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Posted: 11 years ago
I am wide awake now.
Sorry slept early.I know I told I will update once target is reached .But I thought it will take around 8-9 hrs.
But I am seriously shocked that it just took 2hr to reach 30.

Now it si in 50.
Thankyou for liking my story.I am shocked it reached 50.I dont know reason.But I will try my best to keep .

I will update and in an hour and half
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Posted: 11 years ago
i lvd all the parts of your post ... plz do pm me next parts ... n plz continue soon ...
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Posted: 11 years ago
hey i like all ur writings i cld find ... plz send me links to all ur MDT series stories ... i lvd which i found were unnamed n choice ... plz send m all links as i m new to this forum ... plz :)
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part 10

Scene starts with Ishita and Mani going outside.Ishita incidentally din't lock the door.Mani din't notice he was walking ahead so that he can see any one coming before.

Then on reaching lift.He takes stairs as Raman guesses.

Ishita "Lift hain naa .Seediyan kyon ley rahen hon?"

Mani "Tum bhee naa din ba din lazy hothe ja rahen hon.Char floor chalkey nahen aa sakthee."

Ishita takes stairs and then while getting down she notices Raman going back to their flat she bids him silent byes and goes down.

They reach Mani's car.

Ishita "Hum kahan jaa rahen hain?"

Mani "Pehley mera ghar .Fir wahan sey hum Raman ko dhoondhney jaayengey."

Ishita "Tumhaara ghar kyon?"

Mani "Bass welcome party.Waiey bhee tumney gruha pravesh pooja rakha ya nahen."

Ishita "Rakhna hain.But yahan main kissey ko nahen jaanthey na sabh arrangements karnaa hain."

She was simultaneously texting to Raman on discussion.

Mani "Main help kar saktha hun.But risk kyon lena hain.Tumney kahan kee tumhaarey saamney waaley ghar ke log problem create kar sakthey hain chance kyon lena."

Ishita "Aisa kaisey chalega.Tum tho sabh jaanthey hon naa.Yeh gahr key liyen accha nahen hoga.Atleast simple tho rakhna hoga naa."

Mani "Ok ok main madad karoonga.But iss bada sheher mey mujheybtumhey gaay key arrangement karnaa padega."

Raman texts her "Patha hain wohen karega.Sunon Mallad mey aaj party hain.Actually sabhee buisnessman aathey hongey.Main bhee aaonga.Tum bhee aajaana wahan dekho aur drama."

Ishita smiles .

Ishita "Mani mainey suna hain kee Mallad mey koi party hain aaj.Sabhee buisness man aathey hongey.Shaayad Raman bhee aasaktha hain.Hum chaley uss party mey."

Mani "Uss party key liyen tho main bhee nahen jaa rahan hun.Raman wahan kyon aayega."

Ishita "Mani please.Hum koi bhee chance nahen ley sakthey.Raman aayega tho main unhey milney kee chance miss karoongi naa."

Mani "Ishita ek baath kahon.I am jealous of your Ravan Kumar."

Ishita surprised "Jalan kyon?"

Mani "Ussey tum jaisey biwi miley aur who tumsey door chala gayan.Jab tumhey usske jaroori thee thab who tumhaara saath nahen thaa.Fir bhee tum ussey aaj bhee itna hee pyaar karthee hon jho pehley karthee thee."

Ishita "Payaar sirf ek baar hotha hain.Ussey mitaana itnaa aasaan nahen hain.Raman ka bhee kya galathee hain.Uss situation hee aisa tha."

With tears in her eyes remembering Raman in hospital bed.

Ishita "Jab Raman ko mere jaroori thee .Jab main usskey saath nahen thee.Raman paehleey jab bhee mujhey usske jaroori thee who mera saath thaa.Aaj ."

Mani "Tum bhee bachon kee tarqaha ro rahen hon.

She sees text from Raman ."Abh dekho maza."

She is surprised what Raman is planning now.Then she sees Raman's car in rear view mirror.She understood it is all about Mani.

Mani notices it too and sees Ishita seeing that side.The n suddenly he releases his hand from steering as if something struck him.

