Thread #1: Aafato'n k parindey 'IshaqZaade' Chapters 1 -11

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Eatifi

@Eatifi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#101

Hey Jasmene u r a genius yaar,awesome writing...👏

sorry for late reply i was busy wuth studies,today only i could spare time to read it,and i read 9 chapters in one go,itna sabr nahi tha ki one by one padh sakoon.

oh...i just wish ke koi vijra ko pakad kar yeh sab karwaa de aur hum sab live dekh sake,really every chapter,every sukor scene was a masterpiece in itself...👍🏼

just one slight confusion kya is ff aur real waale show mein kuchh similarity hai,just asking coz i became a full fledged udaan viewer only post marriage...

anyways thanx 4 entertaining us n once again👏keep it up...

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srividhya68

@srividhya68

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Posted: 8 years ago

#102

superb upt
loved it
swukor's tashan is always too good
waiting for the challenge
cont soon

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Jasmene

@Chashmish786

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Posted: 8 years ago

#103

Originally posted by: _YmBrYnE_
"naughty girl...tu chahti hai hum tujhe waha'n le kar jayen jaha koi dekh na sake..."
And the flirt is back together with junglee billi as well 🤣
Loved your update Chasmish, as always the best
Loved the sister's emotional scene you did there, it was much needed in these circumstances 😊
These 2 are really something, when Suraj has a plan Chakor can sense it and when Chakor has a plan Suraj can sense it 😆
Sach mein yeh dono toh ram milayi jodi hai 😆
And the precap, its Suraj ryte or it could be Vivaan too but I'm gonna keep my hopes on Suraj still 😆

Now jaldi jaldi se next update kar and don't forget to check my comment for chapter 8 😃😉

I do eagerly wait for your comments neha...and maine yeh raat ko hi parh liya tha...reply bhi likh liya tha but post nahi kar pai because IF won't let a groupbie post more that 20 posts in a day😡

Anyways thank you so much for reading and liking the story...I wanted to see chakor-imli confronting each other...where imli shares her hurtful past and chakor shares hers...but cv's decided to make the sisters bond over something else..( chakor sved imli from suraj and tadaaa imli's sisterly love wakes up 😆) anyways I do love the serial as it is so no complains ...

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Namita

@Namita-M

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Posted: 8 years ago

#104

Afato'n ke parindey "IshaqZaade" chapter 10

recap : chakor gets to know that suraj is making some children bandhua...she goes to haveli ...suraj challenge her...

Chakor : Kia chahiye tumhe agar jeet gaye toh ?

suraj comes close to her holds her face and brings it close to his and says...

suraj : Ek kiss...

this shockes chakor to her death and she immediately took two steps back and looked down...

suraj : arrey kia hua ? Humari bandhua billli jo kisi se nahi haarti..kisi se nahi darti woh humari ek choti si shart se darr gai ?? chal jaa yaha'n se tere bass ki baat ni...( he turn to o inside haveli )

chakor was shocked and angry at suraj ..but she thought about the children and said..

chakor : Manzoor hai...

Suraj stopped hearing this and was surprised by her anser he turned back to her smirked and said..

Suraj : thik hai toh phir mujhe bhi manzoor hai...kal shaam mei gaao'n k bahar jo maila laga hai waha'n par muqable k saare intizaam karwa denge hum...tu bass aa jana...haarney k liye...( smirks )

chakor wanted to give a fit reply but was feeling disgusted so she decided to keep her mouth shut and let from there...

( chakor practice shooting with chagan and imli comes there )

Imli looks at chakor practicing and a flashback shows that...

shikhu : suraj babu apke glass me sharaab khatam hui gai hai or bharr dun ?

suraj : nahi shikhu abb iss sharaab ki zaroorat nahi...

shikhu : oo kyon suraj babu..

suraj smiles and says : Ijazat di hai uss ney k behak jaao'n me uskey Labo'n ko choom kar...

suna hai sharaab aur lab-e-yaar me kuch farq nahi hota...

shikhu : waah waah suraj babu...

imli was listening to their conversation..she comes there and asks suraj what he's talking about...suraj was busy thinking of chakor so he ignored imli ...
shikhu ; tujhe nahi pata..teri behan chakor aai rahi yaha'n...and explains everything that happened...

flashback ends...

while going toward chakor imli thinks to herself...Kaahey karti hai tu aisa har baar didi ? jab bhi apni sari taklifein bhula kar tujh pe bharso karney lagat hain hum tu phir konu nayi wajah de det hai humka k hum tose nafrat kari...par iss baar aisa kucho nahi hoi de hain hum...she wipes her tears and goes to chakor..

