Thread #1: Aafato'n k parindey 'IshaqZaade' Chapters 1 -11 - Page 4

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Lovely update ...good going dear...love sukor...next update kab hai yaar??😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vinlora

Lovely update ...good going dear...love sukor...next update kab hai yaar??😉


Thank you so muc...
well I'm free right now so am going to pm nami di the chapter 5 and hope she will post it tomorrow maybe...
keep reading/...thanks again...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It's wonderful.. continue soon 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oh it's getting interesting :D :D and we all know what happens in the jungle na 😃😆

Great update chasmish! especially Surajz attitude
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Chapter 5:

Recap : Suraj asks Chakor for a gift...KN agrees to dig 10 wells in village...Suraj drags Chakor to storeroom...imli sees Chakor leaving store room and adjusting her dupatta..she sees Suraj coming out room same storeroom

In the evening 5:30 pm

{ Chakor was stealthily searching for Vivaan's room in haveli }


Chakor in her mind : baap re 10 saalo'n me pata nahi haveli me kia kia badlav aa gaya hai abb pata nahi vivaan ka kamra same hai yaa nahi ??

{ She enters a room thinking its vivaan's and shuts the door so no one can see her but when she turns around calling vivaan's name she sees suraj's photo frame on the wall and she realizes that its suraj's room...she immediately opens the door and runs from there and enters another room and thinks..)

Chakor : shukar hai daak baba ka aaj toh bach gai...pehli baar haveli k androoni hissey mei aai hun aur atey hi uss shaitaan k kamre pohanch gai...dhatt chakor...par yeh kiska kamra hai ?? she asked herself and soon she saw Vivaan's pictures on table and walls ...but Vivaan was no where to be seen she was about to leave when she saw a glass which was smelling very badly..she picked it up and doubted by seeing something white and smelly in the bottom so she took the glass and went home..

Chakor : maa yeh glass dekh or bata k iskey ander kya hai ..tujhe tu jarh bootiyo'n or dawaiyo'n k bare me sab pata hai na...

Kasturi after looking in the glass : haan bachua pata toh hai magar ee jo chiz iss gilaas me hai na ee konu angrejji dawai laagat hai hum toh sirf thori si jarhi bootiyo'n se jakham bhare wlai dawaya'n hi banawat hain toh humka kaisey pata chali hai ?

Chakor : achaw koi nai maai hum kal subha sitapur hospital le jayenge isey..filhaal hum practice karne jaa rhey hain aa jayenge wapas baad me..

Kasturi : par bachua raat k 9 baj rahey hain ee time jana zaroori hai ka ??

Chakor : maa darr kyon rahi hai teri panchi bitya ko aaj tak koi pakarh paaya hai kia ?? ( smiles and winks )

( Chakor ran as fast as she could in her black tights and dark purple short tight kurti and her favorite scarf around her neck as usual...she reached in jungle which she heard imli talking about but found no one there...she was hiding behind a large tree and thinking maybe she's late and everyone is gone but suddenly she felt a warm hand on her shoulder ( her kurti's had keyhole neckline styke so her shoulder's were bare ) she turn around and find suraj smiling at her ( evil,loafer typish )

Suraj : kya ?? kyaa kar rahi hai humari bandhua billi yaha'n iss jungle me adhi rat ko ??

chakor jerks his hand away from her shoulder and adjusts her scarf and replies : Pehle bhi keh chuki hun me jo bhi karu'n tumse matlab ??

Suraj : arrey humari bandhua billi se hum matlab nahi rakhenge toh kon rakhega ?

Chakor : bakwaas band karo ..me jaanti hun tum yaha'n koi illegal kaam krne aye they ..

Suraj : ohh achaw toh tujhe pata tha k hum yaha'n ahi..or isiliye tu humse milney yaha'n chali aai waah ( laughs )

Chakor : nashey me ho kia jo aisy behki behki batein kr rhey ho ?? ( angrily)

Suraj coming closer to her to which she takes a step back and soon gets blocked by the large tree and suraj also blocks her sideways comes more closer and says...

Suraj : Waisey nasha toh tujhe dekhtey hi ho jaata hai hume...

