AvNeil SS : The Perfect Stranger , Epilogue 2 updated (10/5) pg 78

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Nivedita

@Nivedita_SS

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#411

This thing I say every time, but then every time it feels new, you're an amazing writer who has the potential to reach greater heights. Very few are found with such versatility, managing a job which requires lots of attention yet taking out time to pursue your interest, kudos to you Tapasi.

The chapter was simply outstanding, loved it to bits and pieces. Every single dialogue, especially Neela's and Ali's, have touched my heart.

Neela, how much I can go on about this woman who changed the definition of a step-mother in the show. You're showing her exactly the same way, sharp, intellectual, at the same time radiating so much of hope, positive attitude and trust towards a 'stranger friend-lover' of her daughter. She is seriously mother goals.

Richa is another beautiful character introduced by you, she is so understanding. Unlike other women who crib about their broken relationships, she had a positive approach towards it. With dignity, she backed out of a relationship, which in longer course of time would suffocate both of them. Now that she knows Neil is in love with Avni, hope she doesn't misunderstand her best friend.

Ali, I love him yaar. If Neil is lover-husband goals, Ali is the best friend-brother goals. How well he explained Avni about not to run away from her problems and inner demons, it felt as though he was less of best friend and more of brother to her. Got so much of brotherly vibes from him during that Avni-Ali conversation.

Neil is in immense pain, staying apart from his new-found love. Totally devastated and heart broken, he is.

Avni has again run away, but then this time this separation will lead to her battling of her demons and emerging victorious. It's not about not trusting him, it's about not trusting herself, believing she is capable of loving somebody and being loved back. The scars her father has given are not something which can be healed quickly, but then it is left upon her whether she wants them to be healed or not. She needs to battle out those insecurities of hers before accepting her love for him and his feelings for her.

Next chapter, please! I am so demanding at times.

Love,

Nivi

Edited by Aphrodite_NV - 7 years ago

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Nidhii

@Nidhii.3007

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#412

And me the second one yippee.🥳

Dekha maine kitna sahi naam diya avni ko marathon runner. Jab Dekho tab bhaagti hi rehti hai show me bhi or is story me bhi.😆

Bichara Neil har jagah use akele hi rehna padta hai due to his miss ajooba. I completely sympathize with him. And don't even have little bit of sympathy for this certain miss ajooba. Aur kitna rulayegi yaar apne blue Munda ko bas bhi kar.😡

Missing Neela maa all the more after last two updates😭. She was surely an avneil shipper and their story is incomplete without her. Wo kehte hai spice ke bina dinner adhoora reh jata hai she is that spice in their life.

Ab aage kya hoga yaar yaha par Neil dost se kuch jyada banna chahta tha or waha avni ne use friendship se bhi deprived kar diya. Feeling bad.

And what to say about ur writing. U do complete judgement with the emotions. I can feel the connection reading the posts.

U are an awesome writer tapasi. I can tell u that.

With lots of love

Nidhi.

Edited by sweetunidhi.445 - 7 years ago

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#413

Originally posted by: rilsaf
I knew it. I expected him to follow her. And he did that. Kya baat hai Saf😃.Tum toh Neil ko bade ache se jaanti ho😳
I didn't knew u update. Sry for late comment.No problem dear.
Totally loved the update. Its awesome.
Iam missing neela ma so much after reading this.😭 I miss her a lot too.I could imagine her throughout this chapter.
Poor girl, Iam feeling very bad for her.
And iam glad she shared everything with him. She literally confessed she's falling for him. She cant betray her friend. She's right in her place.Yes she realises she has a soft corner for Neil.But her loyalty to her frnd is equally important to her.
She faced so many problem and trauma bcoz of ashish.
She cant accept love so soon. I know he will help her to fall in love. Yes its the past trauma dts preventing her from from accepting his love.
And iam waiting for that. I felt very bad when she said, she dont to be a third wheel in her frnd life. Poor soul💔 Anyone in her position would feel this way.Nobody wants to be the one who has to hide relationships.
Neil khanna and his way to request. And its worked. Avni vaapas aarahi hai. Neil ka charm hi kuch aisa hai.😉
Hope richa ko ali se pyaar hogaya ho. Ali is a good guy. He will keep her happy. But neil cant give her any happiness.
Eagerly waiting for next update. Continue soon.

