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Posted: 12 years ago
The second poem for Winter Sonata…😳

Again I haven't actually read the one to you dedicated…😭.

But the lines left me speechless!!!😲


jab thi mai bhi masoom ,unkhili si kali
to maine bhi ki thi himaat
bai khayali,bai irradgi mai
maine bhi bana liya tha sapno mai aapna aashiyaan

Wow!! That clearly depicts every girl…👏
Naive and innocent…😳
Brought up in a protected environment…😳
Specially that unkhili kali part… WOW!!👏

mai samjhi thi ,mere sapne tho mere aapne hai
jo pure karlu gi mai kabhi na kabhi
par na socha tha,,jo hai mere aapne
woh hi kuchal dege ,unhe aapne kadmo se

These lines made me cry…😭
Seriously hate those people😡 who don't think twice before forgetting even blood relations!!!😡
The last line… Woh kuchal denge, unhe apnea kadmo se… Got me so emotional!!!😭

aur tod diya that unhone muhje is tarah
ki khud se khade hone ko apne parro par
ya milane ko khud se nazar
ek zaraa bhi nahi tha mujh mai zinda raha

Clearly depicting the pain of the girl!!😭
Guess its Geet???
My heart went out to her...😭

aaj jab paya khud ko khud ke hi saamne kisi dusre roop mai,to phir dil ne kaha

mujhe bataa,mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai kuch thum si gaii,jhijhak si gai
par phir uski aarmano si bhaari aankho mai dekh kar kaha,ja bana apna ghar kahi dur kisi saahil par
tabhi

Her hesitation yet her what we say ek umeed…😊
Her one hope to have someone who loves her…😳
A new home… where she would be loved and there would be only love!!!😳
Loved it…👏

ari nadaan
rait par bane aaishiyaane ko toh
samander ka mohtaaj hona padta hai👏
kyoki usse to koi bhi sarphiri laher mita deti hai👏

The highlighted line totally stole the light!!😳
Wow!! I mean the whole relation of the imprint on sand and ocean sweeping off its traces!!!👏
Loved it a lottt!!!

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai chand lamhe sochti rahi
phir boli,ja bana le sabse dur chand par apna ghar

Haayee every girls's dream depicted here…
But here in Geet's context…. It's painful knowing how desperately she wants to get away from here as far as possible...

ary pagli
chand jo khud hi andhere ka wasi hai
jo khud hi suraj ki roshni se chipta hai
woh kaise de paayega teri aashao ko roshni

True true!!! 😳
Chaand the place which resides in darkness…😳
Depicting the truth of life…😭
we can't hide from the reality!!!😭
(Hope am making sense!!😆)

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai kuch simat si rahi thi is duniya ki berukhi se
par uski ek siski ne ,tod di meri bebasi si
aur apni rooh ki awaaz,
ke chup ja kahi
tham ja kahi
na lad ab kisi se
ke koi aisa yaha nahi
ke jiske liye tu kar sake khud pe yaki
tabhi uski ek awaaz ke
eeye pari meri
bataa muhje ke

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
ek pal ke liye to koi jawaab mai de na saki
par phir kuch lamhe soch kar
uski aur dekh kar mai boli
jaa bana le badalou pe apne aashiyaane ko
jisko chu na sake ye zami aur yaha ke log

Her desperation to find the prefect place…😳
The description is awesome!!!👏
Lovely!!!👏

arre maasom
ku tujhe laga
ke aasma hai,is duniya se zuda
aur rakh lega yeh tujhe ,har musibat se baccha
kyoki
ik hawa ka jhoka hi,dega issko hila
kaise rakhe ga ye tumhe samet kar
jab hawa ka jhoka hi,le jaayega issko udda

Again face to face with destiny…
Loved the interpretations and the way you bring up reality in every step!!!👏

to phir mai kaha jao,kya karu
kya koi kouna ,koi hissa is duniya ka
nahi hai hammare liye bhi bana

ab bahut ho chuka
sabre kho chuka
ab hum hai jaha,hamaare sapno ka aashiyaana hoga waha

