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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

I am ready to read even now😳😆


Ok deary by noon will post!!!!


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Posted: 6 years ago

Part 10 B

PLEASURE - Indeed the Eagle but his birdie, shy and cutipie

(Bold and mature. 18+ Please read at your risk)

Its been more than six months... they warmed but nothing more...

The day had been great pompous with happiness. The eagle soared high and has landed...

It was indeed too pleasant. the weather was too windy, chill and the moon was shining through. He changed into his sheer white shirt with just one centre button locked and a simple low tied pyjama which was showing his build and also his toned torso and broad shoulders. The wind was making the shirt stuck to his torso revealing his toned packs. He was standing in the balcony holding the railings with both his hands, watching the moon enjoying the chillness and the wind with his eyes closed.

Chakor was looking for her night wear and was wondering if it was in Raaghav's side cupboard. She looked in there when a packet fell down.. This is Raaghav's tracks na, she was to keep in his cupboard when the cover fell and the zipper opened. She was surprised, smiled..

There was soft music in their room playing with few candle lights too...

She tiptoed to his back, he was mumbling with his eyes closed, smiling.. she went just near him hearing.. you look so beautiful in that yellow saree...

She came behind him... hugged him, smoothed her hands through his front up his torso. He just jittered with her on him... held her hands.. bent back, kissed her hands and brought her forward... His eyes were wide open, mesmerized looking at the angel in front of him.

He just couldnot believe his eyes...

She was smiling in that muslin plain yellow saree flowing, with that thin spaghetti strap black brocaded blouse with a low cut in the front... hair let loose with the sindoor and just her mangalsutra which was right on her cleavage. A small bindi...A tint of nude gloss lipstick which was highlighting her pink lips which was parting showing her pearl teeth... a very light kajal with a minimal make up. Her Victoria Secrets was indeed revealing hers... She did not need any highlighters as her cheeks were pink glowing. Her hands were toned and slender plain, the wind was making her look more seductive, strands on her face, breezing her transparent pallu which was revealing her waists and her belly button. the satin skirt was stuck to her thighs. She was jusssttt mindblowing...Raaghav just could not move a muscle...

Oh God!!! Dam ...You look sooo beautiful... he held her around fingering her waist with his left and pushing her strands... he just pressed her forehead with his closing his eyes in reverie. She cupped his face... why did you not give this to me!! She asked and you look so great in this sheer white shirt she said. The boys did not like it he said... but you liked it na!! hmmm yes...I just loved it... they both hugged and stayed in that bliss. You are ravishing!!! You are making me go crazy!! Wish I could take a pic of you he said... take it in your eyes and store it in your heart as this is only for your eyes... she said kissing his eyes...while he was holding waist tight..

The moon is beautiful and so are you he said lifting her chin... and you are so handsome.. unbuttoning that single button, she was blushing too much...aahhahh he exclaimed... he walked back, holding her and sat in the rocking chair with her on his lap.. she looked down and slowly bit her lips.. what? he asked, snaking through her belly and playing with her belly button. her heart was beating so fast... He saw her eyes so dark, lusting... Chakor for the first time was lusting Raaghav her hands was going over his toned packs, sturdy, she was feeling him all over.. he enjoyed that... this is something new and different.. he smiled,my queen "WANTS ME.. she hid her face in his neck ... chup... I am feeling shy she said... why? he asked... he was playing with her straps with his teeth bringing it down and brushed his lips over her blouse line... kissed her MS eventually kissing her valley..

She removed his shirt looking into his eyes... Hmmm I am liking this he said... her hand was sliding down his torso and she bit his neck and he did moan.. he made her get up and lifted her in his arms and went into their room locking her eyes...which was dark with lust.

While he carried her, she kissed him hard in his lips, biting...lowering his head down, he shuddered and placed her straight pushing to the walls.. not breaking her kiss as her tongue was dominating.. I am loving this Greek Geek she said in between but he was not making any moves... allowing the wife to love her husband...her pallu slipped down and with her straps down her assets were clinging to his torso creating ripples in both..

