Sanctified- A SwaSan TS- Final Parts Updated

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#201

Originally posted by: JazzyM
Yar Shru,
While printing my report, by mistake I printed your story; I had India Forum on another tab, clicked it by mistake. So, had something to read while I was soaking in the tub...

Part 3:

"Tum mera saath boat par chalogi Swara?"...gosh very poignant. I smiled and teared too reading the whole para as well as the consequent boat ride drama...When your partner, realizes your turmoil and takes away the sting out of it...sukoon! Love bounds you and sets you free too...Very true and only if you have felt it you would understand the meaning...It takes someone who with lots of depth to be able to put it down in writing...Hats off!

Epilogue :
Adorable but exasperating wife ...I could imagine Swara... cute! The cat and mouse game or should I say Tom and Jerry of MM haveli, Laksh and Ragini have been left to battle it out without SwaSan...a stoke of ingenuity, taking the lead pair out. Allowing SwaSan time to build their relationship and the last para...the song of soulmates...loved it!

Jazz 🤗

You and your poor printer too! But this got me lovely comments so I cannot complain! So glad you felt that boat scene so deeply. Ah well- your observation slightly shook me if I am honest,not something often picked up on! I did get told that i experienced things in my mid 20s (terrible things I suppose) that most people would take a lifetime to suffer but then after that I got reborn again (i used this expression in this TS too funnily enough!) and so I guess what you say is right. The context was different but yes, if you have experienced the depths of despair and also the converse, I guess it may be easier to describe intense scenes. Sorry, have blabbed a lot of personal nonsense but your comment just struck me!

Haha - I have made Sanskaar acknowledge in another piece too that his wife can be exasperating, it's cute in its own way na? I am sure my hubby thinks this about me for sure! 😆 Yeah I am sick of the RagYa drama on the show so wanted to dispense with that quick! I didn't see any other way of making them leave the loons properly so this seemed to work. So happy you have liked this hon xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#202

Originally posted by: JazzyM

The apples...had its fate decide...became the prasad for Kala Booth Ji, hopefully now, Laksh would have his senses back...or become another booth ...he might just be the booth that would seal SwaSan's fate...

The best thing is, you have given an opportunity for Swara to self reflect, get away from her deepest feeling of rejection and bloom into a wonderful Banaras lotus... I do not know if they will show such Swara in the series but your Swara has better sense and most certainly better luck...

The silent types...have more depth...that is for sure Sanskar and you have been able to characterize his superbly...

NB : My OS...thank you so much...it really means a lot (zillion times lots) to be appreciated by you.
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😆😆 Another convert to the Kaala bhooth ji cult- I'll tell Jwalu! Laksh ji getting sense back 😲. Ah well miracles may be possible I guess! Seriously though, the endless drama is so annoying I am seriously thinking of a piece where I can redeem him but in a way that still seems real! Tough challenge I know!

Swara cannot be around the madness and be detached like Sanskaar so he knows that and in this I can make them take sensible decisions, in the show we would never get this. However at least on the show Swara has finally realised her love and is finally exhibiting sense! I always like my men to have that sort of silent strength and as for Sanskaar- I don't know, I actually feel like I personally know him inside out 😃.

NB- why wouldn't I appreciate?! Waise bhi, what is so khaas about me, I thought that you wrote so well but like I said that didn't really shock me as you can always tell the ones who are capable of writing well! Please keep writing and do PM me! Look forward to more. Lots of love you dear xxx

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#203

Originally posted by: monsi08
We demand this in the show 🥳

Awww thank you! No chance of SwaSan leaving Mental Mahal in the show but really hopeful for intense passionate scenes! Glad you liked it!

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sarra0

@sarra0

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Posted: 9 years ago

#204

How cud i have missed this...just read parts 3 and epilogue...once again wat wonderful writing, i dont think it will matter how many diff stories or styles u write in ur words have a pull and that comes from u...

Her having trouble articulating her feelings, himunderstanding, her opening up was great... 😆😆I liked her i will not b signing the divorce papers...

I loved the quotes used throughout also the boat ride...hai if only v cud get such scenes from the cvs...

Loved how smart sanskaar is ...moved out of MM...thats my boy...he knows their combined family is madness and action is required for sanity to prevail...

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inlieu

@inlieu

Stunner

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Posted: 9 years ago

#205

Wow Shruti! What an awesome piece - I really love how you're experimenting with your writing style and this first person approach was apt for the kind of TS you've written. 👏

I'm really beginning to feel that these two should definitely go to Benares and that their confession should happen there. 😆 A lot of people can identify with Sanskaar, and though we have all been annoyed with Swara's blindness to her own brand of mistreatment of Sanksaar, it is great to see you articulate the fears in the deep recesses of her heart.

We have all inferred the reason for her insecurities and I am really hoping that the CVs put some emphasis on this aspect as it is crucial to her character. Thanks for another great piece of work my dear, I am eagerly waiting for more from you as I expect today's episode and the ones to come will give you loads of material to work with.

