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Posted: 11 years ago
part 8

Scene starts with in morning Ishita gets up early and she feels Raman's breath over her and feels shy.It has been the morning she has dreamt for long.Being with Raman and Ruhi completes her world.

Then she checks in other room Ruhi sleeping peacefully she looks at rule book lying on the shelf.She reads each rule and smiles seeing them.Ruhi wrote everything in her favour indirectly favourable to her family.Break fast and dinner should be done only in house leaving family outing.

Letting no one inside house just to reduce troubles.They don't have a maid either.So all works are done by them selves and together.Ruhi wanted her family outings fixed and she made sure of it.

She was amazed whether she is her daughter Ruhi or Raman's naani.Ishita smiling.Then she hears alaram ringing in Ruhi's room.Ishita goes and looks there.She ses Ruhi screaming Raman's name trying to wake up Raman not realizing he is not there.

She realizes seeing Ishita standing there .

Ruhi "Ishima papa uth gayen hain.?"

Ishita "Nahen so rahen hain."

Ruhi then jumps and gets to her mood waking up Raman she employs same trick again.But Ishita stops her this time.

Ishita "Ruhi aisey nahen karnaa papa ka tabhyath kharaab hoge.Papa heart patient hain naa."

Ruhi gets sad as she don't know what to do.

Ishita takes Ruhi in her arms "Papa ko uthaana hain naa.Hum koi doosra raastha lengey."

Then she looks around house and finds a feather in Ruhi's dolls.They take it and starts chuckling Raman and he wakes up irritated who slept after a hard night.

Ruhi runs around usual and Ishita starts making break fast.

But horror struck when Ishita's mobile got a call from Mani.

Ishita was confused not knowing what to do.She tells Raman about this.

Ishita "Raman main kyaa karu uthaun yaa nahen?"

Rama n"Tumhaara doosth ahintumhaara marzi."

Ishita "Raman sabh problem usskey wajaha sey huin hain.Mann kartha hain kee ssedhey daantlu."

Raman "Issliyen kehtha hun apnaa dimaak istamaal math kiyan karon."

Ishita "Raman aap kyan chaahthey hain."

Raman "Tumhaarey daantney sey sabooth thodi milegee.Socheny do ussey kee jaal usske hain.khelney don.Chaahtha hain naa kee humey alag karey.Ussey taraha rehney doo.Abh phone uthaaon aur baath karon.Ussey yeh math bathaana kee hum mil chukey hain.aBass yeh kehnaa kee idhar shift huin hon."

Ishita understood what Raman is planning.Sh edoes as asked.

Mani "Ishita kyaa yaar tum Mumbai aaye hon aur mujhsey milee bhee nahen.Kahan ho tum."

Ishita "Main kall hee aaye thee.Phone kiyya thaa but lagee nahen.Ghar kaa arrangement kar rahne thee na"

Mani "Kahan hon tum?Main koi madad karoo?Tum akeley kyo rehrahen hon.Mera itnaa bada gahr hain yaha aaon naa."

Ishita "Mainey arrangement karlee naa.Suna hain Raman bhee yahen kahee rehtha hain.Ussey dhoondhney mey asaani hooge?"

Mani "Raman mumbai mey hain.Its a good news.Ok tumhaara ghar kahan hain."

Ishira "Boruvalli,Gruhashree appartments"

Mani "Main abhee aatha hun.Main bhee tumhaara madad kartha hun Raman ko dhoondhney."

He cuts the call.

Raman has shifted half of Ishita's luggage to 402 .To avoid doubt for Mani.

Ishita "Raman yeh aap kyan kar rahen hain."

Raman "Hum donon baath nahen kar rahen hain.Main abh bhee tumsey gussa hun aur ussey baath sey ataka hun."

Ruhi comes there same time.

Raman "Oy Mini Me tum Ishima sey baath karogee aur aisey acting karnaa kee bahuth miss kar rhane hon aur main Ishima sey naaraz hun."

Ruhi "Aiasa kyon papa.Jhoot boolna galath hain naa."

Raman "Tumhey Ishima ko help karnaa hain yaa nahen."

Ruhi "Karnaa hain.?"

Raman "Ishita tum uss ghar mey rahon.Hum wahe aathey rahengey.Bass precaution.Mani key liyen tum uss ghar mey rehthee hon ok."

Ishita was listening silently.

Ishita "Raman par kyon itnaa naatak kee kyaa jaroori hain."

Raman "Usskey naatak sey tho kam hee hain."

Raman "Tum abh jaon .Who abh thak tapak gayan hoga.Sab kuch yaad hain naa.Mujhsey contact mey rehnaa.Message nahen watsapp use karon."

Ishita leaves not understanding what Raman is planning.

She just reaches her opposite flat.

Then te moment her door closes after few moments door bell rings.She know who it is and prepares herself for the drama Raman is directing.


(cont.)30 likes for next update.sorry for condition but jut a target.

even if it happens or not there will be update tommorow morning.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Sooo much intersted...fast fast update kardo...aur mani ka band baja dena...
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Posted: 11 years ago
no vikas...dis is nt done..is it point tos top the upadte...
upadte is awesom...
lets see raman kis tarah iss angmani ki baand bajadeta hain...
nd i evn want him to get som nice tit fr tat...
cant bare his tortre in shw so pls nxt update mein baand bajadena...
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Posted: 11 years ago
interestinggg!! im loving it too.. jaldi update kijiye!
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Posted: 11 years ago
ravan kumar bhalla in action...ab aayega maza
mani ki to esi ki tesi...hehe
super update vikas...thnks 4 pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
awesome update
loved each n every part
ishra part was superb
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Posted: 11 years ago
So interesting
ab aayega mani ka asli face infornt of all
woww
cont. Plz
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Posted: 11 years ago
I know I gave the target and you copmpleted it.
I am thankful for you for reeding my update.

