Ranjish Hi Sahi: A Chandini FS LAST CHAPTER updated on Pg 9

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Ranjish Hi Sahi

Part 1(A)

They looked like one happy family...the Emperor, his queen and the one and a half year old prince. Sitting in the lavish palace garden which, owning every possibly available flora, took pride in being one of its own kind. Even a passerby, by just having a glance at them, could tell that they were having a gala time in each other's company. The king looked more than happy and relaxed spending quality time with his family after a hectic day.

Sprawling lazily on the plush settee sofa, Chandragupta looked beside him; his son was just up from his afternoon nap and was bustling with energy sitting in the lap of his choti maa. Placed on the table, kept near them, were his toys, all made up of gold the costliest possibly a child could ever have. But they lay lifelessly brooding over their master's negligence as right now baby Bindu had his mind set upon his mother's hair pin. Stretching his hands once again he tried to take out the shining hair pin which had kept secured his mother's otherwise long flowing tresses in a bun.

uh! Bindu beta kya kar rahe ho...maine abhi abhi apne kesh banaye hai" (Uh! Bindu what are you doing son, I've just done my hairs) she reprimanded his son in the sweetest way possible...she was clearly enjoying his antics.

Paying least attention to his mother's plea ...Bindu continued with his mission and cooed in glee when he finally succeeded to reach out for his object of interest.

Chandragupta watched with rapt attention... "arghh!! BINDU" this time she clearly looked annoyed. With the pin now with Bindu, her hairs fell to her waist like a dark cloud, the wind swaying them to its tunes, making her look all the way more heavenly. Bindusaar by the time was adamant to be kept down on the floor so that he could try his hands in his new found adventure, walking. Nandini ,horrified at the idea of his walking bare foot at the soiled surface of the garden was trying her level best to stop him. While she struggled keeping a kicking Bindu close to herself ... her hairs now open and all over her face were clearly not helping.

Smiling... Chandragupta taped her shoulder making her cast an annoyed glace to him...he slowly removed a wild tendril from her face and tucked it behind her ear...giving her a nodding assurance he took Bindu from her. While she struggled with captivating all the loose tendrils, the father son duo busied themselves into rubbing their nose against each other's, off lately their favourite sport

"Maharaj aur Maharani ki Jai ho" entered a maid. "Maharaj, raaj maata ne yuvraj ko yaad kiya hai...Vey yuvraaj ke saath kuch samay vyateet karna chahti hain ( Maharaj Raaj mata has asked for prince Bindusaar, she wants to spend some time with him)

"Theek hai le jao", said Chandragupta in an authoritative tone, placing a wet kiss on his son's cheek he handed him to the maid

"Sambhal ke le jaana" nandini couldn't help but be the protective mother

As the maid took an exit with Bindusaar, they were left alone, all to themselves .They both looked at each other and the spell which enchanted them moments ago BROKE

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Bindusaar left his parents with the ugly truth that they were husband and wife with their relationship hitting the lowest possible. The proximity which looked so very casual a few moments ago was now suffocating. They both struggled to come up with something to say, knowing very well that they both will fail. The family which looked picture perfect few moments ago now looked like a jaded torn photograph. Not being able to deal with the catastrophic feeling, Nandini stood from her place to go inside. Chandragupta seeing her leave, for once mustered up all the courage he ever had and called... "Nandini... " noticing the faltering of his tone only to make him all the way more nervous.

She stopped in her tracks ...he could feel the tension building up inside her by just looking at her back. "kya baat hai " (what's the matter)... without even bothering to turn around, she replied in a tone, too cold to be Nandini's . "Thodi der aur rukti" (stay for a while) he asked with a hope, only to be crushed, as soon as the words made their way

"Mujhe bheetar kuch karya tha, woh khatam kar ke aati hoon" (I have some chores to tend inside...will come back once done). Not waiting for his reply she proceeded to leave.

Chandragupta watched her trailing figure helplessly...there were times when he would wait and wait patiently for her to complete her "chores" and join him, only to conclude that when she says she will be back she has no plans to do so...those words were mere display of cold courtesy . She being a royal was pro at it.

Sighing tiredly...Chandragupta couldn't help but ponder over the events which took place during the past few months. Five months to be precise... Five whole long months back...

