SuKorFF:Aafato'n ke parindey 'IshaqZaade' Discontinued

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I'm posting this myself now because I solved my email problem...

Aafato'n k parindey 'Ishaqzaade" hapter 12
Recap : Suraj-chakor argue...Suraj wins the competition by cheating...chakor decides that she will not go to haveli...

At night...Chakor's house
Chakor wakes up after having a nightmare about bhaiyyaji making the children bandhua...she was so sad that she lost to suraj and could't save the children...she was lost in her thoughts when she heard somenoises coming outside her roomm...she goes to see what's happening and was shocked too see imli standing there with her goons and kastrui blocking her way..

chakor : maa yeh sab kia ho raha hai ?

kasturi : bachua dekh na ee imlu pagla gai hai kahat hai toka haveli le jane aia hai..

chakor looked at imli with a shock..

imli : abb aisey dekhe se ka faida hui hai didi..shart haari hai tu toh abb chal haveli..

chakor : par imlu tu janti hai suraj ne be-imaani ki..

imlu : oo sab humka kucho nahi pata humka humare maalik ne hukum diya hai toh hum oo ka poora kare k waste kucho bhi kare hai chal humare saath...

she was bout to go to chakor when kasturi slapped her which shocked both imli and chakor..

kasturi : ee thappar humka oohi din mareka chahi tha jiss din tu ek bandhua se ghulaam bani gai thi...suraj ki ghulaam sharam nahi aati oo rakhshas k liye apni behan ki jaan khatre me dalat hai ?

imli cryies and shouts : haan haan hain hum ghulaam...10 saal pehle jab ee tohri laadli bitiya hum sabhan ka chorh k chali gai thi toh oo rakhshas ki ghulaam bane se hi toh ko or baapu ko zinda rakhi hum...

chakor : imli tujhe btaya tha na maine k mera jana zaroori tha uss din hume sab ...

imli : chupp kar or chal mere saath ...

imli pushes kasturi and when chakor was about to go to pick kasturi she hits her on the head with her gun and chakor faints...

Chakor was feeling pain in her head she opened her eyes and her vision was blurred ...But when she got back her sense completely her heart skipped a beat because she realized that she's in suraj's room and is on his bed and the blurred image she saw was none other than suraj's who was sitting on the sofa that was easy to look at from bed ( I make no sense here i guess )

chakor immediately got up and felt a dizy and was about to fall when she felt to warm hands holding her shoulders so that she don't fall...she again came back to senses and looked at suraj angrily and pushed him and said

Chakor : How dare you ? Tumhari himmat kaisey hui aaahh ( she again felt pain in her head )

suraj ; arrey arrey dhayan se sir pe chot aai hai...or di kisney hai ?? Imli ne teri behan hai na woh ??

chakor remembered how imli betrayed her and hit her on head to bring her to suraj...and a tear escaped her eye...

suraj : ch ch ch kia hua bandhua billi dard ho raha hai ? sirf sir par hi yaa dill me bhi ??
( suraj's voice was a bit stern now ) he came closer to her while she moved back but lost her balance due to the bed and fell on it and suraj comes on top of her while hhis both hands are on each side of her shoulders helping him balance ...chakor looked at him and tried to push him but in vain...

suraj : Yaad hai marathon ace runner 501 Chakor bhuvan laal woh raat jungle me jo tune mere gaal par chanta maara tha ? aur ek zakhm bhi diya tha ...yaad hai ?

chakor did't say anything but tears rolled down her eyes and looked at suraj in anger+disgust ...

suraj ; usi in humne teh ( decided ) kiya tha k tune humare gaal par zakhm diya tha hum teri rooh par zakhm ( wound ) dnge...Toh apni hi behan k haatho'n se dhoka khaa kar kaisa lag raha hai ??

chakor : suraj chorho mujhe...( her voice was changed becuase of her mixed emotions crying+anger)

suraj gets up and holds her hand and makes her get up too and holds her hand more tightly...

chakor : hath chorho mera...

suraj : Kaisey chorh dein ?? hum sharrt jeete hain humara inaam ??

chakor was scared now because she knew that she lost the challenge...she's in haveli at this time...in suraj's room ...all she could come up was this..

chakor : Mere liye tum koi shart nahi jeetey...tumne cheating ki thi ...

suraj ignoring what she said pulled her closer and holds her head with one hand while she closes her eyes ( crying ) suraj comes near her and pushes her back ...chakor opened her eyes and was shocked ...her eyes were demanding an explanation of what he's doing but when her eyes met his she could't look staright in his eyes for god knows what reason so she looked down..