I prefer to stand on my word and am writing 9 th part ,Will be updating in an hal an hour.

Thanking you.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Note:This is just an extra note.So you can understand how story will turn by small change.
Assume I din't post part 6,7,8.And read stroy again removing part 6,7,8, and rad marking I make from this chapter.Yo can see story running different way.But story is same.Jsut by showing them flash bach in end.



part 9

Scene starts with Ishita opening the door.Mani was waiting out side looking at opposite flat.

Ishita "Udhar kyaa dekhrahhen hon door yahan hain."

Mani then looking at Ishita "Hi.Good morning."

Ishita "Good morning.Andhar aaon naa.Tum udhar kyaa dekhrahen hon?"

Ishita is cautious now she know what Mani is looking at.

Mani closes the door.

Mani "Kuch nahen.Ajeeb aadmeee hain koi name plate nahen.Kaun hain tumhaareyg saamney ghar mey."

Ishita "Mujhey nahen patha.Uncle ney bola kee.Unlogon ko avoid karey.Who log iss ghar ko kharreedhna chahthey hain."

Mani "Iss ghar mey aisa kya hain?"

Ishita "Mujhye kyaa patha?Main bhee tho kal hee ayen hun."

Mani "Itney issue waaley ghar mey kyon rehnaa.Merey saath merey bungalaw mey aaon naa."

Ishita "Yahan kyaa problem hain?Tum jaanthey hon naa main Raman key liyen yahan aayee hun."

Ishita "Mujhey ek saal laga Raman key baarey mey pathaa karney abh main itney kareeb aa chukee hun tho peechey nahen hatoongi."

Mani "Fir bhee akeley rehney sey problem ho sakthee hain.Mainey abhe abhe commissiner sey baath kee hain.Yeh area bilkul safe nahen hain.Bahuth complaints hain iss area mey."

Ishita "Mani but Raman yahen iss area mey hain mujhey ussey dhoondhnaa hain."

Ishita "Mainey ek saal jee lee Raman key bhina abh mujhsey nahen hoga."

Mani "Ishita but first your saftey is important."

Mani "Mainey commissioner sey baath kee hain.Who hummarey madad karney tayyar hain.Mujhey yahan kuch log patha hain.Unsey baath kee hain who log Raman key baarey mey patha karengey.Abh Khush.But ussney kahan kee Raman Bhalla iss area mey nahen hain.Malad side hain bola.Humey wahan dhoondhna chaahiyen."

Mani "Fir theek hain tum jaldhee ready hojaon."

Ishita "Kyon?"

Mani "Ghar mey rehkar Raman ko dhoondogee kyaa?Bahaar jaana padega?Gahr mey rehkar kuch nahen kar paaogee."

Ishita "Theek hain main abhee aathe hun."

Ishita goes inside while Mani was carefully looking at opposite flat from the small gap he left while closing the door.

Ishita sees him doing so but din't speak much.Sh ewent inside and Raman was there listening whole converation trying to stop laughing.

Ishita with angry look and her face.

Ishita "Kitney jhoot bol rahan hain.Aap malad kabh pahunchey."

Raman was laughing seeing Ishita's annoyed face.

Ishita "Aapko masti suujh rahen hain.Mainey kabhee nahen socha kee Mani aisa kar saktha hain."

Rama n"Abh saabith bhee huan naa."

Raman "Tumhey path hain who hmmarey ghar key ore kyon dekh rahan hain."

Ishita "Kyon?"

Raman "Pehley who confirm karega kee who door locked hain yaa nahen.Loch huan hon tho jab tumhey lekar jaayega."

Raman "Who bhee sediyon sey.Kyon kee lift mey tho chance hoga naa humey dekhney kaa."

Ishita "Abh hum kyaa karey?"

Raman looking at tensed Ishita .

Raman "Pehley nahaa lethey hain.Fir decide karengey."

Ishita "Kyaa?" sensing what Raman meant.

Ishita "Raman aapko har cheez galath time mey kyoo sojhthee hain."

Raman "Merey galathee kyaa hain.Tumhee bathaon abh hum kyaa karey."

Raman "Tmhaara Mani ney bola naa ready hookey aaney key liyen.Abh tumhey ready tho hona hain.But main bahaar nahen jaa saktha.Who dekhsaktha hain mujhey."

Tracing his hands over her undressing her."Mainey bhee nahaaya nahen naaa.Tho hum bathroom share karlethey hain.Ek saath nahan sakthey hain.Waisey bedroom share karthey they naa."

Ishita was looking at him lost in proximity.Turning on the shower.

Ishita comes back to senses by cold water falling on her.

Raman "Bahuth achee planning hain na.Issliyen CEO bana hun itney jaldhee."

Ishita "Raman aaap naa besharam hon."

Raman "Late patha chala.Abh kaam khatham karey."

Ishita comes out after 1 hr.Ishita dresses herself and keeping Raman's dress in reach for him and goes outside.

Mani "Wha wha ek ghantha lagadee.Kya kar rahen thee?"

Ishita "Ladies matter hain.So please."

Mani "Fir chaley."

They leave while Mani was closely looking at Raman's flat while Raman was looking at him from behind.


30 likes for next update.sorry for condition but jut a target.

even if it happens or not there will be update tommorow morning.

(cont.)

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: pravalika9291

fantastic update

loved it
cont.soon

it depends on you buddy.If you reach target .i will make update,simple condition.
but shocking is previous post just took three hrs to reach target,I

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