Chakor : ( angrily ) fikar matt karo suraj tumhare or tumhare baap k jitne bhi illegal kaam hain na apney azaadgunj e band krwa denge hum..fir tumhe kahi'n nasha krney ko nahi milega...

suraj : ( smiles ) Mayy kadey laakh band karein zamane waaley...Shehar mei kamm nahi hain Aankho'n se pilaaney wale...( winks at chakor )

Chakor gets angry at his shayari ( well somehow she knew it was a compliment for her eyes ) she pushes Suraj away and points finger at him and says

Chakor : mere paas aney ki tum dobara koshish bhi matt karna..aur yeh jo tum soch baithey ho na k mei tumse milne yaha'n ai thi aisa kuch nahi hai...( suraj was listening to her calmly and was smiling ) Tum mere liye sirf aur sirf kn k ek paaltu kuttey ho...( this sentence made Suraj's smile disappear and he got angry ) samjhee tum ??

Suraj :
Ayy bandhua billi khabar daar agar hume dobara kutta bulaya toh warna aisy haalat karengey key ...( he was cut off in middle by chakor who said )

Chakor : Tum kuch nahi karr saktey suraj...kyonke tumhara baap kn meri media ki taaqat se darr kar dubak kr baitha hua hai or uskey hukum k baghair uska paaltu kutta kuch kaisey kar sakta hai ?? ( this made suraj more angry,..)

Suraj : bakwaas band kar apni wanraa..

Chakor : warna kya karoge kaha na mene nahi darti tum...( she was about to finish her sentence but suddenly Suraj came forward removed her scarf from her neck and threw it away...exposing Chakor's bare neck and shoulder's ...and this made Chakor scare for a second but then she could't control her anger and she slapped Suraj as hard as she could...they ring of her finger made Suraj's cheek bleed a little he tight his fist in anger and raised his hand to slap her but stopped him self ...He came closer to Chakor when she moved back ..he held her chin and moved her face to right where he had thrown her scarf and put his mobile's torch light on it...when chakor looked there she found a scorpion moving in her scarf ( a deadly one ) she looked back at suraj with god knows what feelings..)

Suraj ( Very angry ) Pehli baat toh yeh k humne iss bichoo se tujhe iss liye bachaya k agar yeh bichoo tujhe kaat leta toh tujhe asaan maut mill jati jo k hum hone nahi denge...tarhpa tarhpaa kar marenge tujhe..or dusri baat Suraj Rajvanshi apne saatth huye kisi bhi badsalooki ko bhoolta nahi hai yeh jo chaanta maara hai na tuny or jo nishaan humare gaal par hai aaj tujhe aisa zakhm denge k nishaan tere chehrey par nahi teri rooh pr hoga...

( He left from there..chakor was still not sure how to feel she decided to go back but she could't just eave her favorite scarf there so she shushed away the scorpion and took her scarf with her...)

At night 2:00 am ( or its morning 😕)

Chakor was tossing and turning in her bed whenever she closed her eyes flashbak of what happend few hours ago plays in her mind...She thought to herself that however suraj is she should't have react this way in hurry ...

Chakor in her mind : acha think hai ghalti ho gai mujhse...sorry bol dein ?? nahi kiss insaan ko sorry bolne ka soch rhi hai Chakor..bass ayenda se iss baat se yeh sabaq haasil kr lena k jaldbaazi k faisley ghalat ho saktey hain ...bass abb soja...

In haveli : Suraj was drinking whisky ...he was also remembering how Chakor had slapped him the thought of Chakor slapping him made him so angry they he broke the glass into pieces which of course wounded his hand too but he did not care for it and thought ..

Suraj ; jiss tarha aaj yeh glass humare gusse ki aag me Chakna choor huva hai na ...usi tarha raat ki thandi chandi chakor bhuvan laa tujhr bhi iss suraj ki aag se chakna choor kar denge waada hai mera...

The End..

Precap : Chakor goes to hospital ...Suraj blocks her way and pins her to wall...chakor act as getting pain in stomach...doctor asks Suraj to bring his wife to emergency checkup room which shocks both...