Hey Saf,

Thank you so much for ur kind words and love for d story.

Sorry for replying late.

Much love

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darsh333

@darsh333

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#414

1st lemme begin with a huge sorry :| and you know what for :(

Was reading through the chapter 12 and there you have updated the next update too!😲

Between i was finding a difficult time finding the previous updates..and i should be blamed for it coz i didnt read it on time🥱

Now woah tapasi!!your writing skills are getting sooo good as each update goes by!!Im loving how you are describing the emotions well!keep going girl👏

The rain splash and drenching was quite unexpected to me😆i didnt expect avni to become a child so soon😃

Neil staring..mmm😉this guy is leaving no chance to be with her..to look at her😉even the writer isn't leaving any such chances😆

There are lots of falls these days😳avni falling into neil's arms😳

So between all this ali-richa story is also budding!im glad you gave a parallel storyline from them too!😊

Next update,chapter 11 has a bigger fall!to be precise 2!😃i loved it!when you described his wet shirt sticking on to her bare waist..uff☺️

You have beautifully explained those falls in details and that managed to bring a smile on my face😊

Shweta already understood he felt something for somebody else when he ran away..wow!i though shweta would make a fuss!

The title runaway girl was least expected tapasi😆😆

So Neelama is avni's real mother here!!!!😊i loved it!i thought i'l get to see ayesha ma in the later updates!

Ashish has passed away and the broken family has taken a huge toll on her..poor avni..it'l take time for neil to bring her out of it

Neil's threatening is increasing as each updates go by!he is gonna threaten her to marry her in future too??😆

So avni doesnt want to be friends with them..aargh i didnt see that coming🥱

I liked how neelama supported and blessed neil😊

The next update is also here!so neil has confessed that he is in love with avni to khannas!!!!😃😃😃

How good are khannas😃they werent even shocked😆

So richa knew neil was gonna call off their marriage and avni sensed it😕

The title runaway girl suited this update more😕she leaving to an unknown place without saying a word to anyone was a shock!

I didnt want her to runaway this way..poor neil

I liked how riya handled it.She didnt make a big issue out of it😊

Neil is all heartbroken!🥺poor guy just realised his love and she is gone

How will neil find where she is??🥱will they ever meet??🥱how are you gonna make them meet??🥱make them atleast meet..confessions and falling in love can happen later..i dont want them to be separated

All the updates were great as usual and each update is getting more and moreee better😊

I hope this long comment has made you happy and sorry again for not reading it on time😕

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blablabla_mo7

@blablabla_mo7

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#415

Bhaag avni bhaag... no mater how far Neil will definitely find you but how soon.. that's the question here. Didn't expect this will happen. I kind predicted that she will return and Neil will call off the weeding, her sudden departure was unexpected.. I like surprises! You have captured that well. I was thinking she'ld have waited for Richard but it's avni, who hates making anyone sad. Neela, Bebe, Prakash and shwetha are total family goals!!! Do these kind of ppl really exists? So understanding and supporting.

now how will he find her, curiosity is killing me. Let's wait and watch..

Thank you for another speedy, surprising and emotionally awesome update..

PS it's 2am in my country.. woke up to go the washroom and now I'm commenting here. Hahahaha..

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HighOnSarcasm

@HighOnSarcasm

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#416

I'm heartbroken...will come back later with more...right now I just can't...

That was def my first reaction after reading the ch. I couldn't understand why Avni would run after finding out that Neil was breaking his engagement to Richa.

But then as I thought about it I realized that Avni is running scared because suddenly Neil has changed the rules of the game!

She had thought that by cutting off Neil from her life, she wouldn't have to face her burgeoning feelings for him, nor will she have to overcome her defensive wall against love & marriage...

That's also why she didn't tell even Neela where she is coz she knows whose corner her maa is & she bound Ali, another Neilz surprising ally, with a promise!

