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pinkly

@pinkly

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#41

Loved the prologue. It is different and interesting. I like this Khushi and the relationship she shares with her parents. Khushi met ASR... would love to read what happens next. Continue soon.

I can not believe this is the first time you are writing. The prologue is written so beautifully, you will be one of the great writers we have in this forum.

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kiwikali

@kiwikali

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#42

You know, Jigs, I think this was a deliberate strategy by Juhi to abandon us and force more Baaraatis into writing.

Wonderful start! I'm looking forward to following this story.

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preethi.saseeda

@preethi.saseeda

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#43

Congratulations on the launch Jigs!!! It is a Res!!!

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bridgeofdreams

@bridgeofdreams

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

Congratulations for writing your first story, Jigs.

That's a great start.I like how you included the basics about Khushi, her background, education and family here making the picture all clear for us, and yet intriguing us with the unknown about her past and the next updates.

First meeting, first fall...first Rabba Ve!

I wonder how Arnav is going to be.

Khushi's family is awesome, and Lavanya seems to be nice so far.

I like the title.

Looking forward to read more. Good luck.

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nishu_shorna

@nishu_shorna

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

WOW... What an start... Already loving it... Brilliantly described Di... Loved Khushi's convo with her parents... Nd also ArShi first meeting... WOW... Fabulous... Waiting for more already... Happy writing Jigna Di...

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1chilly

@1chilly

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

Just read the prologue, and what caught my eye was that ASr had perfectly trimmed hair!😆

When I see Barun's pictures with long unkempt hair, I feel like chopping off the locks!

Really liked the prologue.

Khushi seems to have gone through a bad experience in life.

Loved the telephonic conversation.

Her parents are of course worried about her.

She is alone in foreign land.

The Rabba Vey moment was perfect.

Would love to see how this story evolves.

Great start, though!

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lara3110

@lara3110

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

Great start. Interesting concept. Good luck. Ivam already excited. PM me, dear.

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raina

@Girlabouttown

Rocker

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Nice update

Looking forward to read ur story

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hotchic.

@hotchic

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

Seems interesting that is why sending you a buddy request. 😃

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vandana.sagar

@vandana.sagar

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#50

Jigs, I am so happy and excited and proud of you. You did it...congratulations and a big hug.

The setting, the introduction to the characters, their relationships and the story could not have been better. Khushi's relationship with her parents, her approach to life and then the hint of her past, a glimpse of her life up to now, and then the description of events up to the time of her interview ...all perfect.

What a great start. Loved your Khushi, confident, modern, educated but still seems to be one who respects and values her traditions and family.

I felt the buzz of NYC, the ambience of Central Park, I could imagine her running clearing her thoughts while getting her adrenaline going for a great start for her new life.

There seems to be something about her past that makes me curious. The regret and guilt she feels for her impatience and rudeness realising her mother and father love her unconditionally speaks volumes for her and her relationship with her parents.

It also sounded so real and natural as that is exactly how a lot of us would also react.

I like her being successful, her Jimmy Choos and her outfit, I really liked that description, so clear and vivid. I love this corporate background and already looking forward to them working together...

I love the anxiety she feels like a warning that something is about to happen, I could almost hear Rabba Vey in the background too.

Lavanya as his secretary ...looking forward to seeing how her role develops here.

So she is instantly attracted to ASR and this interview promises to be very exciting ...cannot wait to read. Their first meeting was perfect. The electric shocks...I could feel the excitement too.

I saw glimpse of you in your Khushi, making me like her even more.

I loved this prologue, the honesty and simplicity of your writing made it more attractive and sent out such a happy and positive vibe.

Bring on chapter 1...

Edited by vandana.sagar - 11 years ago