Ashlok & Sajan FS : Yeh Dooriyan(Chap 4 last part) - Page 4

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Posted: 9 years ago
#31
Nyc start dear...
Hope both will meet in nxt update..
Update soon...
Thanks for Pm...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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interesting , cute and twist
well written

thanks for the pm



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Posted: 9 years ago
#33
6 years leap!
And what do we see? Gunjan as Shanaya! Aditi's sis! So Gunjan has lost her memory.
Shlok sees Gunjan when he goes to see Aditi for marriage. And he is hurt seeing that Gunjan doesn't recognise him. Monaya is so cute. Shlok and his mother leave deciding to give Gunjan some time.
Felt bad for Shlok.
So Monaya and Kavya are close friends and Monaya has invited Kavya for her bday party. Aastha and Shlok miss each other.
And Gunjan and Samrat looking forward to meet each other. Want to know what gift has Samrat suggested for Monaya.
And the doll which Kavya wanted to gift Monaya is booked my Gunjan (Shanaya)...

Very interesting! Waiting for the birthday celebration! 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34
Very interesting update...now waiting for the birthday celebrations.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35
Awesome update dear please update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36
Superb update
Very interesting starting
Characters are interesting
Wanna read more
Sorry for late comment
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#37

Chapter 2




Aastha was thinking,about what to wear ,Kavya helped her and selected a blue dress for her ,Kavya pulled her mom's hand to go to the venue .Samrat who was busy admiring himeself from the rear view mirror was obstructed from Aastha "Bhai,now don't do too much of hairstyle ,it's just a kid's party not a date ". Kavya laughed " Mama,I only told uncle that to dress up neatly as there are many aunties whom he can go for a dance with ".
Aastha smiled " Thank God Kavya, you forced your uncle to dance with the girl he sees ." Aastha looked at him emotionally,as she really wanted him to move on in life.Samrat tried to avoid eye contact with Aastha as his eyes became wet which he didn't wanted her to see and he drove to the venue. Aastha knew about it,which made her sad.
In Monaya's Bday party
Samrat and Aastha came there ,Aditi became nervous she tried to hide her face and she went near Shanaya "Shanaya ,I feel you need to be here only, I will go and handle the guest and you don't need to come outside ". Shanaya was surprised by her answer .




" Aditi Di,I always obeyed your orders as I never stepped out of the house without your permission. But now the case is of my daughter's birthday party and a mother won't be in her daughter party then that won't be called a birthday party. You don't have the right to stop me from celebrating my daughter birthday party and be your caged bird ".



Aditi raised her voice " Shanaya... enough is enough, you are crossing your limits ". Monaya came near Aditi " Maasi you be in your limits.Always you come for my parent teacher meeting and never did my mom came just because of you. Now it's my 6th birthday party and you don't have the right to stop my mom to be with me " Monaya drags her mom to the hall ."Monaya wait baby.. "





Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door (x2)


Time stops when Samrat eyes rolled on to the beautiful face of the moon who came towards her ,her face had a different shine, looking as beautiful as the moon. That the moon always will be jealous seeing the most beautiful woman is worth ful to call her face as moon .Shanaya felt it a bit awkward how Samrat was looking at her ,but inner self was getting attracted to him.



Aastha was shocked to see Gunjan Kavya did the honours of introducing
Kavya smiled and told Aastha "Mom ,this is Shanaya aunty ,Monaya's mom , who makes lovely palak paneer ,I told you na I first time met her when I was invited for lunch and she made lovely dishes of my favorite "
Monaya introduces Shanaya to Aastha and Samrat "Mumma ,this is Aastha aunty, my friend Kavya's mom and this is her uncle Samrat". Samrat was surprised to know her name is Shanaya " Tum Shanaya ho.." Shanaya nods bee head saying yes "No,my heart doesn't agree that you are Shanaya, but you are my Gunjan. I know you are my Gunjan". Shanaya got irritated "I am not your Gunjan and please leave me alone ,I understand you are my Monaya's friend uncle ,so as a guest you may be here .


Uljhi si baatein dil
Mujhse bhi baantein
To mehar.. mehar.. meherbaniya
(Meher.. meher.. meherbaniya)
Khud hi samajh ke mujhe samjha de
To mehar.. mehar.. meherbaniya
(Meher.. meher.. meherbaniya)

Aastha tries to calm Samrat down, but then Shlok arrives ,Aastha was surprised to see Shlok " Shlok you here " . Shlok then answers her back "Stop answering me stupid questions, it's time to dance" .Shlok asks her for a dance and she gives her hand,he forcibly takes her and dances with her .



Ho meherbani jo dil de zubaani
Keh de wo jo na kabhi kaha hai
Aise Tera Main.. Jaise Mera Tu
Aise Tera Main.. Jaise Mera Tu..


They both started to dance
He looks at her deeply with intense eyes, his passionate and hot touches make hers feel suffocated ,she thinks to herself "Kaisi hai yeh pehli ,when I wanted him ,I used to thirst for him to come back to me and wanted his touch but now when he is not mine ,I feel disconnected from him "


Milte rahe jo aise hi dono
Lag na jaaye ishq ki nazar
Aye dil farebi, tham sa gaya kyun
Aisi waisi baat soch kar

Bas mein na mere ab ye raha hai
Tujh pe aake dil ye jo ruka hai

Aise tera main.. jaise mera tu
Aise tera main.. Jaise mera tu
Jaise Mera Tu..
Aye.. oo.. ee..
Na na.. yea..