suraj ; Yahi ...yahi dekhna chahtey they hum...Chakor woh chakor jo kabhi kisi se nahi haarti na hi darti hai aaj humare samne ek bebass or bechari ban kar kharhi hai...jiss din yaha'n ( points to his cheek) chaanta ( slap) maara tha na tuny usi din soch liya tha k aisy saza denge tujhe aisy saza denge k Haath toh kia nazrein nahi utha payegi...

snaps his figners...and says
suraj : chal jaa yaha'n se iss se pehle k apna irada badal dein chali jaa yaha'n se ...
suraj turns back and expected chakor to leave but instead she felt a hand holding his arm ...it was chakor who held his hand and turned him and Slapped him so hard that he stumbled a little and he was hell shock as why she did this and looked at her with blood red eyes...

suraj was about to say something when chakor aske him to stop and said

chakor : Yeh thappar shayad tejaswani ji ko tumhe bachpan me marna chahiye tha toh shayad aaj tum aisey rakhshas nahi hote...tum samajhte kia ho apne aap ko ? Tumhe kia laga tha ek agar marathon runner chakor suraj rajvanshi se nahi daregi toh tum ek larki ko daraoge ek larkey se ??? chii dhitlkaar hai tumhari soch par jisey iss tarha'n apni mardangi sabit karne k ilawa aur kuch nahi ataa...

suraj was listening to her with so many mixed emotions but did't say anything...

chakor : Agar tumne badla lene k liye mujhe maarney ki koshish ki hoti toh main samajh sakti thi k Kamal narayan rajvanshi k bete se or kia ummeed ki ja sakti hai par nahi tum toh kn se bhi gayeb guzre ho...Tum chahte they k main tumhe ankhein uthaa kar na dkehu isliye tumne woh kiss wali shart rakhi..meri izzat par hamla kia ? aaj k baad se apne aap ko mard kehne se pehle ek baar soch lena suraj narayan rajvanshi k asli dunya yeh sab karney wale insaan ko kia kehti hai...( she shouted at him )

she turned to go but looked back at him and said ...
chakor : Jin aankho'n ko tum neeche jhuke dekhna chahtey they na suraj abb tumhe woh or bhi unch dikhengi or pehle se ziada gussa dikhega unme...

she left...

Suraj was standing there when imli came to his room and said

Imli ; suraj babu oo didi ko aapne jane diya..bohat gusse ma gai hai kachu kare kia aap ?

suraj ignored imli and left from his room..

Chakor came to her house angrily and kasturi asked her if she's okay...

chakor: Maa main bilkul thik hun...tu achi tarha'n se janti hai k kisi se darti nahi main...bass uss rakhshas ko muh torh jawaab de kar aa rahi hun..
kastrui asked chakor to forget about everything and go to sleep as its going to be morning soon...
chakor on her thinking everything that happened today...she thinks

chakor : Aaj ka thappar tumh humesha yeh yaad dilayega suraj rajvanshi k koi larki kamzor nahi hoti hai ...Pata nahi kyon magar tum itna girr sakte ho kabhi socha nahi tha maine ...bohat jald abb tum bhi apne baap k sath jail ki salakho'n k piche hoge Suraj narayn Rajvanshi...and falls asleep..

Suraj is sitting in a bar ...some voices echoes in his mind (Chakor's) "Yeh thappar tejaswani ji ko bachpan me maarna chahiye tha" (Kn's) "Phirse haar kar aye hain aap aaj chorenge nahi hum apko" (tejaswani) 'Mp sahab bacha hai maaf kar dijiye" :Someone hitting someone with hunter" (Suraj) "Nahi papa hum dobara kabhi fail nahi honge chorh dijiye hume" he shuts his eyes due to these voiced but when he could't take it anymore he breaks the alcohol bottles and shouts..

suraj : BASSS BASSS BASSS KARO...Nahi suraj rajvanshi haar nahi sakta...aaj phirse tuny hume thappar maar kar humara guzra hua kal humare samne khol diya chakor ...Achaw nahi kiya tune Chakor bhuvan lal ...and doses off...

The End

Precap : Vivan thanks cakor...Chakor and suraj meets at kn's conference ...Kn announces about a camp in azaadgunj...


That's it ...I was so angry after loosing this chapter when i wrote it for first time ughh..but I decided not to give up and write agian..I hope you like this chapter but if you don't then please tell me so I can try my best ext time..and if there's something you are not liking about my story then please tell me so i will try to change or make it better...