The last line… The line which made the poem all the more special….
Its true wherever your soulmate is your home is there…😳
Your soulmate's presence is enough to make you feel loved, protected and happy!!😳
Superb poem sis!!!👏
Am becoming your fan!!!😳
Loved it a looottt👏
Love you….😳

(Hope the super special style of commenting made up for the delay!!!)😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ruchs

Finally me aa gayi!!!😆

The 1st poem' Kashmakash'👏

God could really feel it'😳

Never knew you could even write serious ones!!!😲

Haven't read Muskan Di's FF yet'😭

But still have already got a fair idea reading your super awesome poem'.😉

This was from Geet's POV na???😊

My personal fav lines were'😳

jism se rooh tak

din se raat tak

dil ki aakhiri saas tak

dhadkan ki aakhri aawaz tak

to mai chah kar bhi ,sun na saki

saare sapne dobaara dekhu

aisi himmat,khud mai bun na saki👏

Sigh Loved these lines a lot'😳

Loved it to the core'.😳👏

👏
yipeee

l😉ets party girl
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ruchs

The second poem for Winter Sonata'😳


Again I haven't actually read the one to you dedicated'😭.

But the lines left me speechless!!!😲


jab thi mai bhi masoom ,unkhili si kali
to maine bhi ki thi himaat
bai khayali,bai irradgi mai
maine bhi bana liya tha sapno mai aapna aashiyaan

Wow!! That clearly depicts every girl'👏
Naive and innocent'😳
Brought up in a protected environment'😳
Specially that unkhili kali part' WOW!!👏

mai samjhi thi ,mere sapne tho mere aapne hai
jo pure karlu gi mai kabhi na kabhi
par na socha tha,,jo hai mere aapne
woh hi kuchal dege ,unhe aapne kadmo se

These lines made me cry'😭
Seriously hate those people😡 who don't think twice before forgetting even blood relations!!!😡
The last line' Woh kuchal denge, unhe apnea kadmo se' Got me so emotional!!!😭

aur tod diya that unhone muhje is tarah
ki khud se khade hone ko apne parro par
ya milane ko khud se nazar
ek zaraa bhi nahi tha mujh mai zinda raha

Clearly depicting the pain of the girl!!😭
Guess its Geet???
My heart went out to her...😭

aaj jab paya khud ko khud ke hi saamne kisi dusre roop mai,to phir dil ne kaha

mujhe bataa,mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai kuch thum si gaii,jhijhak si gai
par phir uski aarmano si bhaari aankho mai dekh kar kaha,ja bana apna ghar kahi dur kisi saahil par
tabhi

Her hesitation yet her what we say ek umeed'😊
Her one hope to have someone who loves her'😳
A new home' where she would be loved and there would be only love!!!😳
Loved it'👏

ari nadaan
rait par bane aaishiyaane ko toh
samander ka mohtaaj hona padta hai👏
kyoki usse to koi bhi sarphiri laher mita deti hai👏

The highlighted line totally stole the light!!😳
Wow!! I mean the whole relation of the imprint on sand and ocean sweeping off its traces!!!👏
Loved it a lottt!!!

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai chand lamhe sochti rahi
phir boli,ja bana le sabse dur chand par apna ghar

Haayee every girls's dream depicted here'
But here in Geet's context'. It's painful knowing how desperately she wants to get away from here as far as possible...

ary pagli
chand jo khud hi andhere ka wasi hai
jo khud hi suraj ki roshni se chipta hai
woh kaise de paayega teri aashao ko roshni

True true!!! 😳
Chaand the place which resides in darkness'😳
Depicting the truth of life'😭
we can't hide from the reality!!!😭
(Hope am making sense!!😆)

