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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: minizz

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It was beautiful and the ending was as it should be😭there was no other way for Dushyant was there?so true, you exactly clicked on the lineeven if the whole family had forgiven him I don't think he would ever have been able to live in peace.I loved it.It was emotional but it was so good.I also loved the Gulaal-Kesar scenes.they were so sweet and Kesar taking Gulaal along-loved it.He is one of a kind pati and they are a truly unique jodioh yes.I loved reading the whole series and I would have loved to continue reading.maybe an epilogue of sorts😊

you have done very well and I would love it if you would start something else.I enjoy reading what you write and it would be great if you start something new.Please think about it 😊will be looking forward to more from you😃


Congrats on becoming a Goldie👏so sweet of you thank u dear

Yeah I will try to upload if I write anything like this on coming future..Thanks a lot dear..esp for your constant inspiration
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

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Alanta😭.Me so emotional.😭.what a dhamakedar chapi..Par tune khatam kyun kiya😭..Me bahaoing ganga jamuna..😭Nahi..nahi nahi...Mujhe DS ki nayi sequence chahiye..

Alanta..yaar.🤗.It was such a beautiful and emotional end.It is something so touching.I really love your style of writing.👏.It is simple yet profound..👏.Realistic yet romantic..👏Grreat job Alnta..It was a pleasure to read and comment on this DS.😳.pls I just beg you to start a new series...Me a big pankha of your DS.👏thansk for giving us a pleasurable experience of the KG journey post the show end.👏.great Job👏


Ab mein kya karun..Dushyanth and Durgesh ko maar diya..I am helpless dear..chal we can cry together😭 and it was a pleasure for me too to read your comments..and I am a crazy phan of your ff😳..will surely post if I write any thing of this sort...Thank u so much dear🤗 and esp for ur constant inspiration all through out
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: prachurya


Thank u so much for entertaining us with ur beautifully written scenes.Thank u dear hav been followin the thread since Gulaal was on air I know😳. I loved how u tied up all the ends maintaining the essence of the show- it just looked like a continuation i am so delighted to hear this., I just gave a try and glad that u liked it😊 I hope u share ur creativeness with us!Sure if I get a chanceYou are a wonderfully talented writer, Atlanta! I loved each and every scene! But bechara Dushy margaya😭I tried my max to give him a dignified end...i seriously loved the ending lines! Once again thanx, Atlanta!Thank u so much

You have always remained as a source of constant encouragement and inspiration for me..Thanks a lot🤗
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
links added below(in case if anyone interested)😊

Random Scenes

Kanha-Radha-Rukmini:
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1699210
The Unanwered.....
The Ever Waited Realisation

DS:Series 1

Tu Mere Saath hein
Jalthi Aag
Tu Sirf Meri Hein.
Beyond Life

DS:Series 2

It is my right
Kavach
Fear of loss (part 1)
Fear of loss (part1)continuation
Fear of loss (part2)
Adeet ka Saaya
Adeet ka Saaya(part 2)

Climax

The Debt of a Decade
Khushiyon ka mausam
followed
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
alanta - thank you for the PMs, especially the one with all the links in chronology!

The whole climax summed up things very well for GK, as well as Dushyant - sure I'd love to watch Dushyant himself live on and evolve as a character and story of his own, because there is so much to him and his making - but this is one kind of suitable end to his side, which sits well with things. On that note I also want to say how apt and well titled the climax is - The Debt of a Decade - sums up the theme so well!

You did say in your note that this is all to your DS, but will you write more GK in general? If you do, make sure to let me know, cause I have a tendency to miss new threads =)

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JZee
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: JZephyr

alanta - thank you for the PMs, especially the one with all the links in chronology!

The whole climax summed up things very well for GK, as well as Dushyant - sure I'd love to watch Dushyant himself live on and evolve as a character and story of his own, because there is so much to him and his making - but this is one kind of suitable end to his side, which sits well with things. On that note I also want to say how apt and well titled the climax is - The Debt of a Decade - sums up the theme so well!

You did say in your note that this is all to your DS, but will you write more GK in general? If you do, make sure to let me know, cause I have a tendency to miss new threads =)

xx
JZee

Jzee, You are always welcome...Yes Dushyanth always had an almost equal importance as that of GK..and am so glad that you liked the climax..
I am not so sure as of now that whether I would write more on GK..but my love for this couple and the whole story may provoke me to commit such adventurous deeds😆 and if .then definitely I would let you know...Thank u so much Jzee for your inspiring comments all through..😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
piu ab tu ganga, jamuna bahaana band kar..updated a small segment..bolna kaise laga...
mini I guess you were asking something of this sort...when you said somthing of epilogue comment
please do read the update followed
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
khatam ho gaya aaww me sad now 😭
but pls do come up with another DS 😉
loved it
all of the chapters were like Rapchik Rapchus Rapchundas
what did i forget
oh yeah
BAPKAAA
GOING TO MISS IT BERRY MUCH ALANTA
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Posted: 13 years ago
Khushiyon ka mausam

