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From the nuances of musical instruments, to the political intrigues of the time, the entire Nagabhatta map ( even if imagined) and AP's rescue of the valiant now mad prince...hats off for the detailing out of it all -kudos to your commitment..it wins our respect several times over.

And while the parallels with our serial are unmistakable, you have etched out the unwilling connect between our golden duo beautifully ! That the dark prince is avoiding looking into Swara's eyes but can plumb her depths speaks volumes about the yet to be realized soul connect that is sure to break free..

Love the character detailing, the mysterious allusions to Janaki, the tantalizing mystery of Sanskaar's supposed treachery and his dead love and of course the mind blowing Swasan chemistry that I cant wait for you to build up...😃

I am spellbound , you are so talented ...each sentence of your wonderful writing proves that ...The theme of the story is so unique that requires knowledge...

And your character sketch What can I say ? Imagining my swasan in such an epic historical background I am lost somewhere ... As you always illustrate so perfectly that I can imagine easily each and every part of the story...

You described so beautifully the connection of music with Swaragini sisters 👏

I am grateful to you for sharing such a beautiful piece of work with us... Thank you for the PM 🤗

I will wait for the next part 😳

Rani sahiba(Annapurna) wow, she has voice in this work, we died to hear her in show. Wat sanskar is mad, or if I m not mistaken like show he is just pretending to be mad.

Coming to chapter 1, GADODIA n MAHESHWARI link sounds pretty happening.👏 The preety girl u explained is ragin I for all the way I thought she was swara. Sharmishta is shown being more caring towards ragini, swara being more ladki or her janki maa. The whole story of Rajputana n Bengal presidency, falling of shekar for shomi n etc. Was really binding. Swara's usual impression on all. Sanskar first sight me felt something.

Wat ragini n laksh's alliance decided thank god, I thought annpaurna n sujata going to chosse ragini for sanskar.

Sanskar wanted to ruin laksh's alliance, wat could the reason of this all, but he feels no urge to stop this one he should not also. Ragini appears to develop a sort of evil intentions within her.

Ohhh god I wish laksh not develop any sort of feelings for swara, but whatever it might be it is going to be extreamly amusing I m Sure.

Sanskar's past some pages opened rest to come.

Do update asap. Appreciation remained a small word for this. Hope I coveed every part of it . waiting eagerly

Love

Niyati

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just recently realised that what i had posted was only the prologue and that you had also posted chp 1 and now chp 2. i was waiting for it, but got confused because of that whether you had updated or not. will read today evening and post. sorry trying to catch up on my writing so that i can post next update soon. please bear with me.

Chapter 1

I loved how you have shown the equation between the daughters and the two mothers. It was interesting to see and i wanted to know more how that came about. there feels more to it somehow. you also added that wonderful touch about the sujata-laksh bond. We have wondered about that for so long. and then comes the connection between the traitor prince and the spunky princess. i wonder if a bit of worry about swara in AP's mind is also because she knows her son too well. sanskar al least had been quick to spot the mismatch in the pairs, when considering the bratty prince's preferences. so the connection rankled sanskar so much and affected him enough for his feelings to be apparent to swara...hmmm that is one strong bond

chapter 2

so the tensions are already mounting. Kavita and Kaveri already seemed to have played a ploy and wrapped Sanskar as a traitor and handed him back to DP. i wonder if the missing key is with someone in the family after making sanskar the fall guy. making him entangled in the ploy that had him intent on leaving with kavita, only to then kill the pawn (if she is indeed dead) and make it appear that sanskar had made a deal. if there was a honest fight, i don't think sanskar would have lost the fight for the person to take the key, his sword or kill kavita.

i loved how you have brought out the difference between the two sisters and despite her best intent, swara and her bubbliness is what is driving her sister away from her intended. does sanskar suspect laksh in this? or is he just the brat of a prince? the more he is trying to stay away from swara the more intrigued about him she is getting and the more drawn to him. and she is already affecting him at a level where he cannot keep the locks on his heart and emotions anymore. i love how you have said that there is something hidden in her too that she doesnt show anyone but sanskar is seeing that.

I am already waiting for the next part? Will swara accept the wedding proposal that laksh will surely propose and be pressurised to look at, or will she find a way to marry the mad prince, and then discover he isn't mad after all...somehow i feel with the accusation thrown at him, i don't think he can stop pretending anything soon.

loved both chapters and your way of unveiling the equations and the underplays that are going around.

Waiting for your next update