SwaSan & Baby Varun OS-- 'Kairos'

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello Vi!

First of all, I'm very very sorry for not commenting on your works. But I'm very thankful to you for sending me PMs of your works even though I don't respond. I sincerely LOVE your works. This one is just AMAZING. I loved this one. :)

Will try to give a longer comment from my lappy later. I'll just try, its not a promise! I'm bad at keeping promises. :)

Love your writings! Keep sending me PMs. And I'm thankful to you for being kind towards me.

-Arrhy.
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Viji again you make me speechless 👏 but phir bhi i write it was amazing awesome mindblowing superb etc.
I loved it totally swara jealous 😆 varun looks like his father 😆
Sharmishta teasing was too good
Varun is so cute+shaitaan after all he is sanskar's son so he should be asanskari 😈
I loved that part when swasan were missing eachother badly 😳
It was fully cute
The scene was awesome really a superb os viji
Thanks for pm
One more think you known every details of sanskar's face notty 😉
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Viji, my dear dear sister,

First of all a tight 🤗for the dedication darling, I so adore this one and the fact that it is dedicated to me among a few well deserving others is so...so...overwhelming! Thank you so very very much!

Then, let me confess I read this five times already and will be going back for another read as soon as I finish commenting, just for the sake of soaking up my memory further with the warm sweetness of the entire text. Marvelous wording, just pure magic it is!❤️😳

So Varun Sanskar Maheshwari makes an appearance again. I love that kid, your words have made him a cute, walking portrait in my imagination, with a combination of both Swara and Sanskar's features. Then here, instead of being the lovely baby we remember him being, he is a cute kid, curious to know more about his Mother and father's love story.

The pregnant Swara and Sanskar missing her too much part was too good. He was so, moody that his family was alarmed, then the part where the lady next door noticed him entering the house and came pounding on Gadodias' door! Then Shekar about to beat the thief who entered his daughter's room, all that made such a hilarious image in my mind.

Then after all, Shekar and Shomi were love birds themselves. They do understand how desperate their children are getting. Loved them for letting Sanskar take Swara without much teasing. Poor guy had it, in the time he spent away from his precious wife.

Then Varun again, all ready to hear a bedtime story! Oh, he is one wise kid, who knows how childish his parents can get sometimes. I guess Sanskar reading in that deep, pleasant voice of his would be a sight to behold

Then the part where you said about Varun's painting talent😆 It is true, parents always consider their children to be super duper talented!

Then the past,
So this was where Toska lead. Let's keep that kiss out of the way, or else I might not be able to comment and will keep going all starry eyed and blushing☺️ It was perfect!

So Swara was finally accepted in to the Maheshwari house formally, and what a scene that was. Sanskar truly wanted to be the prince of her dreams right? Bless him, Swara is one fortunate girl. So she accepts that he is better than any dream she might have had.⭐️

I guess you know, how much I love those Sindoor, Mangalsutra scenes.😳 They leave you with a deep profound feeling about the love they share, the vows being exchanged and promises being made. I have said this before, it is always a perfect closing whenever these two are concerned. And this one here was the best you wrote on that context till now, wow! It was truly a master piece!

Then back to Varun,
His confusion about his parents having two anniversary celebrations is cleared and Swara...gosh! She wants to tell him about a third one too. Hold your horses Mrs. Maheshwari, have mercy on that poor kid! 😊

Then Varun the wise understands his parents needs space now and makes his exit. God, I love that kid more...if that is even possible! I'm sure not only the features but he has inherited his father's sharp wit as well.😃

Never enjoyed a one shot more. Love you for writing this...well I already love you loads but this is extra specially for this one shot!🤗
Saku
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Viji... 👏👏This is just awesome , fabulous dear..
I'm completely in love once again with this couple.. May be getting addicted after reading this...
I understand how inseparable they both are.. Not even in the name of traditions & rituals...
The love between them is Divine & Eternal...

I loved the way sanskaar hopped into swara's room at odd hours & yet noticed by eavesdropping neighbor .The urge of both to stay with each other is funny & lovable too..

The most fav part of mine is sanskaar making wear swara MS at the same place where once he filled her partition how dreamy...

Here Comes our Little hero Varun , obedient & naughty kiddo...loved his conversation with his Maa & Papa , and his enthusiasm to know the reason of his parents celebrating their Anniversary twice a year...

What ever i say, will fall very less to appreciate ur writing skills dear...

