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Posted: 8 years ago
Messed up Last Part

A/N- For a long time I had been pondering upon what's wrong with this story. Now I realised the issue. I think the track was worn-out and boring. Also less romantic. Or inshort this story was complete bullshit. I appollogise for this crap n promise mover to return with anything like this ever again in the future. I won't ask u to comment or read the part but as per my duty I have completed the story.
Also no epilogue for this one. Coming soon with stories every one wants to read read and are worth giving ur time. Huge appollogies for wasting your time.



"Kitni dafaa, subah ko meri
Tere aangan me baithe
Maine shaam kiya

Channa mereya mereya
Channa mereya mereya
Channa mereya mereya Beliya
O piya... (x2)"

Sanskaar POV-
I am calling her since morning. She isn't picking up the call. I reached her place only to find it locked up.
I visited her office but she is no where to be found be it temple, park market. Tiered I called Laksh Bhai if he knows. I regreted the decision. He grew tensed and worried. He too did not know anything about Swara. Ragini and he rushed around the city so did I. We were searching her.

Morning heated up to the afternoon and cooled down to give a red evening sky but she was still missing. We searched her at airports and bus stands. So also on the railway stations.

All tensed and disappointed I felt like once more visiting her place. Thai is Obsession or love I don't know but I will actually due if something will happen to her. I was dieing for her everyday infact.
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"Tere rukh se apna raasta
Mod ke chalaa
Chandan hoon main
Apni khushboo chhod ke chala

Mann ki maaya rakh ke
Tere takiye tale
Bairagi, bairagi ka sooti chaula
Odh ke chalaa

Channa mereya mereya
Channa mereya mereya
Channa mereya mereya Beliya
O piya..."

Swara POV-
I left everything, I know bhai would be tensed I will tell him about me in a few days. I just want sanskaar to forget me as if I was a nightmare. Or a bad omen. I left as I want to see him happy. It will give me satisfaction and happiness to see him smiling with his family, his wife, his kids. I don't want to be a hurdle. If he will be happy then it will give me enough of the reason to spend the rest of my life smiling. I know it will pain the most. But I will be happy. Happy to see him simple and live. I being a dark spot had to be removed. I had to go from his life one day or the other. I chose today as this day. I tried visiting temple, bus stand and railway station. But no I didn't feel like stepping on to any mode of cinvence to go out of the city. Perhaps this is the love that won't let me go eaisly but I have to convince myself myself that I need to go just to see him happy and smiling. I don't know where but I am walking with the path. Going somewhere away from him.
"Deke mujhe teri judaai
Mere Rab ne mujhe paigham diya
Channa mereya mereya
Channa mereya mereya beliya"

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"Sachi mohabbat shayad wohi hai
Jisme junoon hai
Jisme junoon hai"

Sanskaar POV-
It was turning dark, I couldn't wait for any longer. I stood up and ignited my car. I walked out on unknown roads I didn't know what to do? How to do? Why to do? Where to go? I left tit upon our fate. If she could come back to me ones and if my love is pure we will meet today itself. I didn't know how. But I know we will for sure.
Night 10. I am still driving it's too dark. Here on this road it is lonely and alone. I saw a lady with a bag moving towards a truck. Either she is unknown About the danger or may be she wants it deliberately to crush her. I immediately halted my car and ran to her I tried calling her but she did not respond. I grew worried. I ran and pulled her on me.


Swara POV-
I saw a truck approaching me. I thought Destiny too wants us separated. That is y it set all the ways to kill me. I moved further towards the truck to let the distance between me and death short. Alas, there was something which halted me. His love or rather he himself.


Sanskaar POV-
"Swara" I wisphered
She smiled rearsy eyed. Somewhere rage grew inside me. I didn't know but I held her tight.
"Do have any f**king idea how tensed we were?" I shouted at her
She looked down. My grip over her tightened. "Say something damit, and do u know what will happen if I will tell laksh bahi about this. U started Ur non sense again. Y were u upto killing urself" I shouted again when she weakly replied
"It was easier to die them to go away" .