When they had found about, Apama being guilty of Durdhara's murder. They didn't intended to ...in fact not even in the wildest dreams did Aacharya and he imagined that their whole ploy against Apama will end up revealing in something devastating like this. They had all the proofs against Apama for conspiring with Nand and his allies against the Mauryan Empire. She was arrested with immediate effect. The night before Apama was to be punished he along with Aacharya was supervising the search expedition of Apama's room to investigate further about the treacherous activities she was indulged in,when they had found Durdhara's letter, the last from her. He was surprised to find it from Apama's room, he knew Helena had the letter with her, but he expected her to submit it to the records department to keep it safe, rather to hand it to her mother. But still he couldn't guess, it was only after his eyes caught the ink of the letter, which was far more faded then it was last time, he had read the letter once again, only to find Nandini's name nowhere in the letter . Confused he had consulted Aacharya , who testified that the letter Durdhara left hadn't had Nanidin's name in the first place. And then everything fell into place like pieces of jigsaw puzzle. By the end when they had figured out all, Aacharya had his head bowed down in disappointment and shame, guess even the greatest brains are fallible.

He had wanted to kill Apama right away, then and there...it took Aacharya all his patience and wits to stop him. He still wasn't ready to settle for anything less than death sentence for Apama, even at the cost of enmity with Greeks. Nothing can be costlier than the price they had paid for trusting their Queen. But surprisingly, it was Nandini who had sided with Aacharya on the proposal of sending Apama back to Greece for never ever to come back. He eventually agreed, realizing once again that he is a king and the tag comes with a price, always. They were doubtful of Helenas involvement as well; but silently bearing all the tortures inflicted upon her, Apama not once took her name. In every session when Apama refused to confess Helena's involvement in any of her misdeeds, he couldn't help but contemplate the irony, a morally bankrupt person like Apama knew how to stand by her loved one, but he didn't. Helena all the while kept house arrest was only released after Apama was sent back to Greece. Not being allowed to bid her mother the last farewell, she was still being watched upon. Somehow, her claims of oblivion, were hard to believe.

The whole palace was out of their wits after the truth got revealed. Each one of them apologised to Nandini and she has forgiven everyone even him. Oh! How he wish she wouldn't have, how he wish her to fight with him, to give it back to him all what he had made her endure. Hell! She would have killed him for all he cared, but she chose to forgive him. Only to teach him a lesson, which Acharya never had, that sometimes to forgive is the worst punishment

He clearly remembers her words, how could he forget... ever since she had said them he had spent every single night replaying them a thousand times in his mind...trying to find something hopeful between the lines

"Maine tumhe kshama kiya chandra" (I forgive you Chandra)

"Nandini tum mujhe kshama kar sakti ho parantu main khud ko kshama kabhi nahin kar sakta...Jab mujhe Apama ke kamre se woh patra mila toh..." (Nandini, you can forgive me but I can't, never can I. When I found the letter from Apama's room ...)

"Agar Apama ne galat patra na jalaya hota toh?" ...cutting him midway she had asked him (Had Apama not burnt the wrong letter by mistake, then?") And he knew that she had forgiven but not forgotten. The fact that he had not trusted her words, spoken and unspoken, the fact that he needed proof to trust her...she will never forget

"Main bahout lajjit hoon Nandini" He had tried one last time "Mera vishwas karo " (I'm ashamed nandini, trust me)

And she had laughed, a sardonic mirthless laugh...a laugh which would haunt him for the every coming single night, making his already dark nights all the way more darker

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Initially he had thought it would be tough to win Nandini back, but he was ready to fight.

It was the re coronation ceremony of Nandini as mukhya maharani ...a pooja has been organised for the royal couple after which they had to address their subjects. The priest had asked Nandini to keep her hand on his while the aahuti was being offered to the holy fire. The moment her hands made a contact with his... his heart skipped a beat. It was cold, almost like a stranger's hand. Even with the worst possible sate of their equation never her touch was so detached , so mechanic...their bodies have always been in sync, almost reading each other's touch, having a language of their own...his heart sank in fear because no matter how much he tried to refute he knew that he has lost Nandini. She had given up on him. If only giving up on her has been so easy for him.

