SwaRon OS :Need You Now ...(current track) last part pg- 14

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Muskan Verma

@Muskan_SwaRon

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#101

OMG!!!! Who r u ??? i mean ho kya aap...u wrote it so wonderfully...i just can't express in words that how much i loved it...it was awesome...magical...super cute...adorable...i always wait for ur updates...how can a person write so wonderfully...i read it but still i can feel it...it was so magical...and u said that u r updating a long one...i didn't find that long much...loved it to the core...love u 🤗

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kespari

@kespari

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Posted: 12 years ago

#102

you know

ap har baat bohat cutely describe krte ho

this OS is really awsume sharon's lineis 100% true

n i also felt badly ky wo sab words

shrn ki insecurity ki wja sy tha

i also love swayam's line

222 good di 22222222222 good

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GoldenLuna

@GoldenLuna

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#103

it was just wow...

loved it like anything...

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swasi

@swasi

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#104

wow i m just speechless coz nothing can describe the beauty of ur writing syle😊 agar ek line me bolna pade toh i love the way u write😊😊 the way u show the emotions of swaron its just amazing, i can feel it😊 i really loved the way u describe the window glass between them as a wall of ego pain, it was really very well written👏 and i really liked how u give the sharon pov , the way she apologize everything was perfect😊 all and all it was a wonderful os😊

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-spongy-

@-spongy-

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#105

res

unres

this was magnificent di

wow !!!

i mean seriously

you have written it so well

the way you have shown everything: emotions, love, romance etc. etc.

everything was out of this world

superb writing and amazing concept

wonderful thinking...

aapse ab definitely kuch seekhna padega 😉

thanks for the PM

please do write more

and do PM me

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#106

Awesome Os deepika it was lovely I'm short of words to say about your os..👍🏼.
The moment when swayam comes to meet sharon and sharon stands on the other side of the window and both of them place their hands on the glass was beautiful it gave me a reminder of swaron-s first date ..😳.
When swayam broke the glass and came in his frustration and pain of being away from sharon was so potent and could clearly be seen.. I could feel the pain swayam and sharon were feeling and my heart ached to see them like that..
Sharon's point of view was depicted so very brilliantly by you her thoughts about not deserving swayam her love for him her state of mind made me fall in love with ur write up even more..❤️.
The confession again and the way sharon took the initiative to mend things between her and swayam was amazing.. Every word spoken by her was magical and even more magical was the way she conveyed her thoughts to swayam..😊.
Lovely Os really.. Thank you so much for the pm and keep up the good work I got to see the old swaron here with their essence fabulous dear..😊.
Love,
Kashmi

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Yogini

@yogini64

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#107

Awesommeee... superb update...😃

Kya baat hai... itni meherbaani... double update...😛

Achha hi kiya... coz upar vale part ke liye to achhe se daant pad jati na...😆

I know kisi na kuch nhi kaha hoga ab tak... sab taarif hi karing ... but mera aaj achhe se analysis karne ka mann hai... despite having an exam tomorrow & I've studied nothing... 😆😛

The 2nd chapter started very beautifully... we can expect swayam outside her window .. even if they are in fight (coz aisa d3 me toh hota nhi h) 😆

& the feelings are described very beautifully... the way she moved towards him in her trance... lost in him... even if her heart tried to held her back ... she could'nt do that ... 👏

Ye window usne todi kyun?? Bas ye samajh ni aaya... sharon window nhi khol rhi thi kya?? Ya swayam ab goody goody boy nhi raha... aur gundo wale kaam karta h... 🤣

The next part is -- what I call d3 ... lol... or I would say d3 ka sideeffect ho gya na finally dips pe... tabhi bhid gaye dono... sharon yedi & swayam double yeda... hahaha.. (& u know.. actually they are... itna faaltu me ladte h show me ... bahot dukhi karte h ) 🤪

Now the next chapter-- fantabulous...😃

You know very well... why we love your writings sooo much...😊

Coz the way you show the understanding of emotions... the base of feelings... & set the environment to communicate is just out of the world... 😃

Just bcoz you can feel the warmth of love of swaron... you can do that with full flow... 👍🏼

I still wonder how the hell cv's create their characters with dignified personalities... & then butcher them mercilessly each day...🤢

What they lack is communication ... & when they do... they choose to openly insult each other... & it looks like crap... 🤔

I loved it -- how sharon turned vulnerable in love n flow of emotions that she herself broke the nutshell of her insecurities n confessed her love for him 100 times in 1 go... 😃

What he wants is ... love from her side ... n nodoubt he can see this now... epic moment... roz roz sharon aise nhi milegi... ..😃

But noone can expect so much attention to a relationship in that show... 😳

Bahot ho gyi deeps ki badai aur d3 ki dhulayi... coz palki ne to sudharna hai nhi... hope she reads ur os & get her brains filled with love n emotions -- thats what she is devoid of...😎

Hope I made you laugh n smile n emotional at the same time... with my king size comment...😊

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Megha

@megsy

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#108

Pls copy paste this in the res post.

Diippp :* :* :*
This os was a beautiful journey. ..I always lobe the metaphorsand similis u use...
The glass being their ego nd pride was the one I loved the most! !!

Vaise ek cheez... u can still continue this os...swayam ke hand se oozing blood ka kya hua..pls write further nd make sharon nurse it..romantically ;)

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Amit

@Swaronvrushan

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#109

Deepu can't expressed my emotion in words...this os can't b exprrsed in words...all verbs will b short f this os...just want to say..." khoobsurat"

I agree with megha...do contnue

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Sed_Dreamer

@Sed_Dreamer

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#110

👏

WOW i am sooo touched by this piece of work..great job deep... the way u brought forth swayam n sharon's conflicting pov which melted into one.. simply wow

Keep it up dear 🤗