Pushing her to the walls pressing her more he brushed his hands all over her and she closed her eyes. She slid her hands down his waist to the pyjamas... holding the knot. She knew he was aroused, hard... He looked at her, open your eyes, go ahead... still closing hers she said no, I am feeling shy biting her lips.. He kissed her eyes, open please... she opened, snapping off her blouse he kissed her assets looking up into her eyes, he then trailed down brushing his lips to kiss her navel. He came up cupped her face...as I know each and every contours, every part of yours, you should feel mine, know your husband's too for I am yours, everypart of mine is yours. Why are you holding yourself he asked... you are my children's mother but still you hold.. yes !! you look beautiful when you shy but you should know me too... I too like to be loved, love me the way you want... he said..,,,she stammered...as her heart was racing and he could hear it... but I...itss...and you will tea..se me.. later...She closed her eyes again...holding his neck behind with her left and her right hand holding his pyjama down. Her chest heaving heavy against his torso hardening her peaks more...

Oh Ok let's stop he said and go... moving back a bit...

Nooo...opening her eyes... she grabbed him close and unknotted his pyjama, which fell down...he stood like a Roman Sculpture. I lo...vvee... you. I wa..nt you... feeling him for the first time.. they had written various poetries, she made him discover her but she discovered him only this day... He kissed her lips hard.. with this new action of hers... thank you my wifey...kissing her in between my Queen, my birdie.. for getting into your Moods. She discovered his masculinity. Her heart was pounding soo much... Raaghav she moaned... he carried her to the bed, clasping her skirt down, laying her on him, he drew the curtains around reaching for his packet below the mattress!!!

Lying on him completely, You are ... She said ... what? Beautiful? The exercise ball has indeed shaped you well.. he smirked pinching her back down pressing her to him. Chup! Mine, Mas..cu...line and handsome... Am all yours My Queen.he said. She was loving him, exploring him... making love to him,,, made him love her the way she wanted... she was soft with her Rowdy... but indeed the birdie was pecking him with bites that he was enjoying and could hear his moans ...maidam, queen.. more. She realized he too wanted to be loved, has those soft spots which makes him go eclectic..she discovered his unseen part... looking... her eyes grew wide, mouth opened in shock, she just went up heaving hugging his neck, burying her face...closing her eyes... he asked into her ears,,, what happened?.. Raa..ghav heaving, dam he is so...ooo mas..cu..line and bii...gg...he smiled proud... loved the effect, the innocence in her, he was turned on, grabbed her sideways open your eyes he said and aggressively kissed her hard.. ... looking into her eyes...she too...kissed him all over his face, . .Raaghav please she said as she could not wait longer, neither could he as it was getting harder but he waited for her...he completely gave in to her whims...he took over the stride bringing her down......

Bringing her down, looking straight into her eyes, cupping her face, he asked huskily ...did I say how much I love you... No ...she pouted ...Acchaaa...subliming his naughty in the warmth of her sweety... He turned husky... hoarse... I LOVE YOU LOADS my queen he said...Call me Chakor she said, he closed taking her in.. ...Sorry I will do whatever you say but Never will I, he said, You are My Maidam, My Queen forever and ever!!! And please never ask me again...Kissing her hard... ... he allowed her to invade him...taking her into reviere...making love to her... he asked kissing her lips... DO YOU LOVE ME... Should you ask she said...holding him tighter into her.. he devoured her completely, both going into ecstasy!!! there was passion, love, lust...

Let them sublime, for the wife discovered her man, lusted him, loved him, expressed her desire, her need of him... He allowed her to love the way she wanted to love him...He moulded himself to her lust... Indeed he wrote the poetry but this time she was the poet and he just wrote the versus as she dictated... it was bliss...pleasure taking over...

They were in each others arms after their ecstacy... he kissed her forehead with love... while she was dazed... a little blob in his eyes... he said to himself... you may be an eagle but still you are my little birdie, shy and cutiepie... I promise to myself as I will protect and save this innocence in you always!!! hugging her close to him...

