Two Shot : Set The Fire To The Third Bar +NOTE*

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Jalebi Jane

@JalebiJane

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#121

Really enjoyed reading this piece. Your language painted the mood so well that I was in that cold November night. And love the subtle touches such as:

He had put his usual cigarettes and fished out the money, but instead of tossing it on the smooth shelf, he extended them to her.

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multifaceted

@multifaceted

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#122

That was an amazing beginning...looks very very promising...the plot and the characters are intriguing...everything was described perfectly...

Could you please PM me when you update next? Thanks

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rimu

@rimzu

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#123

amazing concept..

update soon..nd thnx for pm

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sneaky-aj

@sneaky-aj

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#124

what the???😆 my reaction!!
never heard of any such story b4..stalking..yes!! ..a cashier?? not exactly!
nd that's whats unique about our writers and their fiction!! they can do anything!!
lov u babe!! it was a gr8 work and looking forward to the next one as well!😃

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Geeta singh

@sweetdesire

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#125

Wow dear..Just love the concept and story...So Arnav is attracted to Khushi and she is also feeling same... really want to read more so do try to continue soon...Thanks for the PM...Take care

Geet

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Sona

@mistyrains

Dazzler

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#126

The plot is evocative and yes, left us all a little breathless I think.

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mentalist

@mentalist

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#127

That was fantastic, and not to forget fascinating! :D
Khushi's reactions were so apt!

I loved the way you play with words. Looking forward to the next part! :)