..Mushkil Bada Yeh PYAR Hai ![1] {A SaJan FF}

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#151

Originally posted by: RadhikaBhushan
superb entry.

Fastest reply😊 thanks.

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sreelu

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Posted: 14 years ago

#152

hi bhai.............😊

lovely update................👏

really njoyed it...................👍🏼

waiting for the next part.....................😍

update it soon..................😉

luv u bhai❤️...................🤗

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#153

Originally posted by: sreelu.januable
hi bhai.............😊
lovely update................👏
really enjoyed it...................👍🏼
waiting for the next part.....................😍
update it soon..................😉
luv u bhai❤️...................🤗

Thank you Sreelu for your Comment. I'll update it very soon.

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#154

Originally posted by: SHAMSHIR-MJHT
Bro. I must say...I M speechless.U R biggest surprise for me.😲How to handle this story so smoothly??😲 RAHUL,SAMRAT and now GUNJAN....how to U present with a simply superb way..😲??

I M surprised after reading this Update......Its really Fantastic....First time,I saw U describe GUNJAN's beauty from RAHUL's view.Its extra ordinary presentation. U R most promising debut in IF.

Entry Scene is very-very important for Story strength.Its not necessary that, aap Entry scene ka screenplay right karo...usne yeh wear kiya...aise hair the.....aise move kiya.....Entry scene means Character related features show hone chahiye and U R real winner B'coz.Your all 3 characters entry is so clear and very sharply presented.

about,GUNJAN's entry scene....after reading this part,Its so clear that, She is Orphan,Woh Nanda's ke saath rahti hai...Self-respected girl hai so,tuition se apne expenses cover karti hai and she is very emotional person even abhi usne Pink suit wear kiya hai👏.And this is the Winning Point of Your writing style. Your Presentation Style is SUPERB.Its really Eye-Catchy, very clean and simple. and, I liked your Pic.Posting Sys. its looking very nice (Especially that particular SANA-VIVIAN siggy)👏 My RATING for your this part-

RATING - ⭐️/5 WITH 👏

-S O H A M.

Thanks a ton for your reply bro.,after reading your Comment...I am😳 ...😳. Truly speaking bro.,I was very worried about all trio intro scenes.I was so confused..how to present them?? But,finally,I done it. Response is beyond to my expectations.😊 but,still.... i am not satisfied.😕

Gunjan is very important character of this Story (Only 1 female lead 😆,Thank God!) . She is a very simple girl......lives in her very small dreams. But, after 1 INCIDENT.......her life would be change.

Thanks for appreciating Presentation Style.Its totally based on your Format.😳 and,RATING ?? I am fully 😳 😳 😳.

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gunjan

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Posted: 14 years ago

#155

Originally posted by: Joseph_A

Thanks a lot GUNJAN for your Review.I am so glad after reading your Reply.

Ur FF is one of the Ff which I love reading the most......its one of My best FFs. -this is very Big compliment for me but,I don't think ,my work deserve it. Here,many writers are much better then me and they are experienced also.

Gunjan entry scene was very difficult for me.I don't know,how to describe scenes and all things.I want to present every thing in very simple and sober way. Gunjan is a very simple character of this story so,her entry was also simple.I am glad...if,you liked it.

I really work hard on my Dio. portions.It is very imp. portion of any story. and,If you noticed, this is very simple general conversation lines,very ordinary.

RAHUL is very sweet person. A "Happy Go Lucky" type guy.Girls loves him but,he is not Casanova. He is very caring and protective for Gunjan. His dream is very small. He is not ambitious person. He is very happy in his life and his Family. He is not selfish. He wants to marry Gunjan and lives a happy married life with her. Gunjan also believes in marriage..not in love before marriage if,Rahul is thinking same thing then, what is wrong?

And thanks for your Rating.😳 I wish 1 day,5 Star gain kar sakoon. Soham Bro. ne toh de diye😊

Hi Joseph Thanks 4 replying..........😊..........U r really a very good writer...........I mean it and Trust me joseph Presenting the story and dialogues in a simple way is the BEST Way................Our MJht is proof of that..................MJHt was a sweet simple story of Sajan , Mayur , And the Gang..their lives , their love , their fight for justice , and how they fall in love with each other and face many hurdles and win .............MJHT Won our hearts because of its simplicity and sweet story.......................and many other shows on Tv who have won people hearts are simple stories.............SO JOSEPH presenting the story in a simple n sweet way is the best way............Ur Dialogues are superb bec they r sweet n general type conversations ..................And U really a good writer.............👍🏼................