Not to mention that, the pooja along with the function went smoothly, people praising the perfect organization. Perfect, yes things were perfect, they were perfect...perfect king and queen, perfect parents to their son and perfect strangers to each other. No, she was perfect; he still struggles to perfect the last part. He still sometimes dared to be "Chandra" trying to reach out for his "Nandini", only to fail miserably, like he did today.

He sighed and looked around; as usual there were no hopes of her coming back to him. It was dark by the time. Pushing himself he stood up and dragged his feet to his room which was as lifeless as its master, waiting for its mistress.


{Second part in next post}

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Part 1(B):-

It was almost midnight when Chandragupta decided to call it a day ...not because he was tired because there was nothing left to be done. Tying the thread which bound the bunch of perforated papers, he kept the bundle aside. Rubbing his eyes he decided to take a stroll in the room to loosen up his body. He has been working like a maniac on this particular bill for the past 4 months...in fact it has been the only solace of his lifeless days and soulless nights. Roaming around, he once again took the bundle of pages, cursorily going through it. The bill called for women's security in every which way possible. The definition of domestic violence had been revised, the punishment now being stricter. No person/family can throw a woman out of her house, and by no means can a husband disown his wife, only exceptions provided under special circumstances. Even then the State was to provide her shelter and look after her means of living. The welfare department for the women, which earlier worked under the aegis of Ministry of social welfare, was now to be a separate ministry, with provisions of revised grants. He kept turning pages after pages; there were provision for more and more stringent laws against sexual harassment ... the State would ensure that they were granted equal educational rights and so on and so on.

Tomorrow he will have to present it in the court and after his council of ministers approves it, it will be signed by him and the bill will be law. He knew it was just a formality, even if they don't, he had every right to pass a bill and legislate it. But he knew, nobody will oppose, in fact he would be showered with praises for being such a just and considerate king to his subjects. Little do they know that he was doing it for himself, the two women, the most dear to him, his foster mother and his love, have suffered a lot at the hands of their jerk, good for nothing husbands...he remembered grimly the way his foster father used to torture his wife...the way he had tortured Nandini, before marriage, while getting married and after marriage, forcing her to the bath, doubting her with Malayketu, calling her characterless, asking her to leave the palace...not trusting her with Durdhara, for heavens she was the wife of Chandragupta Maurya, her case had all the right to enjoy the privilege to be investigated properly before being sentenced, a right which the State provides to every random citizen. Even when she came back for Bindu, he left not a single chance to demean her, his heart tore into pieces thinking that Nandini, his Nandini, had to be a maid to their son. He knew he cannot make up for the past. Bringing this bill to action was just a small effort from his side to make things not right, he knew that was impossible, but just a little less wrong.

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He closed his eyes in disgust as the memory of all his snide remarks and crude comments haunted him. The list of his crimes was endless. He hit his forehead with his fist as thorny barbs of guilt bore into him once more.

Just then a maid entered "Maharaj ki Jai ho"

It took Chandragupta great effort to stabilize himself "kaho" he asked not bothering to hide his irritation.

Maharaj! Maharani Nandini aap se milne ki aanumati chahati hain (Maharaj! Maharani Nandini seeks the permission to meet you)

Chandragupta couldn't help but utter a surprised "Madhya ratri main" (In the midnight") ..."unhe shighra bheetar bhejo" said he hoping it was not about Bindu. [Send her in, now)

The fact that he had asked the guards not to ever stop Nandini from entering into his chambers was of no use. She would purposefully ask for permission, revenging on him in every possible way.

"Pranaam maharaj!

He replied with a nod equally courteous as her salutation.

