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Posted: 17 years ago
Quite a sentimental part.. it is really nice to see that Jai and Bani thinks alike about someone else's intrusion in their personal lives. The only difference is Jai told Rano straightforward about it but Bani chose to turn her back towards Aprajit.. hahaha

Hmm hope Jai would stick to what he said that he wont lose anything now and we could be able to say that Alls that ends well.


P.S. Btw you wrote Part 6 instead of 16 in subject line. 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
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just loved it
jai tell bani that she is pregnent soon

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Posted: 17 years ago
hey ................

awesome part................

bani going home with jai.................

pushkar...well done......

update soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
Great part.

Jay sems to be very determined to correct his mistake. 👏 👏 👏 .

Something is wrong with Bani. She seemed to be in totally different world. Why is she talking about her past in present tense. Its funny she calls Jay aap but when she talks about her past refers to him as tum. Will Jay's love & attention enough to get her back to her normal self? or does she nee professional help.


Jay should tell her about being pregnant. MAy be that will make feel good especially if she sees how happy she has made Jay with that news.

The whole family need to take of her. MAke her feel wanted
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Posted: 17 years ago
hey great part..
finally jai is briging bani home..
is it me or do i just find bani super weird. the way she behaves and talks..
hope she becomes normal again with jai's help..
continue soon


nadia 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
Different story ..... 👏

I don't think Jai should tell Bani about the pregnancy until she has been brought back to the present. He needs to tell her why he went away from her and then show her that her happiness is tied up with them being together and not whether they live in Aligarh or Mumbai or anywhere else .....

Then they can both look forward to their baby. 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: patooki

leme be 1st 😃

i went through all parts in 2 days and loved all parts u have written so well by now im totally addicted to this FF. do continue soon thanks patooki

loved reading all parts, sometimes i am not able to understand bani's condition and her thoughts and her starnge behaviour, i hope i'll catch it soon. i would say in a crux that Bani is in a transition state... like na idhar ka na udhar ka... delicate transition state... 😳



Originally posted by: swati_bhatia

gr8 part ...plz cont soon


thanks swati

Originally posted by: moonlitnight

awesome part Di

very well done 👏 i can see how hapy u are because after a long time... a comment from u without tears 😉

hope the family members specialy Jigyasa can handle Bani

Thanks for making this part long 😛 i did that because i got a lot of time at home just to type not to sandwich between browsing and typing😆

hope u r ok there. plz continue whenever u can 😊 haila... am i reading right??? 😲



Originally posted by: s_geetu

hey
great part.
please continue sooon 😳


thanks geetu

Originally posted by: ragamthalam0

That is cute ,, but what is wrong with bani? She is acting weird,, like she has memory loss,?
she is just in a transition state... thats it...



Originally posted by: swathi

Abhi, that was one long part which I liked reading.
Somehow I guess I will take some time in understanding Bani. maybe coz I don't really identify anyone with her. It surprises me that she is so naive and I really feel like shouting at both of them But I do need to credit you for making both J and B very human. They are not these super people who know everything but rather they have their own share of vices and virtues which makes them close to....

Overall I think I like the way you write and that is something which I really enjoy reading ! thanks swati... as far as bani is concerned, she is always a bundle of surprises as Jai refers her 😆

Swathi



Originally posted by: koolgal

great part👏......
loved the whole part👏......
poor rano got a long lecture😆😆😆....... i hate such lectures.. but could never complaint... so let it out... 😛
hope jigs wont say something bad to bani😃....... Hmm... lets c... i havent planned anything so far
plzz cont.soon



Originally posted by: rongna

gr88 part plz cont soon


thanks rongna...