Imli : Tu kaisy shart laga k aai hai didi ?

chakor : Imluu shart mainey apne liye nahi lagai .

imli : toh phir kahey lagai hai ?

chakor : imli suraj kal raat kamalnarayan k aney k baad un bacho ko nadhua banadega..isliye meine yeh shart lagai hai ...kal shaam ko muqable me use haraa kar suraj se jeetne par me un bacho ki azadi mangungi...mere paas time bohat kam hai...shaam hone ai hai...or mujhse toh ek nishana nahi laga..

( Imli understands chakor and offers her help...they practice shooting ..finally chakor gets better a little )

At night ...

chakor goes to haveli stealthily and manages to reach in tejaswani's room ...tejaswani was sleeping and chakor very carefully opens the drawer in which she has kept the drug bottle ...chakor exchanges both bottles and then goes out ...she was going out when she heard someone's foot step coming in her direction so she immediately runs in other direction...and some suddenly hold her arm and drags her inside a room and keeps a hand on her mouth...

Chakor was trying to get free but failed...someone came close to her ear and said...Ssshhh...

she felt warm breath on her shoulders and closed her eyes...but after realizing that she's in danger she tried to free herself again...and this time the one who was holding her...when she turned back it was non other than suraj...chakor was dumbstruck knowing that she's caught in haveli at this time and that too from suraj.. ( suraj was wearing his usual white kurti and jeans )

suraj coming forward : Hum poochein k tu btayegi k kia kar rahi hai iss waqt yaha'n ?

chakor was still in shock and was taking steps backward...

suraj : zubaan ghar par bhool kar ai hai kia...

Chakor : n..n...nahi woh mein woooh ( she was still moving backward while suraj was coming to her..she was blocked by the bed and was about to fall on it when suraj held her waist and pulled her closer to him...)

chakor managed to come to her senses and push away suraj...and said..

chakor : woh mein tumse hi milney ai thi..

suraj : itni raat ko haveli mein humse milne ai ho ?? naughty girl..

chakor : shut up..mein bass yeh kehne ai thi k ek baar phir soch lo...humne jo shart lagai hai haarney k baad tum mukarna nahi...

suraj was still doubtful but decided to play along...and said..

suraj : Hum Suraj Rajvanshi hain...ek baar jo keh diya so keh diya...magar tu ek baar soch le...tujhe pata hai na k agar tu haar gai toh...( touches his lips to tease her )

chakor gets angry at him but she knew its better to keep quite or else he'll ask for what she came to haveli...

suraj again holds her waist and pulls her closer to him and holds her head with one hand and bring her face closer to his while she was trying to get free...

suraj : waisey shooting practice toh tuny karli hogi ...

chakor : chorho mujhe...kia batmeezi hai...

suraj : batmeezi nahi hum toh tera bhala kar rahey hain...abb jab tu kal sabke samne hare gi or sabke samne hum tujhe kiss karenge toh teri hi badnaami hogi na...

chakor : aisa kuch nahi hoga...haarne k liye tumse shart nahi lagai mainey...chorhoo mujheee...

suraj : achaw hum toh soch rahey the k tuny shooting practice toh karli...or haarna toh tuny pakka hai toh kissing practice bhi kar lete hain ??

chakor's eyes were blood red with anger...she tried her best to push him away but his grip on her waist and head was so tight that she failed every time...and seeing her this angry he was having fun...but suddenly he remembered how she slapped him and insulted him and he let go of her...this was a little surprising for chakor too..she looked at him confused

suraj (angrily) : tujhe toh kal dekhenge hum jaa yaha'n se iss se pehle k irada badal lein apna..

chakor came out of haveli and went home...everyone was sleeping at her home so she goes to her room and tries to sleep...when she closed her eyes everything that happened today started playing in her mind...she opened her eyes and said...
chakor : nahi mujhe shart ki fikar karney ki koi zaroorat nahi...mera maqsad jeetna hai or mujhe usi par focus karna chahiye...kiss karney ka sawaal hi paida nahi hota jab mujhe haarna hi nahi toh...abb baat sirf un bacho ki nahi meri izaat ki bhi hai...mei sirf or sirf jeetungi Suraj Narayan Rajvanshi...

at haveli...

suraj was on his bed trying to sleep but was thinking of how chakor slapped him and insulted him he opened his eyes and said...
suraj : jo zakham tuny mere gaal par diya tha usko sood samaid lautaney ka waqt aa gaya hai...kal tujhe aisa sabaq sikahyenge k khud se nazrey nahi mila payegi...haarney k liye tayyar hoja marathon ace runner 501 Chakor...

The end...