"kshama chahti hoon Maharaja aapko ratri ke iss pehar mein kasht dene ke liye, parantu baat bahout aavyashak thi" (sorry to disturb you at this hour, but it was important)

He nodded, signalling that he was all ears "woh baat ye hai ki antahpur mein ek daasi hai, Bela, uska pati doosara vivah karne jaa raha hai...usski hone waali dusari patni ne shart rakhi hai ki jab tak woh bela ka parityaag nahin kar deta hai woh uss se vivah nahin karegi aur issiliye kal Bela ka pati uss ka parityaag kar dega...uss moorkh ne bhi mujhe abhi bataya jab maine usey antahpur ke praangan mein rote hue paaya. Meri aapse vinti hai ki aap uss ke pati ko bula ke samjhaye ki woh aisa na kare, aapki baat taalne ka saahas uss mein nahin hoga...humare paas samay adhik nahin hai, hume kal subha se pehle uss se baat karni hogi, main abhi Bela se kehti hoon ki woh apne pati ko aapke paas bejhe" She said in one breathe and now was breathless. He looked her, in the past five months she had made every possible effort to avoid coming to his chamber and today she willingly had came just for the sake of a maid, but then, that's Nandini.

[There's a maid in the harem, Bela , her husband is going to remarry, and abiding the clause put forth by his would be second wife, he would disown Bela tomorrow morning. She being a fool had just now told me about this when I found her crying in the harem's backyard. I request you to have a word with her husband; he would dare not defy you. We don't have much time, we will have to talk to him before tomorrow morning, I'll ask Bela to go and send her husband to you]

Turning around to keep the papers he was holding on the side table, he said "uski koi aavyashakta nahin hai..." (It isn't needed)

"kyun aavayashakta kyun nahin hai..."(why? Why it is not needed) cutting him midway she asked annoyed. She didn't knew what annoyed her more, the fact that he wasn't willing to help her now or the way he was helping her with her hairs in the evening, what the hell does he thinks of himself, and what was that? Asking her to stay and all, when he clearly knows she is not interested...

"kyunki woh ek stree hai..." his voice broke her chain of thoughts (because she is a woman)

"Aur isliye uska koi samman nahin hai, koi adhikaar nahin hai, jis pati ko uss ne itne dino tak apna sab kuch maana , woh jab chahe use kachre ki tarah apne jeevan se bahar phek saktaa hai...kyunki woh ek stree hai, hai na Chandra?"

(And that's why she isn't entitled to any respect, any rights, the man whom she had considered her life can now throw her out of his life like dirt ...because she is a woman, right Chandra?)

"Because she is a woman and it would not be appropriate for her to go and look for her husband at this hour of night, I would send one of my guards for the purpose" ... was what he had wanted to say, if only the furious lady had allowed him to complete. He opened his lips to say something in his defence when something caught his attention "wooah!! Did she just called him by his name, or he mistook? No, he was sure she did, when was the last time she called him "Chandra" ...the day when he went to her to apologize, after that what followed was the wearisome, bland "Maharaj" .

Keeping the papers on the table he turned around to face her, only to be left awestruck. She was in his favourite "just before going to sleep" look with no jewelleries and hairs undone. ...but what caught his attention was her eyes, the otherwise cold, detached pair was now blazing with raze, cheeks glowing with all the fire burning inside her, and lips quivering with agony, she made him go week in his knees.

Pushing his inappropriate thoughts aside, Chandragupta replied "Bilkul theek samjha tumne Nandini, woh ek stree hai, purush jaisa chahe usske saath vyavahaar kar sakta hai" (you guessed it right Nandini, she is woman, a man can treat her as he pleases)

"Yeh tum keh rahe ho, jo apne aap ko magadh naresh kehlaane ka dambh bharta hai?...tum raja ho, woh stree, Bela, tumhari praja hai...kya tumne ek baar bhi socha hai ki jab uss ka pati uss ka parityaag kar dega toh uss ke paas sar chupaane ke liye koi aasra nahin hoga...tumhe tanik bhi andaaza hai ki ye sansaar ek akeli stree ke liye kitna khatarnaak hai...har mod par ek chapnak jaisa darinda..."she stopped midway, what was she doing she was here for the maid, not to share the pain she had endured in her one year of exile and that too, of all the people, with HIM.

[you of all the people is saying so, you, who prides himself as magadhnaresh?.....you are the king, that woman bela is your subject...have you for once thought that when her husband will disown her, she will be have no place to seek shelter, do you have even the slightest idea how dangerous this world is for a single woman, in every corner she encounters monsters like chapnak...]

