Shani OS: Life after the storm (Shani 2)

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The forum looks empty. I wonder there is anybody left to read this story. Anyways, it will contain 12 chapters, until Mandi joins his father in the horoscope of Indrajit. (In my mind Rohit as Shani, Tina as Dhamini and Kartekeya as Mandi)

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Life after the storm

Year one

Shani hears him the moment he wakes.

He has been getting accustomed to the different sounds of his son. Like the sniffly whimper right now until it becomes a full blown wail. He glances at his wife lying beside him, still peacefully asleep. She has been busy all day with all the decorations and arrangements for the celebration of their son's first birthday. He has been busy watching over King Dasharah and his growing children, waiting for the right moment to come.

He looks outside. There is another hour before the sunrise. In the Shanilok, sunlight barely reaches the deepest part of his humble castle. He feels some parts of the castle need to be rebuilt. His child needs to bask in the sunlight, unlike himself. And the work is still going on.

It has been almost a year, he became a father. He never imagines himself as a father figure, but he can't deny the cute little large eyed child has wiggled his way into his life and his heart as well.

A wondrous intriguingly beautiful little piece of himself and Dhamini.

Sometimes he wonder how can he get so much attached to someone when he himself always remain detached.

He stops that thought abruptly - pushes it aside. Sometimes attachment is good. Mahadev is also a father, but he is also detached. Then why can' t he?

His life has changed over last two years. Now he has his own abode, his own family, his wife, and his child. Dare he say, he feels an odd comfort whenever he sees the smiling face to Dhamini or the curious look of his child Mandi. That will have to be enough. He isn't about to ruin that with his philosophy.

Another soft whimper in the next room. And Dhamini's soft snoring. He makes his way to the crib, carefully avoiding raising his wife, and slowly looks at the whimpering baby entangled in clothes and blankets. He smiles at his son, and pressed his finger over his lips and the baby looks at him curiously, forgetting his whimper. He detangles Mandi from his heap of blankets and picks him up in his arms.

Everybody wonders if he is any good with children. It is natural, because of his usual stoic nature, nobody knows what he actually thinks. Even Yami gives up hope when he denies to listen to her advices.

But he knows. More than anybody. Yami teases him that he sleeps through the most nights, while Dhamini feeds or changes the baby. But really, since he doesn't sleep much anyway many nights, he goes up to get the teary little boy before his soft cries can turn loud enough to wake his mother.

He has become quite adept at quick cloth changes and feeding in the middle of the night. Then he puts his son right back down to sleep, allowing his wife the rest he knows she needs after long days. She looks at him with so much gratefulness in her eyes. But he simply tells that this is a part of his duty.

But is it only a part of his duty? Having never being a father before, he finds he rather enjoys the moments with his son at night. His soft sighs and sleepy weight as he drifts off, warm, against him, usually with a chubby hand curled around one of his fingers. Something he never could have imagined being anything but tedious, he finds to be surprisingly calming and even a bit endearing.

Mandi's whimpers turn into a giggle and a pointed pudgy finger as he begins to put him down in his crib. With a finger to his lips and soft shushing sounds, Shani swoops him up in his arms again, and climbs down the stairs, casting a quick, wistful glance at his sleeping wife as he goes.

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Dhamini wakes to the sound of laughter. Baby laughter. The big air gulping belly laugh that only very small children seem able to make.

She smiles in her sleepy half-awake state and glances at the window. Bright sunlight streams through the window. It is almost midday. She slept late. Mandi never stays quiet this long. She rolls over to see what he is laughing at, but realizes the sound is far away. Not in the room. His cot is empty, and the laughing is coming from downstairs.

Taking a quick look at her disheveled appearance, she makes her way toward the hic coughing laughter coming from downstairs.

Mandi is sitting in Shani's throne. A bowl of food lays in front of him, but he is not focused at all on her food.

Bright eyes wide, he holds his breath until... a blue light emits from the side of the throne creating a image of dancing monkeys on the wall and he dissolves again into hysterical laughter. The image disappears for a second and another held breath before another ray of light reappearing on the other side creating the image of Hanuman swinging from one tree to another, resulting in clapping and even more squealing. SHe catches the sound of a deeper baritone laugh as well and chances a glance below the throne.

Shanidev. The Karmafaldaata. Sitting cross-legged on the ground in front of his own throne, playing with his one year old. Not just playing, but laughing with him. Engaging in a game belonging just to the two of them. He move his dand and another ray of bright blue light emits from his dand, and Mandi squeals happily.

Smiling to herself, Dhamini leans against the wall to watch this adorable absurdity that is her life now for a few more minutes before her soon looks over and finally sees her.

"MA!

He points to his mother, dissolving back into giggles. Trying to breathe around laughter hiccups.

A dark disarray of curls pokes up from under the throne and Shani flashes her genuine smile and a "Have you had a good sleep, Dhamini?"

As if there is not one thing out of place about him sitting on the ground instead of his throne, playing peekaboo using his almighty dand as a toy.