Love this so much dear...& thanks for leaving Notes for better understanding...Keep Writing...

Love
Suhasini

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Sorry for late response 😕
Very beatifully written 😳
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vijji loved this lovely cute and beautiful OS..

I guess this is what is called as a pure marital bliss.. a perfect partner, loving and cute son, happy moments and lovely memories. any one wouldnot be able to ask for anything more than this.

i just loved the new word KAIROS and u perfectly described it thru this OS.

the kiddo varun was a real cutie pie.though he is a mix of his mom and dad i can feel he is more like his dad as he is as sharp as his dad. he had the audacity to tease his parents at their kissy wissy things.😆😳 he is just adorable.

i loved the past episodes in ur OS a lot. the anxiety and restlessness of both swara and sanskaar were utter cute. ur description was so apt and i could literally imagine them. since i have seen many of my friends cribbing over the same thing of missing their hubbies i could imagine swara and sanskaar in that place too. i wish i get someone soon who can also love me like him..😉😆

shomi and shekar so understanding. they allowed swasan without any complaint or discussion on the issue😆. that was really cute of them.

the second part of the past was just awesome. only and only sanskaar can think so differently to surprise his swara. and that was why we all fell hard for him.

three anniversaries and that would have really confused our kiddo. he really needs time to know what all happened in his parents life. after all it was no less than a roller coaster ride.
just like swasan we swasanians will also be celebrating three anniversaries of them😆

i loved the way u included the most lovely dialogues of swasan in this OS. they are all time fav ones for swasanians..

i wanted u to write an OS on swasan with two kids. one varun and other a baby girl. that would be a complete treat to read.

loved this and now waiting for the next piece of writing..



with love

rithu..


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Hi Viji! Man, I too love Greek and Roman mythologies. I read mostly everything about them and just love it. Kairos- The meaning of the word is so apt on our SwaSan in the OS. Norwegian Ridgeback and Hungarian Horntail huh? Reminds me of Goblet of Fire. I was just reading the Third Task out of boredom on Thursday. I'm too much a Harry Potter addict. You really can't get the better of me.

Anyways coming to the OS. It was such a sweet one. I loved it. Varun is too cute and good-looking, just like his parents and also such a darling jeezz. Genetic cocktail? 😆 I'd seriously chuckled at this. Loved this reference. Of course, who would Swara think the most of? Sanskaar! This is no question. God, the thought that such an adorable and lovable man even exists makes me go totally jealous! I want this guy seriously! Oh, my never dying love for Sanskaar Maheshwari. SwaSan missed each other so much! Oh God! These stupid traditions. The thought of them staying away just pierces my heart, So Sanskaar is upto mischief eh?

Sanskaar came in through the window and the neighbour aunty saw! Lol...Gynecologist? Good excuse must say!😆These two are too adorable for words!

Varun is such an obedient child! He instantly closed his eyes to not disrupt his mummy and papa's romance. Good lad! Swara likes Sanskaar's stubble?? OMG I was blushing when I read this. Of course my bechara GM!!😳

No getting carried away. Varun saying that he'll not let his parents go to a 2nd honeymoon🤣. Oh God that was too hilarious! Bachche man ke sachche!😆 SwaSan romance☺️ My dear Swara, you are his wifey and the divorce has not happened, so you can go beyond a kiss and totally melt into him, inside and out. This Gutter Mind☺️😳 is making me too Asanskaari. Meri pasand achhi hi nahi... was a perfect fit dialogue! Loved it here

That mangalsutra was such a sweet gesture. Of course Sanskaar doesn't want Swara to be forced for anything. His love for her is so unconditional and pure. Me again J!! And this marriage felt so pious! God! I loved it too much. Such a beautiful scene with not physical proximity yet the emotional intimacy making it too beautiful and seep deep inside the reader. SwaSan and Varun share such a beautiful bond! Love all mummy, papa and son!<3

Loved the OS and love you as well
Sakshi
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Viji my dearest soul sis 🤗

Firstly massive hugs and kisses and gratitude for the dedication at the beginning for yet another soul satisfyingly beautiful and serene piece. 🤗 I am touched. You know the reason for the late unres and I am sitting very early morning on Sunday to do this justice so hope that makes up somewhat. But have had hardly any sleep so if the ramblings make no sense please bear with me!

I was expecting major angst in Kairos but reading this brought me such peace and well, rapture at the idea of this beautiful perfect family, untainted by anything to mar their happiness, especially after what they had to deal with to get here.

