Junior Rawte : ACP Arjun Rawte's son.

TEAM ETF:

                  Commander:  Sameer Daam Singh Rathod

                   Second-in-Command: Arjun Suryakant Rawte

                   Investigation Officer: Senior Inspector Ayesha Kapoor &   
                                                     Inspector Chandrakant Patil ( Ex-
                                                     commando)

                   Research specialist : Riya Mukharjee

                   Tech expert : Shreekant Sen

                   Forensic Expert : Lisa D'cruise

                   Public and Media Communications officer : Sakshi Anand -an     
                                                                                      Ex crime journalist.


Roshni Arjun Rawte : Jr. Rawte's mom, Arjun's wife & Sameer's friend.

Nitu Deshmukh : Chotu's 11.30 girl.

Other characters will show up later.


NOTE: The author doesn't owe the characters, names of the places, people, or establishments. Those are used here only for the sake of the fiction.



For prologue, Scroll down.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Prologue:

I am here, from when, for how long, I don't know; but I have been here, in this dark, warm place since I gained conscious. It's my home, my address, my world.  Totally separated from the outer world, the only thing I can feel about that place is sound: noise and voices.

This place, my home, my sweet home, growing small for me, or I'm growing bigger day by day; I really don't know. All I know that I'm safe here, and comfortable also.

All of a sudden I felt everything around me has changed, I heard a scream; some shouting voices and it was such a pain for my ears. I don't know what's going on there, but it must be something severe. However, I am cool here, in my den, coz I know nothing going to harm me.

But bad luck!!...I felt a pain around my head and then something pulled me out from my cozy den, and held me by my neck. For the first time I looked around to see the world outside my abode, and my eyes dazzled by something bright...I tightly clinched my eyes, as they were burning. For the first time I felt the new surroundings, it is cold enough to make me shiver. Oh, how badly I wanted to go back to by den, my cozy little home.

"Wow, it's a boy!!" a voice came into my ears.

"so cute" another thin voice said.

I really don't know what they are talking about. I don't even know those voices. Who they are? What are they doing, about whom they are talking? Oh god !! I'm totally confused, may be it happens to everyone when they go a new place for the first time; moreover, I even can't open my eyes!!

I felt some pressure on my back, it was moving up & down, then felt something cold on me, I was thinking what are they doing to me, I'm already feeling cold and you are putting something more cold on me? Fool peoples !! Let go off me.

 "Hey, he's not crying !!"  the first voice said. Whom they are talking about? Who should cry?

"Check pulse and heart rate"  the second voice said.

" I did, everything is normal." The first voice answered.

" What? Make him cry. ...or else it'll be trouble." The second voice sounded worried.

" Ulta kare do laagaun khichke?" the first voice asked. Oh god they gonna hang someone up and beat? What have he done?

"Do anything but make him cry!!" the first voice screamed.

Then I felt someone caught my legs and hanged me upside down. Before I could adjust at this new position, I felt severe pain at my bum. It startled me, shook my whole body in a second, I was trying hard to stay calm & understand the situation

"God, he's still not responding..!!" the first voice exclaimed.

"Do it again...untill he doesn't respond." The second voice ordered.

...and I found they're talking about me!!! I felt once again that pain...then again...then I couldn't bar the pain anymore and let all the weights in my heart out. I screamed...and let the air enter my mouth.

" Oh, thank God..finally ..he cried." exclaimed the first voice happily. & I was wondering what kind of people they are, being happy by making someone cry?

...

Should I continue??

Edited by Shamsad1607 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
off course u should continue... prologue is beautiful...plz continue...


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Posted: 10 years ago
Koi shak???
Continue asap
but which novel are you inspured from?
Wait lemme pm u.
Its too good start
well done buddy
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Posted: 10 years ago
awesome start...
do continue... :-)
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Posted: 10 years ago
nice start 
continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
It's different
Good shot
Thanx for pm
Continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
very nice & sweet start
aww... little baby Rawte is already angry
excellent writing
please continue 👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
Its really interesting dear...

Cont. soon...