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Posted: 13 years ago
Alanta🤗both of them are so good but my fav is the 1st.It feels so real, as if Kesar and Gulaal are smiling at each other.So I am a little biased towards that one.If only Gulaal had been near him for real😭sigh...
That doesn't mean that i don't like the 2nd one.I do...a lot actually😆Kesar was so cute in that scene na😳

So bring on the update.looking forward to it eagerly😳
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Posted: 13 years ago

Alanta.🤗.Wow..superb..👏.me so desperate for update now😍


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Posted: 13 years ago
of course Alanta, It will be lovely to read both these updates😍, so how long do we have to wait?Jaldi se update karo pls
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Posted: 13 years ago
Alanta 🤗...these r superb..do update the update soon...

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Posted: 13 years ago

Wahin Batein 2 part1

Gulsar's room in the morning,

Gulaal after a shower stepped out of the bathroom in her sky blue lehenga. She was feeling a strange sort of happiness and then nowadays she didnt need a reason to be happy...The day she met her Kesar again in her life, though almost after a decade...the glimpses of her olden days were revisiting her now and then...but as of now she was going back to herself, being herself, fun loving, talkative and free minded, though some of the past events disturbed her at times, now Kesar being with her, all those fears seem least mattered her.

Gulaal was wipping her wet hair with the towel and putting on the matching ornaments, while she passed a wide smile at Kesar who was still in his sound sleep. Gulaal put the towel aside and with a sigh:

Hmm...Tu ne hi tho mujse kaha dha ki tu bhi ab jaldi udne ki aadat daal dega...haan mein hi bewakoof hun...muje bhi sochna chahiye dha ki aakhir kaha bhi hein tho kisne!! Tu ne hi na...

Kesar, tuje yaad bhi hein ki aaj hum sab ko SaruFui ke wahan jaana hein..aur tu abhi tak udha bhi nahin!...

Gulaal moved towards him and shooked him...but was shocked at the next moment to find that he was having high fever...She called him franctically while placing her palm on his forehead and neck...but as she couldnt find any response, she hurried to the downstairs.

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At downstairs..

Motaba, Panba, Daiba,Giga kaka, JamunaKaki,Raman, Sudha all were waiting for Kesar and Gulaal. Rewa has also arrived there to accompany them...but as they were getting late, Sudha was about to go upstairs and call them but suddenly she stopped on seeing Gulaal with her long wet tresses being partially covered by her pallu came running down the steps...

Paanba (concerned):Kya hua Gulaal?

Gulaal (hesitantly): Woh,..Kesar ki tabiyath kuch teek nahin hein..

Panba(worried):Kya? and rushed to his room, while the others followed.

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In the room

Motaba: Hum koi aur din chalenge...mein Saru behen ko phone karke bathatha hun

Daiba (stopped him): Nahin Soma..Saru ki swabhaav ko jaanthe hein na..khamakha pareshaan ho jayegi woh...hum mein se koi yahan rokthe hein..

Panba(in a determined tone): Aap sab jayiye..mein rukthi hun yahan apne baite ke paas.

Gulaal(assured): panba aap chintha mat kijiye...mein hun na..mein Kesar ki dekhbaal karungi..

Panba:Lekin beta tu akhele kaise...

Rewa:(interrupted) Mein yahan rukhthi hun Baa..Dushyanthba bhi aaj shehar se laut raha hein na.

Eventually Panba agreed half heartedly and left along with the others.

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Hours passed, Gulaal was sitting beside him on the bed near the head rest, waiting for any response from his side. A piece of wet cloth was there on his forehead...Gulaal felt like he had mumbled her name.

Gulaal:Kesar...kya hua...kuch bolna hein?

Gulaal moved closer to him while he mumbled in his sleep. He continued in a less audible and weak tone almost similar to gibbirishing.

Kesar:Zara mere paas baitna Gulaal.

Gulaal: Mein yahin hun Kesar.

Kesar(continued): Tu kahin mat jaana, muje chodke..

Though she was a bit shocked, she tried to console him.

Gulaal: Mein kahan jaungi Kesar...

But Kesar kept on mumbling the same. It seemed like her words were not reaching his ears. He was somewhere in his subconcious. But Gulaal realised it only when somewhere in between he said those words which pierced her heart.

Mujse apna muh mat moud..mein bardaash nahin kar paunga,..Gulaal..

which made her realize the extent of what she had caused him through her indifference and cold behavior towards him was something more than what she really had thought.

She stared at him with her wide opened eyes. His sleeping face still reflected his pain. She slowly caressed his forehead and placed her head on the pillow near to his. Her eyes were fixed on his face while tears welled upon them as if she was taking away all his pain that she herself had once inflicted on him, though unknowingly and letting him, fall in to a peaceful sleep.

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Hours of silence was broken by his weak and stammering voice

Kesar: p..paani...paani..