AS 4 Rating Wo toh SOHAM Ka Right hai.......he knows better then me which story is good and which not.........I Just Copied it from HIM and That also without Asking Soham😉...........I Hope U didnt mind Soham...............😊..........I AM Sorry I didnt ask U Soham...........😭😊...

Soham has given U 5 star rating I know that joseph and If soham has given u 5 stars that means UR FF is really good and progressing well.............😊.......................
Merey 5Stars tumharey FF ke sath hain.........

BUt Agar meney agali bar Rating diye and copy kiya Soham sey without asking sohams permission Toh U know WOH Mujh Ko Chedega and will Call me Nakalchi bandar n cheater 😉😆..................So ratings dena I will leave it 2 soham 😉 SOHAM IS The Best 2 give Ratings..👍🏼...............

But seriously UR FF is Rocking👍🏼...

and I know Right now rahul is Sweet n Loves gunjan n his family and He is a HAPPY GO LUCKY Type guy ..But Every person cant stay Happy go lucky type very time and Seriously its not wrong that Rahul loves Gunjan But he also assumes Gunjan loves him and will be His.......He hasnt even bothered to ask Gunjan her feelings........he just thought I am waiting 4 u since long to complete studies and now we will be together....This dialogues n thoughts of rahul points towards deep possesivenss..SO I WILL SAY AGAIN RAHUL If he doesnt get Gunjan THEN WHAT WILL HAPPEN??????

Love Gunjan😊😊...................

Edited by 1gunjan7 - 14 years ago

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#156

Originally posted by: 1gunjan7

Hi Joseph Thanks 4 replying..........😊..........U r really a very good writer...........I mean it and Trust me joseph Presenting the story and dialogues in a simple way is the BEST Way................Our MJht is proof of that..................MJHt was a sweet simple story of Sajan , Mayur , And the Gang..their lives , their love , their fight for justice , and how they fall in love with each other and face many hurdles and win .............MJHT Won our hearts because of its simplicity and sweet story.......................and many other shows on Tv who have won people hearts are simple stories.............SO JOSEPH presenting the story in a simple n sweet way is the best way............Ur Dialogues are superb bec they r sweet n general type conversations ..................And U really a good writer.............👍🏼................

AS 4 Rating Wo toh SOHAM Ka Right hai.......he knows better then me which story is good and which not.........I Just Copied it from HIM and That also without Asking Soham😉...........I Hope U didnt mind Soham...............😊..........I AM Sorry I didnt ask U Soham...........😭😊...

Soham has given U 5 star rating I know that joseph and If soham has given u 5 stars that means UR FF is really good and progressing well.............😊.......................
Merey 5Stars tumharey FF ke sath hain.........

BUt Agar meney agali bar Rating diye and copy kiya Soham sey without asking sohams permission Toh U know WOH Mujh Ko Chedega and will Call me Nakalchi bandar n cheater 😉😆..................So ratings dena I will leave it 2 soham 😉 SOHAM IS The Best 2 give Ratings..👍🏼...............

But seriously UR FF is Rocking👍🏼...

and I know Right now rahul is Sweet n Loves gunjan n his family and He is a HAPPY GO LUCKY Type guy ..But Every person cant stay Happy go lucky type very time and Seriously its not wrong that Rahul loves Gunjan But he also assumes Gunjan loves him and will be His.......He hasnt even bothered to ask Gunjan her feelings........he just thought I am waiting 4 u since long to complete studies and now we will be together....This dialogues n thoughts of rahul points towards deep possesivenss..SO I WILL SAY AGAIN RAHUL If he doesnt get Gunjan THEN WHAT WILL HAPPEN??????

Love Gunjan😊😊...................

