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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: shahbhavini



Chapter: 8

Surbhi yaar superb!!! Awesome!!! Mind Blowing chapter... You have shown what a beautifully their pain... their helplessness... and Love... I love how Jodha was confuse about her own emotion...

Bas aapse hi thoda bahut seekh rhi hu sarkaar _/\_

Very first line... Kya hamara koi wajood nahi hai... This line shows her pain immensely ... and at the same time Jalal thinking ... does she any idea what importance she holds in my life? Vow... Really touched my heart... Then the way you have written they eye lock... They both are so much in love... I love how Jalal bend down on his knees... and caress on her cheeks... vow amazing.. "Hum aapke radha krishna ko wapas unke ghar le jaane aaye hai jodha begum" I love so many lines in this update but I love this line particularly... This one line shows many things... Jalal's love for Jodha... Jodha's love for krishna and Jalal's respect for other religion... and then Jodha's answer vow superb!!!

You know what even i loved this particular line...don't know how it came but i just wrote while undertaking him in concern. And i am very glad that you recognized it :)) Thank you so soo much di!

Jalal realization and inner turmoil... I loved each and every line of this update...

Jodha's anger vanished with tears... her inner war is really painful... but she is so wounded inside her heart is not ready to forgive him this easily... When she heard Abul mali is nearby... she forgot everything... She knew it is not safe for him to stay their or going back agra at this was not safe either... She went back to him ... I loved that dialouge...(bagin) vow... Jalal get excited at first, you have forgive me Jodha begum... Jodha bhi cum nahi hai... then she said I want to go back to Amer... Poor Jallu yeh kitna tadpati hai... but I love at the end at least she has realized Jalal became her habit... Just being together was giving her heart peace...

Surbhi I love love love your writing...👏👏👏 Your writing is so deep and emotional... Superb yaar

Sorry for late comment...

Oh god...pehle toh please sorry mat bolo aap yar...i understand :) And thankyou thankyouu soo very much! I am deeply touched by your response, you are so sweet di, i just wish to write something close to what you do, thats it. Thank you so much 🤗Dil khush kar diya aapne!



Love you di! :*
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni

Okay firstly I would wish u belated happy birthday to u darling ...🤗 god bless u with all the happiness & love ... 😃 ...

next thing is Chapter 6 se chapter 8 😕 ... surbhi 😡 ... How the hell u forgot to PM chapter 7 😡 ... I went back read chapter 7 & then came back & read chapter 8 ... 😭 ... mujhe gussa aaya hai 😡 ... mein maun vrat le rahi hoon ab ...



Firstly ThankYou soo much for your wishes di! 🤗 Means a hell lot!
Secondly i am so very sorrry...seriously kaan pakad ke sorry \-0-/ pata nahi kis duniya mein kar rhi thi mein pm uss time!
Maun vrat tod do :/

Originally posted by: SARA4444

👏fantastic update... 👏

loved it... jalal and jodha are almost back together now😃
poor jalal... so much he has to do for being a king 😭
jodha is going to amer... why/??
update soon 😃



Thanks Alot 😃
Almost 😉
Jodha decided to go to amer as she overheard about agra's situation...so that jalal could be safe.

Originally posted by: shikha-aggarwal

Lovely chapter
continue soon



Thankyou so much!



Thankyou! :) Keep visiting.

Originally posted by: dodoneha

fab update jalal nd jo r so close yet so far😛 excited 2 read d unfolding of deir new journey😃 pls update soon😉 nd thanks 4 d pm😳



You wrote it right! So close yet so far!
Thankyou so much neha :)

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: aisha...11110

woah!!! what an update dear...truly!!!! luved it

i really liked the way u describe all the things...it was appreciable😆
waiting deliberately for yr next update nd thnx for the pm🤗



Thankyou so very much for your kind words of appreciation 🤗

Originally posted by: hemakeerti

Surbhi darling... 🤗 kya likha tum ne.. super super super.. 👏
I loved loved loved your portrayal of their pain.. darling, now all set for Amer track hun.. so I'm go to see mischievous Jalal pacifying Jodha, huh 😆.. hayy.. I'm waiting for this.. love u and love u for this update.. will be loving u more for coming up naughty updates too ❤️



Thankyouuu di 🤗
Haaahaa you will see more of it sooner, trust me 😉😆
Aww itnaa pyaaar! Kaise manage karung mai? ☺️
Love you more :*

Originally posted by: rima4ever

wonderful update
thanks for the pm



Thankyouu :)
My pleasure!