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..chotu.. thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank u. Even though u had problems u still wrote the chapter. Lovd the chapter. Chakor did the right thing. Suraj must let go of his harkats and surely Chakor usse track pe le ayegi. Amazing update.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Comment for chap 10,11,12:
First of all,i am really very very sry for the late reply Chashmish,was really busy...sry once again.
Now,coming to the story,kya kamaal ka updates the yaar,luved them totally.
Right from the starting scene where suraj asks her the kiss,her shocked state,the scene where she sneaks into the haveli at night...Suraj taking her to his room..their heated convo...competition...rounds..Suraj cheating in the last round...then the last scene of SuKor...wowww!the way u moved the story from one high level to another was commendable,u did a great job. 👏 👏
What a story development yaar...its amazing. 😳
Now cant wait for the next part...zyaada wait mat karwana.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: shravs1101

Comment for chap 10,11,12:
First of all,i am really very very sry for the late reply Chashmish,was really busy...sry once again.
Now,coming to the story,kya kamaal ka updates the yaar,luved them totally.
Right from the starting scene where suraj asks her the kiss,her shocked state,the scene where she sneaks into the haveli at night...Suraj taking her to his room..their heated convo...competition...rounds..Suraj cheating in the last round...then the last scene of SuKor...wowww!the way u moved the story from one high level to another was commendable,u did a great job. 👏 👏
What a story development yaar...its amazing. 😳
Now cant wait for the next part...zyaada wait mat karwana.

You don't have to say sorry😳
And thank you so much for reading and here commenting...I really hope that I don't disappoint you guys at any point...Someone said that is't any romance ...Do you also think I'm missing the romance ? I wanted to start their story from hatred and my story is not only of 20 yaa 25 chapters it's a long one...maybe 50+ But if you guys want I can make it short and move to the romance quickly ??
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Originally posted by: ..chotu..

Thank u. Even though u had problems u still wrote the chapter. Lovd the chapter. Chakor did the right thing. Suraj must let go of his harkats and surely Chakor usse track pe le ayegi. Amazing update.

Thank you 😆
An important question ...Do you think the romance is missing ? Yaar meri story 20 25 chapters ki nahi hai its a long one maybe more than 50 so I'm moving it slowly but if you think that i should write a short one then I can add some romance and make it quick but then the story will be short ...please suggest me what to do ?
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Originally posted by: Chashmish786


You don't have to say sorry😳
And thank you so much for reading and here commenting...I really hope that I don't disappoint you guys at any point...Someone said that is't any romance ...Do you also think I'm missing the romance ? I wanted to start their story from hatred and my story is not only of 20 yaa 25 chapters it's a long one...maybe 50+ But if you guys want I can make it short and move to the romance quickly ??

Nahi nahi. Keep it slow n steady. Tabhi toh maza ayega.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Chashmish786


Thank you😆
An important question ...Do you think the romance is missing ? Yaar meri story 20 25 chapters ki nahi hai its a long one maybe more than 50 so I'm moving it slowly but if you think that i should write a short one then I can add some romance and make it quick but then the story will be short ...please suggest me what to do ?

sorry I quotd ur reply to Mishti by mistake :p
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Originally posted by: Chashmish786


You don't have to say sorry😳
And thank you so much for reading and here commenting...I really hope that I don't disappoint you guys at any point...Someone said that is't any romance ...Do you also think I'm missing the romance ? I wanted to start their story from hatred and my story is not only of 20 yaa 25 chapters it's a long one...maybe 50+ But if you guys want I can make it short and move to the romance quickly ??


Take ur time jaan...no need to rush it,i love the current pace at which it is moving...gradually they both fall in love,then only mazaa ayega,rush karenge toh woh saara maza chala jayega...ur story doesnt lack anything,its perfect...jaha tak romance ka baat hain,uske liye tumhe rush karne ki jaroorat mahi...i am ready to wait for it but plz dont cut the story short for it,proceed in the way u already planned it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank you @Mishti and @APS SAHAS for you're opinions...2 votes for slow and steady track...lets wait for more 😆
I will still wait for neha,nami di and some other's opinions too because sabki opinions sun'ney k baad I'll decide toh it will be fair ...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hii Jasmene... 😃
Superb update... 👏
I really luv this stylist n badass chakor of your story... 🤣
Update d nxt part soon...waiting eagerly 😳 ⭐️

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