In that moment Chandragupta wouldn't have minded if an enemy would have came and pierced his sword right through his heart. He regretted giving the brother in law of kalinga king such an easy death, had he knew the lady he was molesting was Nandini...he would have ensured him a death that even death would fear. But most of all he regretted that Nandini had to bear it. Death seemed to be a lot better option than facing this ugly truth. But no, he can't run away, he will have to face the demons.

He looked at Nandini, a lone tear was threatening to fall down betraying her. "NO" he said to himself "no... don't fall, don't make her weak in front of me, this is not the time". She was coming back he can't afford to let her be isolated once again

Pushing the tear inside, Nandini tried composing herself. "khair, main ye puuchne aayi thi maharaj, ki aap uss daasi ki sahayta karege ya nahin" [ well, I came here to ask you maharaj ,that whether you will help that maid or not]

Dekho Nandini jaisa ki tumne kaha, main ek raja hoon , mera kaam hai apne rajya ka vistaar karna, na ki steeyon ki samasya jaise bekaar ke masloon par apna samay barbaad karna" he replied making a face.

[Look Nandini, as you said, I'm a king, so my job is to consolidate my empire, not to look into frivolous matters like women and their problems and waste my time]

"Main soch bhi nahin sakti ki ye tum keh rahe ho. TUM..." he mentally did a happy dance, she was again furious and back to "tum" instead of formal "aap" "jo meri shiksha ke liye Aacharya ke virudhh chala gaya tha" [I can't believe you are saying this, YOU who went against Aacharya for my education]

"woh meri bhool thi" said Chandragupta making himself comfortable on the settee "ab dekho na padh likh ke tum kitni ashisht ho gayi ho...apne pati parameshwar ke viruddhh vaad vivaad kar rahi ho" said he before making sure that all kind of lethal weapons were out of her reach .

[that was my fault...now see after all your education, you have become so manner less , you are debating with your husband, who is supposed to be your God]

Her lips rounded in a perfect O, "God! She was cute", he sighed inwardly. If only he didn't want to live a little longer, he would have kissed her then and there

"Parameshwar aur tum? tum toh pati kehlaane ke bhi laayak nahi ho ...tum , tum "...arghhh

[ God and you? You are not good for being just a husband, you ..you are...]

"Dekho nandini tum mera samaya barbaad kar rahi ho, ye mere vishraam ka samay hai...tumse se pehle mantri veerbhadra ne waise hi inn bekaar ki baton mein mera bahout samay nasht kiya hai...woh bhi tumahari tarah wahi ghisi piti baatein dohra rahe the...stree ka samman and uss ke adhikaar" mocked Chandragupta

[Look nandini, you are wasting my time, this is my time to rest...before you, minister veerbhadra has already took a lot of my time with these banal talks about women and their rights]

To say she was angry was an understatement; her glares were now getting murderous... "tumhe ye ghisi piti baat lagti hai?" [this is banal talks to you?"]

"Aur nahin toh kya...woh toh tumse bhi do kadam aage nikle. Dekho poori pothi likh ke laaye hain iss vishay pe" signalling to the bill he continued "vey sabha mein ek prastaav laana chahte hain...jis se streeyon ki sthithi samaaj mein sudridh ho sake"... "maine toh unhe taalne ke liye keh diya hi aap iss prastaav ko mere paas chod jaye main aaram se padh loonga...ab kaun itni maathapacchi kare, main toh ab araam karounga. kal jab sabha mein woh apna prastaav rakhenge toh use nirasat kar doonga" Chandragupta replied feigning tierdness

[what else , he infact is two steps ahead of you, see he has written a whole volume on this subject. He wants to present a bill in the assembly, so that position of women can be strengthened in the society...to avoid further boredom I lied to him that I will read the bill once free, though I have no plans to do so. I will rest tonight and tomorrow when he will present the bill I will negate it]

"kya? tum prastaav nirshat kar doge woh bhi bina padhe?...tum aisa nahin kar sakte chnadra!" she almost screamed

[What you will reject the bill? that too without reading it?...you can't do this Chandra!]

