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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey everyone .i m neha!!...
i have been silent reader on "love ne mila di jodi"forum...
but was a great fan of its show...
after reading so many stuff...
i really miss the show...
so to relive it..
i decided to write a short story on them..
hope u will like it..
please do hit like button and comment...


note-
the characters here are same as in serial...
in my story ila gujral and suman sexana are alive...


index-
chapter 1-page 1
chapter 2-page 2


my other work-

it is of my favirote serial "pyar ki ye ekk kahani"...a supernatural ,dark love story...
mini ff-falls apart
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2756185

ff-live again
it is of my favirote serial "pyar ki ye ekk kahani"...but no supernatural story...
a simple love story.
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3093129#60951201



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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey everyone .
here is my first chapter...
hope u will like it..
please do hit like button and comment...



chapter 1-


in manali-
early morning,birds chirping,sun shining brightly,cool breeze flowing,a
foggy,misty surrounding...there is a two storey house made of wood with
old,simple,sober,classy and ecstatic look surrounded with hills,mountains...
it seems like the house was enveloped by nature and looks more like a
paradise...away from huzzle-buzzle,busy,hectic ,crowded and populated city...
near the house there was a garden with a swing...and a well-
built,masculine,toned- body with six-packed abs,handsome young man of around 28 age Wheatieh skin color,brown eyes and black-brown shade hairs was busy in his daily workout,sweating ,wearing black vest and track pants engross in his exercise...
inside the house,there was lady in her late 50's in kitchen preparing for breakfast and the delicious aroma could be smell from mile...
a young cute boy of around 24 age,fair skin,dark black hair with broad
eye-brows and black eyes ,clad in business suit was seated in drawing room
engross in files and smiled smelling that yummy aroma...
boy(smiling.joyfully)-"hmmm...smell yum ,maa...what r u cooking??something
special,right??"(and turns to her mother,who looked at his youngest son
lovingly)
suman(smiling)-"yes!!!,varun...its prithvi favorite...aloo paratha.!!!..he has
came back home after 3 months..so i decided to make his favorite dishes...i
must be missing them to eat..."
varun(hesitantly)-'ji..maa.."
and tried to hide his discomfort...but suman notice it..
suman(worried)-"varun...is there something wrong??"
varun(confused,caught off-guard)-"n..no maa..why??"
suman(tensed)-"i don't know..its just that i feel something is
wrong..something has changed after ur father's death...it almost 6 years when
ur father left us and then i got sick...and after that everything has
changed..our life has changed...u all three of u brothers have changed(looks
at varun)..."
varun(reassuring his mother)-"its nothing like that maa...just that we lost
papa..and then u got sick..we were very scared to lose u and that is why may
be we became more serious and responsible towards u and family..."
suman(not buying it)-"i know what u r saying is may be true...but i feel
there is drift between u three..u all don't behave like 6 years ago...i can
see tension between u all especially with sameer..."
varun tried to dodge this question..
varun(to himself)-"how m i going to tell u maa that whatever we r today is
all because of our insane,idiotic revenge of our father's death and that too
failed and we couldn't find the culprit and cherry on the top we lost our
precious possession...our love!!!!!"
suman was waiting for his answer and found him lost in chain of thoughts...
suman went to him and kept her hand on his shoulder bring him out of
trance..
suman(softly)-"varun..."
varun jerk and looked at his puzzled,worried mother standing beside her and
smiled at her...
varun(assuring her)-'nothing maa...just thinking about business meeting...so
(changing the topic)is the breakfast ready.??.i m really hungry..maa"
suman understood that its not right time dig further but she was sure that
something has happened 6 years ago which they r hiding..
suman(smiled)-"yes it is call ur brothers..now.."
varun nodded and went upstairs signing with relief...
varun stood in front of door and stared at for a second and then knocked at