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#157

Originally posted by: 1gunjan7

Hi Joseph Thanks 4 replying..........😊..........U r really a very good writer...........I mean it and Trust me joseph Presenting the story and dialogues in a simple way is the BEST Way................Our MJht is proof of that..................MJHt was a sweet simple story of Sajan , Mayur , And the Gang..their lives , their love , their fight for justice , and how they fall in love with each other and face many hurdles and win .............MJHT Won our hearts because of its simplicity and sweet story.......................and many other shows on Tv who have won people hearts are simple stories.............SO JOSEPH presenting the story in a simple n sweet way is the best way............Ur Dialogues are superb bec they r sweet n general type conversations ..................And U really a good writer.............👍🏼................

AS 4 Rating Wo toh SOHAM Ka Right hai.......he knows better then me which story is good and which not.........I Just Copied it from HIM and That also without Asking Soham😉...........I Hope U didnt mind Soham...............😊..........I AM Sorry I didnt ask U Soham...........😭😊...

Soham has given U 5 star rating I know that joseph and If soham has given u 5 stars that means UR FF is really good and progressing well.............😊.......................
Merey 5Stars tumharey FF ke sath hain.........

BUt Agar meney agali bar Rating diye and copy kiya Soham sey without asking sohams permission Toh U know WOH Mujh Ko Chedega and will Call me Nakalchi bandar n cheater 😉😆..................So ratings dena I will leave it 2 soham 😉 SOHAM IS The Best 2 give Ratings..👍🏼...............

But seriously UR FF is Rocking👍🏼...

and I know Right now rahul is Sweet n Loves gunjan n his family and He is a HAPPY GO LUCKY Type guy ..But Every person cant stay Happy go lucky type very time and Seriously its not wrong that Rahul loves Gunjan But he also assumes Gunjan loves him and will be His.......He hasnt even bothered to ask Gunjan her feelings........he just thought I am waiting 4 u since long to complete studies and now we will be together....This dialogues n thoughts of rahul points towards deep possesivenss..SO I WILL SAY AGAIN RAHUL If he doesnt get Gunjan THEN WHAT WILL HAPPEN??????

Love Gunjan😊😊...................

Thanks Gunjan for Replying.and Thanks alot for appreciating my righting style.I believe,Simplicity is real beauty so my characters and my presentation is very simple.If,you will read further updates,you will feel they are natural persons just like us , unke reactions n move natural honge ,not Hero or Villain type. In real life,every persons are carry GREY shed.Grey the mixed version of Black & White. Tell me, Who is RAM (lord) here??

I don't know,how will be readers react? But,I am confident about my Characters. and thanks for RATING. Soham bro. bad feel nahi karenge😆 He is very nice with me , don't worry😊

RAHUL doesn't assume, Gunjan loves him.He knows she is Family person and she believes Love after marriage.So,he wants to marry to Gunjan and protect n love her for whole life.

Edited by Joseph_A - 14 years ago

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Joseph

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Posted: 14 years ago

#158

..Mushkil Bada Yeh PYAR Hai !
[-A Passionate Love Story]

Part 5 :

[A]

SAMRAT VILLA -

SAMRAT in his room.He was reading some files. suddenly,his phone rang ...he pick-up the receiver and said,"Hello ! SAMRAT speaking..!"

A girl's voice came from other side and she said, "I know,SAMRAT..ye tum hi ho..itna toh main bhi pahchanti hoon..par kya tumne mujhe pahchana?"

S : RICHA..!* tum ho..! tell me kya baat hai..?

R : How boring SAMRAT , ek beautiful girl ne tumhen call kiya hai....naa Hi.....naa Hello...?? Direct come to the point....koi apni hone wali wife se aise baat karta hai kya?

S : RICHA,I am very busy,koi kaam tha kya?

R : Haan , aur main tumse kaafi upset hoon.Tum ab tak ghar par official work kar rahe ho?? Party mein kyun nahin aaye? aur,tumne apna cell bhi off kiya hua hai !

S : Woh mobile discharge hai so, cell off hai. Aur mujhe some important work karna hai...so,no time for Party.Please Enjoy with your friends...

R : Tum aur tumhaara work...waise,Tumne poocha nahin ,maine Party kyun di hai??

S : Party ka reason kya hai ,RICHA? (He said with irritated mood)

R : RICHA ko party pasand hai, aur ye to tum college day se jaante ho.Oh Sorry! Tum kaise jaanoge ? tum to kabhi hamari party mein aaye hi nahin. Waise,yeh party ke reason ye hai ki, woh "New York FASHION SHOW" mein jo Exclusive range launch hui thi naa...! Maine,woh puri RANGE hi buy kar li hai. Next 10 days mein woh deliver kar denge. Hai naa..BIG PARTY ka reason.

