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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Firstly Thanks thanks a lot Smita Sharma for taking time and always sharing those lovely words which I cherish a lot

Happy I could fulfill your wish of Raaghav with his action sequence.

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Wow Sumi, it was tremendously outstanding, full of thrill from start to finish. Chakor's assumptions, asking everyone to stay alert , the suspicious man with the mystery box, Govind suspects him, seeing the pic & called immediately to the SI office, Mohit's quick perception & removed the box swiftly. It seems like I'm watching a thriller movie. Everything is described in a perfect way. Loved the Lion's roar. Waiting when Hira Lal will came in front of Raghav to be crushed.

Liked the Ragkor scene after dinner, the promise of not looking back during the sprint .

On the D day loved the puja, taking blessings, Then Raghav came, tie the sacred thread, given by Mai & the holy cloth of Dak Baba, reminds me the early days of her marathoning & I too felt so emotional like her. Loved Chakor's reply to Neha, not 2 but mother of 4.The boys are so caring, protective, responsible. They involved in the battle of honesty Vs dishonesty. The way they were surveillance everything so carefully & protected Chakor from all the snares was really commendable, specially the portion when Ar, Ro pressing the metal wire & were bleeding & hitting the evil guy, holding water bottle by the catapult .

I thoroughly enjoyed the entire action & clapping. So, Kedar was behind the mask, who earlier tried to kill Rati & now Chakor. Now it's turn to Hira Lal & I'm so happy to read & imagine the Lion's punch to his prey & his roaring & the powerful dialogues " how dare you try to hurt my son, the boys & Rati, I can forgive you for anything but not for trying to call my wife and threaten her " and pointing the rifel toward Lal, but he was saved & for this he should thankful to Govind & Chakor. Thank you for this action sequences which is treat to me. I just visualized it & remembered the furious Raghav Vs Bhanu pratap.

Coming to the race. It was so emotional, so heartwarming , at last our imperfect wish to see the 501 runner, the unforgatable champion Chakor who was forced to take retirement before the time due to some egoistic, brutal people's conspiracy, was now fulfilled. Seeing all the people cheer her up I thought if I can also cheer her up then I will be more happy. I thoroughly enjoyed the entire marathoning from the first step she took to the finishing line she touched searching for Raghav ,her strength, inspiration, motivator, her love, protector. The flying in the sky, the swirling around , their hug & kiss, the excitement with happiness, the furor of victory, her cry seeing the bleeding hands of Ar & Ro. Loved the happy family scene. It make me emotional too , couldn't control my tears to fall down, but it's a happy tears as I'm happy & satisfied. At last Lal & Kedar reach their right place where they should go. Thank you Sumi for giving us so much peace, satisfaction, happiness through your writing. Your story has still kept Ragkor journey & the family alive in us. I love the new fictional family. Pls, keep them alive through your story .Thanks again.

Thanks Smita

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sonali mishra

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Interesting updates👏

No words for it🤗

Loved the family moments👏

Ragkor's romance was very hot it was not vulgar

Will miss this story

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Originally posted by: katheriene
Interesting updates👏
No words for it🤗
Loved the family moments👏
Ragkor's romance was very hot it was not vulgar
Will miss this story

Thanks so so much Sonali

missinggg yes but hope we good some others to complete their incomplete stories too.

thanks for your No words which means a lot to me and you know that.

warm with the hugs

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Sumi dear 🤗

Omg Sumi dear, your RagKor moment and this bold chakor really made me

😆😆

Right from the atmosphere setting in, chill wind, moon, the setup before steamy night..too good

And she found the saree he bought for her and surprised him with that. that yellow saree and the dream of his

and us..

And dear your white shirt in story and coincidentally VJ has posted a hot pic of his in white shirt..already i am visualising them and going😳😆

I thoroughly enjoyed and Chakor discovering her man..thats a good one,

yes men do love to be loved by her women😛😆

Though very much eligible to read a 18+ story, ready to risk always to read yours and knew how it is, still i visualised and saw RagKor like this

you knew I am shy😛 and not a lover of explicit writings of it.

But yours was as always fab..I love your writing on romance..its about the lust husband and wifey have but its not more of lust anywhere. it wasnt vulgar at all.

Good one indeed.

I loved their romance and their blissful night. ❤️

Then the next morning family moment❤️, she coming in, cutely searching for her warmth, king already with his gang, that wink of him saying my queen's demo, her smile, all the foursome happy moment with ragkor along. I loved it. Tha happy scene of them ended me with smiles. I went..

Thats a beautiful story with beautiful parts and a final blissful ending..

Thanka lot dear for such writings.

And this is for you

Special special hug for bringing back the ace runner 501 on tracks, chakor on tracks dream being fulfilled is much happiness. Then its doubled to see our intelligent intellectual Chakoriya back and finally that dreamy yellow saree sequrnce😉😃😆

Take rest till you are back with next😉😆

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Originally posted by: LuvSSever
Sumi dear 🤗

Omg Sumi dear, your RagKor moment and this bold chakor really made me

😆😆

Right from the atmosphere setting in, chill wind, moon, the setup before steamy night..too good
And she found the saree he bought for her and surprised him with that. that yellow saree and the dream of his
and us..

And dear your white shirt in story and coincidentally VJ has posted a hot pic of his in white shirt..already i am visualising them and going😳😆

I thoroughly enjoyed and Chakor discovering her man..thats a good one, yes men do love to be loved by her women😛😆

Though very much eligible to read a 18+ story, ready to risk always to read yours and knew how it is, still i visualised and saw RagKor like this

you knew I am shy😛 and not a lover of explicit writings of it.

