Originally posted by: Amayrasharma18
Came here to comment upon the 8th chapter but got to see a new update 😆
Will now read it and would comment on both the updates simultaneously !
*Now going to read this *
Till then
Reserved !
Unreserved !
Heya..Tapasi 🤗 The updates were amazing ! I m falling harder and harder for these two cuties and ur story day by day ! 😆
The car scene in the beginning of the last update was described so effectively with the impactful words and writing ! Could literally feel the tension filled atmosphere among the two ! The music was a perfect idea and the choice of the song only added its impact to their situation ! ( Aahatein song by Armaan Malik is one of my favourites but which was the second one? Never heard before !) Thank you .I'm glad I was able to correctly convey their emotions through my words.The 2nd song is from the upcoming movie 'October' starring Varun Dhawan.
Poor guy couldn't resist himself but bad timing...she woke up and it only added to the persisting tension between the two ! Both of their turmoils were narrated perfectly by you ! That whole scene where she marches towards her apartment without looking back was so intense - with both of their emotions being conveyed to the readers along with those lyrics (perfectly suited the situation) was the highlight for me ! I m alwayz a sucker of intense scenes and u r amazing at writing them ! I could imagine Zain and Aditi nailing it 😆 Intense is the word I was looking for😳.Finally somebody said something about the lyrics!!! I always felt this song would suit AvNeil.So as the situation in d story permitted I incorporated it here.Feels so good to know someone other than me felt d same way.
Finally ...we got a sneak peak into Avni's unsettling feelings..!! Again the emotions and inner turmoil were effectively described... it was another highlight for me ! It was very much realistic ! Could relate to her very much ! She knows he is someone's fiancee and so all the resistance arises from there ! On the other hand Neil is so intrigued to unravel her mysterious aura ! Complications are what keeping them refrain from their realization and accepting their feelings ! Hope this engagement party gives them that push to realise what their heart wants ! I wanted to portray the varying emotions that both were going through.They are two different personalities in two very different situations.I tried my best to explain that.Read d next one to know.I hope u r nt disappointed.
Neil formulating a plan to meet her and going all filmy to convince her was so amusing ! 😆 He looked so handsome as u narrated his appearance outside the hospital 👏 He he... you just hv to imagine Zain...rest everything is easily.done.
The scene at the garment store was also lovely ! The conversation was cute and he is sometimes so reflex in replies 😛 Yet here this point is a must say - U wrote that intimate scene so graciously ! Nothing appeared OTT ! The effect of their physical proximity on each other was defined gracefully ! Also the couple's remark was on point ! But Poor Neil - this made Avni even more resistent and she took a cab back home ! I like the fact that although the Resistance and Tension persists between them but they gel along once they get to each other ! All the awkwardness seems to be gone at that very moment ! Even in the start when they were mere strangers they were very much comfortable in one another's company ! Their this 'Strange bond ' with a not-so-stranger other is the key element of this story for me ! 👏 Oh I'm so happy to know you liked the whole scene.You have so rightly pointed this out.However awkward they might get, the next very moment they are together everything seems to hv been forgotten.Thats how comfortable they are with each other.
I really don't know what it is with me that i always look up to a short and effective comment instead of a long and boring one but end up writing such long theories ! Please bear with me i would wrap up the next update in a few words
🥱 No problm.I love reading your review.Gives me utter satisfaction.
The second update was very much needed for progressing the story ! It answered many questions regarding Richa and Neil's bonding ( which i was waiting for quite sometime ) Richa's perception towards Ali ( another ship at the shore 😆 ) ! This is to be mentioned - Neil's cuteness is on another level ! From sending a formal message to sending her sneakily clicked pics this and personally inviting her to the party with a smiley - Can he get any more cuter than this ! 👏 He doesn't remain in touch with her fiancee but keeps contacting his would be's friend 😛 Again Nostalgia engulfs me - reminds me of his fiancee Riya and her complaints 😆 Looking forward to the party ! Hoping it to be a Surpise for both Neil and us as well rather than a shock
😆 Do update soonish :) This was very much needed to move the story forward.Neil just keeps getting cuter and cuter😆.Nostalgia 😆.Ok Riya was also treated this way by Neil...ryt😆
P.S Don't kill me for writing this history ..i didn't realise while writing but now as i scroll up the screen ...i myself is finding this horrible to read ! 😆 Plz Do bear with me !
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