Originally posted by: Pooja_fren

Hey abhu
That was long but kya kare dilhain ki bharta hi nahin i knew it...
Oh! when will Saturaday come? sorry dear... its already sunday... 😛
That was beautiful
But what is with bani's health
Does she losses her memory sometimes or what? well.. she is in a transition state..
Waiting for next one
Thankssssssssssss



Originally posted by: popeye

Abhilasha the update was excellent.. I loved it .. my heart goes out to bani.. whats wrong with her.. im so sacred .. i hope she will become ok.. im worried she is loosing her mental balance.. she might... if she is not taken care... I worry it will get worse when she finds out she is pregnant and I have a feeling Jigyasa is the one who is gonna tell her.. do u think so... i thot bani would be happy to find that there is someone inside her and for her... whom she might call her own... as far as jigs is concerned... havent planned so far... I dont wanna see bani suffering anymore.. I want her to get the love she deserves especially now since Jai has realised his mistake.. I still am curious as to what Jai has done that bani retreated into her shell in the first place. IT was nice to see her smiling and her moments with Jai... Please do update soon.. I love this ff its beautifully and extremely touching.. u really portray emotions beautifully 👏 thanks a lot dear 😊



Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey abhi
gr8 part..
cont.sooon


thanks janu

Originally posted by: nema123

It was wonderful update Abhi... 👏
Poor Bani... looks like she is not well... Hope JW help her to get better... 👏


thanks nema... of course.. it is jai who can bring her out....

Originally posted by: tam2

lovely and long update... thanks... 👏 👏 👏 ... do cont soon ...


thanks tam... i miss ur traademark Comic Sans Bold

Originally posted by: amiee

that was a wonderful part but why is jai hiding about her pregnancy from bani i think she need to know but then again she does not look like she is in stable mind right now pls cont soon.....thanks amiee.. i guess ur in a dilemma whether to break the news to bani or not..



Originally posted by: siumi

Wow lots of drama happened in this update, sorry to say but Bani needs to comeout of this bubble/shell she has created around her, I understand the way Bani has lived her childhood with her parents and sisters, whom she thought they didn't care for her and later comes Walia family in the picture who love her and care for her and Bani becomes so attached to Krishna and Jai. Whom later become the only people she "thought/imagined" about and comunicated through her mind... I mean Bani needs to live for herself too, not only think that she has done anything wrong to Jai and his family, by living in there. I mean she'd have self confidence and self esteem I don't know if you understand what I'm trying to say about the character of Bani, I don't like her character nor Jai's. They're so distant and not so comunicative even living around one roof....

I get it... dont worry at one stage.. she will do that... as far as self-esteem is concerned... well one needs to love themselves to respect them... if they dont love them... u cant expect self-esteem from them..... in bani's case.. her self-esteem is directly proportional to the number of people whom she thinks love her... so in this case... its zero... Krishna helped her in the beginning when she was wandering... now when she had been... or she thinks she had been denied of everything... she is confused and living in her own world... First thing to do is to remove the mind block.. (my colleague says so...)

I love the story but please I didn't mean to offend you by any way or another . You have written it so beautifully the perspective of two people who love eahother yet are apart, I like it very much. g8t update👏 👏 👏
PS. please don't mind my words, please please please 😛 dont worry... these comments make my writing and thinking better... so its most welcome.. 😊



Originally posted by: pooja1_76

Awesome update.
Can't wait for the next part. wow.. one more pooja... 😆 thanks pooja...

Please continue soon.

pooja



Originally posted by: niruba

nice part Abhilasha.......there are some changes in Bani..... i thot u would have guessed... i guess i am wrong... can't wait for your next update.......



Originally posted by: bhanu

great part, Are u settled in the new house. You must be exausted, My husband has a moving job and i know how tiring it is to move.
my papa does that very often... it has sort of become a habit.. but guess what i have never ever been once with him when he was shifting... i always come to the place a week later... 😆 thanks for the comments and concern
cant wait for the next part.



Originally posted by: pooks

Bani has built this wall around herself that needs to be broken slowly but steadily and Jai needs to be the one to make the start. exactly the point... Am glad that Jai has realized that he is at fault here for Bani's condition he is not completely responsible... and am glad that Bani got a good tongue lashing from Pushkar..she should also relaize that the solution to every problem in life is not by running away now I sincerely hope that the family tries to take extra care of Bani and I hope that Jigs does not try to be a cow of the highest order 😡 hahahaha 😆 sorry no comments...