Lusting the wife and wife lusting her husband is not wrong, not vulgar not to shy for Lust is an emotion, a pleasure, a desire which proves that a man and his wife are for each other...Physically, mentally and soulfully...

Let them love...

Let them live

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It was a pleasant Sunday morning...

He saw his birdie, his queen sleeping beautifully, peacefully with a smile on her lips in her simple nightwear... He kissed her on her forehead...

He got up refreshed and went to his princesses, they had woken up calling him daddyyy ...from their room...my princesses are awake... Did you have good dream...muaaahhh he kissed them. Took them and went to his cubs who were lazing on the bed...

He hugged them both on their sides... placing the princesses on them...bhaaii ...they were kissing them ...goodh maning,,,, they giggled... walked in, his birdie in her nightwear rubbing her sleepy eyes cutely , pouting...missing her King...his warmth...

Mumma come ...the lazy A2 pulled her on to the bed moving the roses aside. OOopsss she fell beside him...

Daddy you are the strongest... Hug us all he hugged her them and the roses on him...

Bajrangbali thankyou, thank you Raamji... For giving me this happiness...

They were tickling, playing and all I could hear was laughter, laughter...

He looked into her eyes...She saw his neck which was red, his lower lips bruised, he winked and very softly spoke into her ears...its my wifey's demo!!! She was shy lowering her eyes..he kissed her forehead. Thank you he said.

Girija was cleaning the Pooja room and was hearing their laughter...with happy tears she was praying Daak Baba please keep this family happy, for my bitiya has suffered enough and this pure soul too.

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Let happiness prevail, let them laugh...

Yes she is the Eagle, sets her Goal, Focuses to reach her Finish Line but... She is his nave, innocent little birdie, cutiepie and shy ...

He is her Ray, has set his Goal to always be with her, and his Finish Line is just her happiness. For she is his life and he has no life on his own.

The Lion and the eagle will rise again with their cubs when there is a social disrupt, till then let them sublime in love, passion and pleasure...

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Thank girls!!!

For all your love, your likes, views, comments which I treasure the most.

I just thoroughly enjoyed writing this story.

I am happy I could bring that solace...

Wanted my Chakor back on Track

Wanted my Chatur Chakoriya

Wanted happiness for my Chakor

Wanted that innocence to be guarded and turn her into the eagle when in need... and that guard can be none other than the Ray of hope... Her Raaghav. And I am sure all are in love with this innocent pure soul...

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Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Thanks Sukor 123 for your comments on twitter


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Just read last part on my own risk it was fabulous Enjoyed each & every moment of RagKor Loved this happy family May this family always be happy & also our adories with ur writing I am more fan of raghav & ragkor and thanks for fulfill our wishes we want chakor in her marathon career & also want our chatur chakoriya & u fulfilled our wish with ur amazing story Once again thank u so much for writing for us keep writing & entertain us with ur superb writing

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Posted: 6 years ago
Sumi kya bey! Ek ke baad ek dhamaka ...fantafab ke baap ka baap this time😳😳
Pleasure is all mine😉😉

Jokes apart what an awesome awesome update... with the subtle message intertwined so beautifully...

Sheer white, yellow muslin, pleasant night ... everything to the T... even the packet under the pillow😉 kamaal kar diya bey😳

Seriously your ficfam is now what comes in front of my eyes when anybody says udaan👏👏

Thank you for writing this grand finale and the effort you have taken to put up such a lovely lovely story... you may take a break but not for long😉
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Posted: 6 years ago
Thanks Mahsa 😉
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My Sumi dear What a Magic you Writting dear, I dont know now where am I dear!!!! Ufff❤️This is more than Hotttyt fiery dear!!!! What a Kissed to each other moment What a fiery dialouges magical moments between of them, fall in love and l lost with them fiery momentthey killing it killing it yaar



I always Want Such more than fiery magical moment full of bliss kiss to each other moments all the time dear, Thanksss youuu Sooo much my lovely Sumi dear

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Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Thanks Sritama for the insta comment.. Very overwhelming

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Wowww wht an updatefirey😉 Ragkor just killed it with their streamy sizzling romance n blazing hot chemistryloved it to d core

Chakor discovering Raghav for d first time n d way Raghav made her shy birdie to express herself it was beautiful..bold nd beautiful

it was bold nd beautiful not vulgar at all.. u retained d innocence n purity in both of dem intact while writing d scene..