S : Yaa...(He was getting bore) so, enjoy your Party,mujhe neend aa rahi hai,I am feeling tired,mujhe sona hai..Bye....Good Night.

R : Oh SAMRAT ! how boring you ! Itni jald bhi koi sota hai kya?? Ok. No problem ,ek baar shaadi to ho jaane do ,tumhen to main pura badal doongi.

S : Ok. Wo sab baad mein dekhenge....abhi main sone ja raha hoon ,Bye. He cut the call and thought ((SAMRAT kabhi nahin badlega RICHA .....kabhi nahin...kisi ke liye nahin...achha hoga ki, after marriage,hum ek dusre ki life mein interfere na karen aur ek dusre ko uski life style ke according hi life spend karne den.
Aur..yeh Dai Maa...Unhen kya ho gaya hai....Unhen kaise lagne laga ki,Hum donon ek doosre se PYAR karte hain..issliye shaadi kar rahe hain....Shaadi ke liya PYAR nahin...2 individuals ke social status important hote hain. Aur,SAMRAT aisa kuchh nahin karega..jisse uske Business ko loss ho...RICHA se marriage hum donon ke liye hi Profitable hai.aur yeh woh sach hai,jise main jaanta hoon.))

He was trying to sleep with his emptiness.without Dream, without Hope......Hope ki...ek din sab kuchh badal jaayega.....He knew that, kal phir subah hogi......same Routine...same Office...and same Life.....Kuchh nahin change hone wala ......Yaa phir kuchh change hoga ??

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NANDA HOUSE

On Dinning Table -

RD : Oh ! Aaj lag rahi hai complete family...pata hai GUNJAN? jab tum nahin thi ,Dinner par sirf hum do hote the , main aur tumhari Aunty.Yeh janab toh itni raat mein aate hain ki, inke wait main banda bhookha mar jaaye.

R : Dad! Not fair , aap yun hi meri image spoil kar rahe hain...kabhi-kabhi hi late hota hoon...aur woh bhi work...

RD : Work...?? yaa, unn work-less friends ki parties ki wajah se...aur kaun si image..?

R : Mom ! Aap toh kuchh kaho Dad ko...!

RM : Aap bhi naa..

RD : Dekha...Dekha....Gunjan yeh donon issi tarah Group bana lete hain. aur main akela pad jaata hoon (He said with cute anger)

G : (She smiled) Yaa..Dekha..Par Uncle ab koi tension nahin...ab main aa gayi hoon...hum apna ek alag group bana lenge...so,Koi Uncle ko kuchh nahin kahega. and FINAL...Hum dinner saath mein hi karenge. Aur yeh rule aap ke liye hi hai RAHUL sir! so....

R : (He smiled) Ok. Done ..jaisa aapka order ho ,GUNJAN Madam.((Tum nahin bhi kahti GUNJAN,to bhi ab main time par hi ghar aata...yahaan tum jo ho.. Tumse door rehna bhi kaun chahta hai...?))

RM : Waise beta,Tumne bataya nahin...train to 6 baje ki thi...phir tum sab itne late kyun hue?

G : Woh Aunty actually....

RAHUL saw GUNJAN...winked his eyes n said...."Woh kya hai naa Mom..Train hi late thi...hai naa GUNJAN ?? (asked very innocently) kaho naa...Train late thi....Mom se kya sharmana ??

RM : Train late thi toh wo kyun sharmayegi ? (asked innocently)

GUNJAN was smiling because,she knew ((Agar sach kaha toh RAHUL ko kaafi daant padegi... Uncle-Aunty donon se hi...chup rahna hi better hai)) she said, Yaa Train late thi...pure 1 hrs. hai naa RAHUL...kitna wait karna pada. and smiled again

R : (he smiled) Thanks

RM : Ab tum usse kyun thanks keh raha ho?

R : Wo..woh Mom woh..I mean,Thanks because,1 hrs. late hi sahi..woh aayi toh sahi...

