SwaSan Drabble: 'Mangalam Bhagwan Vishnu'

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bones123

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Vijiii...

First of what a lovely piece...like I said yest, cathartic to read but highly utopian as far as execution on screen goes :P

I cringed through yesterday where Shekhar extolled his laado's virtues !! I was wondering if he confused Ragini with Swara in terms of who works for the sukh of whose house ! I was actually happy he got slapped *well maybe Lux doing it was overkill, but still he deserved a slap*

I <3 Swara, Shomi and Sanskaar in this !! They show Shekhar the mirror and so well !! Starting off with Swara's thoughts about how she deserved none of these and basically Ragini probably had some of it coming to Sanskaar asserting his right and finally Shomi's showdown !! brilliant fireworks...and sadly only in your story !! Shomi's conversation is amazing !! In few sentences she shows him exactly how poor a father he is and how he's conveniently gone back on all his words and time and again puts them on the chopping block...kudos !!

I have full faith that Shomi and Swara will shed tears...listen to Shekhar...shed some more tears...listen to Shekhar...shed some more...on and on until Ragini in her cuckoo post suicide life says jaa Swara go to that house...and finally Shekhar will be like agar Laado chahti hai toh !! This time and again sacrificing of the Bose family's happiness when opportunity presents itself is so convenient for the Gs...Ragini was happily maang teeekafying when Swara was sobbing on the old pillow covers ;)

Really a more brainless...spinless...everything less character I haven't seen...but hopefully like your Sanskaar and Shomi...they do have some terse words with him...and say dude...bus..kehdiyana...and make him stop holding their happiness hostage for the alabaster laado *zero hope from Swara*

Thankyou for making my day by writing this... :) 🤗🤗🤗🤗

P.S : Technically lux and Ragini should be cell mates or asylum mates for all that they've done till date...i wonder when someone will make that decision ! 😆

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KostinsQueen

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Viji... 🤗 Thanks for writing this ...especially in this crap segments..

You very well described all the emotions of swara & her pain crushing between her husband & father...the newly wedded couple going through this phase is unbearable...

Shekar...brainless & Spineless creature...always thinks about his laado ki kushi , never thought of swara...never done any fatherly duty towards swara...i'm very that shomi spoke up for her shona...i wish this to see in show too..

Sanskaar...well now he has every right to meet his legally wed wife... I adore them both very much

My fav part...swara convincing her father but not hurting him..

Very well written...thanks a lot for giving us this & saving us from torturous feelings we were getting since yesterdays segments...

Keep writing..

Suhasini

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sujay kumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Viji you just made my day with this drabble seriously i loved it from the core of my heart 🤗. I loved every bit of this drabble.

I just hate shekhar how can he decide anything actually i think he is selfish he was only thinking about ragini and not about swara.
I really felt bad for swasan

Viji you have written there painful journey very well when they were not together. Sharmista promising to her daughter that everything will be fine was very well written.

Swasan meeting 😳 i just loved that seriously viji you nailed it and their hug was awesome 👏

I like sharmishta when she payback to shekhar because he was needed to listen all this thing. By his wife.

Last part when swasan was going to their home was superb

Viji you just nailed it with this drabble 👏

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: Shaheenq
This is the Best thing that I have read today soo far. Its just Brilliant 👏 I hope the CV's use some of your magnificent ideas. 😉

Thanks so very much Shaheen 🤗 🤗 I was going all 😳 at your warm words. Well, I don't know about the serial, but I do hope someone tells Shekar he has no right to ask Swara to stay away from Sanskaar...they are married and deeply in love with each other, for God's sake. 😊

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geetkumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

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This is so beautiful. After seeing the olvs ., I was constantly thinking how long do Swara and Sanskaar have to pay for others misdeeds. Is it ever going to end. I don't know what will happen in the show. But reading this OS it gave a sense of peace. Kaash... kaash aisa sach me ho jaye. You have just penned down the heart felt wishes and hopes of Swasan's fans.

Thank you.👏🤗

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Aayat23

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hi Viji..
How relieving this drabble is.
The way you penned down Swara's thoughts, emotions at her maternal place was so moving that I had tears in my eyes imagining that..

That was so unfair to Her...but given the way how biased Shekher had been from very start when it comes to chose between Swaragini, this was expected...But someone really need to put some sense in his brain...

And I am proud the way Sharmishta did that...She realised that it is high time she have to stand for her daughter and son in law...

They should not suffer anymore for others misdeeds...

I am in love with her portrayal in every story of yours...