(Mehar.. mehar.. meherbani ho)


she stared at Aditi who is getting jealous seeing them together.
Samrat asked Shanaya for a dance, she refused, he forcibly takes her hand and starts dancing with her .

Tumse milke aisa laga
Jaisi apna koi
Aankhon mein sapne naye
Mann mein hulchal nayi (x2)

Dhadkane tham gaye tumko dekh kar
Tumse milne ki dua zindagi ban gayi






Shanaya felt like as if these touches weren't knew to her,it was some known connection with him in dancing with him.She felt spell bound and got lost in her dance with him .They both shared an emotional eye lock.

Waqt ki karvatein ya mausmon ke rang
Har safar sath ho har safar sang sang
Kam na ho ek pal pyaar ka ae suroor

Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door
Jana na dil se door (x2)

Jana na dil se door..





Monaya smiled seeing her mother truly found her soul mate "Mumma" the sweet voice of Monaya broke their romance dance "I wish Samrat uncle would be my Dad .Please Mumma get married to him.You both look perfect together".
Shanaya got angry with Monaya's words " Shanaya stop it ? And stay away from him "

Samrat went near Shanaya "Look at the innocence of your daughter, at such a young age she spoke the truth. I love you Monaya baby. Come here give your daddy a hug" Monaya comes running into his arms and hugged him and gave him a kiss "Love you" .





Shanaya took Monaya away from him and she distracted Monaya by cake cutting ceremony. She thought that she shouldn't scold her on her birthday .
Monaya cuts the Birthday cake and she feeds Samrat first which makes Shanaya upset. Shlok smiled seeing this .Everyone have presents to Monaya,Monaya showed her doll which her mom gifted to her ,Kavya smiled that it was Shanaya aunty who purchased the doll.Fnally the time came when Kavya gifted Monaya her gift, Monaya opened the gift and she was so happy to receive a puppy and she named the puppy "Puchpush" she hugged Kavya "Kavya this is so cute gift, who gave you this idea?".






Kavya smiled and told Monaya " My Samrat chachu gave me this idea ,I was suppose to gift you the same doll which yout mom just gifted you but then chachu gave this idea".
Monaya hugged Samrat "uncle this is best gift" Samrat corrected her "What you had called me earlier?" Monaya smiled and she replied "Thanks Dad" she kissed him.Shanaya felt irritated



Shlok went near Kavya "meri bachi,I love you dear"He kissed on her forhead




Kavya didn't knew who he was "Uncle, who you are ?" Shlok became emotional "Kavya I am your ..." he starred at Aastha emotionally.Aastha starred at him angrily "You are nothing to her " .When Aastha was dragging Kavya away from him,her hand left his hand and it pained Shlok.





Shlok gazed at Aditi angrily
"Aditi, you are responsible for this ,I will not spare you" Shlok thought in his mind and gritted angrily at Aditi. Fear ran down from Aditi's spine,she became nervous and she started to panic and she ran from there but she was stopped by Shlok and Samrat.

Edited by -Dellz- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
That was an amazing update...
Ashlok meets last...
I loved that...
Mounya called samarat dad. ...
Astha is too anger with shlok...
Hope they will clear the misunderstanding soon.
Shlok and samrat is behind Aditi...
Hope her truth will come out soon...
Waiting for next part
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39
Aastha felt happy when Kavya forced samrat 2 dress up well 4 other girls at d party as she rly wanted her bro 2 move on.but Samrat became upset,she notuced her bro's pain but she hid it n didnt question him abt that.somehow i liked this scene.Aditi doesnt want Shanaya to come 4 d party also as she feared if anyone wud c her.Y didnt Shanaya question aditi till now y she never allowed her 2 come out?She dodnt have any doubt?But i loved shanaya being bold 2 aditi n told her that she has 2 b there at her daughter's b'day paryy n nothing can stop her.this aditi is so angry at her.Aastha's n Monaya's party outfit match each others.Finally Samrat Gunjan saw each other.But poor samrat was scolded by gunjan when he called her gunjan.but 4 him she is his gunjan n thats y he danced forcefully with her.Loved Gunjan feeling his touch tho she didnt recognize him.Monaya liked their jodi n want them 2 get married.loved Samrat's reaction 2 that in front of her Gunjan.Loved samrat Monaya scene n he made her call him dad was very sweet.Shlok did forceful dance with aastha.it was so passionate.Kavya realized that d doll she cudnt buy was bought by none other than Gunjan n became happy.that was very cute.It was a puppy which Kavya n samrat brought 4 Monaya.so cute.It reminded me of CC.Tho Kavya is Ashlok's daughter u r showing her bonding with Samrat too.I liked that very much.Shlok kavya scene was also gud.but un4tunately aastha didnt let shlok reveal who he is n said he is no one.shlok is shattered n is angry with aditi as she is responsible 4 the present condition.Aditi tried 2 escape but shlok n samrat caught her.glad that u didnt delay in exposing aditi unlike d serials where d culprit doesnt get exposed easily.so sweet of u 2 add jana dil se door song.it really matched d situation too
Edited by jasminerahul - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
Awesome update...
Finally ashlok and sajan met..
Love the way the story is shaping up...😳😳
Continue soon

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