RD : Sharda jii..aap kaafi bholi hain..ye donon mil kar aapko bewkoof bana rahe hain.Achhe se jaanta hoon main iss badmaash ko..kuchh aur hi baat hogi..aur yeh...yeh (He saw GUNJAN and smiled) hamesha ki tarah isse save kar rahi hai.....

R : Aisa kuchh nahin hai Dad.....aap kuchh lijiye naa...aapki Plate mein toh kuchh hai hi nahin..

RD : Tumhen kab se meri itni parwah hone lagi??

G : Oh par mujhe toh hai...aapne kuchh bhi nahin liya...Ok. yeh kheer try kijiye..maine banai hai

RD : Sharda ji...Ye kya hai ? Meri princess aaj hi aayi aur aapne usse Kitchen mein jaane diya?

RM : Main kya karoon? Maine kaha tha..par isne suna hi nahin..kehne lagi..Uncle aur RAHUL ko pasand hai iss liye banaoongi...

R : How sweet ! Agar promise karo ki aisi sweet dishes Lunch mein bhi banaogi toh...I swear main to Lunch mein bhi aa jaaoonga

G : Main aisa koi promise nahin karne waali. zyaada sweet health ke liye good nahin hoti.

RM : Tum sab baatein hi karte rahoge yaa dinner ke baad sone ka iraada bhi hai ? woh thak gayi hogi..usse aaram bhi toh karne do..

RD : Ya...Yaa...You are right. GUNJAN Kaafi tired hogi..ab toh ye yahin aa gayi hai,hamesha ke liye...baatein toh hoti hi rahengi.

G : Uncle woh...?

RD : Kya hua...Kuchh kahna tha...??

She thought something and said, "Nahin,Bas ye ki aapki medicine table par rakh di hai.."

RD : Thanks beta..

Everyone was happy. Mostly RAHUL....he was smiling. After Dinner they went to their rooms.

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[B]

#Siggy Courtsey -Nice_Angel_Sana

RAHUL in his Room -

RAHUL lost in his thought...((Finally,Woh aa gayi. But, usse marriage ki baat kaise karoon?? Kaise kahoon ki usse pyar karta hoon issliye Shaadi karna chahta hoon..?? Khud purpose karoon...yaa..??..phir...Mom ko bata doon? woh khud usse baat kar lengi...Yeh thik rahega....par?? Oh RAHUL , tu bhi naa..Mom ko kyun beech mein la raha hai? She is GUNJAN..your GUNJAN...Tu direct bhi to bol sakta hai...par kaise kahoon ?? Main to khud itna sharma raha hoon..wo toh pahle hi itna sharmati hai...wo toh kuchh bol bhi nahin paayegi..Phir mujhe uska answer kaise milega ?

Soch dude ! Kuchh to soch...koi toh rasta hoga...aur tu ..? tune toh aaj tak kisi ko I LOVE YOU nahin kaha...Direct Marriage Proposal ?? Kuchh zyada speed nahin ho gayi ?? Ok..Ok..pahle I LOVE YOU kahoonga phir Marriage ke liye propose karoonga...Haan ye thik rahega...Par..?? kahoonga kaise? woh bhi I LOVE YOU ?? Ab yeh Kahna zaroori hai kya ?? Woh khud se hi kun nahin samajh leti..! Kitna achha hota woh khud mujh se kahti....?? Dude are you mad?? Tu ladka ho kar nahin kah paa raha..aur woh ladki hokar kaise kahegi...woh bhi GUNJAN..?? Jo waise hi itni sharmili hai...! Kitna mushkil hai Yaar !

Aur,Yeh Mom-Dad bhi naa....Kuchh nahin samajhte.Kuchh samajhna hi nahin chahte... aur ye Dad...Main aur Gunjan , donon ek-dusre ki care karte hain dikhta hai..ek-dusre ko save karte hain..ye dikhta hai....Woh mujhe inki daant se bachati hai ,yeh bhi dikhta hai...Saari Mumbai ki ladkiyaan unhen mere kaabil dikhti hain...Par Duniya ki sabse khoobsurat aur Lovable ladki unke saamne hai...woh unhen mere liye nahin dikhti...?? kitna achha hota wo khud Mujh se kahte , GUNJAN ko tumhaare liya pasand kiya hai...tumhen pasand hai?? aur, main..main to 1 sec. mein Haan keh deta....kaash....)) Oh GOD ! HELP ME...! Kaash aisa ho jaaye toh....