Originally posted by: coolgurl_2005

hey Abhi,hope you are all moved into your new house. 😃 moved... yet to settle... will take some more time... 😊

another amazing update,the way you etched Bani's confusion to Jai's feeling loved it, loved it. Bani surely needs to come out this self made shell and I Hope Jai really helps her with it.loved Aparajit and Rano, there characters are soo well etched out.hope its Jai to tell her abt their child.lookin forward to readin the nxt part. 👏
thanks preet 😳
preet 😳



Originally posted by: Nimmie1'2

Hi Abhi,

How are you? Hope you have settled in your new place. i am fine... i am gradually settling

Again, what a great writing! You brouhgt so much drama into the hospital scene, starting from Jai to Pushkar. I loved Puskhar's tougue lashing Bani, he seems the right person to do so, especially with Bani. of course exclusive right... 😉

Bani is leaving in world of illusion where her only good memory is being her childhood with Jai's family. Jai has realise this and bring out, which can't do without professional help. He hasn't told Bani about her preganancy, which show that he is definitely needs help. Hope Jigs, talk it out with Jai before doing something silly which might hurt Bani further. Well lets c...

I loved the way to wave in the AD and Rano's characters perfectly into the story. thanks...

Looking forward for ur updated soon and thanks.

Have a great Wednesday! for what... 😆

Nimmie



Originally posted by: gaurifan

Quite a sentimental part.. it is really nice to see that Jai and Bani thinks alike about someone else's intrusion in their personal lives. The only difference is Jai told Rano straightforward about it but Bani chose to turn her back towards Aprajit.. hahaha somethings... bani learnt from jai... somethings jai learnt from bani.. this is one thing that jai learnt from bani...

Hmm hope Jai would stick to what he said that he wont lose anything now and we could be able to say that Alls that ends well. he needs to work a lot before that day comes or for the day to come...


P.S. Btw you wrote Part 6 instead of 16 in subject line. 😊 thanks for pointing out... i changed as soon as i read ur comment...



Originally posted by: jeenal20

gr888 pasrt
just loved it
jai tell bani that she is pregnent soon
will he..? I havent decided anything yet..



Originally posted by: culgal86

hey ................

awesome part................ thanks

bani going home with jai................. yep...

pushkar...well done...... he deffo needs applause

update soon



Originally posted by: suwas

Great part.

Jay sems to be very determined to correct his mistake. 👏 👏 👏 .

Something is wrong with Bani. She seemed to be in totally different world. Why is she talking about her past in present tense. wow.. did i write like that... i dint notice??? Its funny she calls Jay aap but when she talks about her past refers to him as tum. Will Jay's love & attention enough to get her back to her normal self? or does she nee professional help. lets c... how her condition becomes...


Jay should tell her about being pregnant. MAy be that will make feel good especially if she sees how happy she has made Jay with that news. nice idea...

The whole family need to take of her. MAke her feel wanted the big question is will they?



Originally posted by: nadia.s

hey great part..
finally jai is briging bani home.. yep...
is it me or do i just find bani super weird. the way she behaves and talks.. u r fine... its bani who is super weird... i like this phrase... super weird... sounds nice...
hope she becomes normal again with jai's help.. she will
continue soon

nadia 😛



Originally posted by: nikkitherealist

Different story ..... 👏

I don't think Jai should tell Bani about the pregnancy until she has been brought back to the present. He needs to tell her why he went away from her and then show her that her happiness is tied up with them being together and not whether they live in Aligarh or Mumbai or anywhere else ..... thats true... but the environment plays a main role in person's psychology...

Then they can both look forward to their baby. 😊




Thanks Everyone for their awesome comments... Atlast I have bought new modem... its speed is low... but can manage it... will update tomorrow hopefully... 😳

Atlast


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Posted: 17 years ago
Abilasha, actually I have predicted what will happen next 😉 😛 but did not mention it in my comments because it will kill the suspense.....from the comments, I could see that most of the readers are curious of what will happen next, so I didn't want say something which will ruin the suspense in your next update......I'm looking forward to read your next update...
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Posted: 17 years ago
Hi Abhilasa,

what a heart touching story. I just loved it and finished reading at one go waking up whole night. Please continue soon, can't wait.
Edited by juliebehera - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Hi all... Sorry for not updating... Renu ka asar pad raha hai...😆 I am becoming pathetic in managing time...