Mani "Ishita steering pakadon."Sh eimmediatly does that.Now Ishita is loking in front.Bythat time Raman's car crossed them and went far long.

Ishita "Kyaa huan?"

Mani "I don't know haath mey suddenly pain aagaya."

Ishita knew what the pain is.It is calles Raman phobia.It si just a trick to make sure Ishita don't see Raman.

Mani "Ishita ek baath bathaon.Raman sey milkar kyaa baath karogee."

Ishita "Main boldoongi kee main ussey pyaar karthee hun.Aur sab kuch bathadoongi.Fir Raman jho bhee karey kitbna bhee daantey main peecheny nahen hatoongi."

Mani "No planning."

Ishita "Palanning key liye yeh koi buisness deal ya surgery nahen hain.Pichley baar planning kaam nahen kiyan.Tho iss baar main apnee dil kee baath sunungee."

Ishita then notices something "Mani gaadi rokho."

Mani stops the car.Ishita gets down and tells Mani "Mani tum jaon main shaam ko party key liyen aajaongee."

Mani "Main tumhey pickup karney aaonga."

Then he leaves he don't know what is there.But he just leaves finding no threat.

Then scene starts at evening party.Mani came along with Ishita.

Ishita was searching Raman.Mani know it and he just stick beside Ishita.So that he can do what is necessary when needed.

Raman was just behind them just maintaining proper distance.

Ishita saw him in reflection over a articraft.Even Mani saw him but he don't know Ishita saw him too.

Mani "Ishita chalon hum wahan chaltey hain.Yahan drinks centre hain.Tumhey pasand nahen hain naa."

Ishita "But Raman ko tho pasand hain.Raman yahen aayega."

Mani "Byt hum wahan sey dekh saktey hain."

She holds Ishita's hands and take her away from there.Raman just smiles at his antics.

Then it goes on similar way.They will go to some place Raman comes there and Mani takes her to another place.Ishita is hating it but she is doing just as Raman told.How will he let such person go without getting what he deserve.I know you know what it is.

Then after half an hour.

Ishita "Mani mainey Raman ko dekha hain yahan.Tum poochon naa raman bhalla aaya hain yaa nahen."

Dance floor was on.

Mani "Mainey poocha thaa Raman yahan nahen aaya hain.Aaya hotha tho abh thak diktha naa."

Ishita "Mainey apney aakhon sey dekha."

Mani "Kahan?"

Then some friend of Mani comes "Raman Bhalla shaayad nahen aaya hain ."

Ishita "Mere aakhey mujhey dokha nahen de saktey."

Mani "Theek hain tum yahen rahon main dekhkar aatha hun."

Mani leaves along with his friend.Raman comes from behind and pokes Ishita.

Raman "Maza aaya?"

Ishita "Raman kab h thak aisa karnaa padega."

Raman "Planning darling.Ishita dance karey."listening music on background.

A light music sunsuising and romantic is playinf behind.

Raman foewards his hand and Ishita forwards her.They slowly starts dancing and enjoying each moment of it.While Mani is searching for Ishita .Raman and Ishita were in middle of dancing couple objecting them from others view.So Mani was not able to see them.

Then after few minutes.They part as music stops.Raman signs her to come home quickly.

They leave in different ways.

Mani "Kahan gaeyee the tum?"

Ishita "Main yahen thee.Kya ahuan."

Mani "Kuch nahen dance key liyen poochna chahtha thaa but ok abh music be dead hain."

Ishita "Raman aaya nahen ?"

Mani "Han mainey poocha thaa ?But kissey ney Raman ko nahen dekha.Who iss taraha key parties mey bhee nahen aarahan hain."

Ishita dissappointed "Thek hain main ghar chalthee hun."

Mani "Main drop karo.Waisey tumney dinner bhee nahen kiyya"

Ishita "No mani.Main chale jaaongee."

She leaves without waiting for his reply.

H enotices Raman's car not there and understood he left.

Then he dicides to stop Ishita but she already took a taxi and left.

Then on middle Raman was waiting in his car.Ishita stops tax and gets back in her husband's car.

Raman "Aur late aaney chahiyen thee."

Ishita "Raman main koshish kar rahen thee naa.Apnaa naatak bandh karon aur jaldee gahr chalon.Humney khaana bhee nahen khaaya."