Finally coming to our swasan, I have no words to express how beautifully you have penned down their dreams, longing, bond, trust and their eternal love!

Just loved this whole drabble!

Superb job dear!
Thank you for this and pm!

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lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

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viji ...🤗

Loved it😳 👏.👏.kaash kaash aisa kuch hota SR main ..I am sure nothing of this sort is gonna happen but reading this made me utterly happy..you voiced out what most of forum members are feeling towards shekar ..😡😡.Good you gave it back to him properly through shomi ..khaleja thand hogaya😆

And the title ..Whenever I listen this Mangalam bhgawan vishnu ..in any of the daily soaps.. swasan spring in my mind juts like that ..the mang filling scene in temple

Can I say I love u for this unintended drabble ..much needed one ..🤗🤗🤗

Love

Lucky

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Nupur

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Posted: 9 years ago

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I'm too much frustrated with the situation our SwaSan will go through!!!

Hadd hoti hain yaar! Raita dusre failate hain aur suffer SwaSan ko karni padti hain! Why? Every single time they had to suffer & bear unbearable pains bcoz of others mistakes, actions specially Sanskaar!! And this is happening again now!

Upar se ye Shekhar! Unbelievable creature! Why the hell he stopped Sanskaar from consoling his lawfully wedded wife? What the hell is he thinking? What is Sanskaar's fault? Why he is punishing Sanskaar & in a way Swara for the crimes Laksh & in a way Ragini committed? He should be grateful that he got a Damaad like Sanskaar who always not just supported Swara but her family also in every situation! Bt no he is separating these two souls who are very much in love & went through hell to be with each other & got married few hours ago after bearing so many pains!!!

I loved the way you potray Swara. She loves & respects her father & concerned for her sister Bt she took stand for Sanskaar & their relationship, sacred bond as well <3

Bt I doubt the Swara in the show! I know she will want Sanskaar by her side but would she protest against her father for insulting Sanskaar & forbidding him to come to meet Swara! After today's sgs, we know that Swara was crying & missing Sanskaar & he will come to meet her secretly and they will hug & console each other ( Thank GOD for small mercies) Bt I want Swara to take a stand & try to do something for her & Sanskaar!

Bt trust Swara, her most priorities will be her family (Which is justified) & her EHMPB!

I have no problem with her going Baadi after the wedding & staying there bcoz no person can't enjoy & spend happy moments when their family is going through hell & father got insulted, slapped in front of everyone! Bt I will appreciate if she think about Sanskaar as well.

I love your Shomi as well Bt I afraid she will also do nothing & will concentrate only in Ragini.

It's good that Shekhar is concentrating on Ragini & thinking about her when she is in mortal, life threatening danger - though she invited everything herself - Bt he should not neglect his other daughter and her happiness which he did before already!!!

Viji dear, love you for this (As per Sanskaar's rule: No sorry, no thank you...So love you) Bcoz I also needed to vent out!

PS: When it comes to SwaSan & that too written by you, can't wait for PM ;)

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shamina

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Awesome my friend.

You beautifully said the feelings of swasanians.

After knowing the news about shekhar's reaction towards sanskar I also felt the same.

How can Shekhar do like that. I know it is difficult for him

Ragini is shattered because of laksh and he was insulted.

But sanskar is innocent. He loves his love and he supported swara in thick and thin.

For laksh's mistake punish sanskar is really unfair.

After so many hurdles swasan reunited. After the wedding like any other they will also had dreams about their life .but it was ruined in seconds.

The decision of swara is right. The reply of sharmista was also nice.

But what will happen in the story, it is own the hands of Cv's.

Thanks for giving a positive hope for me.

Thanks for the pm

Edited by Sakkiyah - 9 years ago

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Sree

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Viji 🤗

Loved it.. I wish for something similar in SR though I know in my heart it's not going to happen. This has lifted my spirits up again giving some strength to go through with this serial.

I'm happy to see Shomi taking a stand for Swasan. Trying to knock some sense into her ... Husband. God that... Well I'm not going to use words for him. How can that pathetic man punish Swasan for Ragini's misdeeds? Where was he when chose the wrong path? He is a pathetic excuse for a father when it comes to Swara. I have always wondered what did Shomi actually see in this one to fall in love with him.

Laksh what he has done is not right and I'm not supporting him. But I feel Ragini deserves what she got. Has he not taken their relationship forward I would have supported him whole heartedly, but not here. Some one needs to show these two the difference between right and wrong. Their actions always ends up at the cost of other's happiness.

Love

Sree

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