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
mai kuch simat si rahi thi is duniya ki berukhi se
par uski ek siski ne ,tod di meri bebasi si
aur apni rooh ki awaaz,
ke chup ja kahi
tham ja kahi
na lad ab kisi se
ke koi aisa yaha nahi
ke jiske liye tu kar sake khud pe yaki
tabhi uski ek awaaz ke
eeye pari meri
bataa muhje ke

to phir mai apna aashiyaana banau kaha
ek pal ke liye to koi jawaab mai de na saki
par phir kuch lamhe soch kar
uski aur dekh kar mai boli
jaa bana le badalou pe apne aashiyaane ko
jisko chu na sake ye zami aur yaha ke log

Her desperation to find the prefect place'😳
The description is awesome!!!👏
Lovely!!!👏

arre maasom
ku tujhe laga
ke aasma hai,is duniya se zuda
aur rakh lega yeh tujhe ,har musibat se baccha
kyoki
ik hawa ka jhoka hi,dega issko hila
kaise rakhe ga ye tumhe samet kar
jab hawa ka jhoka hi,le jaayega issko udda

Again face to face with destiny'
Loved the interpretations and the way you bring up reality in every step!!!👏

to phir mai kaha jao,kya karu
kya koi kouna ,koi hissa is duniya ka
nahi hai hammare liye bhi bana

ab bahut ho chuka
sabre kho chuka
ab hum hai jaha,hamaare sapno ka aashiyaana hoga waha

The last line' The line which made the poem all the more special'.
Its true wherever your soulmate is your home is there'😳
Your soulmate's presence is enough to make you feel loved, protected and happy!!😳
Superb poem sis!!!👏
Am becoming your fan!!!😳
Loved it a looottt👏
Love you'.😳

(Hope the super special style of commenting made up for the delay!!!)😳


haila
tere view read karke
i feel proud of my self😉😉

off course
meine itni solid poem likhi thi😆😆😆

waiting for your others comment
as still lots of poem left😡
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Posted: 12 years ago
any one here
to read one more poem
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Posted: 12 years ago

poem no :22
its for darmiyaan ff by neha 512
this poem
i write after reading the update
where they have their unusual SR😉😭😕

murado waali ghadi aayi thi
besabri se jiska intezaar kiya
woh haseen raat aayi thi

par kuch alag sa ,
na ho kabhi kissi ke saath jaisa
vaisa woh kuch apne saath layi thi


ek masoom si kali
o khilne se pahle hi
murjhaane si thi lagi
uske liye tho woh tufaan layi thi
is bechaari ne
thik se aasmaan na dekha tha
arre usne tho abhi osse ki thandak bhi na paayi thi
aur yeh raat ,
uske liye tufaani barsaat le aayi thi


yeh akeli hi nahi thi
is par yeh maayusi chaai thi
kyoki ,
sapno ke sach hone ki aas toh
iss bhavree ne bhi lagaayi thi


dekh kar iss kali ko
iske mann ne li angdaai thi
ek din yeh kali sirf hogi meri
pahli nazar mein hi yeh aas lagaayi thi


kya kasoor tha ,yeh iss bhavree ka
kee
isse pyaar hua is kali se ,
jo abhi phool bhi na ban paayi thi
NAHIII
NAHI
yeh kasoor toh hai uss maali ka
jisne sabse khubsurat kali ,
usske baag mein sajaai thi


tut gaye sab sapne inke
kyoki aaj ki raat sitaaro ki jhilmil hi nahi
apne ander chupa kar tufaan bhi laayi thi
ab dekhna hai ,
key kya sach tha pyaar bhavree ka
jisse hamne ,
kali ko sawaare ga woh ,yeh aas lagaayi thi



ok dear
me done with my few lines
please tell me
did you like them
me waiting for reply
please pm me soon😊

Edited by 9n9i9s9h9u9 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome
lovely 👏
thanx for the pm dear
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: kiran_rati

awesome

lovely 👏
thanx for the pm dear

THAXXX DEAR
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Posted: 12 years ago
Love it graphics
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Posted: 12 years ago
thaxxx alot dear

hey
how are you now
thik ho gayi aap😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
hi
the poem is really good
its really hillarious
plz cont with more funny and interestings poems like this
i really loved it

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