"Ab kya Hua Jo God se Help maang rahe ho ? aur, kya ho jaaye...Jo ab tak nahin hua??"
A sweet silky voice came in his ears, she was GUNJAN.

R : Oh ! Tum ..abhi ..Yahaan..(He was shocked)

G : Haan, par tum itne shock kyun hue? (She came and set on his Bed)

R : Nahin, wo....woh... mujhe laga tum so gayi hogi toh..

G : Sone gayi thi..kaafi koshish ki...par neend nahin aa rahi thi.....Glass lene aayi thi toh dekha tumhaare room ki light ON hai..toh socha chal kar thanks keh doon.

R : Thanks mujhe ? kyun ?

G : Tumne mere room ko kitna khoobsorat decorate jo kiya hai.

R : Kisne kaha? Mom ne?

G : Nahin. Uncle ne..Unhone bataya ki, tum last 3 days se Office se jald aakar usse thik karte the..kaafi late night tak....Par....(She saw here n there and said) par mujhe yakeen nahin aa raha

R : Kyun? Kyun yakeen nahin aa raha..Kya main ye nahin kar sakta?

G : Hmm...mmm..mmmm ! nahin woh tum kar sakte ho par mujhe yakeen nahin aa raha ki, mere room ko itni khoobsurati se interior karne wale ka room khud kyun aisa hai...??

R : Means? Kaisa Hai,mera room??

G : I mean, Tumhaara room kitna patchy sa ho raha hai,Koi bhi stuffs apne place par nahin ...sab kuchh bikhra hua...

R : Tum aa gayi ho....Yeh bhi set ho jaayega....Tum Karogi naa? (He asked this question with a different feeling)

G : Definitely, karoongi....I know, kal ka toh full day issi room mein bitne wala hai.

R : ((Sirf kal ka din nahin GUNJAN...Main chahta hoon hamari full life issi room mein bite....saath saath.)) he smiled with his thought.

G : RAHUL main tumhaare liye kuchh layi thi....

R : kya?? koi Gift??

G : Haan GIFT.

R : Phir ab tak diya kyun nahin?

G : Soch rahi thi...pata nahin tumhen pasand aayega yaa nahin?

R : Kya ab tak aisa hua hai ki, maine tumhaare kisi Gift ko pasand na kiya ho? Par woh hai kya?? Dikhao mujhe?

G : Wait main abhi laati hoon,Room mein hai. She left the room and came after some time with a packet and said, "Yeh hai woh Gift " (She showed a packet,A beautifully wrapped Packet)

R : Oh! Yeh kya hai...main dekhoon?

G : Of Course tum dekh sakte ho.

He un-wrapped it and saw.....It was..??

R : MOBILE !! Its so beautiful...recent model !! but,

G : But ?

R : GUNJAN,Its very Expensive...aur tumne Dad ke A/c se koi withdrawal nahin kiya . Its means tumhaare tuition fees se tumne Education related n other expenses cover kiye honge,phir itna expensive Gift??

G : Itna shocked hone ki zaroorat nahin , batati hoon......pahle tum ye batao..yeh kaisa hai?

R : Its very-very beautiful..actually,main new set lene ki soch hi raha tha.

G : Ok.Phir thik hai..

R : Kuchh thik nahin hai...pehle yeh batao ki,Yeh paise kahaan se aaye?

G : Arre ! koi chori yaa shoplifting nahin ki,Trust me ,I swear (said with a very innocent face)

R : GUNJAN ! Yeh face banakar tum mujhe distract nahin kar sakti Pehle batao mujhe...

G : Ok , baba..batati hoon.Maine University mein Top kiya hai,not only in College haan ! Puri University mein....TOP, aur,phir as a prize mujhe Rs.50,000 mile the..socha kyun naa iske Gifts le loon....tumhaare liye Mobile,Uncle ke liye Suit aur Aunty ke liye saries...

R : Aur apne Liye?

G : Mujhe kuchh pasand hi nahin aaya toh....

R : Toh pure 50,000 ke Gifts le liye...Hamare liye.....GUNJAN tum aisi kyun ho...?? ((Oh ! Kitna bura hoon main...STATION par bina kuchh soche kitne hard word kah diye....ki,tum Hamein apna nahin maanti...par yeh....Meri GUNJAN...ye toh hamesha hamare baare mein hi sochti hai..,Kitna bura laga hoga....RAHUL you are very bad.)) his eyes was numbed.