Here you go guys...May be some of you heard about the tragic incident that happened with me while I was writing the story...but I did't took it seriously laughed on it and moved on to writing again...Hope you guys enjoyed it...And please do comment if you're liking it or not weather should I change anything or not ...please do comment today because I've done the hadrwork twice today 😆...Sorry for mistakes..
Big thanks to Nami di for being kind enough to help out with posting this ff..🤗 ( a hug too )

Love-Jasmene

Edited by _Namita_ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Its well written... I deserve a hug for reading in Hindi chashmish😆😆. The plot is proceeding very nicely. Suraj and chakor gravitate toward each other 😃 whether friends or enemies.


Thanks to Nami DI for posting it
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: sukiya123

Its well written... I deserve a hug for reading in Hindi chashmish😆😆. The plot is proceeding very nicely. Suraj and chakor gravitate toward each other 😃 whether friends or enemies.


Thanks to Nami DI for posting it


🤗 Here you go sweetheart a big hug from me...Thanks for reading it and thank you so much for your lovely review...☺️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Aafato'n ke parindey 'IhaqZaade" chapter 6

Recap...Chakor enters suraj's room by mistake..Suraj and chakor argument in jungle..Suraj throws away chakor's scarf in anger ...she slaps suraj..

In morning 8:00 am

Chakor was getting ready to go to hospital ( she was wearing black jeans with orange long flared kurti with black embroidery on neckline and her half back was showing and she rapped her scarf around her neck took her bag kept the glass in it carefully informed her mother and left from house...

Imli was with suraj in his jeep going somewhere when imli saw chakor on road going toward sitapur bus station...she informed suraj the same who decided to follow her therefor he asked imli to get off his jeep..

Imli : Suraj babu hum bhi aapke saath chalat hain na...Shayad humari zaroorat parh jayii hai..

Suraj : Suraj rajvanshi ko kisi ki zaroorat nahi..chal jaldi utar jeep se hum nahi chahtey woh bandhua billi humare hath se nikal jaye or koi naya panga shuru ho jaye...

Imli sadly got off from jeep and became a little jealous seeing suraj going behind chakor...

In Hospital
Chakor told the doctor everything and he asked her to come and get the reports tomorrow morning...she was leaving from hospital while suraj was entering same corridor looking for her...they both were coming from opposite sides...chakor looking at her mobile and suraj looking here and there and *Bhammm* They both collided with each other chakor was about to fall when suraj held her waist by his one hand and the other held her arm...Chakor was shocked to see suraj in hospital she got more angry realizing that surj was holding her...

Chakor pushed away and tried to walk away but suraj was as angry as chakor remembering the slap so he pinned her agains a wall...

Chakor : Kya pareshani hai tumhe ? mei koi photo frame hun ?? jab dekho diwaar se chipka dete ho...jane do mujhe ( angrily )n

Suraj : Aisey kaisey janey doon...pehle tu yeh bata k yaha'n hospital mein kyon aai thi ??

Chakor : kis haq se pooch rahey ho ? mein tumhe kuch bhi btana zaroori nhai samjhti...( looked away )

Suraj showed the stamp on her wrist to her and said : Yehh dekh bhool rahi hai toh yaad karwa dein bandhua hai tu humari...

Chakor was unable to find a suitable answer so she started acting like she's having pain in stomach...

Suraj : ( confused ) yeh kya drama akr rahi hai tu drama queen ?? band karr natak...

( But chakor did not listen to him and continued shouting until a nurse came and ask suraj to move aside...)

Suraj : kuch nahi huva yeh natak kar rahi hai..
Chakor : nahi nurse mere pait me boht dard ho raha hai chakkr bhi aa rahey hain..
( Suraj looked at her angrily )

Nurse : Arrey hatiye aap aur checkup karne dijiye inka humein..aur kaisey pati hain aap apki patni ko dard ho raha hai chakkar aa rahey hain aur aap ...she was cut off in middle by chakor who said..

Chakor : nahi nahi aap...( this time interrupted her she looked at him confused and he was smirking and said to nurse )

Suraj : Hum jantey hain humari patni ko chkkar aa rahey dard bhi ho raha pait mein magar jaha'n takk meri jaankaari hai aisy haalat mein aisa hota hai ( suraj said smiling and giving chakor an evil smirk who was hell shocked on his statement...)

nurse took them in check up ward ( i don't know what it is called )

and asked them to sit here while she arranges a doctor she left from there and chakor shouted at suraj..

