A story: Dusk and Dawn(p12,13,14 updt) - Page 7

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Posted: 14 years ago
#61
Hey Nisha, comment vas tu ?
Sorry for the delay... i read all the updates already but i had no time to reply.
Anyway the story is nice so far,very well written, and as i would say in French " c'est du beton". I always try to guess what will happen or what happened why ...but there ..???... so i guess i have to wait for you to unfold the mystery .
The characters what i can say about them...
* Nandini is a sweetheart, a very good friend
*Yudishnee ...hmm can't understand her and i don't think she can understands herself either
*Arohi seems to be a lovely, a good person thats why i think she probably has a very good reason for what she did because I'm sure that she loves her daughter
*Arjun...??. waiting for more.
Hey, hey !!! ...And what a surprise !!! you're a poet and a very good one ( sorry i mean arohi) lol...i love that..
Looking forward to read more...TC
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Posted: 14 years ago
#62
update the next part soon nisha:)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#63
Yes guys, this weekend, i will try to have a time for the update.
Arjun's character will come much later.

@andrea 'merci' je m'amuses bien avec celle la😊
a propos du caractere de Yudishni, elle est dechiree et tu as raison, elle ne comprends pas elle meme, peut etre, elle voulait tellement un raison pourquoi sa mere lui a jette dehors de chez elle. c'est penible. Meme Yudishnee ne peut pas comprendre ce parti la et c'est ici que sa mere n'aime pas qu'elles parlent mal d'Arohi.

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True, Yudishni has not yet understood herself because she is so torn due to the dark circumstances she has been in. Perhaps she is looking for a reason for that wound her mother gave her, why did Arohi kicked her out. It is the same time,I tried to leave it heard that even Yudishni despises Mrs Arohi and whenever she will say something wrong to Mrs Arohi infront of her mother,Mrs Diya, that's when as an adult,Mrs Diya said to her that she can not judge Arohi without knowing her, she is sure that Arohi is torn too. When she has moved on in life, she has a regret of not cherishing motherhood.

However thats why i decided to write in poems for Arohi's part, Poem is normally for me to express something intense briefly, saying something with deep meaning but left the reader to understand it the way she wants to.

Soon on the 2 updates in this weekend for you guys.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#64
sry sry sry...m sooo late was in short of time...jst read d parts dat i missed...must say amazing...ur os always bears some unique char...never thought some1 can express a story sooo amazingly even in a poem...next1 plzzz...i m hooked n cant wait now...
thnx 4d pms...tc :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#65
so busy with my studies guys :) but i am writing the updates in the evening, sure.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Chapter 5: Something strong and painful in these words

The two girls had their dinner quite different as they used to have. Weird perhaps were the right way to describe their feelings while going down with the pages of the diary. It was like so many questions running in their mind, and yet they know they have tonight only to explore most of the pages. Fingers crossed from Nandita that the pages will heal the wound of Yudishni and stopped the wedding that in her viewpoint is impulsive.

Little did the girls know that the pages that they were going to read were the decadence of Arohi?

Knowing thyself

Soon a year and a half when I was doing the course

Many things change, either with my will or by the nature force.

My passion for psychology continued as a quest for more.

Hungry I was to explore.

Human minds, human reactions, human occult all were as a draw.

Sketches in my mind, depth in my heart, was it the bell for a crawl,

Actions I took were on my viewpoint to braw

Love blow.

He was busy and I understood but perhaps I was impulsive

I thought I was mature

As I let go this relationship as decisive

As ever, I did not think to inform him on our rupture.

I felt at that time it was a cure

Of getting him to where he wants himself to picture.

I was sure.

I felt it was right for our future.

Or perhaps I was so much in the understanding of the human behaviour

That I never realised I was in my own failure.

Did I least think of asking for the Grace of the Omnipresent?

Knowing thyself was radiant and brilliant

Yet I have to admit of going in a decadence

I need help!

Sorry!

Arjun,I will explain to you in you are coming for summer holidays!

We are no longer teenagers.

Grown up adults!

Life is waiting for us in different path.

Amen

The girls were numb when they read this page. What is she talking about? There is something missing, she has torn few pages before this poem. What is going wrong in her? She was happy and suddenly she felt to be so unsure. What is she hiding? She decides for herself whatever she wants. Damned, Yudishni you are not the only one who behaves like this. Nandita has speechless. She does not want to say a word. Will her mother know what Aunty Arohi is talking about? How will she ask her tonight when her mother also does not know about the reason she is at Yudishni's place?

This diary is definitely a gift from the Lord for Yudishni not to jump into actions like her mother did.

She was sweet and suddenly tearful. Kahin to Arohi had the same fate that she gave her daughter?

So many questions in Nandita's mind, she wants a break. Perhaps it is better for Yudishni to read it by herself. Then if she reads it by herself and still not decide her course of action, that will be worst. Nandita does not like to impose herself on someone else but she loves the person to know the consequences before the latter jumped into it. Still for Yudishni, she does not want her to even jump to it.

Does she need to talk to Sarvesh? Does she need to look for Abhinav, yet she does not want to bring Abhinav in the friendship she shares with Yudishni. Is Aarav the right guy to talk with? Yet , Aarav will not understand her mother, still the diary does not talk why she married Mr Anand and who Mr Anand Nanda is actually?

Who is this Arjun? Yudishnee remembered him as an uncle who came to her mother's place? Hold on, what mess happened in Aunty's life?

Edited by Du_Nish - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#67
this update was beautiful nisha when is Arjun entering the story?. nice update👍🏼
Edited by kk-dd4ever - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#68
@anu it is time for mr anand to enter the story now :) Arjun will come soon.
I am writing the second update and will post it in a while.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#69
will wait for your next update:) feeling sorry 4 yudishni so much of confusions in her life😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
#70
Hey Nisha,
Guess this is the 1st time I'm commenting on this story...caught up with all the parts I missed..
Fabulous, Fantastic, Amazing, Marvellous...I run out of adjectives to describe how good your story is...being lucid, simple yet so poignant...You are a brilliant writer and I loved this part of the story too..
The confusion of Yudishnee..her emotions is well described...I thoroughly lovedd the whole story up-to-date
Cont ASAP and thanks a lot for the PM's :)
And I forgot to mention I just love the title..DAWN and DUSK..beautiful!!!

Sia <3

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