Dhamini can never imagine the mighty Karmafaldaata in this avatar. But fatherhood changes him, so does she.

Life can't be more beautiful than this.

And she is so lucky to have such a beautiful life.

To be continued...

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Posted: 7 years ago
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It is so beautiful. Seeing this side of shani dev makes my heart flutter with happiness. With Dhamini and Mandi, shani finally found peace in his life. You bring out that very well in your stories. Keep writing dear. I always loved your stories. I will definitely read them😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Very Beautiful.
I Will Read All The Chapters Don't Worry.
This Is Very Cute. Shani Playing With Baby Mandi.
And Dhamini The Proud Mother Looking On.
Update Soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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awww...Loved it so much...U always prove me wrong...Whenever I read ur story and I think this is ur best creation , u prove me wrong by writing something which is more beautiful than the last piece of ur writing...I just found Mandi adorable...I can imagine his big wide eyes looking at his father and squealing happily...Loved the inner thoughts of shani...and Dhamini gazing at her husband proudly...never thought that Karmaphaldaata could play peekaboo using his dand as a toy...

Waiting for more...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Beautiful story .
Thanks, pl conti5
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Posted: 7 years ago
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U r a better stry writer than even the writer of karmafaldata shani . Pl continue even after mandi impact on indrajit's horo 👍🏼
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Life after storm

Year two

It is a sad day.

Today is the day when Bhara died. It has been a decade, but the wound is still fresh. In these days Devi Chhaya misses her son most.

Suryadev understands her sadness, and sends his fastest carriage to carry his wife to his son's abode. Now they are sitting together under the violet sky of Shanilok, watching the tiny satellites gleaming overhead.

"It is beautiful." Devi Chayya says to her son, as a tiny meteor crosses the sky, leaving behind its shiny trail. Sunlight barely reaches the distant part of this planet, and it is unusually cold comparing to scorching temperature in Suryalok. So she pulls her shawl closer, and watches her son, "I really wish Bhadra could see this place."

A shiver runs though Shani's body, which he sincerely hopes his mother did not notice. He still feels guilty whenever they talk about his lost sister. "She would love this place." Shani replies, not turning gaze away from the sky above.

Though Devi Chhaya can't see his face, but she knows there are tears in his eyes. There are tears in her eyes too, but she says nothing, but touches her son's arm gently.

"She would." Devi Chayya nods and averts her attention to the twinkling stars.

Then again, they sit in silence for a bit just remembering the past.

In his mind Shani has so many things he could say to fill the silence; yet afraid if he opens his mouth his vulnerable side will show.

They rarely talk about Bhadra these days, and both of them know that the wound is still fresh. Whenever Shani wants to heal the wound, it begins to bleed again and again. He knows his mother bears the same wound, but none of them have enough courage to talk about it.

Today this silence seems almost dangerous as his thoughts battle to betray him. It is a companionable silence, but strained, with something bubbling just under the surface that needs to stay contained.

In the end, he doesn't need to be the one to break the quiet.

*******

Devi Chhaya watches her son for a while. She has been waiting for a time like this to broach the topic, the unbearable guilt she knows she needs to get rid of.

She looks up at Shani and catches his eye. She pulls her shawl together, and sits on a chair nearby, and pats the space beside her. "Son...Um...can we speak for a while?"

Shani averts his attention from the stars, nods and slides himself onto the chair a few inches from his mother, facing her.

Devi Chhaya takes a breath and looks down at her hands.

She should have said it earlier. Long before losing her son forever.

"I'm sorry, son." She mumbles into her lap.

"Mata?" Comes the confused reply.

"For what I did...after Bhadra...Taking away your position. Sending you away ...,"

She swallows past the sick feeling in her throat, "All the bad words I used. All the rudeness...Hurting you. No mother should do this with her son."

She reaches out a hand to touch her son, but hesitantly settles down on her side. Silent tears well up from her eyes and begin to fall on her lap. She doesn't even try to stop her tears. She needs to get rid of her guilt. She can't bear it anymore.

A moment passes before a hand reaches to her cheeks and wipes her the salty tears away, and a deep voice, full of empathy than she expects from the man she hurt, answers slowly, "Mata. Do you really think I care so little for you that I could not forgive you for being human?"

Devi Chhaya feels the sting behind her eyes. She lays her hand atop her son's curly head, and looks at his face, with eyes full of affection, "I don't deserve forgiveness, Shani - but you are always so nice with everyone."

"Wrong, Mata," Shani retorts, then adds in a softer tone, "I believe, sometimes, we all deserve a chance to ventilate our feeling. You were grieving, Mata. I was the cause of your grief. Whatever you did, it was justified."

Then he wraps his arms around his mother and holds her close.

"Cry, Mata." He whispers softly her ears, grazing his fingers through her hair, "Let your tears flow. Get rid of all the pains you have."

She does. Her tears soak her son's skin, his arms around her as she sobs. For a moment a memory flashes in her mind- her holding little Shani in her arms. How the situation has reversed? Now her little son is comforting his mother. When did he grown up so much? How much she misses those lost days.