Suddenly Gulaal stood up and got him a glass of water. She supported his head and made him drink some water and sat on the nearby chair. She was relieved to find that his body temperature has become almost normal by now, but was worried to find that his eyes were red and filled with tears. She placed her hand over his forehead and asked in a quite concerned and worried tone:

Sir main bahut dard ho raha hein?

Looking at her, Kesar took her hand from his forehead and cupped with in his hands.

In an almost pleading tone: Tu bas mere paas hi rahna.

Gulaal went still for a moment, but at the next moment she nodded and assured him, while both of them smiled through their tears.

After a while, Rewa started calling her from the kitchen, on hearing which Gulaal tried to free her hand from his. But as her voice neared them, he only tightened his grip over Gulaal.

Gulaal: (In a tensed voice) Kesar, Rewa aawaaz de rahi hein..muje jaana hein.

Rewa suddenly walked in to the room.

Rewa: Kya bhaabhi..mein kihtni der se..

Suddenly she stopped as she noticed Kesar's eyes fixed at Gulaal, holding her hand tight, not allowing her to go away. Rewa suddenly looked here and there and in an hesitant tone: Bhaabhi,..aap zara rasoi main ajayiyega...

and left while Gulaal looked her slightly emabarrased.

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Gulaal entered the kitchen and slowened her pace as she saw Rewa,.who was chopping some vegetables...She quitely went inside,...when Rewa made an intentional cough...Gulaal raised her head and squeezed out a smile.

Rewa (teasingly): Kesar bahut ziddi hein na bhaabhi..

Gulaal(shyly): Woh..beemar hein na..shayad isliye...

Rewa: Haan..haan beemar hein aur shaayad isliye uska zid aur bhi badh gaya hein (she laughed and continued in a contented voice) Kuch bhi kaho bhaabhi...lekin Kesar aapse bahut pyaar kartha hein

Gulaal smiled and slightly nodded her head,..suddenly they heard his voice calling out Gulaal.

Kesar: Gulaal...

Rewa:(sighed) Ap jayiye bhabhi..warna woh ab iss pure ghar ko sir par udha lega (and giggled)

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Note: I was planning to update part1 and part2 togetherbut due to time constraints I couldnt..😭.I know this one is quite boring...but please do bear with me this time...I wont be able to come here regular from tomorrow to the following 5 days.😭...will update part 2 as soon as I come back here...will miss u all 😭🤗

Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
res😊

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This was such a beautiful piece,It just warms your heart to see this little nuance that was so missing from the show.

You portrayed his insecurities so well,his biggest fear in life of not having her around doesn't leave him at peace and even in that feverish state his sub-concious mind is just worried about it,I agree with Mini there should have been one such scene in the show where we could see her showing care and concern for him

And the holding of hand was so Kesarish,he knew Rewa was calling her,infact she had walked in the same room,but oblivious to this he contued holding that hand signifying his zid ke aage kissi ki kuch nahi chalti😊awww brilliant...

Rewa and Gulaal teasing session in kitchen was so heart touching,lovely update Alanta🤗
sorry for my late comments,I will try and be quicker next time😊
Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Alanta 🤗...wow...its so good to see ziddi kesar back with a bang...he is very much afraid of losing her n not having her by his side...good that now she is atleast understanding what she did to him though unintentionally...i would like to see her to let him get rid of those fears of losing her...its only gulaal who can do that...so me waiting for next chapter of ziddi kesar...do update soon...

Edited by MR21 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Alanta🤗I love ziddi Kesar.I want to see more of Ziddi Kesar right now(throwing a tantrum)😆This episode was so beautiful.Most of the family gaayab except for Rewa.I don't mind her😆
Gulaal finally realizes the extent of his fear of losing her,never seeing her face again,never having her besides him again.I so loved how you portrayed that.Very simple yet so effective.I would have loved to see one such scene in the show.She needed to know what her indifference did to him,how her rudeness affected him.That's my fav part in this one Alanta.It felt so good to see them together but even now that fear of losing her has not left Kesar's mind completely na.Gulaal needs to do something about that.His heart needs reassurance and she is the only one who can drive away his fears.My next fav one is when Rewa witnesses Kesar holding onto Gulaal's hand and the scene in the kitchen.That was lovely.As I said earlier I would love to see more of the ziddi Kesar in the next update.Please consider my request😳

Alanta awww you will not be a regular here for the next 5 days.I will miss you yaar.Take care.
Edited by minizz - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

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Awww Alanta..WOW!!what a beautiful update yaar.Ziddi kesar awww so sweet..and bechara is so afraid of her leaving him na..I just lubbed the little role reversal here ,Gullu taking care of Bimar Kesu that was such a beautiful scene very well written..Wow ...bootiful Alanta🤗Lubbed the kitchen ched chad with rewa So sweeet👏

Edited by manzilmukul - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
*Reserved* here too. Alanta, be back next week to comment, I have an out of town assignment that I leave for tomorrow...

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