The part is small, I know... will update soon... 😃

Previous Parts:

Part 1 - Page 1; Part 2 - Page 3; Part 3 - Page 6; Part 4 - Page 9; Part 5 - Page 12;
Flashback 1: (1.1-1.3) - Page 16; 1.4 - Page 23; 1.5 - Page 26; 1.6 - Page 30; 1.7 - Page 33; 1.8 - Page 35; 1.9 - Page 38; 1.10 - Page 41; 1.11 - Page 45;
Part 6 - Page 48; Part 7 - Page 53; Part 8 - Page 58;
Flashback 2 - Page 62;
Part 9 - Page 65; Part 10 - Page 68;
Flashback 3 A - Page 73; 3B - Page 76; 3C - Page 79; 3D - Page 81; 3E - Page 86; 3F - Page 89;
Part 11 - Page 94; Part 12 - Page 97;
Flashback 4 - Page 97
Part 13 - Page 103;
Journey into Bani's thoughts: 1 - Page 107; 2 - Page 111; 3 - Page 114; 4 - Page 118
Part 14 - Page 120; Part 15A - Page 125; Part 15B - Page 129; Part 16 - Page 134;

Part 17A

When Jai stopped the car in the portico and got out of the car, he noticed Bani still sitting inside the car and staring at nothing. Jai opened the door and called her. Bani turned to him. He found her eyes welled with tears. Jai stared into her eyes what went wrong.

"Bani…!?" Jai called her and asked her at the same time.

The tears which had welled in her eye cavity started to flow like falls. Jai panicked. "Bani… kya hua?" He bent to her and asked.

Bani started to sob.

"Kya hua Bani?" Jai asked again.

"Hum yahaan kyun aaye hai?" Bani asked as she wiped her tears.

"Kyun?" Jai was stunned.

"Mujhe… mujhe yahaan nahin rehna…. Yahaan mujhe koi… koi bhi pasand nahin karta…" She rubbed her eyes as she wiped her tears.

Jai did not know what to say. "Aise… aise kyun keh rahe ho, Bani…?" Bani just shook her head as 'no'. "Dekho Bani… Bani mujhe dekho…" He made her look at him. "Dekho Bani… Masi hai… Dadi hai… Aditya hai… Jigyasa hai… Dekho sab yahaan pe hai… Tum sabko jaante ho na…" Bani just sobbed without saying anything. "Sab tumhein pasand karte hai… hai na?" He asked her patiently.

"Nahin… mujhe… mujhe yahaan nahin rehna… mujhe Aligarh chod dijiye… please…" She started to plead and beg.

Jai did not know what to do. He could not tolerate Bani begging for something. He felt helpless. He mustered some courage and said, "Maine kaha na… main tumhein le jaaonga… Tumhari tabiyat teek hone do, main tumhein le jaaonga. Maine kaha tha na?"

Bani looked at him. Then said in a soft voice, "Nahin… aap mujhe nahin le jaayenge… mujhe pata hai… aap jhoot bol rahe hai… aap mujhe kyun le jaayenge… Aapko toh main pasand hi nahin hoon… Aap mujhe kyun le jaayenge…" she let out her worst fear.

Jai looked at her patiently. He knew she had asked a valid question. He took a deep breath and said, "Kyunki tum chahti ho… Isliye…"

Bani looked at him for the longest time. Then she said, "Aap sach mein mujhe le jaayenge…?"

"Haan…" He said looking into her eyes.

Bani looked at him as if trying to believe his words. Jai smiled and tried to cheer her. "Chalein?" He asked offering his hand to her. Bani looked at the forwarded hand. She then surprised him by grasping his arms. She in fact grasped his arms tightly and got out of the car. She held on to his arms and tried to stand steadily. Jai gave her time to compose herself. Only when she looked at him did he take his first step towards the house. Bani held his arms tightly as she took her hesitantly. Jai suddenly surprised her by releasing her hands from his hands and hugged her sideways as he used to do before. Bani, though was shocked at his sudden action, later felt warmth pass through her when he hugged her sideways. Jai too felt the warmth spread into him. They both reached the entrance of the house.

