SwaRon OS :Need You Now ...(current track) last part pg- 14 - Page 9

Besties :)


Himani(My Rockstar)😳

Hey Di...🤗🤗

Superb...awesome...seriouslyyy...one of the best part...so very well written.
I loved the description when Swayum was standing out of the room and sharon on the other side of the glasss...two souls...tied with the beautiful relation of love...but still apart.

You are one of the best in expressing feelings...emotions...and out of most...LOVE!!!

I loved each and every bit of this update...his pain...her guilt...his ignorance...her inner turmoil...everything was just perfect...and equally balanced...too good.

And last but not the least...the bang on confrontation...it was amazing...his silence...and her frustration...and finally her outbrust...cant express in words...and than tye kiss...it was heavenlly...so beautifully penned...this OS is one of the best in the forum...just perfect!!!!

I love ur write ups...u know that...aur un sab se jyada...i love you...keep writing these amazing write ups Di...will be waiting for next...

Love you
Ur Rockstar
Ps- time mile to Archangels Ss bhi update kar do...pleej :)

Wow diii...its so magical...its like I culd imagine swaron speaking their heart out to each other...n this magic can be done only by u...👏😳

So nice to see them clearing out things...n Sharon making a effort this time...superbly written*hatts off*

The cold surface of the window glass was the obstacle to the warmth of their love reaching its destination. ...their beloved...their hands rested together with the fragile separator made of glass...

Masahallah kya likhte ho aap...superb how u described a small misunderstanding between them with fragile glass👏

He remained silent...those taunts for each other...those allegations of ruining their relationship in each others eyes...there was a time he used to find traces of love in her hateful words...again history was repeating itself...their love was proving its existence through hatred...

Omg yeh kya hai...i m just speechless...how beautifully you have penned swaron love n hatred relation❤️

. A part of her shattered inside ...the other part of her claimed her rights on him...

Swaron r magical but ur writing give them a special touch n makes them more special...as I say u give them a new identity...

Thank u so much...swaron u :* :* :*

P.S: Mu bhal tumara fan

Megha Di 😳

Diippp :* :* :*
This os was a beautiful journey. ..I always lobe the metaphorsand similis u use...
The glass being their ego nd pride was the one I loved the most! !!

Vaise ek cheez... u can still continue this os...swayam ke hand se oozing blood ka kya hua..pls write further nd make sharon nurse it..romantically ;)

Res
**Unres**

Deepu 😳 main yehwala experience sach mein bohat cherish karungi...i hav been emotionally involved with this OS along with u and have seen ur writer avtar at close quarters...waise bhi u know what ur writing does to me...it transports me to a world of romance with all its many facets...im a sucker for emotional action and u deliver that in plenty...aur jab baat Swaron pe aati hai toh nuthing works like the classic Swayam cheesy and sumtimes cheeky liners and Sharon ka trademark attitude which is like second skin for her...Sharon's exploration as a character has of late been fascinating me lots and I luvd the way u brought out her vulnerable side - and Sharon baring her soul in front of Swayam has to b an emotional rollercoaster and whatever we get to see on the show or we dont, as a Swaron fan...u fulfilled a desire to see that passion and deewangi and bonding - in a literal sense of the term - that thrilled me to bits...so thank u for that...and an ever bigger thank you for keeping the lover boy's status quo intact...at least u didnt need to tamper with the essence of their basic natures to drive home the point... 😊

I am honored by ur sweet dedication and trust me the feeling of being privileged is mutual...so then...waiting already for ur next work 😉

okai first of all i really thought its gona be long as u mentioned it to me before posting it...Naaa that was not long yaar...i really wanted to read on but unfortunatly it finished...one more thing i know as a writer u will never be satisfied with ur work but trust me its ummm u knw what i dnt even have the words which can decribe even 1% of this story...coz if i say awesome fantastic brillient this wont do justic to what i just read now...but speechless is the word i will use coz that what i felt through out reading it. ...how u decribed close window symbolising her heart door close for him was so intellegent and clever of u...i thought this idea was so unique...now comming to the lines i loved the most which held my heart in a tight griped and i had a slight smile on my face as i was so proud when reading it...okai lets not drag it and let me reveal it to u kt was " her heart her soul her existance refused to obey, they were listening to their master who tamed them with endless and unconditional love" that was the highlight for me...dude this is going to my favourite quoting session in my diary and it will say written by the very deep Deep 😉,and how u went on about his blood drops relating with her pain was an other mind blasting idea, its like ur each and word is used so magnetically that if by chance one wants to skip few words they just cnt this how powerful as a writer u r. also wana say that u read sharon so well coz when i was reading this bit " a simple, confused insecured girl madly in love with" i was like damn u understood her so well.
so this is why u take so long haan, u r perfectionist, no wonder u uploade ur work so late coz u, and its completely fair actually. coz if the end result of that wait is like this thn u can have all the time in the world...okai may not all the time in the world, kya pata aap sach main seriously le lo and upldate ur work wen i am like 50 phir to nazar b kamzor hogi lol...love u ❤️