As they sit in the stillness of the mostly darkened balcony, it is Shani this time that breaks the quiet.

He begins to talk. About the past. About more recent events. Real and open conversation, serious and silly, until they are interrupted by a two year old entering into the room.

"BA.." Mandi waddles into the room and raises his arms towards his father.

Shani smiles at those dark eyes with the hint of gold, so very much like Bhadra's. "Well then, little dear. What should we do now?"

Mandi gives him a serious face before breaking into a wide grin as he sticks his tongue out at him and blows raspberries in his face.

Shani laughs loudly, wiping his eye with his sleeve, " You , my dear, are most definitely your father's son."

Mandi giggles in reply, then points to his grandmother, repeating "DA DA" while squirming to go to her.

Devi Chhaya opens her arms for her grandson, and the toddler waddles into her arms. The fragrance of him surprisingly reminds her of her long lost daughter. He has the same innocent smile like his aunt.

Devi Chhaya puts Mandi on the ground, sitting down with hin, and begins creating shadow puppets on the wall, and Mandi claps happily. He expectantly looks at his father, silently begging to join them too.

Shani pushes himself off the chair and plops down beside his mother and son, summoning his dand which has already turned out to be the favorite toy of his son. Devi Chhaya smiles as she sees the way Shani's eyes light up whenever he talks with little Mandi. Seeing Shani playing with his son, Devi Chhaya can't but remember the joy she had seen in Shani's eyes when he held his baby sister in his arms for the first time.

A sigh escapes from her lips involuntarily, and Shani reaches to touch his mother's hand, knowing what she is thinking about.

"It's alright, Mata." He whispers.

Mandi reaches down to pat their joined hands.

"DA!" he giggles. Then, "no..no...cr..."

Devi Chhaya smiles and puts a finger to her lips in a "be quiet gesture. Shani gives her a confused look, but the older woman gestures him to stay quiet.

"Wait...son..."

Mandi giggles again, shakes his head, little curls bouncing.

"No...no...no cry DA!" He all but shouts, and then erupts into a fit of giggles, wrapping his tiny arms around his grandmother's neck. "No cry DA."

Devi Chhaya can't help but laugh with him as Shani watches his son with a confused look. It is Mandi's first time saying a full sentence. She also doesn't miss the hint of pride in his eyes.

"He is talking really early, Mata." He says, proudly looking at his son.

"You were a early talker too, Shani." Devi Chhaya answers with a smile, holding her grandson in one arm, and her son in another. Her hand is still deftly running over her grandson's hair, almost petting, as Mandi sequels happily.

"You used to talk all the night when you first learned to speak." Devi Chhaya smiles and Shani looks embarrassed remembering his childhood misadventures.

Mandi chooses to verify his newfound vocal talent by reaching for him with both hands and giving another giggled "BA...No cry."

Devi Chhaya has never seen her son's eyes crinkle up into a smile like the one that lights up his face in response to this. He looks at his mother, who nods and encourages him to talk with Mandi.

"No cry...BA." Mandi repeats, as Shani picks him up in his arms and bounces him on his leg.

"I am not crying, dear. Not anymore." the Karmafaldaata all but whispers, his face still cracking in that absolutely gorgeous smile as he presses his nose to his in a playful nuzzle.

It is the most beautiful sight Devi Chhaya can imagine. A drop of tear rolls on her cheeks unknowingly.


"No cry...DA." Mandi reaches for her. Shani follows his son and rests his head on her shoulder.

"Don't cry, Mata." He whispers. "You are not alone anymore. "

"I am not, dear." Devi Chhaya smiles. An odd sense of peace fills her heart. She can't remember ever feeling so perfect. Not sure what just happened, but the warmth of her son and grandson makes her feel as though she belongs there.

Has always belonged there.

To be continued...

Please leave your comments...

Next chapter- Yam meets Mandi and Shani...

Edited by foreign-beauty - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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WOW!! beautiful chapter dear...Loved how Shani consoled his mother...Shani was right...He could not blame her for being human...Chhaya's pain was so deep that she couldn't understand what was right and what was wrong...
Mandi's inclusion in the scene made it more beautiful...I loved how the little one finally brought a sense of peace between the mother and son...Finally Chhaya would let bhadra go...


Will u show tapti's birth in this story?
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Originally posted by: sanghita0000

WOW!! beautiful chapter dear...Loved how Shani consoled his mother...Shani was right...He could not blame her for being human...Chhaya's pain was so deep that she couldn't understand what was right and what was wrong...

Mandi's inclusion in the scene made it more beautiful...I loved how the little one finally brought a sense of peace between the mother and son...Finally Chhaya would let bhadra go...


Will u show tapti's birth in this story?


Thanks for giving me ideas. It will be wondeful. I will try to write something like this.
Before I need to write something about Yam's yearning for a proper family and his marriage
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btw...this one will be my final story for this forum :(

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