Everyone was sitting in the living room waiting for her and Jai to arrive. When they noticed them entering, they walked towards the entrance and welcomed her. Somewhere deep inside Bani…. She did not like the welcome. She snuggled close to Jai as she entered. She half hid behind Jai. Jai noticed her nervousness and felt it too. Hr hugged her tightly and tried to calm her. When Masi and Dadi reached them, Bani completely hid herself behind Jai. Jai had no other choice but to go forward and stand before the two elderly ladies.

"Masi… Dadi…" Jai smiled at them.

"Itne der kyun kara diya tum logon ne?" Dadi asked.

"Bas aise hi der ho gaya." Jai said. He walked in along with Bani trailing behind.

Masi and Dadi smiled at Bani. Bani hid her face behind Jai. Masi and Dadi looked at Jai questioningly. Jai gave a lopsided smile. Then, he turned to Bani. "Bani… peeche kyun chup rahe ho? Dekho na Masi aur Dadi tumse kuch poochna chahte hai…"

Jigyasa smirked. "Bani, masi mushkil sawaal those na pooch rahi hai. Jawaab do."

"Main… main teek hoon…" Bani said faintly without looking at anybody.

Jai did not know what to do to cheer her. He turned to Masi and silently gestured for leave her alone for some time. Masi faintly smiled and nodded.

"Bani, kamre mein chalein?" Jai asked Bani. Bani looked at him. He continued. "Thoda aaraam kar lo…"

Bani nodded. Jai smiled and guided her to climb the step towards their room.

Everyone noticed their retreating back.

"Ek jawaab deti toh kya kum ho jaata?" Jigyasa fumed in anger.

"Jigyasa, is baat par gussa kyun kar rahi ho? Chod do… Shukr hai ki wapas mil gayi… Warna…" Aditya was stopped in the middle.

"Toh kya hota… Jai bhaiya khush toh rehte na…" Jigyasa let out her thoughts.

"Shayad tumne notice nahin ki, Jigyasa. Jai, Bani ke bina khush nahin rahega. Aur ek baat mat bhoolna. Bani pregnant hai." Aditya made her understand.

"Isi baat ke liye jhel rahi hoon." Jigyasa muttered and left to her room.

***

Bani entered the room little hesitantly. She looked around. She found her childhood photograph on the night stand. She frowned at it. It was not missed by Jai. He went to her and made her sit on the bed. She looked at the picture and then him again and again.

Jai smiled at her, "Kya hua?"

Bani swallowed and nodded her head as 'No'.

Jai sat beside her and placed his arms around her brought her close to him. Bani lost balance at his sudden action and her head fell on his chest out of balance. She tried to balance herself without touching him and it hurt him. He realized, to much level, her self-esteem had fallen. He hugged her by his side and he dragged her near him. She had no choice but to place her head on his chest. He in stead hugged her even more tightly.

With his other hand, he touched her face. "Ayinda se aise chodke mat jaana. Mujhse saha nahi jaata. Mujhe bas tumhare paas rehna. Aur kuch nahin." He said in his mind as he brought her face closer to his chest.

Bani went stiff as he hugged more, but he did not loosen his grip on her.

"Mujhe sona hai…" she said abruptly.

Jai looked at her. "Thoda khake so jao. Tumne poora pet nahin khaya na… Khake so jao." He said as if he was speaking with a child.

Bani tried to feel whether she was hungry or not… Yes… she was little hungry… She nodded her head to Jai. Jai asked Tony to bring breakfast for Bani. Tony brought breakfast exactly 10 minutes later.

Jai made her finish the whole breakfast that Tony brought and made her take her medicines.

Bani had a good sleep with Jai patting her head till she went to deep sleep.

That evening, she was made to have dinner along with everyone. She looked at everybody's faces as she sat at the dining table. She barely spoke since she came back. Everyone around the table was trying to engage her in one or other conversation, but she responded to them in monosyllables.

Jai stayed with her the whole day. He barely gave her time to think unwantedly. But that did not stop her from asking when she would go to Aligarh… Jai tried his level best not to let her go to her thoughts. He tried to make her understand through his company that she was not alone. But alas! It's not a one day job…!

***

Thanks for reading 😳

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