I ADORE Varun!!! I like kids but am not the gushing sort, even with babies. I am more the silly auntie who plays Disney games and talks to them like little people rather than baby talk. Varun is perfect for my style- and the perfect age I find (experience of my nieces and nephews) to interact with especially when the child is so intellect and a real chip off the old block ❤️. I love the description of his unique combination from his parents but particularly looking the part of his Dad and it seems a lot of his characteristics and rapier intelligence are also (thankfully) more his dad 😉

I liked how this took us so fluidly back and forth in the nice parts of the SwaSan union and encompassed the adorable sequence of sickness by Swara at the final stages of pregnancy due to being parted from her heart and soul. I love how Sanskaar showed his typical impatience and ditched conventionality to go through his antics to stay stuck to Mrs M 😆

And the memories of the days when they finally overcame their terrible obstacles to unite, in the sweetest and most poignant of ways- that was so blissful . I read this a few times since yesterday and it so helps create a nice happy bubble to keep you floating through the day in You used your by now honed method of weaving in key dialogues from the show which worked so well again and interspaced with the real depth you give to the piece (far more so than the show manages to do), makes for a piece that stays with you long after. I of course fell in love all over again with the sindoor and mangalsutra moments . I am personally not a fan of the Bengali groom's attire at all and unsure of the effect on Sanskaar (purely personal opinion and not intended to hurt anyone!) but I love the symbolism here of them both adopting the best of each other's cultures as part of their absolute acceptance of all of each other ❤️. And can I say the crowning moment was Varun's assessment that they had to get remarried as Sanskaar was not in that get up first time around - lovely child logic 😆😆

Oh and lest I forget- as usual I loved the little weaving in of fine details that we have both agreed elevate something to more than just a recounting. A lot of your work is such free flow of beautiful prose, it had a real connect and sheen on it. I liked the touches here of describing for instance the outfit Sanskaar gifted her, the supremely elegant and yet understated mangalsutra- all small parts of a great whole.

Overall I fear I am sounding repetitious on my comments to all your work but the reality is that they are all wonderfully penned so makes it difficult to find new vocabulary all the time 😃. Regardless of that, I hope my message comes across and shows the appreciation and connect for the piece. I am in a hazy and contented world imagining not just endless days and nights of soul stirring love for our Golden Couple but the result of that love being so perfect too! Here's to Mama, Papa and Baby Bernstein- all so loved and adored, there is no match for them! ❤️
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Shru n viji in one day 🥳

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Viji 🤗

So this was not angsty Good girl XOXOXO


In my experience it is quite easy to make a reader feel sad for a character but to make him experience profound joy, make the reader actually feel the character's joy is extremely difficult. And you managed that quite easily in this OS. That atmosphere of bliss which you painted... I have no words to describe it properly but I felt so happy, so calm, so peaceful...Oh God I am blabberingbut I hope you got what I meant to say😳


Blessed is the child whose parent's love one another😳 and by this definition no one can be luckier than Varun. He is too young to realize it yet but one day when he is all grown up he will realize how blessed he truly is to have SwaSan as his parents.


So that is how Varun got his looks??! They are so obviously in love & their love is so much for everyone to see☺️ Zaalim jamanewale keeping him away from his pregnant wifey for a whole month with plans extending to prolong the torture for more months😵 Ofc he had to remedy the situation in the way he did😆 And OMG they were so lost in one another that they didn't even register ShekShomi coming in brandishing canes & knives 🤣

Oh a father/ husband who gives baths to his son Super adorbs!! ☺️

I love how Daadi & Badi Ma know that SwaSan havent yet come off their first honeymoon 🤣 I could imagine some taunting dialogue from Sujju in her sharp Marwadi tongue 🤣 Khullam Khulla Pyaar Karenge Ye Dono!😆

So like all kids Varun too wants to know his parent's love story & here he is getting the story of not one but two anniversaries😆

Those kisses are back again ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

I so love those sindoor & mangalsutra moments these two have. They are on a completely different level...though I dont know how much I will like to see Sunny/ Varun in that topor which Bengali grooms wear😆 I much prefer him as the Marwadi groom with his pag, kalgi, etc😳

And they have a third anniversary too😆 Let the poor boy process these two anniversaries first Swara uske baad third ka bata dena...but these two they might have a fourth anniversary ready by then 🤣



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