Their conversations were so beautiful n pure..u wrote it amazingly

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Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: 77nikita

Sumi kya bey! Ek ke baad ek dhamaka ...fantafab ke baap ka baap this time😳😳

Pleasure is all mine😉😉

Jokes apart what an awesome awesome update... with the subtle message intertwined so beautifully...

Sheer white, yellow muslin, pleasant night ... everything to the T... even the packet under the pillow😉 kamaal kar diya bey😳

Seriously your ficfam is now what comes in front of my eyes when anybody says udaan👏👏

Thank you for writing this grand finale and the effort you have taken to put up such a lovely lovely story... you may take a break but not for long😉


Kya karun bey mera bossy aisa hai, dhamaka denahi na!!!!😉

yes all Pleasure is yours...

Enough of Pressures only Pleasure...

Face palming shy shy yep his maidam's words are his order na, he has to be a responsible citizen at any time so always handy to handle the moods😆😉

@red bold thanks deary feel so so honoured. and true i Love this ficfam too much now...


Thank you boss for the break ufff... need it now!!!

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Posted: 6 years ago
Omg... this is too hot and romantic 😛😃
Loved it very much...
how dreamy!!


This part took me into dream land

Fantabulous is only what I can say...I don't have any words 👏
Ragkor moments loved each n everyyy part 😉😉 my unsatisfied heart wants more😃
it was bliss ❤️..

A huge thank you ...and big hug to u dear 🤗..keep writing more ❤️


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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Kavi.Gollapudi

Omg... this is too hot and romantic 😛😃

Loved it very much...
how dreamy!!


This part took me into dream land

Fantabulous is only what I can say...I don't have any words 👏
Ragkor moments loved each n everyyy part 😉😉 my unsatisfied heart wants more😃
it was bliss ❤️..

A huge thank you ...and big hug to u dear 🤗..keep writing more ❤️



Hi Kavi thanks deary awwwh dream land yes thats the magic MeeJay spins me into and I just pen my emotions and feelings twining a subtle message...

Thanks for that special word... means a lot to me...

Ragkor ha ha always insatiable 😉

I am warm in your hug and thanks for the lovely comment which I cherish a lot.


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Posted: 6 years ago
Thanks Smita Sharma for the lovely comment
I love the way you very patiently read the story and analyse and write your comment without fail even you take time.

Thanks so much means a lot .


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Part 8

It's an another beautiful update. Loved the portion when Hira Lal was drinking tea & a birdie came flying & broke his cup & fly away. You make it understand symbolically that his empire (cup) of greediness & unrighteous act will destroyed by the birdie (Chakor).
Rati's condition is saddening though she is slowly recovering in Ragkor's tendance but it will take time to get her back to normal life & racing track.

Loved Chakor playing hide and seek with the angels & Raghav was enjoying Chakor's childishness. It was a cute moment.

I always admired the determind, intelligent Chakor. She always smells the upcoming danger & ready to face it. I could remember during the bandhua track she always felt something bad was going to happen & used to ask herself what will be KN's next plan & her intuitions were always right. In this case her intuition is proven right, so it's Rati, who is Lal's target as threatening to Chakor was not fruitful. So he attacked Rati again but she survived due to her good fortune & Chakor's intelligence. You maintained the thrill, the suspense very well. It was good move to keep Lalit's father as an eye witness & the blurred pic which is easy for Aa to make a sketch.

And lastly, the Ragkor scene, was always a treat for us. Loved Raghav heated dinner, fed her, the balcony scene, her sitting on his lap, his pretend to sleep & the gentle kiss on her forehead, everything was so soothing. Thank you.

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Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago

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