door and shouted..
varun(plainly)-"sameer bhaiya,wake up...breakfast is ready..maa is
calling..."
inside,the room was messy,clothes were scattered on floor,big posters of
female models were pasted on wall ,and sun light from window fall on figure
lied on bed carefree but listened to voice calling from outside..and
reluctantly still sleepy,closed eyes, shabby and messed black hair ,broad
eye- brows,fair skin,handsome, charming young man wearing funky,cool,green color t-shirt and white capry opened the door and looked at the well dressed varun staring him plainly...
sameer(smiled)-"morning chote!!!!"
varun(plainly)-"(sternly)don't call me that.and.maa is calling for
breakfast..."
and went away without looking at sad,disheartened sameer but soon sameer
covers up and went to freshen up...
meanwhile varun went into garden and saw his big brother working out drenched in sweat...
varun(smiling)-'prithvi bhaiya...maa is calling for breakfast..."
prithvi got up and took towel and rubbed on his face...
prithvi(slightly smiling)-"i m coming in a minute,varun..."
varun nodded and went inside and sat on dining table where suman was
arranging plates and suddenly sameer came from behind her and hugged her..
sameer(joyfully)-"good mornig maa...!!!hmmm smells good.."
and sat beside varun who avoided looking at him and concentrate on serving in plates...sameer notice it but shrugg it off...
suman(smiles)-"morning sameer..."
and soon prithvi came after freashing up..and sat in front of varun...
prithvi(halfed-smile)-"good morning,maa.."
suman(smiling)-"morning prithvi beta...i have made ur favorite aloo
paratha..."
prithvi(plainly)-"no maa.i don't have time to have them ,just toast and a
glass of juice would be fine.."
suman(tensed)-"but its ur favorite at least have one...'
prithvi-'sorry maa..i have to go office..its urgent..please maa.."
suman(relucantly0-"as u wish prithvi..."
and gave him juice and toast..
varun and sameer looked at him and know the reason for not having aloo
paratha but didn't say and engage themselves in their plate..
soon suman joined them and there was awkward silence prevailed on the
table..so varun decided to break it...
varun-"prithvi bhaiya,today u have to go with mr.mehta for site-seeing at 4
p.m."
prithvi nodded his head...
varun(hesitantly)-"and bhaiya they want us to see the presentation and sign
the deal in their head-office by the coming week...'
prithvi-"okk.then call them and fix the date with them and i want u too
accompany me there for handling accounts..."
varun-'ya sure..bhaiya...so i will book tickets for tomorrow morning for
..mumbai..!!"
and signs and look at prithvi who had listening to the last word has stop
eating and staring at plate and sameer shoot a WHAT-look to varun and varun looked at prithvi for his reaction but immediately prithvi recovered and
nodded his head in yes without looking at him...and continued eating toast
and after few minutes left telling them he is getting late...and suman
observe the sudden change of expression on her sons face but didn't say
anything but now she was sure it is something related to mumbai...what must
have happened 6 years ago in mumbai that her sons especially prithvi has
changed so much..its more like a new personality is transplanted in him..she
was worried,tensed,confused and no one was there to answer her query...she
has to do something that to fast before its get too late...sameer was little
hesitant and sad with the current situation of his family...he may not point
them for their aloof and distant behavior of his brothers but it hurts him
and sometime feel sorry for his elder brother...but he has no remorse or
guilt what he did 6 years back because for him ..his revenge !!,his
family,,his maa,, was more important to him and he does not regret it...
,varun felt guilty for again reminding his big brother of that place which
snatched his everything:his father,love of life-his WIFE!!!,his interest in
his hobbies,his passion for horses,his enthusiasm,his confidence,his
happiness,his balent and blunt attitude..his prithvi bhaiya was lost in
complexity of life,,now he is just a walking machine, surviving for his
family..he has no personal desire and lost his faith and hope in love and in
life..how he wished??? ..he could do something for his big brother but none
he could do..with big sign varun left for office and sameer went to his room leaving behind puzzled,disturbed,worried,tensed suman behind...