Raman "sochna bhee math.Ruhi key saath hum dinner nahen karengey tho usska punisment.Rule book ka pehla rule hain."

Ishita smiles remembering rule book.

Then they reach home and Ishita goes to their house immediately.Raman stops nears gate and tells watchman something giving him some money.

Then in house.Ruhi is annoyed as both Raman and Ishita were late.

(cont.) 30likes for next update.Even if target is reached or not update will be there to day evening.

Next part mannoying Ruhi.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
shravani_2311 thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
nice update...
raman nd ishu palying tom nd jerry wid mani...
bt pls yar iss amni ka chaptr katam akrlo...
its so boring...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Superb update
Bechara mani
Loved Raman
SAKIVIAM thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
ok understood target is reaching.
I will update by 1:30-2:00 .
Will be back in 20 minutes.
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Posted: 11 years ago
haha...mani ka shani ho gyaa...lol
sweet ruhi manaofying
waiting for next
SAKIVIAM thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
part 11

Scene starts with Raman and Ishita entering the house and Ruhi was standing rightfromt angry and ready for action.She is not speaking.

Raman and Ishita knew why she is angry.

Ishita tries to speak to Ruhi.

Ishita "Kyaa huan mera baby itnaa sad kyon hain?"

Ruhi din't utter a word she is angry and giving punishment.

Ishita "So Ruhi Ishima aur papa sey baath nahen karegee."

She tries to take Ruhi in her arms.But Ruhi resists it.

Raman "So Ruhi late aaney key wajaha sey naaraj hain."

Raman "So punishment tho milna chahiyen."

Ishita "so kyaa punishment hain.Yeh tho bathaon." While Raman was chuckling her.

Ruhi finally laughs and speaks up.

Ruhi "Aap late kyon aayen.Aur aapney bahaar khayen "

Ishita "No ways.Hum rule kaisey break kar saktey hain.Humney whan paani bhee nahen peeya."

Raman "Abh mujhey bhook lagrahen hain.Jaldhee khana pakaon.Bhejha baad mey."

Ishita "Sab log ko kaam karna hoga.Jaldee chahiyen tho."

Ruhi "Han papa aako bhee kaam karna hoga."

Raman "Oy Mini Me sirf Papa nahen tumhey bhee kaam karna hoga."

They go to kitchen.

Ishita "So kyaa kaayegee mere baby aaaj."

Ruhi "Ishima aloo gobi,poori,dal chaawal."

Ishita "Yeh sabh raath ko ?"

Ruhi "Mujhey bass chahiyen."

Raman signs as if we can't do any thing.

Ishita "Theek hain."

Raman "Pehley tumhey aatha hain kyaa."

Ishita "Raman bakwaas bandh keejiyen aur pehley sabjiyan wash karkey kaatdeejiyen."

Ishita"Main daal lagadethe hun."

Raman "Yess boss."

Ishita "Ruhi tum who wala barthan laon aur fridge mey sey paani laon."

Ruhi goes running.Then they start making dinner together.With all three pairs of hands working Ruhi.

Raman "Ruhi tum abh sey seekhlena khaana banaana nahen tho thumhey bhee Ishima key taraha cooking class join karna padega shaadi key baad."

Ishita nuges Raman with her elbow.

Ishita "Raman pehley aap khaana banaathey they kyaa?"

Raman "Kabhe kabhee.Daily hotel sey laatha thaa."

Ishita "Ruhi ka home work?"

Ruhi "Main papa sey pehley aathe the naa.Main home work karna suru karthee thee."

Raman "Fir main aatha tha aur madad kartha thaa."

Ishita "Koi meetin hon tho.Ya party aaj key taraha"

Raman "Cancel.Strict rule lagadee .Koi meeting raath ko nahen hoge.Aur party Ruhi ko bhee ley jaatha thaa."

Ruhi "Aaaj aap ney mujhey nahen lekey gayen naa."

Raman "Sorry Yaar.Firsey papa kabhee nahen karnegey.Papa's promise."

Then they have their dinner and goes to bed.

Ruhi was tellinf stories which happened all this year.

