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Originally posted by: bwvianna

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Shruti,

I was eagerly waiting for an update for this SS. The waiting really kills! This was an enlightening chapter. So many things happened here.

First, Ragini's character portrayal is finally here. You have shown it so interestingly. Her following Annapurna to understand her duties, her need to build rapport with Sanskaar, her shyness in front of Lakshya, and finally the obsession, jealousy, possessiveness creeping into her due to interactions between Swa-Lak. Fantastically shown!👏

Second, Sanskaar's 'pagalpan'! Gosh, this guy plays it well no?? I really became a fan of Sanskaar in the show when he was acting all pagal/villainish! That was probably the best moments of Sanskaar's awesomeness being portrayed.😉 Anyways, loved the 'Dulhan Girl' tantrum he threw. And ofcourse he doesn't like Swara, she makes him FEEL, which he really doesn't want to.

Third, I really liked how you have created the relation between all four of the characters, Ragini shy towards her Prince Charming Lakshya, while he is indifferent towards her, and more focused on sunny Swara, where she is indifferent towards him and in all this Sanskaar is playing his master plan. I am going to sadistically this human emotional mess that will be created like it happened in the show! 😈

Fourth, Annapurna is awesome! This woman knows everything. Nothing gets past her. Well almost nothing. I really like her in the role of a Rani.

Fifth, finally you revealed why Sanskaar was taken captive as a traitor. Can I say that the whole four blueprints part was just ingenious! Hats off there. 👏 I really enjoyed reading how the previous King tried to keep the allies as allies by providing each with the other's secret. Smart guy! This whole part was the highlight of the chapter for me!😃

Sixth, Sanskaar and Swara's reactions to each other is always amazing to read. The Swara singing and Sanskaar's reaction to it was written so beautifully written, I was spellbound! Looking forward to more of those.

Please update soon! I am really eager to know how this story progresses. :)

-V

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

New Chapter! Yayy!!

@the pink paragraph:👏

Ragini was beautifully described. It was so easy to picture here sitting there playing that Veena

Prince Sanskaar! That sounds so good! Though my boy is like a Prince even in the 21st century OK...back to the SS😆

Sanskaar bada chalu hai😆 I am watching repeats of Swaragini on Rishtey...the way he used to stick to Ragini😆😆 no wonder people assumed SanGini were meant to be😛 Prince Laksh 🤣 I know its needed here but even then LMAO!

That whole Sanskaar admiring Swara silently, it reminded me of Kashaf's line from ZGH: meri wajood se na hatne wali tumhari gehri bolti nazrein! For some reason such a simple line sounds so much better in Urdu I am imagining Sanskaar's gehri bolti nazrein now jo Swara ki wajood se hatati nahi☺️

Oh its already been a year since AP rescued him from jail😲 You understand the importance of modern transport & communication facilities better at times like these where the mothers had to fret for months before they could come back home

Good work describing the map & code thing👍🏼

Waiting for the next chapter

Originally posted by: piccola1

👏 Shruti, I am truly astounded at the depth of your knowledge and research for this beautifully detailed outlinibg of this period piece. ⭐️

From the nuances of musical instruments, to the political intrigues of the time, the entire Nagabhatta map ( even if imagined) and AP's rescue of the valiant now mad prince...hats off for the detailing out of it all -kudos to your commitment..it wins our respect several times over.

And while the parallels with our serial are unmistakable, you have etched out the unwilling connect between our golden duo beautifully ! That the dark prince is avoiding looking into Swara's eyes but can plumb her depths speaks volumes about the yet to be realized soul connect that is sure to break free..

Love the character detailing, the mysterious allusions to Janaki, the tantalizing mystery of Sanskaar's supposed treachery and his dead love and of course the mind blowing Swasan chemistry that I cant wait for you to build up...😃

Originally posted by: Vaibhi.

Amazing update Shru 👏

I am spellbound , you are so talented ...each sentence of your wonderful writing proves that ...The theme of the story is so unique that requires knowledge...

And your character sketch What can I say ? Imagining my swasan in such an epic historical background I am lost somewhere ... As you always illustrate so perfectly that I can imagine easily each and every part of the story...

You described so beautifully the connection of music with Swaragini sisters 👏

I am grateful to you for sharing such a beautiful piece of work with us... Thank you for the PM 🤗

I will wait for the next part 😳

Originally posted by: foresight

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just recently realised that what i had posted was only the prologue and that you had also posted chp 1 and now chp 2. i was waiting for it, but got confused because of that whether you had updated or not. will read today evening and post. sorry trying to catch up on my writing so that i can post next update soon. please bear with me.

Originally posted by: foresight

one more thing...NOCOPY works only on the first post of a new topic. doesnt work on the rest. just use MEMBERSONLY for them...that is the only thing you can do.

Originally posted by: KawalArora

loved chater 2 a lot bcoz
1. u unmasking all d mysteries
2. brilliant command of language
3. cosmic connection of swasan
4. thorough research of history
5. giving Annapurna so much emotions for Sanskar
6. for ur briiliant writing
all i can say is i m looking forward wid most interest to next updates
lots of luv n blessings dear Shruti