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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: bwvianna

Hey,
I guess I am on a spree of reading your work 😛

Okay first off I wanna say, what a delicious Sanskaar! I went all moony eyes over the guy. Seriously it was a mixture of ASR from IPKKND and Sanskaar. 😃😉

Coming to the story, I loved it.! I am so happy I have read it now and not when you were updating because girl I would be constantly going mad waiting for updates. Seriously I was on the edge of my seat reading this story. Absolutely wonderful work!

I am guessing from this story that you also like Ragini and are a Ragya shipper?

I was all shocked during the whole confrontation with the gun scene. I was all like shit its Lakshya, its Lakshya!!! I literally went to the top and read the whole update again when Sanskaar went 'Adarsh Bhaiya, put it down'! Oh God! Brilliantly done there! Mystery is my thing and gosh! there was so much of it here! You left me a happy soul with this story. Pretty awesome last day feelings! 😃

What I love about your writing is the way you have let everything flow so smoothly. The Sanskaar entry, their first interaction, their constant bickering, their deal, not-so-fake marriage, SwaSanRag confrontation, their first kiss, their awkwardness, their emotional turmoil, their getting together, feeling confession, and happily ever after! This story was like the perfect story of SwaSan, loved it to the core!

You have portrayed every single person so well. What caught my attention was how you did not get Ragini's truth out in front of everyone but instead only in front of selected members. I think Lakshya should have been told. Not a good base for Ragya if he didn't know. But this is a SwaSan story so understandable.

Sapna, you have created a fan in me for your writings.! Kindly PM me on any new stories. I plan to follow it religiously. 😛 Seriously yaar, your SwaSan interactions, their scenes have made a place in my heart.

Coming to the awesome battle between DP and Sanskaar, take a bow! It was so well written. The Adarsh Bhaiya twist, the Kavita being money minded twist, fantastic!

I won't give a person to person portrayal awesomeness, but I have loved each and every character portrayal in this story. And your epilogue. It was justice to such a story! Complete justice.!

Please keep writing. Awaiting more short stories. :)

A very happy new year and loads of 🤗to you too.

-V :)


P.S.: What happened to Parneeta Bhabhi?


Thanks so so much dear. your comments are a delight to read and bring a wonderful smile to my face. a very HAPPY NEW YEAR to you too! 🤗 🤗

I didnt reveal it here, but for me Ragini and Laksh were best friends in this. So the moment she told Swara the truth, she would have also spoken to Laksh. Even thought I haven't written it, i cannot see it happening any other way between them. She had to be the one telling him the truth, no one else. See that was the reason why it wouldn't have been a shocker for him when Adarsh brought it up in his rant. And being worried about his best friend in that shooting episode would have bridged any gaps between them and made him realise what ragini means to him and forgive her - or at least that is how it plays in my mind. He went after the not attainable and not so close to him swara and overlooked what was in front of him. This ragini wouldnt have left the drugs part unshared with this laksh for long. laksh was never mad at swara over the drugs, he stood by her then, he was pissed because he thought there was something between her and sanskar the way she was obsessing over him.

I did leave Pari out in the end because it was getting too much but i expect she would have gone back to her family and found someone better to share her life with - with the blessings of all the MM wasi.


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Posted: 9 years ago


Hi Sapna,


So i read two of your SS in one day . 😉 Good for me. I loved it dear⭐️. After finishing Eye of the storm , i thought i should start this one . But it was so good i end up completing it in one go.😊


I read the whole in one , so i wont be able to detail appericiate all of the chapters, but it was really awesome . this has to be my favourite out of all your works, wait i might say the about others SS too.


Loved the whole new smart Sanskar and his revenge, Liked the fact that he had nothing to do with the drugging, Loved the surprise twist of the marriage being real in the first place, Liked the war between DP and Sanskar, Loved Swasan relationship and i can go on and on but just in short i really loved this one Sapna.


I checked your index and it looks like i read all of your works .Do write soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hi my name is Shriya awesome story.. can you repost links your other stories please. Want to read more of you..
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: NitaMikealson



Hi Sapna,


So i read two of your SS in one day . 😉 Good for me. I loved it dear⭐️. After finishing Eye of the storm , i thought i should start this one . But it was so good i end up completing it in one go.😊


I read the whole in one , so i wont be able to detail appericiate all of the chapters, but it was really awesome . this has to be my favourite out of all your works, wait i might say the about others SS too.


Loved the whole new smart Sanskar and his revenge, Liked the fact that he had nothing to do with the drugging, Loved the surprise twist of the marriage being real in the first place, Liked the war between DP and Sanskar, Loved Swasan relationship and i can go on and on but just in short i really loved this one Sapna.


I checked your index and it looks like i read all of your works .Do write soon


Nita 🤗 🤗

you went on a spree 😉 i like this one too...sanskar in this is something else...confident and gives back to everyone so well. plus it is less gruesome vs my last one. cloaked one actually drained me in writing it because of that.

😳 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Mishri1

Hi my name is Shriya awesome story.. can you repost links your other stories please. Want to read more of you..


Hi Shriya

If you look at my signature, you will find my writing index, it has all my works there in one place.

thanks so much for liking this one. 😃 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: foresight


Nita 🤗 🤗

you went on a spree 😉 i like this one too...sanskar in this is something else...confident and gives back to everyone so well. plus it is less gruesome vs my last one. cloaked one actually drained me in writing it because of that.

😳 😃


Yep i love this Sanskar, well i love Sanskar in the show too, but this one was bit different and i loved it. Cloaked intention was awesome too. i liked the awesome twists in that one. Do write soon though, the show current track is so boring
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: NitaMikealson


Yep i love this Sanskar, well i love Sanskar in the show too, but this one was bit different and i loved it. Cloaked intention was awesome too. i liked the awesome twists in that one. Do write soon though, the show current track is so boring


the current track has gotten my brains too frozen to write anything...plus pretty busy on the work front...lets see...hopefully CVs will spare me enough for the brains cells to start functioning again.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: foresight


the current track has gotten my brains too frozen to write anything...plus pretty busy on the work front...lets see...hopefully CVs will spare me enough for the brains cells to start functioning again.


Hope i wasnt pressuring you, Write when you have time or when you feel like it , but just let me know if you wrote anything new . i will love to read
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Posted: 9 years ago
Dear Sapna👏👏👏
And with this I have finished reading all your works - as usual I read this SS in one reading - and it was such a lovely ride - I loved the gentle handling of all the characters and especially the happy ending (I am a sucker for love stories - especially ones with a happy ending).

So Adarsh was the culprit- nice twist and the reveal that Kavita was not what she portrayed herself to be - must be definitely easier on Sanskaar (he believed he had her blood on his hands)

And I have the same question I ask of all writers - why is that that the CVs ruin the serial - in such unimaginable ways😡😡

Please do write more - I need my SwaSan fix - more nowadays since I am not watching the inane track😭

Nyna
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sapna👏👏👏

And with this I have finished reading all your works - as usual I read this SS in one reading - and it was such a lovely ride - I loved the gentle handling of all the characters and especially the happy ending (I am a sucker for love stories - especially ones with a happy ending).

So Adarsh was the culprit- nice twist and the reveal that Kavita was not what she portrayed herself to be - must be definitely easier on Sanskaar (he believed he had her blood on his hands)

And I have the same question I ask of all writers - why is that that the CVs ruin the serial - in such unimaginable ways😡😡

Please do write more - I need my SwaSan fix - more nowadays since I am not watching the inane track😭

Nyna


Thanks so much nyna 🤗
I love happy endings too...have to have them in my stories.

What can I say about the cvs they are a mystery to me

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