[Months passed since Dushyanth's death..and to recover from their loss was not at all easy for the family,...but life has to go on..anyway.the reality has to be accepted, however bitter it might be.and they tried their best to move on in their life..]
(Kesar engaged himself more in work, to ease his mind and he was recently working at huge number of orders and had to stay away from the haveli in connection with his work..)
[Paanba and Jamuna, Rewa in the kitchen]
Jamuna:Undiyu bana rahi hein??
PB(entusiastically):Kesar ko bahut pasand hein na..
(Jamuna looked worried and tears filled her eyes which were noticed by Paanba)
PB:Jamuna..mein bhi apna beta khoya hein..lekin zindgi kisi keliye nahin rukhthi na..jeena padtha hein..na chahkar bhi kabhi kabhi..jo log bacha hein unke liye hamare dukh ko dabaakar jeena padtha hein..(she resumed) 'mauth'..yahin zindgi ki sabse sabse badi sach hein, hum jithne jald iss sach ko apna le jeena uthne hi kam mushkil mehsoos hoga.
Jamuna:mein jaanthi hun Paanba..lekin phir bhi aankhe bhar aathi hein..(weeps) maa hun na..(Paanba tries to console, while they hears the sound of the jeep and proceeds to the living room and MB, Raman and Kesar returns from the factory)
Motaba(happily):lagtha hein mawdi ne hum par apna kripa barsa raha hein ( was saying about the orders on which Kesar was working on and peacefully sits on the chair)
(Paanba signals Rewa..Rewa goes inside and came out with a box full of sweets)
Paanba:Aap ne bilkul sahi kahan aur Kesar chal yeh mittai kha..(she feeds him the sweet)
MB:humein nahin denge??
PB(laughs):dungi, pehle Kesar..aakhir wahin hein jo..(she said it with lot of happiness..but Jamuna stops her..and changes the topic)
Jamuna(with a teasing smile):Tu yahaan kya kar raha hein..jaldi apni patni ke paas ja(Paanba and Rewa laughs, MB and Raman looks confused )
Kesar(confused and concern):Gulaal..Gulaal ko kya hua?(every ladies were silent and gloominess was spread on their faces)
Rewa(pretented sadness):tu apne aap ko sambhal Kesar..yehi soch ki sab bhagwan ki marzi hein (and pats him with concern)
Kesar(worried):Koi bathaayiye na Gulaal ko hua kya??
Jamuna:(teasing):Ab zyaada bhola mat ban humare samne( Paanba and Rewa tries hard to control their laughs while Jamuna continues)
ab jaldi jaa..woh bechaari kab se raah dekh rahi thi tera..(Kesar rushes through the stairs, while MB looks all confused towards PB and PB jesters him to cool down and was about to say some thing)
...
[Kesar hastily entered their room to find Gulaal sitting on the bed clasping her legs by resting her chin over the hands crossed on her knees, lost in thoughts with a smile on her lips..Kesar ran to her and sat by her side]
Kesar(with concern):tu teek tho hein na Gulaal.
( Gulaal snapped out of her sweet thoughts with his voice)
Gulaal(suddenly became nervous):Kesar tu kab aaya??
Kesar:(all concerned and tensed):tuje kuch hua tho nahi??yahan kyun hein..neeche kyun nahin aayi??
Gulaal(looked down embarrased):Meri tabiyath kuch teek nahin tha tho PB ne kuch der keliye aaram karne ko kahan..
(Kesar places his arm on her forehead and neck):Kahin beemar tho nahin padi thu??(moves from the bed and becomes irritated..Gulaal too stood up)
Kesar(scolds with concern still echoing in his anger):mein kya do dino ke liye yahan nahin tha aur teri tabiyat bhi aisi kharaab hogayi..hamesha..hamesha aisa hi hota hein..(moves towards her) tuje na har koi ki khayaal rehtha siwai tera..(so worried and dissapointed)..kam se kam yeh bhi to socho kabhi ki agar tuje kuch hua tho ..mera..(he couldnt complete the sentence and looks in other direction while tears were flowing through his eyes)
Gulaal:(moves closer to him, looks at him and in a gentle complaining voice): Tera gussa hamesha tere naak par rahtha hein..kya sochega woh..(her face turned red while she lowered her eyelids shyly)
Kesar(still in anger mode):Woh??kaun woh??waise muje kya farak padtha hein ki koi aur mere baare mein kya sochega ya nahin sochega??
Gulaal:(places her fingers over his lips) Shhh..woh sunega tho aane se pehle hi bahut dar jaayega apne papa se..(and falls to his arms and tightly hugs him)
(Kesar stood there stunned for a moment as if he is dead, Gulaal tightened her hug over him only then he came back to reality...)
Kesar(couldnt believe his ears): K.kya k..kaha?
[Gulaal stands straight and nodes her head in assuarance and at the very next moment he enclosed her in his arms with so much love and care..tears filled his eyes while he closed his eyes delightfully..he gently kissed her forehead and held her close towards his chest]

As I said in the preface:

Life is indeed a bed of roses, but thrones along with it
...
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Dear friends,

So the series officially ended but I wrote this one and clipped along with it..as i thought I did unfair to all of you by leaving you all in a tensed and emotional point with Dushyanths death..so thought to write a leisurily one too...
On a side note..If I ever write any random scenes or series on Gulsar, I shall use this thread itself..as there is a lot of space left...Hope you all enjoyed..please do share your opinions,,,please dont ignore to comment😊


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