"Main aisa kar sakta hoon nandini...aur koi bhi sabhasad mera viroodh karne ka sahaas nahin karega

[I can very well do this Nandini...and not a single assembly member will dare to defy me]

"Tum aisa nahin karoge Chandra" [you will not do it Chandra]

"Main aisa hi karoonga nandini" [I will do it Nandini, precisely]

Main tumhe aisa nahin karne doongi, main... main..." [I won't let you do this, I ...I..will]

Main, kya nandini? kya karogi tum? bolo, kal sabha mein sab ke saamne Mukhya maharani hone ke naate mera viroodh karogi?"

["I will" what Nandini, what exactly will you do? Tell me? Being the mukhya maharani, will you oppose me openly in the court tomorrow?]

She kept quiet for a moment "come on pretaatma, take the bait" Chandragupta couldn't help but mutter under his breath.

"Haan main yahi karungi" came her response [yes! I will do the same]..

To say the least, Chandragupta Maurya's joy knew no bounds. ".Toh theek hai tum yahi karna parantu ,main tumhe cheta deta hoon , koi bhi tumkhara paksh nahin lega ...Aacharya bhi nahin"

[Fine do it...but let me warn you nobody in the assembly will side you, not even Aacharya]

"Aacharaya ji kewal sahi ka paksh lege" [Aacharya ji will only side with what is just]

"Toh theek hai Mukhya maharani Nandini...dekhte hai kal mere viruddh aap kya kamal kar paati hain...pooori sabha ko mere virudh mat dene ki liye tyaar kar paati hain ya nahin. kahiye kya aapko ye chunauti swikaar hai" he had kept his fingers crossed

[Fine Mukhya maharani Nandini, let's see what wonder you are able to do tomorrow to convince the whole assembly to vote against me...tell me are you in?]

"Swikaar hai" came her confident reply [I am]

"Toh ye tay raha ...milte hain kal sabha mein Maharani" he bowed a little in mock courtesy [its decided then, see you in court tomorrow, Maharani]

"Uchit hai Maharaj Chandragupta Maurya milte hai kal sabha main" she replied menacing each of her words [very well Maharaj Chandragupta Maurya ...see you in court tomorrow]

She turned back to leave

"Shubha rarti" Mukhya maharani Nandini..He called from back [Good night]

SHUBH RATRI she said "oouch! even go to hell sounded more polite" thought Chandragupta

He closed his eyes in content, the night was going to be a long one, he had to call for bela's husband and not to forget poor veerbhadra. But everything can wait...he for once wanted to savour the moment which was brimming with hope. Now that Nandini was ready to fight with him, he had hopes to win her back.

"Welcome back Nandini"...he said smiling. Her apathy had made him realize the value of her hatred


Ek baar aur ulajhna hai tumse

Bahout kuch suljhaane ke liye...

(anonymous)




Edited by aishwish - 8 years ago
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Author's Note:

well that was a long one, and if you have reached till here, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your patience. As the author of this OS, I feel its my responsibility to declare a few things on my part, First, as a viewer of the show, I don't feel that chandra did an unpardonable offence by banishing Nandini, though it was an unfortunate turn of event, with every character acting foolish. Secondly, the women's rights bill mentioned in the OS, now as far as I know chanakya's views on women were not what could be termed as "progressive" according to the standards of 21st century, bu it is a known fact that mauryan empire worked on a model closed to what we call a "welfare state". I by no means back that part of the OS by any historical evidence, it is just a fragment of my imagination. Thank you once again, I can see that the OS is very lengthy, still if you read it, please do let me know how you feel about it. You have no idea, how much your feedback, even a single word, good or bad, matters to me.How much they inspire me.

Regards

Aishwarya

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Index:

Part 1 (A &B):-

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Part 2 (A)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/141979567

Part 2(B)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/141979625

Part 3(A)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/142109560

Part 3 (B)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/142109643

Part 4 (A)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/142303610

Part (B)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/142303671

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Originally posted by: abiariel

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Posted: 8 years ago
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FInally !!! Another OS from you😊. It was so beautifully written Aish,👏👏 each word exactly like a follower of Chandra and Nandini would want it to happen. Romantic and interesting in every sense.😳
Are you going to continue this to the Sabha, because you surely generated enough curiosity for it ?!!😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wow Aish🤗...It was so beautiful...😳😳I really liked it...Please keep on writing 👍🏼👍🏼