upstairs in the clean,tidy,simple,dark room, prithvi was seated on bedside
touching a ring in his finger and caressing it lovingly and then took his
wallet and looked at the photo of smiling,cheerful,smart,arrogant,full of
confidence but polite,soft-hearten,little bit shy lady clad in green-golden
lehenga with her short-straight hair open looking beautiful...he smiled
looking at smiling photo and caress her face and a tear fell down and only
one word came out..
prithvi-"DAMINI!!!!!"
he was guilty,remorseful,longing for her one sight,to see her,to touch her,to
hug her,to kiss her,to tell her how much he missed her and love her but
couldn't...she has abandon him from her life...she left him alone to live
this miserable life alone and suffer...he knows what i did was wrong,not the
correct way to find the murderer or to take so called revenge,,he betrayed
her,broke her heart,faith,trust on him...she might now hate him and didn't
want to see him again...
prithvi(crying)-"i m sorry ,damini...please forgive..please..listen to me
once...i wish i could change past..please believe me..i love u and will
always love u..please come back to me.."
and cried bitterly holding her photo close to his heart...
but the ring of his phone bring back him to earth to face the harsh reality
that she will not forgive him ever,come back in his life ever or would trust
and love him again ever...!!!with he rub his tears and composed himself and
picked up the phone seeing caller id..
prithvi(as calm as possible)-"yes,varun..."
with the sound of his brother he could tell he was crying,remembering DAMINI
BHABHI!!! and would be cursing himself of all that but still kept quite for
that matter and talk for what he had called..
varun-"prithvi bhaiya,clients r about to come and..we have our meeting with
them in half and hour...u have.."
prithvi(signs)-"i m coming in 15 minutes..till then u prepare for meeting.."
varun-"okkk bhhaiya...(not sure)hmmm...r u fine ,bhaiya???"
prithvi felt lump in his throat and fresh tears were ready to come down his
cheek but he held them back..
prithvi(composing himself)-"i m fine varun...thanks and meet u in office
...bye.."
and hung up without giving him chance to say anything more..varun sign and
took a deep breathe and started preparing for meeting..
on the other hand,prithvi know why varun ask so and he little bit happy for
his concern towards him and sad for ruining his life also...but nevertheless
got up to ready for office...hoping that someday everything would be back to
normal and happiness in everyone's life...

precap-
gujral side story...
arrival of prithvi and varun in mumbai

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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey neha...
awesome part dear...
really luved it...
so prithvi is feeling miserable for what he did..n so the varun is...
i dont know abt sameer...when he will regret...
nd eagerly waiting for gujral girls...especially daminis entry...
plz do continue...n ud soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi Neha, interesting story. luved it. waiting for gujrals entry. pl. add my name. do continue soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: mddmayuri

hey neha...

awesome part dear...
really luved it...
so prithvi is feeling miserable for what he did..n so the varun is...
i dont know abt sameer...when he will regret...
nd eagerly waiting for gujral girls...especially daminis entry...
plz do continue...n ud soon...


hi...mayuri...
thank u so much...😊😊
ya sure may be by sunday...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: pia09

Hi Neha, interesting story. luved it. waiting for gujrals entry. pl. add my name. do continue soon.


hii...
whats ur name???😕😕😕
thank u so much for liking it😊😊😊
ya sure...by sunday
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: laxmii


hii...
whats ur name???😕😕😕
thank u so much for liking it😊😊😊
ya sure...by sunday



Hi Neha, u can call me pia. I am great fan of Gaurav.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome part
to be honest there was another prida ff with the same concept and was discontinued after 3 parts.. but i want to see this one complete..
waiting for the next part..
update soon...
laxmii thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: ...Tich...

awesome part
to be honest there was another prida ff with the same concept and was discontinued after 3 parts.. but i want to see this one complete..
waiting for the next part..
update soon...


thank u...😊😊😊
i will try to complete this ss...
next will be soon may on friday...😕😕😕

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Sorry for the late...Very nice ,interesting start must say!

Add ne in the PM ist.

Regards
Sia
Edited by Killer_Shark - 13 years ago

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