Precap : Competition starts ...chakor misses her 1st shot...suraj changes the last round and asks chakor to shoot flying bird...

That's it for now guys..I hope you're liking the story..sorry for the mistakes and an important question...Do you guys want chakor to win or lose ?? I mean if you guys want the kiss to happen then I can manage to make it happen in a nicer way.😆 I really need suggestions on what to do...make chakor loose or win ? So please comment and tell me...

Special thank to Nami di for posting this...

Love-Jasmene

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crystal30003

@crystal30003

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#105

Please make chakor lose so we can have the kiss. So far chakor and suraj haven't had any romantic or intimate moments. We need this to be the first moments since the show is also refusing to give us any. Bye your writing is amazing, and I look forward to your updates also.

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Neha

@howler

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#106

Chapter 10

Another amazing update aloo 😃👏

Again ImKor bonding and I loved it actually, at least Imli cleared her confusion rather than harboring any ill feelings towards Chakor

Aur kya ghazab syari tha yaar 👏, did Suraj really said this or you came up with it?

Cause if you did then chashmish, you have a great future in literature dear 😉😃

Olalala , thank god it was Suraj who caught her, and he even sushed her 😆, Suraj babu doesn't want his junglee billi to be caught by someone else 😳

And I really want to see Suraj in white kurta again

"suraj : zubaan ghar par bhool kar ai hai kia..."

I laughed out loud for this yaar 🤣🤣... And that naughty girl wala dialogue is back 😆, I just keep imagining Suraj saying naughty girl to Chakor with the expression he had during the dhabha scene where he says jhuti jhuti 😆

and that touching lip scene ☺️ #GMmodeactivated

And CVs should learn from here, rather than fall-catch why don't they do scenes where Suraj pulls Chakor close and holds her waist or something anything, thank god at least you write it aloo and I love you for that 🤗

Now running to read chapter 11 😆

Edited by _YmBrYnE_ - 8 years ago

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Neha

@howler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#107

Originally posted by: Chashmish786

I do eagerly wait for your comments neha...and maine yeh raat ko hi parh liya tha...reply bhi likh liya tha but post nahi kar pai because IF won't let a groupbie post more that 20 posts in a day😡
Anyways thank you so much for reading and liking the story...I wanted to see chakor-imli confronting each other...where imli shares her hurtful past and chakor shares hers...but cv's decided to make the sisters bond over something else..( chakor sved imli from suraj and tadaaa imli's sisterly love wakes up 😆) anyways I do love the serial as it is so no complains ...

Don't worry dear, come here I'll give you a hug🤗

Ad it's a good thing you did thought of the sisters scenes, tat would give more insight on their relationship and yes agree with you, Imli started having her sisterly love only when Chakor wanted to help Imli and tat is soo wrong at least in your story we get to see it so we need to thank you for that 😃👏

Edited by _YmBrYnE_ - 8 years ago

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srividhya68

@srividhya68

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#108

wow
awesome upt
the show & ur upt today has really made my day

plz plz make chakor loose this time...really wanna see suraj reaction to chakor's lose...its a request plz

eagerly waiting for the nxt chap
cont soon

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anuja

@princess2791

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#109

First i am sorry to late reply to your story.

Now comeback to story. Just now read all parts in one go they were mind blowing excellent. Each part was amazing. Sukor's journey with whole new form i love it so much. Waiting for next update.

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SukiDakanya

@SukiDakanya

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#110

Aloo Chap 8 /9/ 10

You get the character's spot on. Chakor's fierce righteousness Suraj's proud haughty and flirty demeanor and Imli's jealous mixed with big sister adoration very well.

I love how you make the characters more dimensional than they appear on screen sometimes.

My favorite parts are when suraj gets super possessive about his playmate going with some else and hits his own friend.

Chakor calls his vehicle Kattara and so predictably he gets upset...

You also make Imli more than her Suraj Babu's pyar... best way to use her jealousy to beat Suraj at his own game...

these lines is such a gem --

"naughty girl...tu chahti hai hum tujhe waha'n le kar jayen jaha koi dekh na sake...🤣

suraj smiles and says : Ijazat di hai uss ney k behak jaao'n me uskey Labo'n ko choom kar... suna hai sharaab aur lab-e-yaar me kuch farq nahi hota...

shikhu : waah waah suraj babu...❤️

and the kissing practice...

Of course Chakor in his arms doesnt make him forget that she owes him for hurting his ego.

I love your story so much... hehehe soon we should have a towel girne wali scene too ...😆

My Hindi😲 is also becoming better thanks to you and the show 😕 my Hindi teacher would have been so shocked at this English Mem's Hinglish attempts!!!😳

Edited by sukiya123 - 8 years ago

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