Ruhi hugged Ishita tightly "Ishima nainey aapko bahuth miss kiyan."

Ruhi has tears in her eyes.

Ishita "I promise naa Ishima aapko chodkey kabhee nahen jaayegee."

Ishita "Raman mummyij who log yahan nahen aathey kyaa?"

Raman "Pehley aathey they but Ruhi ney sabko mana kardiyan.Patha hain kissey ko andhar bhee nahen aaney diyan."

Ruhi gives victorious smile.

Ishita "Sab kuch merey wajaha sey huan.Maujhey pehley aapko bathaana chahiyen thaa."

Then Raman's mobile rings.

It is from Mihir.

Raman "Mihir ka ohone hain."

Raman takes the call and keeps it in speaker.

Raman "Kyaa huan itney raath ko kyon phone kiyan."

Mihir "Kuch nahen bhaaye.Aapsey kuch bathaana thaa."

Raman "Kyaa .?"

Mihir "Ishita bhaabhi key baarey mey kuch info miley hain."

Raman "Great.Tho main kyaa karo?"

Mihir "Bhai aapko kyaa hogayan.Aap Bahbhi ko doondrahen they naa."

Raman "Milney key baad bhee dhoondunga kyaa.Abh who merey saamney hee hain tumaarey baathey bhee sun rahen hain ."

Mihir "What?Kaisey?"

Ishita smiles.

Raman gives call to ishita.Seeing Ruhi sleeping crazyiness strikes him.

He takes the chance and starts his antics.

Mihir "Bhaabhi.Yeh sabh kaisey huan.Aap kaisey miley.I am sorry bhaabhi mainey aapko nahen samjha ."

Raman was giding his hand over Ishita's waist dragging her closer.Ishita was sartled as words got struck in her mouth.

She removes his hand but he does it again.

Mihir "Bhabhi aap sunrahen hainnaa?"

Ishita "Han sunrahen hun.Main sabh baath mey bathaongi.Pehley yeh bathaon ghar mey sab kuch kaisa hain.Mihika ,amma,appa.mummyji pappaji,romi."

Mihir "Sab loog theek hain.Bass aapsey naaraz hain.Mihika idhar hee hain who aapsey bahuth gussa hain aap chodkey gayen naa ussey bathaaye bhina."

Raman hands are moving to her private parts.Ishita is struck by multiple emotions at same time.She can't concentrate on any thing.

Mihir "Bhabhi Mihika ko phone detha hun baath keejiyen."

Raman was doing his antics and Ishita is in bewildement she could neither speak nor stop him.

Mihika "Akka aap jeeju key pass hon.Aapney mujhey phone kyon nahen kiyya."

Ishita din't listen this properly.Because of Raman.

Raman is kissing her cheeks now.

Ishita "Mihika main baath mey phone karthee hun.please"

Raman pressing his lips over Ishita's.

Mihika "Akka .Kyan huan akka .I know aap bhee mujhsey naaraz hain .Mainey aappar vishwas nahen kiyya.But you din't do it right aap ney ek saal sey mujhey phone bhee nahen kiyya.Aur abh phone kaat rahen hain."

Ishita tries to speak but Raman does it again.

Mihika "Akka aap baath keejiyen naa.Kyaa hogayan."

Ishita "Main subaha phone karthee hun.Main abhh phone rakh ..."her words again get stopped.

Ishita "Raman kyaa kar rahen they aap.Aapko dikh nahe rahan thaa main phone mey baath akr rahen thee."

Raman just shrugs his shoulder as if he did nothing.

Raman "Mainey kyaa kiyan?Mai n bass apnee biwi sey."

Ishita "Raman main wahan phone mey baath kar rahen thee aur aapko romance sujharahan hain.Wjo lg sunliyan hotha tho kitnaa gandha lagatha."

Raman "Issmey gandha sochney waaley kyaa baath hain.Main kissey aur key biwi sey thode kar rahan hun.Apni biw sey."

Ishita "Fir sey.Aaap ko na koi sharam nahen hain.Sab kuch galath time mey."

Raman know what to do to shut her up and he does it correctly.

(cont.) 30likes for next update.Even if target is reached or not update will be there to day evening.


Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago

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