Your OS is actually helping me come out from the current track and enjoy my chandini😳😳

Will be eagerly waiting for the next part 😛😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#9
Part 1
ranjish hi sahi dil hi dukhaane ke liye aa
If it is grief so be it, come to break my heart again

aa phir se mujhe chhoR ke jaane ke liye aa
Do come, if only for the act of leaving me again

pehle se maraasim na sahi phir bhi kabhi to
Our relationship may not be the same now, but even if seldom

rasm-o-rahe duniya hi nibhaane ke liye aa
Come to fulfill the rituals and traditions of the world

kis kis ko bataayenge judaai kaa sabab ham
To whom all must I explain the reason of separation

tu mujh se khafaa hai to zamaanay kay liye aa
Come, despite your displeasure, at least for the sake of the world

ab tak dil-e-khush_feham ko tujh se hain ummeedain
Till now my hopeful heart is keeping some expectations from you

ye aakhari shammain bhi bujhaane ke liye aa
But at least come back to put off these last candles of hope

ek umr se hun lazzat-e-giryaa se bhi mehruum
Too long have I been deprived of the pathos of longing

aye raahat-e-jaan mujh ko rulaane ke liye aa
Come my love, if only to make me weep again

kuchh to meri pindaar-e-mohabbat ka bharam rakh
Respect a little the depth of my love for you

tu bhi to kabhi mujh ko manaane ke liye aa
Come someday to placate me as well

ek umra se hun lazzat-e-giriya se bhi maharoom
It has been a long time I haven't had the luxury of grieving

e rahat-e-jan mujh ko rulane ke liye aa
My peace-of-mind please do come back if only to make me cry

I thought this would be suitable for this part😳
I just loved Ur scenario explaining the leisure time of royal family. They were left alone, all to themselves .They both looked at each other and the spell which enchanted them moments ago BROKE

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Bindusaar left his parents with the ugly truth that they were husband and wife with their relationship hitting the lowest possible. The proximity which looked so very casual a few moments ago was now suffocating. They both struggled to come up with something to say, knowing very well that they both will fail. The family which looked picture perfect few moments ago now looked like a jaded torn photograph

hey were left alone, all to themselves .They both looked at each other and the spell which enchanted them moments ago BROKE

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Bindusaar left his parents with the ugly truth that they were husband and wife with their relationship hitting the lowest possible. The proximity which looked so very casual a few moments ago was now suffocating. They both struggled to come up with something to say, knowing very well that they both will fail. The family which looked picture perfect few moments ago now looked like a jaded torn photograph.


I loved this part very much as this showed how much this relationship collaterally damaged beyond redemption

There was a time when they both enjoyed their presence in their life and now they left with nothing but a bitter memories of recent events

Forgiveness is the most cruel punishment , and Chandra is being punished for his lack of trust.

Their conversation after the revelation was beautifully penned. Very small conversation with so many emotions. Guilt, pain, hurt,love

Perfect, yes things were perfect, they were perfect...perfect king and queen, perfect parents to their son and perfect strangers to each other. No, she was perfect; he still struggles to perfect the last part. He still sometimes dared to be "Chandra" trying to reach out for his "Nandini", only to fail miserably, like he did today.

He sighed and looked around; as usual there were no hopes of her coming back to him. It was dark by the time. Pushing himself he stood up and dragged his feet to his room which was as lifeless as its master, waiting for its mistress.


⭐️


He lost the only person he fancied, desired and of course loved for the first time

But still hopes and fights to regain whatever he lost. The battle is going to be the tough one.


PS: why don't u make it as an SS and carry on until they get united😳 just a request😆

I wish I could see a scene like this in CN too, but I have a strong belief that wen our CVS peeps in they will fulfill my wish as they were doing this for quite some time


Will come for part 2😆


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Posted: 8 years ago
#10
First of all, a big THANK YOU and a lots of hugs from me for having come up with such a wonderful concept. This is such a relief reading, from the repetitive scenes that have kept us now at the extreme edge of insanity. If only we are all blessed enough to view your verses into visuals. Anyways, plz keep such great works coming and most importantly do continue this story further. I am desperate to read more.
Pretty plzzz...

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