Ranjish Hi Sahi: A Chandini FS LAST CHAPTER updated on Pg 9 - Page 2

Aish, Gosh I sooo wanted to write the word dear' today.. 😳

Just let me make a small honest confession here. Yes am an avid reader but still old-school when it comes to the medium; still prefer the books to digital content. Naturally my attention span is limited for the digital medium. So, when I saw your post I just quickly scrolled to check the length first and then happily started reading it.😛😛 And this answers for an author's anxiety whether I , as a reader, reached till the last.😊

Now coming to your writing, am not an expert critique but I will say what felt.

>>As a person who is eager to learn n grow I can see that this piece of writing as a more well-rounded, well-thought compared to the last one, which was very good but seemed bit rushed.

>>Another sign of a good writer is her/his ability to imagine scenarios where you have never been to. For instance, a child's nature to leave aside all the toys in the world to go for the prohibited' ones- salt/pepper pot on table, hammer from toolbox , mud from flower pots; much to the irritation of a parent . And I can see how nicely you have portrayed that emotion between N and baby B.

>>For the on-going turmoil between CGM and N, I can only that you have captured the imagination of the majority of the viewers, including me who desperately hope for these subtleties to come on screen. Geee Aish I hope some CVs come here, read and copy this and I will happily welcome this act of plagiarism' if they do so. 😛

>>I loved the way in both Part 1 and 2 you twisted the scenes- picture perfect family to suffocating silence. And, of course, of course, how you resurrected the guilt-ridden CGM to the CGM with a spark of wit and mischief.

Now time for some best written lines(my favorite activity😆)

..slowly removed a wild tendril from her face and tucked it behind her ear.

...The family which looked picture perfect few moments ago now looked like a jaded torn photograph.

..even the greatest brains are fallible.

..he is a king and the tag comes with a price, always.

..a morally bankrupt person like Apama knew how to stand by her loved one, but he didn't.

..Only to teach him a lesson, which Acharya never had, that sometimes to forgive is the worst punishment

.."Agar Apama ne galat patra na jalaya hota toh?"

Perfect, yes things were perfect, they were perfect...perfect king and queen, perfect parents to their son and perfect strangers to each other.

..her case had all the right to enjoy the privilege to be investigated properly before being sentenced, a right which the State provides to every random citizen.

..when was the last time she called him "Chandra"

..Chandragupta wouldn't have minded if an enemy would have came and pierced his sword right through his heart.

.."ab dekho na padh likh ke tum kitni ashisht ho gayi ho...apne pati parameshwar ke viruddhh vaad vivaad kar rahi ho"

..he said "oouch! even go to hell sounded more polite" thought Chandragupta

Now slow cap for this last one::👏 👏

"Welcome back Nandini"...he said smiling. Her apathy had made him realize the value of her hatred

Ek baar aur ulajhna hai tumse

Bahout kuch suljhaane ke liye...

Lastly I would say you always save the best for the last leaving a lasting impression on the reader. Loved it..🤗

Originally posted by: alanta

Sorry for my late reply, was waiting for the weekend 😊

First of all thank you so much for this wonderful read. This OS is equally brilliant and beautiful👏👏
The intelligence strikes in right from when baby bindu is sent to rajmatha's room, and reaches in its peek with fading of the letters that is quite probable . ⭐️ for that single thought Aish. On a personal note you really cant guess yaar how much I wish to see a Nandhni that you portrayed here, exactly whom I have imagined/wished to see in the actual show post the revelation, who in every aspect clears this point to Chandra that she is only here to look after Bindusaar and not as Maharani or his wife. I liked the portrayal of this Royal Nandhni while in the original show her royalty is lost somewhere. In the show the fact that she had compromised her self respect for the sake of Bindusar is understandable to some extent but the way she is allowing every others around her to treat her as a doormat is far beyond the nature of a royal born. I liked this Nandhni and I know she is an iceberg and can melt at anytime but it would be good if she could stay the same for atleast some more time. Yes its so true that Forgiveness is the most cruel punishment and Chandra is going through the same. Once again a great applause for your brilliant thought beautifully penned where even every single subtlety is explained in detail. Can I ask for a sequel to this?

Originally posted by: aishwish

hey alanta!

come on, no sorry haan!. even if you had taken ages to comment, I wouldn't have minded, especially when the feedback is so amazing 😉 I know alanta, not only you I think most of us badly want some improvement in nandini, though the chances look bleak . Nandini is the first ekta kapoor heroine which I was able to relate to a large extent, so it hurts all the way more to see her being a doormat.

anyways no points in cribbing, I hope she lets CGM to woo her back in the show, small mercies. I'm really glad that I could full fill your expectations which you had from the show. its a huge compliment.I'm glad that you appreciate, the anti climax which follows after bindu's exit...I can see I was able to deliver the jolt which I was intending.

Now, you very well can ask for a sequel...the problem is whether I will be able to give it to you nor not😆 jokes apart I'm working on things, lets see what next I can deliver, I hope whatever it is , you like it.

thanks once again for the wonderful response, means a lot