Neil was supposed to remain in a box on which she could look upon sometime in the future to reminisce upon...but he defied her expectations & started on clearing the path towards their love & future, leaving Avni with no option but to run!

But she doesn't know it yet, she won't be able to run very far away from Neil or hide from either him or her feelings.

The moment our boyo comes out of his self-pity...he'll find her...he did it once...he can obv do it again!!!

Spl mention to the Khanna family who understood Neilz unspoken feelings & accepted them whole-heartedly!

Can't wait for the game of hide & seek to commence!

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#417

Originally posted by: sweetunidhi.445
And me the second one yippee.🥳competition nai hai😆
Dekha maine kitna sahi naam diya avni ko marathon runner. Jab Dekho tab bhaagti hi rehti hai show me bhi or is story me bhi.😆 maine bhi naam diya hai na the runaway girl.
Bichara Neil har jagah use akele hi rehna padta hai due to his miss ajooba. I completely sympathize with him. And don't even have little bit of sympathy for this certain miss ajooba. Aur kitna rulayegi yaar apne blue Munda ko bas bhi kar.😡 Yes the guy is completely heartbroken.He did everything for her and before he could confess his feelings she ran away.
Missing Neela maa all the more after last two updates😭. She was surely an avneil shipper and their story is incomplete without her. Wo kehte hai spice ke bina dinner adhoora reh jata hai she is that spice in their life. Yeah dt she was.I miss her talks, her laughter and her love for AvNeil.
Ab aage kya hoga yaar yaha par Neil dost se kuch jyada banna chahta tha or waha avni ne use friendship se bhi deprived kar diya. Feeling bad. Just have some faith in the story...dts all I can say.
And what to say about ur writing. U do complete judgement with the emotions. I can feel the connection reading the posts.
U are an awesome writer tapasi. I can tell u that. Thank you so much dear.This really touched my heart.Love you so saying dis.
With lots of love
Nidhi.

Thank you so much Nidhi.

Love your constant love and support for this story .Your excitement keeps me motivated.

Much love

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#418

Originally posted by: darsh333
1st lemme begin with a huge sorry :| and you know what for :( Its okay dear.No problem.

Was reading through the chapter 12 and there you have updated the next update too!😲 I'm very pretty fast na😆

Between i was finding a difficult time finding the previous updates..and i should be blamed for it coz i didnt read it on time🥱
I should hv made clickable links but den I don't knw how .Sorry fr d inconvenience.
Now woah tapasi!!your writing skills are getting sooo good as each update goes by!!Im loving how you are describing the emotions well!keep going girl👏 Thank you dear.I'm trying my best. Its d appreciation frm you all dt makes me keep going.So a heartfelt thnx.

The rain splash and drenching was quite unexpected to me😆i didnt expect avni to become a child so soon😃 Great!! I like it when I can surprise my readers.Neil always brings out d child in Avni.Thats d beauty of their relationship.

Neil staring..mmm😉this guy is leaving no chance to be with her..to look at her😉even the writer isn't leaving any such chances😆 R u blaming Neil or Me?😆.Please blame him😳.Their chemistry makes me write these😳

There are lots of falls these days😳avni falling into neil's arms😳
Yes these falls lead to the ultimate fall... falling in love😳
So between all this ali-richa story is also budding!im glad you gave a parallel storyline from them too!😊 I'll just say its the beginning of a parallel story.

Next update,chapter 11 has a bigger fall!to be precise 2!😃i loved it!when you described his wet shirt sticking on to her bare waist..uff☺️ Dts very specific😳 keen observations😳.Gud to know you liked dt so much dt u sent a blushing smiley.That what I wanted...a lil blush😆

You have beautifully explained those falls in details and that managed to bring a smile on my face😊 bas smile??😳 Sure? Kidding 😆.Glad to be the reason of ur smile.

Shweta already understood he felt something for somebody else when he ran away..wow!i though shweta would make a fuss!
Shweta is a mom above everything.She has motherly instincts too.Dts y she understood Neil just by seeing him.