G : Ab kya kiya maine ? aur iss baar meri nahin....tumhaari aankhen bhar aayi hain...

R : Kyunki...tum....tum bahoot buri ho....bahoot zyada buri....

G : Ok.Main buri hoon...bahoot buri...Ab toh khush....toh yeh aansoo kyun? she wiped his tears softly.

R : (( Tum itni achhi kyun ho GUNJAN? Hamesha dusroon ke liye kyun sochti ho? tumne khud ke liye kuchh bhi nahin liya? wahaan bhi sirf hamare baare mein hi sochti rahi....Main tumhen khud ko tumse PYAR karne se nahin rok sakta...Koi hai...Jo tum jaisa ho..? koi hai jo meri itni care kare...? Tumsa koi nahin GUNJAN...tumsa koi ho bhi nahin sakta.... ))

G : Kuchh kaho toh....kuchh soch rahe ho..??

R : Ok. Ye sab baad mein....Soch raha tha,aisa kya hai jo tum mujh se kahna chahti ho par kah nahin paa rahi... tell me kya kahna tha..main sun raha hoon...

G : Mujhe kya kahna hai?? nahin toh...Maine kuchh kaha kya?

R : Pinky ! Bachpan se jaanta hoon tumhen.Tum mujh se kuchh nahin chuppa sakti
tumhaari aankhen sab bata deti hain...tum Dinning Table par kuchh kehna chahti thi...Tumhen neend nahin aa rahi thi...kyunki tum kuchh soch rahi thi...Tum yahaan aayi...Kyunki,tumhen pata hai sirf main tumhen samajh sakta hoon....so, tell me baat kya hai....kya kahna hai...??

She was shocked....He was Right... ((RAHUL mujhe itni achhi tarah kaise samajh
leta hai..Kaise kahoon ki main kya kahna chahti hoon..? par kahna toh padega..))

G : RAHUL...wo...woh..main JOB karna chahti hoon. Par Uncle-Aunty...

R : Ok. Kaafi raat ho gayi hai...mujhe neend aa rahi hai....Good Night.(He was wanting to ignore this topic.)

G : RAHUL..Please suno toh...!

R : Kaha naa...kaafi raat ho gayi hai..aur mujhe neend bhi aa rahi hai...subah office bhi jaana hai....

G : Ok...I understand...I go...par...kal baat karain...??

RAHUL didn't say anything...He was acting to sleep....

G : ((Oh,lagta hai so gaya...kal baat karoongi...Uncle-Aunty ki permission toh le bhi loongi par RAHUL ki permission ke bina....?? I wish ye maan jaaye...)) and she left-out the room.

RAHUL was feeling disturbed after GUNJAN exit.... he was thinking..(( GUNJAN iski kya zaroorat hai? kya zaroorat hai tumhen JOB karne ki....ye sab kiska hai...? I know, you are talented n deserving person. I respect your 'self -respect' feeling but, I don't know....why? kyun nahin chahta ki, tum work karo? Zindagi bhar ki tumhaari responsibility lena chahta hoon...tumhaari har chhoti-badi needs ko pura karna chahta hoon....I know main wrong hoon..tumhaare JOB karne mein koi burai nahin....par...main...main kya karoon...?? ))

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*Friends,hope you like it. I know,this part is not up to the mark(Sorry for Longest Update).This part is very important for some future scenes establishment. I Hope you enjoyed it. I try my best , thank you for bearing me.Sorry Friends ! if u disappoint 😳 I am still trying to improve. Please,Point-Out my mistakes.*

* I am trying to show SaJan 1st meet scene in Part-7,this is the main reason of this longest Part.Sorry,If you getting bore.

*RICHA - 'CS n look' on P-1 (Please Check)
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Edited by Joseph_A - 14 years ago

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👍🏼Joseph beautifully written update👏...It was really filled with joy,love & family bonding...You wrote so well that we felt we were there with them...Loved Gunjan's character a lot❤️..She is so pure & naive..Sammy's & Richa's conversation was good too..It showed their relation very well..& also showed how different they are from each other..Can't wait to read more..Please continue soon..