Chakor : Kyaa bakwaas kar rahey they tum nurse k saamney...himmat kaisey hui tumhari ?

Suraj : Arrey ahista bata karo iss halat me chillana thik nahi..( which angered chakor more ) Aur nataak tumne shuru kiya tha toh hume kya hai hum bhi hissa ban gaye iss nataak ka...shayad tumhare liye ek sabaq hoga k dobara Suraj rajvanshi k saamne nautanki karney ka kia anjaam hota hai...

Chakor : enough...boht sunli tumhari bakwaas mene abb me jaa rhi hun yaha'n se...

Suraj holding her arm and pulling her back...: Kaha'n jaa rhi ho doctor ko toh aney do...( he teased her )

chakor freed her arm and left from there angrily..while he was laughing and then he left too before the nurse come back...

In evening..
Chakor: maa imli kidhr hai ghar khana nahi khaney ayegi ?

Kasturi : naahi bachua oo imlu toh iss bhakat bhi factory maa hi howat hai..

Chakor: achaw parr aaj aisa nahi hoga mein dekhti hun imli kaisey ghr nhi ati..she said this with a naughty smile and left for factory..

Outside factory ..

Suraj was sitting on chair reading some files while imli was supervising workers...when chakor came there ...

Chakor : Imluuu..
Imli ( coldly ) : tu yaha'n kia karat hai..

( This caught suaj's attention too but he wanted to see some sister drama so he just closed the files rest his feet on table and started to watch what chakor is upto)

Chakor : Chall imli bohat kaam ho gaya ghar chall khana khaatey hain aaj sab ikathey..
Imli : pagal ho gai hai dikhat naahi hum kaam kar rahey hain ..
Chakor : kaam waam toh hota rahega abhi please chall na ghr ma se wadaa kr k ai hun..
Imli : toh nahi karna tha wada jaa eeha'n ( yaha'n ) se ...

Chakor knew that imli will not agree to come so she started to think of something when suddenly she saw a well few feet away...went there and stood on 1st step of well..and shouted ..

Chakor ( shouting ) : Imluuu dekh mei tujhe request kar rahi hun ghar chall mere saath warna me iss kunwei'n me kood jaungi..

( Suraj was being entertained and decided to not say anything and Imli was a little confused at this behavior of her elder sister...but did not agree,...)

Chakor : achaw thik hai matt aa...( took another step ) iss gehrey se kunwe'n me abhi chalaang laga deti hun main ooorrr ( she was shocked to see the depth of the well so she immediately sit on the stair and murmured ..)

Yeh toh kuch zyadaa hi gehra hai...but when she realized everybody is still looking at her she said..

Par mujhe koi farq nahi parta main abhi kood jaungi ismey orr ...orr saraa ilzaam tere suraj babu par ayega...

This shocked both suraj and imli...

Imli :
kyon un par kaisey ?

Chakor : Dekh yeh factory suraj ki hai...sab jantey hain k suraj mera dushman hai...aur mere marney ki khabar sun key media sabse pehle suraj or kn ko hi shaqq ki nazro'n se dekhega..abb bata ayegi k nahi...

( Imlii looked at suraj who was surprised by this behavior of chakor and asked imli to go ...when imli agreed chakor immediately came down n and both sisters left..while suraj was smiling a bit at childish behavior of chakor and said "Dramaa queen " )

The End ..


Precap : Holi special update ( or should I say Maha update😆 )

Here you go...another update...hope you are enjoying and liking my story .. I really apologize for the mistakes ( grammatical , or any other ) ...Do let me know if I should continue or not ?? the next update will be longer because of holi special...are you exicted ??
A big thanks to Nami di for posting it...

Love-Jasmene
Edited by _Namita_ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very well written. ..loved it so much...I appreciate your hardwork dear..thank u so much. ...keep writing. ..stay blessed. ..
@namita Thank u so much. ..stay blessed. .😊
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Loving the direction of the story Jasmene. 🤗

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