SwaSan OS- 'Space' - Page 13

Originally posted by: azira07

u r the ultimate writer of swasan stories u r the best writer I ever seen dear simply amazing dear thank u sooo much for pm it has lot me r

Originally posted by: hp_2006

I have no words Viji..⭐️

its really out of the world OS👏

Your language is so profound..so great..

and coming to the story.. i really loved durga prasads back story. especially the folk tale of sky and earths wedding.😳

loved the way he made sanskaar understand about the need to express his love to swara. And I loved the part where u wrote that sanskaar resembled DP and Swara was the daughter DP had always wanted

And the last scene between Swasan was mind blowing

A big hug from me Viji🤗

love,

Naina

Originally posted by: hp_2006

I will surely read the rest of your elements series works and comment on them too😃

Originally posted by: .Regal.

I am seriously in love with your style of writing. I have never read anything so fast in my life. Honestly, I am glad that I came late to reading your works because I read them altogether instead of waiting in agony for the next one. I am a dialogue orientated person when it comes to writing, I do love my descriptions but dialogue is what I usually crave. But reading your works, that thought flew out the window. You seamlessly incorporated the characters thoughts, descriptions and perception in a way that dialogue became obsolete, only added when truly necessary. And that is so remarkable cause so few people can do that!

I could praise your writing style all day!! So I am going to move on the stories themselves. All four of them were so intriguing given how you added your own background, and depth to each character making their conscious choices within the story so real. Even though you dissected the characters in the story, it felt like a cohesive story rather than pointed listed of the characters attributes and traits. Especially regarding Annapurna. It was interesting to see some sort of fictional glimpse into a character who hasn't spoken much in the show. And how Durga Parsad was shown in a different light from the show, but it felt very much canon given the apt descriptive background story you presented.

And at the end, how Swara and Sanskaar managed to come together was beautiful, and I liked how you added them having to fake the marriage longer because the prolonged time for the truth to come out probably would cause a difference in Swara and her affection towards Sanskaar. And I don't mind a jealous Laksh anyway, it shows that Swara and Sanskaar are truly together. Honestly I feel like I can ramble on for days about this, so I am just gonna this here!

(I kinda combined all four of your stories into one post, lol)

Anywho! I just wanted to say you are beautiful writer, and I really hope that I have the pleasure to read more of your stories!!

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Thanks so much for reading, and taking the time to leave such a detailed, analytical comment. 😊 I got this today morning, and it was just the best start to the day!

I'm glad you liked my portrayal of all the characters in this quartet-- Water (Swara), Fire (Annapurna), Earth (Sanskaar), and Space (Durga Prasad). My idea while writing the "Elements" series, was to explore each character's layers, edges and shades, with reference to the elements. 😉 I wanted to flesh them out, add a back story, and I am so glad you felt that worked.

I did want to give Swara and Sanskaar time to discover their feelings for each other, in my OS's. I love the serial, but I do get a feeling sometimes that they are rushing tracks too fast. Am really happy you liked how Swara & Sanskaar come together, at the end of my OS series.

Thanks again for your generous words. 😊

Originally posted by: .Regal.

The portrayals of the characters was amazing. At first I thought there was too much background, but then there wasn't enough. I kinda lost myself in the details. Also, the comparison of the elements to each character, and the quotes about each element was a highlight of all the stories. Especially the quote regarding the balance that Earth and Water bring and seeing that parallel Swara and Sanskaar. And how water can exterminate fire, and that is how Annapurna felt about Swara. That Swara's strong personality would indeed extinguish her strong influence.

I am completely with you, I love the serial but they are a little to fast paced in the story telling. I felt Ragini was outed too quickly. I always want the villain outed, but there is always the allure of the "slow burn" and this was too quick. (side note: Sanskaar falling in love was a little to quick as well) And it blocked any Swara Sanskaar connection post marriage, and the potential tipping of Swara's emotions. And I am guessing that Swara not divorcing Sanskaar in the show will be for all the wrong reasons. Also, a little more time would sway Sujata eventually to Swara's side, as you wrote.

Originally posted by: RUQAIYA10

Hello Viji😊

Hope you are well. Firstly I want to thank you from the bottom of my heart. I was truly touched to find out that that I am one of the members to whom you have dedicated this piece to. It was such a pleasant surprise. So thank you so very much🤗❤️

I had loved your characterization of AP but DPs is absolutely brilliant. This peek in to his childhood and upbringing is completely on par with the the man he is today. His love for his nephew is even more special because it stems from his heart and you have narrated it really well.

Swasan's Milan was perfect as usual. It felt like I was watching the ending of a romantic Hollywood flick. Sealed with a kiss in the end. I am big fan of the Hobbit and LOTR films so was delighted to find Sanskar reading those dialogues to Swara. It was a nice touch.

Please do not stop and keep writing more. Once again a big Thank you to you with lots of love and hugs. And many apologies for such a delayed response 😊😊

Ruqs

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

beautiful one-shot..👏