Originally posted by: lourel24

loved it.Jodha ka andaj hi alag hain i liked it when jalal said "baghin".It was so cute.thanks for pm.



Glad you liked the portrayal! Thanks alot!


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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: dharshu

Aww!! Cute update!! Thanx fa d pm di!! Continue soon!!



Aww..Thankyou so much :)

Originally posted by: spvd

part 8
awesome dear...
nice...
so Jodha is going back to Ameer...
and Jalal to Agra...
cont soon dear...



Thankyou and here jodha and jalal both are going to amer together! She asked him to take her to amer, so in a way they both are going there.

Originally posted by: yurimehta11

very nice chapter
love it
love this understanding jodha
thanks for pm



Thankyou so much,glad to see the liking towards jodha's character here :)



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Posted: 11 years ago

Chapter: 9



A new path and starting of a new journey was awaiting both jalal and jodha. She was standing and staring at the moon soaking in its glow when a soldier came and announced "Mallika jaane ke saare intezaam ho gaye hai...aap tashreef laaye"

"Theek hai hum abhi aate hai" jodha replied with a heavy tone. She was confused about her state,what she wanted and what she landed in, phew...totally confusing! Gathering herself and with a deep breath she came out of the hut. A palki was placed few steps away at her feet, jalal was talking to his soldiers about the directions and was asking them to equip themselves with all the requirements as they were less likely to stop anywhere in between. "Aap sab tayyar ho jaye hum bas amer ke liye nikalne waale hai..." his eyes fell on jodha after he dispersed the army. Jodha looked at him from the corner of her eye...he stood there and kept on staring at her...he didn't even budge an inch from his place...jodha was casually stealing glances at him...she was walking towards her palki but her mind and heart were glued on him...as she desired to have a look at him again, she found him in the same situation, stuck in the same pose staring at her...she narrowed her brows but he was lost in her...it was appearing as a challenge to him now, he smiled and kept looking at her...jodha was now getting irritated, his continuous gaze on her was making her uncomfortable, he caught her expressions and understood that she is getting annoyed; he bowed his head slightly and coughed...jodha looked at him with a stern look and he smirked at her. She turned away in anger and he laughed a little and went to sit on his horse. The lady was standing and looking at the whole scenario with half of her face hidden under ghunghat...jodha saw her and stepped towards her, the lady got cautious and nervously joined hands in respect remembering their last encounter. Jodha came closer and too did pranaam "Pranaam" jodha elegantly said. "Pranaam Mallika" lady said feebly. "Hamara dhyaan rakhne ke liye aapka dhanyavaad, humei aapse uss tarah baat nhi karni chahiye thi, hum mallika zarur hai par kisi bhale dil ke vyakti ke saath aise bartaav karna..humei koi haq nahi hai..." jodha was about to say more but she stopped as the lady was not reacting, jodha smiled and handed a ring to her. The lady hesitantly took it and replied "Aapka bahut bahut dhanyavaad mallika...bhagwaan aap dono ka joda banaaye rakhe" she did pranaam to her. Jodha Yeh aashirwaad humei hamare vivaah par bhi praapt hua tha...uska kya parinaam nikla hum kaise bataaye inhe...kitni saaf dil ki hai yeh. She smiled at her and sat in the palki. Jalal and jodha with their soldiers started their journey towards amer.

10 pm


Moon was at its peak, the gleamy and shining night was ongoing. The voice of horses could be heard at that time, their every step was creating a certain beat TicToc along with the winds flowing in the atmosphere. For jodha and jalal this night was definitely not silent and gloomy, there were numerous instances when they exchanged looks and glances at each other...there were difference in the expressions but same emotions hidden in the heart. A Strange Excitement
Finally jalal spotted a dhaba, he signalled everyone to stop and said "Aap sab yaha thoda aaram farmaaye aur khaana khaale...kuch der baad hum wapas se safar chaalu karenge" Jalal and jodha got out of their respective horse and palki "Aayiye jodha begum" he said in a low tone with a smile hanging on his face. Jodha simply walked in the food place. They sat for the dinner, jalal ordered some vegetarian food. Jodha thought and smirked on him Inko aaj shaakahari khaane ki kya sujhi? Jalal "Hum hamesha ghosh nahi khaate jodha begum" he smiled and said looking into her eyes. Jodha surprised "Kya...humne kya kaha?"
Jalal "Nahi hume laga ki aapko aisa laga"
Jodha "Toh fir aapko jaanke dukh hoga ki humko kuch nahi laga" she said keeping a straight face.
Jalal "Par aapka har lafz hamare dil ko lag jaata hai jodha begum..." he responded and intensely gazed at her. Their food got served and so it broke their seconds of sweet and sour conversation.

