SwaSan Drabble: 'Mangalam Bhagwan Vishnu'

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rithika2015

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Posted: 9 years ago

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finally unres

hi vijji

that was a superb drabble.. loved it..

i just loved this swara of yours. i hope it was the same in the show but cv's can never give us.

i loved the way u described her feelings at that moment. she was married to the love of her life and the soulmate after so many hurdles yet her share of happiness was still far away from her because of someone else's sins.

i just loved the way u described her imaginations and the cute and short romance between swara and sanskaar in the mandap. the tieing of mangalsutra around a girl's neck is the most important and unforgettable moment in any girls life and the cute romantic gesture of our sunny boy was like cherry on the top.😉😳

i just loved that swara tried to explain her point to her father rather than keeping mum and bowing down for his stupid decisions. she chose to stand for her love and for her husband just like her hubby who always stands by her. sangat ka asar i feel.

sanskaar as usual cared for his wifey and came to check upon her. i just loved the way he shot back to mr.brainless egoist who can never be rational when it comes to his daughters. sanskaar though knew swara's love for her father still he made his point clear and claimed his right on his wife.and to his surprise even she was with him.

i loved the way shomi made her points calmly yet sternly that even made Mr. Brainless to think for a moment and act little wisely. for dadi no comments. she can never think beyond her ladoo and will never try to go beyond that too..

i just loved the way swara calmly left with sanskaar to the place where she rightly belongs to even when her father was not willing to send her as she knew that he was wrong this time. im finally happy that swara is realistic who can think and differentiate between right and wrong unlike the show one who can give up on her hubby for anything and everything and be with her undeserving baba and sissy for ever.

finally the mantras u added in the drabble made me get goosebumps when i was reading the whole drabble in a flow.. these mantras which are the soul of the marriage will really have a great effect on the couple who are binded by it. though i have no experience of it till now i have seen many of my friends change for better after they get married and i guess swara madam too had that effect on her.

i can understand that u have tried to vent out ur anger on shekar with the help of this drabble and believe me i used to do the same and do it till now and that is why in my ss swara will reject to forgive her father after the truth is out..

waiting for ur next work..

with love

rithu.

Edited by rithika2015 - 9 years ago

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piccola1

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Beautiful and just SO RIGHT !

Viji, love you for this !🤗

Res till i get home

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Sneha Ray

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Superb..
Shekhar's behaviour is unbearable..
Swara's inner turmoil well penned..
Sanskar answer back to Shekhar..nd swara supporting sanskar..is nice
Shekhar's reality check by Shomi..is great 😊

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hi Friends 🤗

Thanks for all the most lovely comments coming in. I have some commitments to attend to, so will start with my individual replies tomorrow.

But I'm reading all your feedback and am feeling most touched and humbled by the warmth of your comments.

Thanks again

Lots of Love

Viji

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soapbubble

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Oh good! How cathartic is this drabble!!

In my heart there was a good tongue lashing still due to Shekhar and your Shamishta has provided that...

He's an absurd idiot - always ineffectual when needed and moronic when you most need sense out of him. 🤢😡

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Res, until I find some words and yes have a fair few minutes to cry too. That's moving on so many levels dearest :)

Unres

My dear darling sis🤗(As you asked in Kairos, you can most certainly call me doll as all my other sisters do😉😳)

Okay, I have already read this one a few times (there I can see my notes glaring at me😡) but what to do, A swasan addict I am and I can't resist something of this caliber!

Coming to the nerve wracking current track this is based on, I think compared to the line up the CVs seems to have in store for us, this is like honey dipping from a chocolate corn filled with ice cream...(You get the idea!)

I so want someone to help me with the major confusion I have when it comes to a certain Mr. Shekar Gadodia's brain, spine and a several other body parts. Their presence is as annoying as their absence! So this man suddenly, get's a severe injury on his ego and decides that his utterly innocent Daamad, and always self sacrificing Beti should pay of it? Well done Mr. Gadodia, you just made my job of hating you ten times easier! I so want this man to get an earful on the show Viji darling thank you for what your Shomi did! This🤗is for that!

Now that I vented the venom out...talking in terms of Snakes that is😉I think this is the sane way the twist could take, but it won't as we know. We won't be getting any happily ever afters, riding in to sunsets or cute kiddos any time soon.

But for once I want Swara to think, if not anything else, think, about her husband too. You know my view on extra selfless heroines...As we discussed in Icarus (Where SK is promoting selfishness) I think one should be selfish when it comes to some extreme matters. There's nothing wrong in having a spine. Your Swara stole my heart in that.

What I loved foremost was her thoughts where she accepts that Ragini, no matter how "Good" she is now, deserves a part of the misfortune she is going through for what she had unleashed earlier upon the Maheshwaris. That is so true, I mean I do agree that Lakshya isn't any better, or that his way of punishing her is as foolish as Ragini's way of redeeming herself, but Swara most wisely admits that her sister had collected the outcome of her own actions!

Then she is again right when it comes to her Dadi and Baba. It's only the Laado's pain they are concerned about aren't they?

Then comes the part I adored. Swara missing Sanskar and he appearing; there❤️went my heart! These two...will kill me someday! That was so wonderfully worded as how firstly swara wondered this was a trick of her mind, which is trying to keep her strong and going by projecting Sanskar in front of her! Then she realizes he is indeed there and runs to his arms! God, that was one wonderful moment. I so wanted to cry here!😊

Then comes my enemies😡Just to ruin that awesome hug! Seriously, I hate you more Mr. Gadodia! Just stay away from my path and my SwaSan from here on!

Then Sanskar...for some reason he reminded me of the one you created in my once favorite Earth where he stands straight against Annapurna and says it is Swara who should decide what to be done with their marriage, no one else. The power I felt him unleashing there touched me again as you wrote how he made his stand clear for Shekar here.

And Swara understanding and taking the opportunity declares her decision to accompany her husband. Bravo! For both of them⭐️

Then Shomi, comes and does what I'm itching to do. I love this Ma! She knows when to use her mouth! There is nothing I can add to all she said. Just my all agreeing nod here and there and then at the end a pat in the back and a "Well done!" Great going Shomi!

Then Swara and Sanskar finally leaves. With Shekar's half hearted (He is still not strong enough to say no, or yes huh? Half hearted is as bad as nothing!) and Shomi's all loving, warm and well meant blessings.

It sort of draws a parallel to the event of Bidaai of their fake marriage too (Only shekar played no part there). This part finally reduced me to tears. Oh so lovely it was to imagine. How they went off, hand in hand, with only each other in mind. Wonderful, wonderful and wonderful.⭐️⭐️

Love you loads sis,

Saku

Edit:

While reading for the tenth time I just realized in my boiling hatred for Shekar, I forgot to mention how much I loved that Mehendi reference. I think you touched upon this same topic on Old sins...too, where Swara is gazing at her mehendi, of dark brownish tint with the S right in the center of her palm and wonders how Sanskar has become the center of her life similarly. In both stories, differently, the moment had been so soothingly, perfect. I love it when you write that kind of deep emotional stuff Viji darling, which aren't conveyed straightforward, but have a very twisted, hidden sense of profound meaning. It's like opening the shell of an oyster and finding a pearl within...so beautifully gleaming!

Love,

Saku

Edited by Sakura24 - 9 years ago

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Beautiful os.. Really Shekhar is so spineless to still separate Swara and Sanskar..and Dadi still has the capacity to say something.. As usual Sanskar was awesome.. Wish they show same in Swaragini..and dont stretch the separation track.. Really want to see Swasan together after so much of the ridiculous drama.. Thanx for the pm..