I was numb for a second n then the happiest man.
"Kya??" I gave a reflexive reply.
She broke down and hug me.
"I love u, but I know I don't deserve you, I wanted u to be happy. Pls throw me out. I am a bad omen,.. a dark spot.." she continued when. I cut in b/w..
"Shut up" I continued " I love u n that's it. No other explaination or excuse is required. Just don't go away it kills me. N dare not speak a word against my love or I will kill u." I pulled her into a tight hug.
I wanted to kiss her. Touch her. Make love and tell how much I loved her but I couldn't. I had to controll.
We stood there still untill laksh Bhai called me. I told him she is with me safe and sound. I held her hand and made her sit in the car.



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"Par do dilon ki yaari mein bhi to
Kitna sukoon hai
Kitna sukoon hai"


5 years Later-
I am standing here at the window of my room. His arms encircled around my waist. We had come a long way. Helping Bhai marry Ragini. Then her dilvery. Then Sanskaar convencing Sujata maa about our marriage. Then over coming my fears. He had been a friend and lover both. He loved me the way no one could have. I was hesitant about marriage but now I am confident. I trusted him and married him. He took out all the dark idea out of me . He never forced me. He just loved my soul not only my body. He made me feel I am important. He respected my opinion. He showed me what true love is. Now finally after this long we r together.It had been 2 months to our marriage.

He pecked my earlobe. Removed my earings. I melted in his touch. He lifted me up n his arm. I was lost in his dreamy eyes. He slowly kissed me. I was numb under his touch. He was over me when he slowly asked-" swara are u sure"
"Yes sanskaar" I caressed his hair. He pecked my cheek. Soon me intimate completely. We were the luckiest not only our bodies but souls got intimate this night. .

"I love u sanskaar" I wisphered before falling asleep in his arms.
"Love u 2,3 and infinity" he replied.

We fall asleep. Our bare bodies touched every inch. We we united in all ways and for forever.






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Posted: 8 years ago
Harshi, 😊
All the parts were brilliantly written by u sis. 👏 A beautiful ending. 😃 And nothing was wrong in ur story! Don't dare to say that! 😡 😭 I loved it so much and infact I am sad that it ended so soon. Comeback with more SwaSan stories. 😉
With love,
Aheli.
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: iam_aheli_98

Harshi, 😊
All the parts were brilliantly written by u sis. 👏 A beautiful ending. 😃 And nothing was wrong in ur story! Don't dare to say that! 😡 😭 I loved it so much and infact I am sad that it ended so soon. Comeback with more SwaSan stories. 😉
With love,
Aheli.

Thanks for reading this and also for ur kind words. Glad u liked the story. According to me silence is also a response. So those who didn't liked the story neither read it nor replied. U can see that. I just penned their silence in my A/N. U can also see that. More than a week and only u replied. Rest is all an excuse the truth is there in my A/N. No worries. My mistake. I know. Whatever letting go of those who didn't read it. I would love to thank u a zillion times for reading this update.

Regards
Harshita
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: harshitaloomba1


Thanks for reading this and also for ur kind words. Glad u liked the story. According to me silence is also a response. So those who didn't liked the story neither read it nor replied. U can see that. I just penned their silence in my A/N. U can also see that. More than a week and only u replied. Rest is all an excuse the truth is there in my A/N. No worries. My mistake. I know. Whatever letting go of those who didn't read it. I would love to thank u a zillion times for reading this update.

Regards
Harshita


Sis plzz don't be disheartened dear. Maybe they all r busy with their respective commitments. Plzz don't lose ur hope. 😊 And nothing is ur mistake. I again say don't dare to say that! 😡 Coz u r a wonderful writer. 😃 And if u still feel that it was a 'mistake', then its their mistake to miss such an awesome story, not urs! 😉 So cheers! 😃 🤗
With lots of love,
Aheli.
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Posted: 8 years ago
I am literally going to kill you if you say this story as a mistake. I got very busy in my exam preparations so could not even come to forum. I literally ask forgiveness from you for that. The story had no mistake, my dear. In fact your dark stories are always intriguing. All the chapters were just marvelous. Sanskar's worry, their love confession everything is indeed beautiful. Though I am little sad that you are ending it, but I do hope you come up again with such stories which can be co related to the present scenario of our country.
Love you loads
Nivi
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Posted: 8 years ago
First of all Awsome Update
My Fav Song in it

You Such A Good Writer

😳👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
Harshu darling...
Read all parts...enjoyed a lot...swasan came so long in their relationship...after much hardship n struggle..ending was great...

Talia

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