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#206

Originally posted by: sarra0
How cud i have missed this...just read parts 3 and epilogue...once again wat wonderful writing, i dont think it will matter how many diff stories or styles u write in ur words have a pull and that comes from u...
Her having trouble articulating her feelings, himunderstanding, her opening up was great... 😆😆I liked her i will not b signing the divorce papers...

I loved the quotes used throughout also the boat ride...hai if only v cud get such scenes from the cvs...

Loved how smart sanskaar is ...moved out of MM...thats my boy...he knows their combined family is madness and action is required for sanity to prevail...

Sarra- hey! How are you? Thanks so much for these lovely words, made me feel so happy! I'm grateful the readers here are so patient and appreciative. Glad you liked this story, it was meant to be a very simple telling of how I want SwaSan to reconcile. Yes Swara clearly struggles both with recognising her feelings and also in expressing them. Usually this is an issue the heroes have but I love it that Sanskaar knows his own mind so clearly. Not signing was meant to speak the words she was having difficulty with. Glad you like the boat ride. In the shows I now have hopes of more and better SwaSan scenes but unfortunately we have to contend with unwanted rubbish drama too- grrr. How I wish SwaSan could leave MM and the mental families they both have even for a while but no chance on the show! Once again thanks for your comment, much appreciated. X

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Vianna

@BookWormV

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#207

Wow! I am absolutely a fan of your writing! My heart is all warm and fuzzy after reading this story! :D Its so so very beautifully written. Thank you for such a beautiful story. You have done a splendid job writing the story in Swara -Sanskaar Point Of Views. :)

Truly loved it. Hoping for even the slightest of this romance on the show. :) It was a complete SwaSan centric fiction and truthfully I was just happy that there were no negativities from people. All that was needed was the sharing of thoughts between the two and all was simply and beautifully sorted. :)

Keep writing. Awaiting a new story soon.

-V

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#208

Originally posted by: inlieu
Wow Shruti! What an awesome piece - I really love how you're experimenting with your writing style and this first person approach was apt for the kind of TS you've written. 👏
I'm really beginning to feel that these two should definitely go to Benares and that their confession should happen there. 😆 A lot of people can identify with Sanskaar, and though we have all been annoyed with Swara's blindness to her own brand of mistreatment of Sanksaar, it is great to see you articulate the fears in the deep recesses of her heart.

We have all inferred the reason for her insecurities and I am really hoping that the CVs put some emphasis on this aspect as it is crucial to her character. Thanks for another great piece of work my dear, I am eagerly waiting for more from you as I expect today's episode and the ones to come will give you loads of material to work with.

Hey Jean!! Sorry for my late reply- my schedule is as mad as a box of frogs 😆

Thanks so much!!! Yes, I just like to venture out of my comfort zone from time to time, be that at work or with my dress sense or indeed writing! Sometimes the consequences may not be great but I like to think of it as a learning experience so thank you for liking the attempt! I would so like a Banaras track but we get kitchen politics instead . That was exactly my intent- give Swara a voice we can relate to! I will think on more plots or ramblings as I call them and hopefully be back to bore you all soon! I am on holiday abroad from tomorrow so will have to see but will use flight times to pen thoughts! Love x

PS: I am also awaiting a certain experiment from you, very eagerly! 😉

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#209

Originally posted by: bwvianna
Wow! I am absolutely a fan of your writing! My heart is all warm and fuzzy after reading this story! :D Its so so very beautifully written. Thank you for such a beautiful story. You have done a splendid job writing the story in Swara -Sanskaar Point Of Views. :)

Truly loved it. Hoping for even the slightest of this romance on the show. :) It was a complete SwaSan centric fiction and truthfully I was just happy that there were no negativities from people. All that was needed was the sharing of thoughts between the two and all was simply and beautifully sorted. :)

Keep writing. Awaiting a new story soon.

-V

V 🤗

As usual, such sweetness and kind words from you!! Am so happy to read you liked this so much! Thank you!! I'll do my best to write a new one and hope you will keep reading and supporting me as you always do. Lots of love to you xoxo

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Sapna

@NainoMeinSapna

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#210

Hey Shrutu 🤗,

It's actually been quite a while since you posted this, and I read it too, but I didn't get much time to write up a proper comment, so after all this time, here it finally is.

Overall I really loved this TS, but then again, when don't I love your pieces? 😆 The first person style was quite different. I don't think many people on the forum have been using it, at least most of the works I've read aren't first person. I enjoyed it anyway. First person really helps develop the characters more because we can hear their thoughts and sympathize with them more. So, frankly, I think you should definitely use it again. 👍🏼

Also I know your TS mostly concentrated only on SwaSan and I absolutely loved that about it. I mean common, who even cares about the other characters? Not me at least. 😆

I really liked their confrontation. When Swara told Sanskaar she didn't want divorce, it was such a beautiful moment. 😳

Thanks for all the PM's.

- Sapna 😃