12pm

Everybody took rest and now the journey was set to go forward...jalal and jodha had their food...while jodha was not in a mood to rest, she observed jalal throughout. After having food jalal went and talked to some soldiers about the situation of agra, tension was quite evident on his face. She also saw him rotating his neck which showed that he was indeed exerted. Humei pata hai hamare chakkar mein aapko aaj kitni mushkil ka saamna karna pad raha hai...jabse humne aapko dekha hai aapne ek pal ke liye bhi vishraam nahi kiya.

"Mallika palki tayyar hai" a soldier knocked her thoughts out of the place. Jodha nodded to him and stood up, she was walking all lost towards the palki when she felt her head spinning a bit, this sudden occurrence made her stop in her tracks. She blinked her eyes and touched her head...jalal was standing near to her... she didn't knew when her hands went on his shoulder for the support. He turned and saw her fainting...and her vision got blurred in few seconds. Last she saw jalal's worried expressions and his hand on her waist.

"Jodha begum aap theek toh hai?" jalal asked when jodha opened her eyes fully. She half sat on the wooden khaat and said "Jee shenshah hum theek hai" with a dull voice which made jalal not so sure about her health. "Jodha begum humei lagta hai aapko aaram ki zarurat hai...aap abhi bhi puri tarah se theek nahi hui hai" a concerned jalal replied. She stood up from the khaat and stubbornly replied "Nahi hum theek hai...chaliye" and she fumbled few steps. Jalal "Woh toh dikh raha hai humei ki aap kitni theek hai" and he shouted to his army "Aaj raat ka hamara rukne ka prabandh kiya jaaye!" and his army quickly started the preparations.
Within minutes kheme's were setup...jalal instructed few bandi's to take jodha to her khema. After settling themselves in their respective tent, jodha told the bandi's to go and rest.
Jodha "Aap sab jaiye aur vishram kariye humei agar koi bhi zarurat hogi to hum aapko bula lenge" she said it in one breath and they left the khema. Jodha saw them going out and soon they disappeared out of her sight. She let out a deep breath of relief and then got out of her bed...sleep was not coming to her as she had already rested alot. Slowly she peeped towards shenshah's tent...she could see no one outside, she was glad that finally he was taking rest.
One second! What if he is not? I should check, after all i cannot let my planning go in vain! She smirked to this thought of hers and made her way to his khema. She saw there were no soldiers outside, which was quite weird for her to imagine so she went inside...there was no jalal.
Jodha was searching inside but within seconds she got confirmed about his absence
"Shenshah kaha jaa sakte hai itni raatri ko? Unhe zara bhi fikar nahi hai kya khudki, aise bina bataaye kahin bhi chale gaye"
Her heart was sinking while thinking about the consequences jalal could be in...he was the shenshah-e-hind and problems and dangers are supposed to be the part and parcel of his life! But jodha was not ready to think any bad happening to him. "Hum jaayenge unhe dhundne..." and she turned to go but
Bump!!
"Aah" she squealed as she ran into someone! Jodha caressesed her head after being hit..and her eyes grew big when she saw it was jalal.
Jalal was watching jodha with a confused expression on his face...
What is she doing here??
Jodha "Aaap!! Kya samajhte hai aap khudko? Maana ki aap shenshah hai...par bhagwan nahi hai aap! Ishwar nahi hai jo aapko kuch hoga nahi" she shouted on him.
Jalal was not expecting this, he was just trying to guess what made her go mad.
"Jodha begum kya hua aapko? Aap aise yahan" and jalal looked at him with narrowed brows and his tone normal but curious.
Jodha "Hum toh yahan..." and she stopped while speaking as she realized her mistake.
Jalal "Aap yahan humei dhundne ayi thi?" he advanced his head towards her to observe her expressions closely.
Jodha "Hum..hum thodi na aapko dhundne aaye the...humei aur bhi kaam hai aapko dhundne ke alawa!" she retorted back trying to act normal.
Jalal "Acha...jaise?" and he took a step towards her.
Jodha took a step back and said "Jaise ki apne kaksh mein jaake vishraan karna!" and she rushed out of his khema.
"Are!" before jalal could say anything jodha was out of his sight. He laughed heartily on her cute antic and then went to bed...he was so exhausted that sleep took over him within seconds after laying down.
Here jodha was angrily pacing to and fro in her khema..."Ho kya gaya tha humei...kya kuch nikal gaya hamare muh se...upar se ve itne dusht hai..." she went and sat on the bed, she was showing all signs of a woman who gets caught after pretending that she doesn't care for her man, though she does! Jodha was no different...since her marriage it was a tough task for her to adjust herself in the mughal empire, the culture the food the people everything was new to her but inspite of facing many hardships she fulfilled her duties as a wife. Misunderstandings galored them at times but somehow she started trusting him. jodha let jalal become her shield, she was developing some new feelings in her heart for him when this unfortunate event took place. However she realized that it was even her fault to not disclose the truth before but whatever it was it did made her heart scared of any trusts and bonds. She won't be able to handle another heartbreak!
After giving her head so much of pains she decides to finally sleep.