The title runaway girl was least expected tapasi😆😆 Inspired from the movie 'The runaway bride'

So Neelama is avni's real mother here!!!!😊i loved it!i thought i'l get to see ayesha ma in the later updates! Thnx. I didn't knw how you guys will take dt.I love Neela Ma.Never connected wid Ayesha.So since I hd d chance I used it.

Ashish has passed away and the broken family has taken a huge toll on her..poor avni..it'l take time for neil to bring her out of it Yes seeing your parents fight everyday takes a toll on you.She has been badly affected by it.Now its upto Neil to bring her out of dis with his love and support.

Neil's threatening is increasing as each updates go by!he is gonna threaten her to marry her in future too??😆
Who knows?😆 He might😆
So avni doesnt want to be friends with them..aargh i didnt see that coming🥱 It would be difficult for her to be frnds wid him after everything that happened and after she realised she too has feelings fr him.

I liked how neelama supported and blessed neil😊 Neela Ma is the best😃

The next update is also here!so neil has confessed that he is in love with avni to khannas!!!!😃😃😃 He had to do that.Avni won't ever agree to him otherwise.And Khannas had already seen Neil in his distraught state...so they kind of knew.

How good are khannas😃they werent even shocked😆

So richa knew neil was gonna call off their marriage and avni sensed it😕 Richa already had got d hint in d party.And Avni was just scared Neil might do that only.

The title runaway girl suited this update more😕she leaving to an unknown place without saying a word to anyone was a shock! Dono chapters ka same title nai de sakti na..Knowing how Avni is...she can't let her frnd be heartbroken even if it meant breaking her own heart.

I didnt want her to runaway this way..poor neil

I liked how riya handled it.She didnt make a big issue out of it😊
Richa is a understanding and sensible girl.Thats my take on third angles.I alwys say people dnt alwys hv to be negative.
Neil is all heartbroken!🥺poor guy just realised his love and she is gone
Yes it was tough for Neil.He is heartbroken no doubt abt it.He did everything for Avni and she ran away before he could even say anything. Hope his heart gets mended soon.
How will neil find where she is??🥱will they ever meet??🥱how are you gonna make them meet??🥱make them atleast meet..confessions and falling in love can happen later..i dont want them to be separated So many questions😆.I like it.You will get all ur answers tomorrow.Hope you like them😳

All the updates were great as usual and each update is getting more and moreee better😊

I hope this long comment has made you happy and sorry again for not reading it on time😕

Hey Darshana

Thank you for such a longgg review.But it had to be long... since you read 4 or 5 chapters together...you owe me that😆

Yes I forgive you and I'm happy wid d compensation.

Thanx for being a constant source of support.Your review was awesome.Thnx for showering me wid love and praises.

If it wasn't for you...probably I would hv never written dis.So a big thank you to 🤗

Much love.

PS : sorry for d previous reply.Was in a low mood.

Edited by drbeth - 7 years ago

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#419

Originally posted by: blablabla_mo7
Bhaag avni bhaag... no mater how far Neil will definitely find you but how soon.. that's the question here. Didn't expect this will happen. I kind predicted that she will return and Neil will call off the weeding, her sudden departure was unexpected.. I like surprises! You have captured that well. I was thinking she'ld have waited for Richard but it's avni, who hates making anyone sad. Neela, Bebe, Prakash and shwetha are total family goals!!! Do these kind of ppl really exists? So understanding and supporting. Avni the runner😆.You know you are absolutely ryt.The question isn't Will he find her...its when and how? Glad you liked surprise😆.
Neela, Bebe, Prakash and Shweta...I'll say yes good people do exist.These 4 may not exactly exist but then dts the point of writing a story...you can make others believe that these people exist.

now how will he find her, curiosity is killing me. Let's wait and watch..
Won't keep you waiting for long😳
Thank you for another speedy, surprising and emotionally awesome update..

PS it's 2am in my country.. woke up to go the washroom and now I'm commenting here. Hahahaha..

Hey Monz

First of all its really sweet of you to read and den comment at 2am in d morning.Thanx a lot for for appreciating d story and making me smile by dis swt gesture.

Much love