AvNeil SS : The Perfect Stranger , Epilogue 2 updated (10/5) pg 78

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Aditi

@-AditiS

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#461

*New reader*

I read all the parts in one go. So putting in one comment altogether..

I loved the story you are portrayig here- story of AvNeil who are different yet so similar to their onscreen avatars.

Avni is independent, strong, hurt, dry n practical though not as broken as NK

Neil is charming n gentleman as the original, but with less complicated life.

With no OTT twists, all you have at your disposal to engage the readers, are your words n i must say, you are very good with it.

Your writing is like a smooth flow of thoughts, the way to describe the setting, their state of minds, conflicts 👏 it binds us to the story.

I will definitely come back to see how Neil (or Avni?) complete that adhura khat... ❤️

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Wingsoflove_2

@Wingsoflove_2

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#462

Kaan pakkad ke maafi. Late hogai.😒

Chapter13

Awesome chapter.👏

Neela ma is mother goal. She can understand everything in a second.

She realised Neil love her daughter so much. She trust him. And Neil will try his best to not to hurt her trust.

Iam loving this.

But tum writer log milke mera saath emotional attayachar karrahi ho. Neela ma ki yaadein bohath aajati hai.😭 thank god, atleast she's here.😭

Yeh ladki phirse bhaagai. I knew it. She can't see her best friend pain.

Khanna's oh god. Itni achi family duniya mein hai kya?

Bina koi drama they accepted Neil's love.

I did felt little bad for Richa. But iam happy Neil didn't betray her. He shared everything.

And somewhere Richa also know about his feelings. Iam glad usse jaldi Ali miljaye.awesone chapter tapsi.

Last scene broke my heart. I felt very bad for Neil. Hope avni jaldi samajle.

Chapter 14

Awesome chapter tapsi.

Full and full avni monologue.

Oh my poor girl. Now she will understand everything.

She can't go. She's trying her best to not get affect. But SaB ulta hore.

We can't blame her. Neil Khanna ki jaadu kabhi fail nahi Hoti.

Yes, Banda ne pakadke usse.phirse.

Wow, I love that letter. Superb.

Ab kya hoga? Eagerly waiting for next update. Tapsi ek doubt hai?

Kya tum iss FF Ko finish karne vaali ho. Agar yese hai toh pls shaadi Karthi toda married avneil dika doh. I want to see married avneil in Ur writing. It's a request.😊

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Zara_Imam

@Zara_Imam

Inactive

Posted: 7 years ago

#463

Finally caught up with the story... yay!

#11

If I thought that previous chapter was hot, this was blazing... u made me blush yaar☺️

I just felt a deep connection wid that scene... I could understand Avni's inner turmoils.

Prakash uncle is so caring... He didn't even knew her but the genuine concern he had for her made me emotional

Ali, this guy has my heart. He understands Avni so much! I love this duo

My heart goes out for Richa. Neil, this guy is giving me reasons to love him more after every chapter

#12

Neelamaa is such a beautiful person. I'm so glad you portrayed her as Avniz real mom. Their past is heartbreaking

Neilz dhamki that he'll come to her house if she doesn't meet him was rather cute😆

I'm happy that Avni told Neil about her past... It gave Neil a little knowledge of her fears

Finally he manofyed her to come to Mumbai... yay! Three cheers for him! 😆

#13

Loved Neelamaaz monologue, she is so cute! Neil will make everything, we trust him

Khanna family is ❤️ they are too good to be real!

Richa had already anticipated that Neil will break up wid her. I'm glad Neil decided to clear out his feelings once and for all.

Ali n Avni are friendship goals. Somewhere he also knows Avni likes Neil but is afraid to accept that

I was frustrated that Avni ran away but the girl didn't really want to be the third wheel... she didn't want this alliance to break bcoz of her. I really hope Neil will help her overcome these fears

#14

This was short n sweet😳

Loved Avniz monologue, it was much needed

She expects Neil to come n propose her still she has a doubt about why will he come... my Avni!

Awwie, can I just pull ur cheeks? That whole confetti n letter thing was so creative and expressive... that letter expressed Neilz emotions brilliantly. It compelled me to fall for ur writing again!

Neil found her, yay!

Omg what a cliffie! 😆 ab to I'm very impatient

Next one soon please😃

PS: why r u afraid of me? Just because I tell about beating Neil sometimes😆 don't worry I'm a very gentlewoman, mein ladkiyon pe haath nahi uthati😳

Yay, finally our ship is sailing🥳 lemme do DameTuCoSita😆

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snigdha1712

@snigdha1712

Explorer

Posted: 7 years ago

#464

A small smile creeps on my lips whenever I see that You have updated your story!!

This is an another awesome update!! Another Cliffhanger!!

Waiting for your next update!! :)

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#465

Originally posted by: srain10
Ch 12 and 13 were fabulous... Thank you.
Emotions of avni and neil were perfectly written and dare you call yourself average writer...Happy to knw I was able to potray it well.'perfect' is my fav word😃. Dhamki😆...aww so cute.
Avni running from love is understood coming from broken family and seeing her father blame her mother for everything where he was equally responsible for his act...Yes a broken family breaks you frm within.Exactly two people are responsible fr a decision like marriage.
Loved neela is avni's mother ... Yay😊
Neil ne avni ko wapas aane ke liye maana hi liye...koi shaq tha usmein😉
I love khaana family...they accepted neil's decision without any drama including shweta...My happy story😆
Avni poor girl phir bhaag gayi... Please someone tell her running away from problems is not a solution face them...She needs to learn that on her own...dt you can't always run frm yourself.
Richa's character is beautifully written...she understood she and neil are not meant to be...she was happy for her friend...full of postivity and sulji hui ladki... People should be this only.When you know there is nothing for you in a relationship, den there shouldn't be any fear of letting it go.

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#466

Originally posted by: blablabla_mo7
I was dumbstruck cause of the abrupt TBC note.. that's such a cliffhanger.. she couldn't see him and there came his letter so he has found her but being invincible and probably watching her from somewhere.. there's lots to be told between the two and sort things to start of a new journey..
TBC note😆.That's the effect that I wanted.Dnt knw how it comes off in writing...but it did look good when I had imagined it.

It was short but I connect to Avni totally. Brilliant writing. Thank you for the update. This part was just for Avni...to showcase her inner turmoil.Glad you could connect wid her.

I hope next is longer

Hey Monz

Thank you so much for liking this update and appreciating my writing.

Yep d next one is longer.

Will update in a day or two.

Much love.