Morning

Jodha and jalal both got ready to leave the place on time. Jodha saw jalal and whispered to herself "Vishraam karne ke baad shenshah kitne durust dikh rahe hai...hum khush hai humne sahi faisla liya yaha rukne ka" jalal saw her smiling and looking at him...he was literally shocked to see her expressions...he curiously looked at her and started walking towards her...jodha didn't realize when she was smiling at him, she had no control over her heart, a certain free flow of emotions was taking place where all the things doesn't even matter infront of her admiring him. She had no clue when he was standing close to her, his striking gaze piercing right through her eyes. They both were standing lost in each other, jodha's calm expressions and jalal's intense staring was melting the ice in her heart.
"Huzoor saari tayyari ho chuki hai" a soldier unknowingly intervened in their romance.
Jalal and jodha quickly came out of the trance and looked at the source.
Jalal "Theek hai" and indicated him to go. Jodha was embarassed of her own behaviour How could she let her guards drop? She shyly went away and sat in the palki.

Night

Tilak was done and jalal entered the amer palace with jodha grandly...mainavati and raja bharmal warmly greeted the shenshah.
"Aap dono ke aane ki humei jaise hi soochna mili hum sabko bahut khushi hui, kintu aap log toh savere pahuchne waale the" jodha interrupted "Ji bapusa woh zara shenshah thak gaye the isliye hum vishram karne ke liye ruk gaye" she said eyeing jalal. He saw her with a smirk Bhaaghin nahi ye toh chaalak lomdi hai! "Haan raja sahab...jodha begum sahi keh rahi hai...bahut khayal rakhti hai ye hamara.." he passed a smile towards him and then looked at jodha...she was fuming...he delivered her through his expressions Hum aapko jeetne nahi denge iss khel mein while jodha just faked a smile Dusht!


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I hope you all liked it. Hit likes and comment 😊
Thankyou again everyone for your love and support 🤗

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Posted: 11 years ago

Surbhii.. How I wish JA serial was directed this way.. It would have been a feast watching Rajat and Pari enacting these scenes.. Your Jodha and Jalal are diginified and truly Royal, no less than the other.. I loved each and every altercation of them in this chapter darling.. I was all smiling, blushing reading the chapter.. please give a long update next time darling with more and more sweet romantic scenes 🤗

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Posted: 11 years ago
Awweee ... kitna cute sa update tha ye surbhi 🤗 ... just loved jodha & her cute antics of fake fainting 😉 ... she does care for jalal ... but is adamant in acknowledging her feeling towards him ... I hope jaldi se jaldi inn dono ko pyaar ho jaaye ek doosre se 😃 ... n thank u so much for the PM sweetheart 🤗 ... next update jaldi de do ... I am loving their nok jhok 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago

Chapter: 9

Vow beautiful... I love that both are feeling same... they are stealing glance... and hiding their feelings... I loved the part when Jodha apologies to the lady and give her ring... that shows her royal gesture and culture... Her pure divine heart... I loved how Jalal could hear her unsaid words... and he replied ... "Hum hamesha ghosh nahi khaate jodha begum" that is calling heart connection... superb! Jodha does care about him a lot but still she is not ready to forgive him... her feelings are so visibal... so cute she pretend to faint so Jalal could get rest...and best part she got caught by Jalal... and her antic drama... and Jalal laugh ... I loved it... She is seriously falling for him hard... aww so cute I love the morning part... Jodha don't have control over mind at all... she is smiling at him and gazing at him... so romantic... Why that solider disturb my cutie pie couple... heheh Bhaaghin nahi ye toh chaalak lomdi... I love their nok jok... Can't wait for more... UR writing is so mesmerizing... Never feels enough... Loved it so much... Continue soon... AS USUAL SORRY FOR LATE COMMENT

Edited by shahbhavini - 10 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
bhaavviii update de 😡
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Amazing update
continue soon😊

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