But yours was as always fab..I love your writing on romance..its about the lust husband and wifey have but its not more of lust anywhere. it wasnt vulgar at all.
Good one indeed.

I loved their romance and their blissful night. ❤️

Then the next morning family moment❤️, she coming in, cutely searching for her warmth, king already with his gang, that wink of him saying my queen's demo, her smile, all the foursome happy moment with ragkor along. I loved it. Tha happy scene of them ended me with smiles. I went..

Thats a beautiful story with beautiful parts and a final blissful ending..
Thanka lot dear for such writings.

And this is for you

Special special hug for bringing back the ace runner 501 on tracks, chakor on tracks dream being fulfilled is much happiness. Then its doubled to see our intelligent intellectual Chakoriya back and finally that dreamy yellow saree sequrnce😉😃😆

Take rest till you are back with next😉😆

at the outset a big big big squashy hug with a big smile on my face to your Uma 🤗

AWWWhhh am loving the way you are shy awwwh and you know how shy and naive Sumi is but for these two and my bossy who turn my brain on😉

Loved it that you loved it and not being vulgar...

to be honest I thoroughly enjoyed writing this story especially bringing back the Marathon Runner, the chatur Chakor and the placedo Raaghav...

Overall thanks so so much for this lovely emojirary which will be very close to my heart.

Thanka lot dear for such writings. Indeed Pleasure is mine😳😉

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Thanks Smita for your lovely words dear on twitter

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I was so curious to know that what surprise is waiting for in part 10B for which you have warned us, but I didn't get time entire the day to read this, so when I returned home I read the updates first .

Part 10A

Awesome update. Loved the happy family moments, the family shopping , the boys chose their parent's outfits & Raghav's fascination over the yellow saree touching it, closing eyes he was just imagining his Maidam, & his secretly buying the saree. I too fall in love with the white & yellow combination. The mirror scene was amazing , helping each other to dress up. Visualizing the scene I was blushing. Loved the perfect family with the perfect outfits, boys were in black & girls were in red. I can imagine how beautiful they looked. The felicitated ceremony was good, specially Chakor's speech & her last words looking at Raghav " without him I wouldn't have here & thank you Raghav for making me fly high " so touching. And wow the possessiveness of Raghav babu was a treat . Mr. J was more jealous to see someone has extended his hands to take his Maidam to the stage but he didn't allow him to hold her hand to bring her down. Loved their cute banters.

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Wow Sumi it was so beautifully written?????? I have no words to express my feelings as I feel too shy?????? to read it & write anything. It was bold but there is no vulgarity & nudity in it. It's natural as they are husband- wife & you had written it so beautifully. I enjoyed a lot, the beautiful night, spread the sweetness , their conversation, I liked his not forgetting about being a responsible citizen??????. It was beyond our expectations. Can't write anymore as I have reached in some other world, my dream world where I can see them happily living with their cub & roses. Thank you ?????? for giving us the beautiful, amazing family which I will not be able to forget. Loved the story, the family you created .

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Thanks Smita for your lovely words dear on twitter

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I was so curious to know that what surprise is waiting for in part 10B for which you have warned us, but I didn't get time entire the day to read this, so when I returned home I read the updates first .

Awesome update. Loved the happy family moments, the family shopping , the boys chose their parent's outfits & Raghav's fascination over the yellow saree touching it, closing eyes he was just imagining his Maidam, & his secretly buying the saree. I too fall in love with the white & yellow combination. The mirror scene was amazing , helping each other to dress up. Visualizing the scene I was blushing. Loved the perfect family with the perfect outfits, boys were in black & girls were in red. I can imagine how beautiful they looked. The felicitated ceremony was good, specially Chakor's speech & her last words looking at Raghav " without him I wouldn't have here & thank you Raghav for making me fly high " so touching. And wow the possessiveness of Raghav babu was a treat . Mr. J was more jealous to see someone has extended his hands to take his Maidam to the stage but he didn't allow him to hold her hand to bring her down. Loved their cute banters.

Wow Sumi it was so beautifully written. I have no words to express my feelings as I feel too shy. to read it & write anything. It was bold but there is no vulgarity & nudity in it. It's natural as they are husband- wife & you had written it so beautifully. I enjoyed a lot, the beautiful night, spread the sweetness , their conversation, I liked his not forgetting about being a responsible citizen. It was beyond our expectations. Can't write anymore as I have reached in some other world, my dream world where I can see them happily living with their cub & roses. Thank you for giving us the beautiful, amazing family which I will not be able to forget. Loved the story, the family you created .

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Thanks all girls for your lovely words.. Of all the stories written i felt emotional, extremely satisfying and happy writing about this story..

Once again thanks for sailing me through with your views, likes and comments.

Well as I always say my big pusher, tough bossy my dear Nikki i dedicate my stories especially this one too you.

Love you all so much

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Posted: 6 years ago

#139

Hi Sumi

Just finished the 6th part, the story is going great. I'm in love with Ragkor and their cute family.

Loved how the family worked together to protect Arjun and how Chakor dealt with Rohan and Lalit.

Feel sorry for Rati, all she wanted was to achieve her dream and treat her brother.

Happy that Chakor will return to running, great idea from Raghav babu.

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sumsukor

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Originally posted by: nemo316
Hi Sumi
Just finished the 6th part, the story is going great. I'm in love with Ragkor and their cute family.
Loved how the family worked together to protect Arjun and how Chakor dealt with Rohan and Lalit.
Feel sorry for Rati, all she wanted was to achieve her dream and treat her brother.
Happy that Chakor will return to running, great idea from Raghav babu.

Mai.. 🤗🤗🤗🤗 Thank you so much for taking the time to read amidst you bust work.Your words mean a lot to me.Take your time dear