unres

diii🤗
update ke liye
you did not have to mention me I was no help to you dii
sholly dii late comment ke liye😳😳😳

coming to the OS iski tareef to geeta maa ke style me banti hai
Stupendo fantabulously fantastically magical hypnotic brilliantly awesome mind blowing perfect etc etc to the power of infinity.I think ye bhi kam hai but abhi isi se kaam chala lo aapki tareef me to ek new dictionary banaani hogi🥱...

ye update badaa tha😲🤢
Shuru hote hi khatam ho gaya but what can we do aapka write up is like 5 star for Tannu mann hi nahi bharta.😉

The best part about this update was the magical simplicity.You didn't use too heavy dialogues and melodrama but still it was so magical.I learnt this from you aaj ki aache story ke liye heavy dialogues important nahi important hai how you present them.The dialogues were so apt and perefect na kam na zyaada itna ki we can imagine swaron so easily.I could see the whole scene playing in front of me.Flawless writing.The emotions were penned down to perfection.I could feel each emotion radiating off the protagonists here be it Pain,hurt,anger,guilt,regret,angst,love,hate ,resentment,desperation and every other emotion.The beauty of a writer.You kept the characters so real ki padhte hi bas muh se yhi nikalta hai This is our swaron.
Magically khoobsurat.
you know aapke write se pehle I imagined the same scene in my head like bazillion times but naaa kabhi mazaa nahi aaaya something was missing but your write up ke baad to mere dimaag me bas yahi scene repeat pe chal rha hai.Ever since FB trust me.Pta nahi ku but this was just so perfect.Like absolutely perfect.I loved the convo it was intense yet not OTT.Their was drama lekin melodrama nahi.There was just this quality in it ki no matter how much anyone tries koi fault nazar naa aaye.Pata nahi aisa kya kahu ki I can describe how lucky I am that I get to read something like this.It taught me so many thins fir bhi I can't write like this.Aapke write ups me ek magic hai let me name it Deep dii magic as it is something I can't recreate.It is very unique and very you.Iloved how you kept the Swaron essence in it.You wrote swaron just as they are simple yet complicated.Endig couldn't have been any better.That kisit was just perfect there.Swayam once said ki our first kiss will be special and this was exactly that.A kis that sealed the promises of love , trust and happieness.A kiss that welcomed a renwed relationship stronger than before and a kiss that bound two souls madly in love.This was the best swaron first kiss penned down ever according to me.There could have never been a more perfect situation for a first kiss as it was really a special one.One thing that I salute you for is how easily you changed the mood from emotional and intense too naughty and goofy in the last minute.It was so flawaless ans smooth.It wasn't abrupt or out of the blue or odd it was just Perfect👍🏼

gosh I am editing this comment like crazy as jaise hi post karti hu kuch aur yaad aa jata hai.I loved the metaphors that you have used throughout they were so apt and relatable.I mean the way you have used metaphors is so innoative aapki soch ka sochkar hi meri battiyaan gul ho gayi hai🤢I mean how did you even think of glass as a symbol of their ego is beyond me but i guess aapki yahi quality hi to aapko awesome and unique banaati hai...
diii I am stumped and I dont have the ability to edit more kuki aise edit kar ke ke mai aapke OS ke har line ko quote kar ke shuru ho jaungi bas and fir pata nahi kya hoga.
By god diii mujhe lagta hai agar mai detail me taareef karungi to aapke update se lamba mere feedback ho jaayega😆.I know thoda OTT sound kar rahi hongi but I dont care.Aape write up ka hi kamaal hai.

I am so proud to call you my inspiration diii.😎Aise hi likhte raho so that mai bhi kuch sikh loon😈Mujhe bhi magical likhna hai😈...Kaash mai aisa likh paati
anyways diii agar aapne likhna choda na too

I loved it❤️
Luv
Harshi

unres
deepu di its simply wow for this os. The flow of lengthy storyline bring it to more perfection... I m litteraly speechless. Each and every moment were beautifully plotted with amazing description.
Love it frm core. 😳 👏

Res

Awww how cute!!!!
Romantic couple
Superb update!!!
😉
Loved the way you wrote abuot the window is between them like their ego.
Just loved that part... it was so real

Deepu aapi 🤗

deepu,